Writing Feedback / Crimes among numerous teens in several countries. Causes and solutions of Juvenile Delinquency. [2]

The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries.
Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.
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Teenagers in the 21st century have to face a more challenging in their lives. They must stand on a right position in order that they do not fall into crimes like numerous teens in several countries. In fact, recent years have occurred a significant rise of juvenile delinquency and it becomes a serious problem worldwide. This essay will discuss some reasons why this problem happens and solutions to overcome it.

The main cause of the Juvenile offending is a failure of family's function. It is because family is the first socialization agent which can early make or break the personality of children. When parents do not know their role and cannot give firm societies' values for their children thanks to divorce, the majority of children will grow as teenagers which are capable committing criminal acts. Statistics show that 73.53 % of the delinquency teenagers is caused by parental disobedient, and it turns the greatest proportion than other factors.

In addition, the adolescences also commit the crime due to worse influence of schools, peer groups, and mass media. For instance, many of them engage in a gang or school fight because they imitate their surroundings, including bullying action in a school environment and a program of violence in television.

However, there are several ways to solve this trouble, related to the socialization agents. Firstly, the parents have to realize about their role to educate and could also prevent their children's behaviour, which deviate since they were three-years old. Moreover, other agents could give good surroundings and give a good role model.

To sum up, it is evident that the juvenile delinquency happens because of the failure of the socialization agents, consisting of family (parents), schools, peer groups, and mass media. In this case, I believe that these agents have to be responsible to tackle by full awareness to provide better environments for the young generation.

Writing Feedback / Task 2 IELTS - INVENTORS and DOCTORS' significant role for human being [2]

Q: Inventors are not important to society as doctor.
To what extent do you agree about this statement?
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Nowadays, the advance of technology occurs due to numerous inventions, which are founded by scientists worldwide. In this case, however, discoveries are considered as uncrucial factor to society unlike doctors. I strongly disagree about this statement, because doctors and inventors are of important role for societies' live. In this essay, I will describe the reason why people agree and disagree about this case.

Many people believe that the inventors are not essential for human's life, because most of their inventions do not influence the societies directly and sometimes their discoveries are made to commercial industry interest. For example, the discovery about the household furniture which is similar with the inventions in the past do not make the communities helped, but by seeing that product, they want to purchase it without considering about the real function about the item. Finally, many people are not satisfied about some inventions and they became lazier and lazier because of that invention. Consequently, the people consider that the discoveries are not much important to people's lives.

On the other hand, the inventors and doctors have a similar function, because they give a better life for communities. For instance, the inventors which find the medical equipment can support the doctor's job to cure people. The doctors feel that their job's easier than before with the inventions of surgical tools. Therefore, it proves that the position of doctors and inventors are equal to societies' life.

To sum up, it is evident that the inventors and the doctors have significant roles to human beings. In this case, people have to realize about the functions of both jobs, and the inventors should find the novel discoveries which are useful for human's life, instead of the companies will.

Writing Feedback / Hybrid cars sale trend in Japan increased significantly from 2006-2009 [3]

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009.
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The given line graph describes the number of hybrid vehicle sales worldwide from 2006 to 2009. It is obviously seen that Japan sale trend increased significantly, whilst the United States sales rose with some fluctuations.

According to the data, the hybrid vehicle sales in Japan started at just around 50,000 at the beginning of period. Next, 2007 saw a slight rise to approximately 70,000, and then a moderate increase occurred in the next year. Interestingly, in 2009 the vehicle sales, using fuel and electricity energy rocketed to almost 350,000, but it did not peak the highest data over four-years.

On the other hand, the people of United States dominated the sales in the first year with 250,000. In addition, the unique feature witnessed in the next twelve months, and hit the greatest number at 350,000. Unfortunately, it decreased moderately by roughly 50,000 points, and these tend was closed at just under 300,000 at the end of the period. Next, the other country sales were a gradual rise, which started the similar point with Japan, and ended at 120,000 in 2009.

Writing Feedback / The amount of money spent on buying books in four European countries, measured in millions US $ [2]

The given line graph reveals the amount of money spent on buying books in four European countries, measured in millions US$ from 1995 to 2005. It was obviously seen that the trend to purchase books in Germany, France, Italia, and Austria was upward over ten-years.

According to the data, German spent much more their money to buy the books than the other countries. Firstly, 80 million of the German' income was spent in 1995, and the rise tend occurred in the next two years to 90 m. Even though, it experienced a slight decline two years later, the increased trend continued and it hit the highest data at almost 100 million in the end of the period.

In addition, the amount of money, which was spent by French to books stood at roughly 55, and the gradual increase happened up to reaching 75 m in 2005. Though Italy had an almost similar point with France in the beginning of the period, the slight decrease during the period could not give the significant alteration. Interestingly, Austria, which was in 1995 became the lowest data, rocketed to 60 m and replaced Italy as the third position. Finally, the gap among three trends of expense money to book had become lower and lower over a decade.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: the arguments about living in apartment building [3]

Q: Some people say that living in a high-rise apartment block is a lonely experience because there is no community spirit. others say that people who live in high-rise apartmentd have a much better sense of community than those who live in houses.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Living individually in a high-rise apartment is one of the characteristic of modern people in huge cities. They believe that the flat has a much higher sense in community than the people, who live in houses, and the others consider that living in apartment demolishes all community spirit. In this case, I strongly believe that being an inhabitant of a condominium not bring excessive drawbacks for societies' live, because they can merely keep in touch among the dwellers with different circumstances. This essay will discuss both points of views.

In fact, the majority of people claim that the reason why people live in high-rise condominium lonely is to avoid disruption from their relatives and neighbours. It is because many apartment providers guarantee private life for citizens through the limited access to others, who are not interesting. For instance, many apartment dwellers communicate and interact with their neighbour, even they do not know anyone who rents the room next to their flat. Finally, the lack of community's interaction occurs and the communities are more individual.

On the other hand, the reason why living in apartment reduces all community spirit is too excessive because many of them can interact with their neighbours in other ways. For example, when they use the facilities, provided such as swimming pool, jogging track, and fitness center, they can build relationships and have friends to exercise together in similar condition. It proves that they do not leave the communication at all and the argument, saying that matter is not true everlasting.

To sum up, it is evident that being the apartment occupants does not demolish interaction among human beings at all. I think that it is better for societies to communicate with the others in many ways and circumtances.