nda18
Oct 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / There are no people born with creativity in their mothers' stomach [4]
Hi alfa7
here are my review towards your essay
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... and creativity are being(you can find some collocations / synonym for this word) the bottom of the priority. School haskillingkilled creativity as a ...
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... that some adolescent(s) clever in art and other(s) in math. Sir Robinson believes in (the) next era we shouldto adapt new conception concept of human ...
suggestion :
mr alfa7 you should watch you SVA, and basic grammar to improve your essay
i hope it will make your essay better.
good luck :)
Hi alfa7
here are my review towards your essay
Pablo Picasso, one of the biggest
In some
... linguistic and mathematic(s) are the top of (...) it means (i think you missed the conjunction here)that pupils should have ...
... and creativity are being(you can find some collocations / synonym for this word) the bottom of the priority. School has
Furthermore, schools thought [you should put conjunction here] being wrong is some student(s) mistake
Disagree for this statement(wrong spelling)[you should put comma here] Sir Robinson thought if student afraid of[you missed the collocation] being wrong they cannot learn to
... teach their student
... that some adolescent(s) clever in art and other(s) in math. Sir Robinson believes in (the) next era we should
suggestion :
mr alfa7 you should watch you SVA, and basic grammar to improve your essay
i hope it will make your essay better.
good luck :)