Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 :Children need to eat a healthy meal at school! [4]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Adopting the best quote "regardless logistic our logic does not work" which indicate our topic that healthy food are quite notable to maintain health. Not only do children have to consume healthy food, but all people also need healthy meal to give energy and more active in the daily activities. Standing in contrast, why should children consume a healthy meal? The answer is common, because their bodies are still growing.

Most people agree with this statement that children have to eat a healthy food. It will be a problem for children when they are not getting enough nutritious from healthy food. Moreover, when children are hungry in the school day, they cannot focus on the lesson. As a result, children cannot participate fully and accept all of materials which deliver by teacher. If we compare a kid who has breakfast at home than who does not have breakfast, they will show different performance when children learn at school, for instance. Standing in contrast, productivity in school depends on not only healthy meal, but also the teachers who are of role to encourage sense of competition.

Having said and done, nowadays many working parents prefer to give money than serve healthy food at home. Because of that, some children eat something at school's canteen which sells various meals. If children are given a choice between crisps (junk food) and salad (healthy food), what do they choose? The answer is ironically "Crisps". So, school should consider about meals which are sold in the food court in which healthy food is provided. Having said this, bringing meals from home which is made by mother will be better than buy some food in canteen. In my experience, when I was school my mother always catered a meals which was eaten in the break time. The merit of this was more economically and more hygienist.

In my eyes, presumably healthy food will give extra energy for children in the school and will help children's bodies which are still growing and establish brain's nerve. However, parents and school should provide healthy meal in school and home. I ponder that the average food which is not as well-being as food was the past.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : customer satisfaction lever with airlines and aspects of air travel [2]

The chart and table below show customer satisfaction level in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000 and 2007.

First of all, there are providing the data which consist of the bar chart of the job nation's major airlines and the table of specific aspects of the flying experience over the duration of several years period. A more detailed look at the chart indicates that from 1999-to-2007 the percentage of satisfied had increased onwards (65%, 69%, 72%), while dissatisfaction levels decreased, in 1999 was 32 percent, in 2000 was 29 percent and in 2007 was 24 percent.

Moving onto the data in the table of specific aspects of the flying experience, the satisfaction of courtesy of flight attendants grown in 1999 onwards and sat a peak at 92%. From 1999 to 2000, the numbers of satisfaction was a notable rise by up about 87-to-89 percent, while in 2007 percentage of courtesy of check-in/gate agents fell by 88%. What is more, Schedules occurred in the third place with 75% in the 1999 and stayed in the same percentage in the 2000-to-2007 (79 percent). Standing in contrast, the price of tickets was the bigger increase in satisfaction, where the figures rose nearly 1999-to-2007 approximately 30%, while the seating was least satisfied.

If we analyze the data we can see several trends clearly emerging. Firstly, the numbers of satisfaction year-by-year was rising well, while dissatisfied could resolve over the eight years. Secondly, turning to the data of flying experience, costumers were most satisfied with the courtesy of flight attendants. Having said this, the biggest increase in satisfaction was in connection with ticket prices.

All in all, the levels of satisfaction were growing throughout the period, and excellent service from staff was getting better to obtain good feedback from customer.

Writing Feedback / music can nurse and improve feeling; The traditional vs international music [3]

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

The earth has wonderful rhythms and sounds which cannot be imitated with anything in this world even using sophisticated an instrument. The sound of recurring waves of the sea, the flow of the river all have been a great influence on mankind. Music was born, following the day the world was created. Music has appeared into human beings over years, shaped by various improvements, used to reflect the feel of a person who plays it.

According to research that music can improve feeling and cure diseases. In fact, for woman who has pregnant, it is recommended to hear classis music, because the classic music can influence brain improvement from embryo. Having said this, different people have different a sense of taste for music. Some people hear music as media relaxation and keep rejuvenated throughout their life.

Moreover, for composers music is part of their blood. They have a sense how to make a song with great melody which is collaborated with fabulous lyric. When people get heartache, they hear pop music as a reflection their mood. Nowadays, many people are in hurry which have busy schedule for reducing problem most of people listen to music. Take one example in the office when employers face a terrible situation, music will create good soul and sensation in their mind. This research has shown why people are keen on music

Earlier in the decade ago, international music has grown a massive hold on which has influenced of the great globalization, communication, the way of life and shrinking of the world. Take one example, hip hop is a new genre which has been influenced in lifestyle, and it is quite popular. Standing in contrast, there has been changed in traditional music which is more affected by culture and traditional country. Collaboration between traditional music and international music has created to pour creativity by musician, nowadays.

On the other hand, each country has unique traditional music and it has correlation with culture and art of this country. In my country, Indonesia, there are many kinds of traditional music, and the most popular is 'Keroncong' which has unique melody which is produced by traditional instrument: Gamelan, for instance. Not to deny the fact that the traditional music has increasingly developed too. There have been adaptations made from the international music. The use of instruments has been very different and more advanced keeping in pace with technological advancements. Although they have been changed, the basic structure of the traditional music remains unique and unchanged.

In a nutshell, I deliberate that there is difference between traditional and International music. It is very important to preserve them. Hence, I believe that traditional music is more important than international music, which gives the sense of the tradition and culture; and is more than that of art.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Planning for the town [4]

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map depicts a town named Garlsdon in which has a population of 65,000. The local state has planning to establish a supermarket in the one part of two potential areas.

Overall, S1 is located between the main road and the railway to Hindon. What is more, S2 is situated in a traffic-free zone. However, running along S1 and S2 is the railway line.

A more detailed look at the map shows that the main difference between S1 and S2 is that S1 located in outside of the town, while S2 lies in the town centre. Road and rail can be compared as public transport facilities and their location have linked with three small towns. Standing in contrast, the main road is provided from three areas to visit in the Town centre. In the opposite, S1 only has main road from Hindon, so it would be more difficult to reach from Bransdon and Cransdon.

According to the map, S1 is situated in the northwest of Garlsdon, but it is close to the residential area of the town. S2 is near the housing area, which surrounds the town centre. Interestingly, Bransdon is linked to Garlsdon by the main road and does not have access to visit at S1. S2 is located in a traffic-free zone which is an area in a town where transport is not permitted to enter, but there is railway.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1:the fishers in different regions and the world's top ten exporter of fish [2]

The chart and table show the number of fishers in millions for different regions between 1970, 1980 and 2000, and the world's top ten exporters of fish in 2000.

The bar chart and table indicate statistics about fishing over three decades ago for several countries.

Overall, Asia achieved the largest number of fishers than other countries in the world, and the top one exporter in the world come from Asia region.

The chart depicts the data of fishers in 1970, 1980 and 2000. Asia achieved the largest number of fishers at 9, 13 and 24 million respectively. Africa's fisher had 1.3 million in 1970 and dramatically increase 2 million in 1980 onwards. South America had constant numbers of fishers, 1.2 million throughout the period. In North America numbered 0.5 million in 1970 and sharply rose 1.2 in 1980, a number that kept unchanged in 2000. From 1970 to 2000, Europe had the fewest fishers who were under 0.6 million.

A more detailed look at the chart indicates that in 2000 listed five of the ten countries were from the Asian region and Thailand was the world's top one exporter of fish, but European and North American countries also followed in the next ranks. Norway and Denmark had second and fifth place, while the USA was in the third large exporter and Canada ranks sixth. China and Taiwan occupy fourth and seventh place, while Russia, Indonesia and South Korea took eighth, ninth and tenth spots.

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