Writing Feedback / TASK 1 :The changes that have occurred in selected area, around school area [3]

The changes that have occurred in selected area, around school area, there were two periods of continuous development, each period of 30 years, starting from 1950, then 1980 and 2010 is demonstrated in the map. Overall, it can be seen, the most noticeable change was the replacement of houses and farmland with several projects then these change with other projects in the next period.

To begin, there were several major changes to the left of schools building and playground area in first development period, from 1950 to 1980. Three Houses had been changed with car park and science block beside the school in first period. Farmland witnessed a change in use to be sport field. However, school building and playground saw a similar condition over the 30 years.

Turning into the second period, the next 30 years, in 2010. Car park located to the left of science block extended the area. Sports field located on just south from car park was used as the expansion of car park. And the playground was minimized, then a part of which was used as sports field with size less than before.

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Writing Feedback / The cycle of hydro-electric power generation classified by two important concepts - IELTS [3]

The cycle of hydro-electric power generation classified by two important concepts, production of electricity using turbine and distribution of electricity to consumer like houses, fabric, and hospitals or schools is demonstrated in the flow diagram. Overall, it can be seen, the two concepts constituted mutual support. In production, there are six stages, including radiation, evaporation, rain, accommodating water in dam, draining water into turbine, and the pump and in distribution electricity who had been produced by turbine will be distributed in 3 stages, in high voltage cables, transformer station, and underground cable before reaching consumer.

Turning into electricity production, sea water is radiated by sun light, then water experiences evaporation to form cloud in the sky. The cloud will produce rain. The water from rain is accommodated by reservoir, built by dam. A valve sees to open or close water into turbine. While the valve opens, the water from dam drains into turbine and produces the electricity. Then water which had used to run the turbine is recycled with pump back to the reservoir and process is repeated.

To distribute the electricity, after electricity production by turbine, use cable which is able to hold the high voltage. The transformer station is to change the high voltage into right voltage of electricity for consumer uses before it distributes. The cable is located in underground to distribute it. However, the electricity will reach the consumers like houses, factories, and hospitals or schools.

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Writing Feedback / Task 1: The number of visitor to and from the UK over the period from 1979 to 1999 [3]

The number of visitor to and from the UK over the period from 1979 to 1999 and is measured in millions and most favorite countries visited by UK people in 1999 is illustrated in the line and bar chart. Overall, it can be seen, visitor to and from UK, showed a sharp increase; moreover, UK residents visiting abroad showed more dominant than another and the most popular countries in 1999 visited by UK residents were experienced by France

1979 to 1984 witnessed a slight increase for both categories, visitor to and from UK. The beginning rates for both stood at a fair similar rate, 10 and 13 millions for visitor to and from UK respectively. Afterward, They increased steadily at 13 and 20 million. From 1984 to 1999, visitor visiting UK increased rapidly at approximately 27 million, however, at the same period, visitor visiting abroad ny UK resident rocketed reaching at 55 million. The increase rate saw twice times bigger than overseas residents visiting UK.

There were five most popular countries including Turkey, Greece, USA, Spain, and France. France was recorded as the most popular country visited by UK residents in 1999 at 11 million of UK visitors. The visitor rate visiting Spain reached almost 10 million people. And the other countries showed the rate less than 5 million people. Interestingly, the rate of visitor visiting Greece was about three times less than the rate of visitor to Spain.

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Writing Feedback / The recorded and forcasted population data and percentage of people aged above 75 years [4]

The number of total population and percentage of people aged above 75 years (the older) in United Kingdom, recorded and forcast the data about total population, the older, and the percentage of the older from 2015 to 2070 is illustrated in the table. Overall, it can be seen, 2070 is predicted as the highest of the total and the older population and in fact, the actual last data recorded in 2015 as the lowest rate.

Turning to the prediction data, the highest rate is predicted at 82 million of total population in 2070. Meanwhile, there are a fair similar rate at approximately 9 million of the older population in 2035 and 2050. 2015 to 2035 data is forecast every 5 years then 50, and 70. In 2030, 11,34% indicates less percentage then the prediction before.

In contrast, 2015 experienced the total population 64,8 million with the older percentage 8,33%. Afterward, the predictions forecast a virtually similar rate until 2025 less than 70 million of total population but the older population show much far differentiation from 5,4, 6,1, and 7,3 million for 2015, 2020, 2025 respectively, reaching 10,52% in 2025.

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