Writing Feedback / Should people date at a young age? [2]

Age-Appropriately Date

A traditionally brief was- for some people still are- forbidden to date at a young age. I totally agree with this idea for some reasons.

Let me make it clearly what do i make young age? They are people who are under eighteen and not mature yet or we can call them kids.

I have known that it is so difficult to control your feeling when a person have chemistry with someone, however, once they are fall in love, they will spend every single day of their time to think toward the others instead of focusing your study. This is why their study result is bad and it can affect terribly on the future. On the one hand, in some cases, girls get pregnant and she is not able to raise the baby. Therefore, they both decide to have an abortion which will colour the girl's psychology most from then on. She deserts things better. On the other, sometimes, they need money to pay for gift, drink or food, which means they need their parents' money. They work so hard to earn it.

Some believe that love can make people mature, caring people around. It might be true but, it can barely some couples, the disadvantages are over the advantages.

In short, I think study is put at first when you are student.

p/S: This is my first short paragraph, please help me to fingure it out the mistakes..

Writing Feedback / Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing? [5]

young stars

With the development of technology in 21st century, everyone can become stars at from an early age. Many people think that it is good to find out and take advantage the talent as soon as possible. However, to be famous whether they only focus on what they are good at or they force to face the others. In my opinion, it is the worst thing to be as a star at young age.

On the one hand, whoever you are, an adult or a child, you still need to face complicated social issues. Although you are still young and not mature, these problems happend to you. People cheer you up and like you in this time, however, they can turn back you for just one second because what you did. Money, fame, dignity are such a good things everyone dreams of and work hard to have, but these people are so easy to have it. That is therefore they do not value normal things. In addition, some country's culture concern so much about their look, fan will give bad comments in their different appearance.

On the other hand, the massive scheduals would destroy your childhood. You do not have time to see friends, relatives; care about around people; go public like others because fan will annoy you all the time or you can not play things what your friend do. It might change your characteristics a lot, criticisms makes you feel stressful which you sould have not sufferred in this age.

A philippines singer, Charice pempengco, become famous since she was nine, consider as the best diva ever because of her wonderful voice. Many people even told she was better than Whitney Houston, so she try her best to sing all the time in different shows while her larynx does not fully develope. The result is that she lost her amazing voice now and her career is destroyed. It is pity for such a talented person.

In short, finding talents are so important, however, let that talent have time to develope and train in right way and right time.

Writing Feedback / Do you agree as computers translate quickly and accurately, learning languages is a waste of time? [4]

Is a computer able to help speaking foreign language without learning it?

Nowadays, computers can do a lot of human's jobs. One of them is to become a translator. It can be quick and accurate to translate one language into another. Therefore, it is not necessary to learn languages to go abroad or travel around the world. However, knowing languages plays an important part in this society. In my opinion, it is totally worth learning languages.

Knowing another language is like living a different life. That sounds interesting. The key for people to learn languages is communicating. Besides, we can read books, the taste of literature, understand culture, custom or even compose music. These things cannot be done by computers. We should not computer- based. In addition, people will feel excited to write words. Rather, what if we do not bring computers along with?

To success in learning a new language means getting a lot of characteristics. That is not easy to start something different. We need persistence, effort, passion, and belief in the whole process. Evidently, it takes a long time to be done. Therefore, those are good to improve themselves. We can have both knowledge and skills at the end.

Letters / I have to write an email to all the employees to announce the office renovation plan. [3]

the concept of "Art Gallery"

Dear all,
We are excited to announce that the ABC Office is going to be renovated, it is considered as a big remodel after 7 years working here. With the concept "Art Gallery", a well thought out office renovation can turn our existing office into a comfortable working environment that brings more beautiful, creative and unique for us.

The starting date for the construction work is 23 Nov until December 2019
We need your cooperation in the preparation and also the construction time.
- Every member will clean their work desk and make sure their personal necessities as well as the essential work things are in your personal locker. We will add your name in your personal locker and your chair because it might be moved while constructing.

- After this announcement, we will work details with all teams to make sure areas are cleaned to start the construction as scheduled.
Thank you for your concern and your cooperation. I hope that we will welcome a new year 2020 with a beautiful office.