Letters / Letter to a professor who offered me a research job [5]

hi, I am in singapore , and I am a native speaker of Chinese.
following was the letter I reply to a Prof who had offered an research job for me, can you help me to check ?

Dear **
Scarcely does a choice will be better than this for my case. it well balanced the work and the person wish, so I accept the arrangement.

Although two years is shorter than ordinary PhD duration(even in related direction), it is too long to predict how the situation will be. Present will affect the future, so I would do well to strive for a bright future and prove my value.

I can imagine it will make far-reaching positive impacts for me, sincerely thanks.
With regards

Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay large firm and small company - higher income in a large one [4]

The following was the one of my essay for TOEFL, your review comment will help me improve me writing abilty, thanks in advance.
Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Lots of student will face such a problem, to work in a big company or a small one. Each choice has benefits as well as disadvantages .for a big company, one will gain more knowledge and experience, but his work will focus on a narrow area. On the other hand, if one chooses to work for a small firm, he will have a wide experience and knowledge about the company operation, but his income will be very likely not higher then working in big company. Personally, I preferred to working in the big firm.

There are several reasons for me to choose the big company, and the main reason is that I wish to be a professional and I believe working in big company will help me to realize it. There are many opportunities to get in touch with the talent on their major in big company. Working with them, I will definitely benefit from their experience and skill. For example, once, I had worked at a company with several professional research engineering as research assistance for one year. Their knowledge helped me directly drive to the key of the project, and their experience saved me form impracticable ideas. Furthermore, in big firm, one had more training opportunities, which cannot provide by the small company.

The other reason for me is the income. For working in big firm the income will be higher. The wage will be very important for the new graduate whose family needs money. For example, one came from financial strait family, and had two little brothers studying in school. A good wage will be help his family form hard living.

Although working in a small company, one will gain full experience, and will obtain greater choice to promotion, when the company gets a good development. But the undeniable fact was the work was not steady, as the small firm was weak in the market economy.

After considering the above, I can get the conclusion that although working in small firm also have advantage, I will choose to work in the big firm.

Writing Feedback / Cable ship visit report -- ASEAN Explorer return from the Indian Ocean [6]

Cable ship visit report
At the beginning of the Sep, a Singapore- based cable vessel -ASEAN Explorer return to the homeport form the Indian Ocean, while it still stayed in harbor, IEEE Photonics Society Singapore Chapter getting the support from SingTel organized a visit. As there were no more than 50 cable vessels in the world, while most of time such ships were sailing on the sea. Such an opportunity was really valuable.

Using submarine cable for communication has near 150 years history, but it had not been the reigning technique for intercontinental communication until the fiber communication system presented exclusive advantages in late 1980s. Now, over 95% of trans-ocean communication is sent via submarine cable, and the cable ship is dedicated to lay fiber based cable, and it was started form 1988 first commercial trans-oceanic fibre communication system TAT8.

The cable ship was specially designed and used to lay or maintain cables under deep water. Distinguished from other types of ship, it has a large superstructure, and several big cable tanks. It always outfits with the latest navigation and dynamic positioning controlling equipments. Furthermore it also equips with remotely controlled vehicle, seaplow, cable drum, linear cable engine, and vast communication equipments. The cable ship is generally designed for deep water operation, for the shallow water, near terrene construction barge was used in the water depth less than 10m, and diver was employed in the water depth less than 2m.

The cable laying operation begins with the cable being 'floated' ashore to the landing position from the cable ship, and then the floatation bags are removed and the cable settles to the seabed. After that the cable ship follows the pre-determinate route laying the cable as required. Once the ship arrived at the other cable end (previously installed and buoyed off), the ship would adjust its position so that both cable ends could be brought to the board, then the final splice of cable was made. Upon completion of the final splice joint, the cable would be deployed on the seabed.

The maintain operation starts from roughly locating the fault form the terminal stations, then the cable ship with the grapnel, which was a special device that can simultaneously cut and seize cables was dispatched to the nearby regions. Once the cable was found, it would be cut in situ and brought onto the ship by the grapnel. On the ship, a buoy would be attached to the end of the cut cable, and then replaced them on the ocean surface. After that, the ship went to find the other end of the cable. Once the other end was found, the faulty cable section would be instead by the replacement cable. After that the ship returned to the buoy, and the cable attached to the buoy would be spliced to the replacement cable. Finally, after a series of tests, the cable was released onto the sea bed.

Beside the advanced techniques and highly trained staff, a suitable organize scheme was necessary for balancing the cost, time, and quality. The submarine cable communication system project often adapted the Project Management frame to organize the resource, and the project manager was ultimately responsible for ensuring that the objectives of the project were achieved.

The signal on each fiber -pair of TAT8 was transported at 295.6 Mbit/s. Now 1000Gbit/s can be obtained on each fiber-pair (100 wavelengths to be modulated at 10Gbit/s enabling a capacity of more than 1 Terabit/s per fiber-pair). Seldom can a technique improve itself like the speed that fiber communication has improved, and influences of such improvement were on the way that we living rather than the way that we communicate. If you answer the question what is the Engineering as the practical application of science and math to solve problems, the fiber communication could be taken as the example that can demonstrate well what the Engineering is.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL essay What are some important qualities of a good supervisor [2]

What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.

Corresponded qualities were necessary to be succeeded in an occupation. For a good supervisor, I think three qualities were more important. They are good perception on the man, good knowledge, and good personal character.

The most important quality of a good supervisor ...

All in all, I believe that good perception on the man, the knowledge on the specialized subject, and the good character were conspicuous qualities for a good supervisor.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay which changed people's lives automobiles bicycles airplanes [3]

hi my friends,
Another essay,Againe I hope you can help to make it better.
Thanks in advance.
Ruoming

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why
you think it has changed people's lives.
- automobiles
- bicycles
- airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although new invention will changed the world more or less, only a few inventions can take the significant change to the ordinary people. The automobiles were one. The automobiles had improved our travelling ability, and such changed is not only in the travelling but also in living.

The speed and range which was provided by automobile has facilitated the transport and travelling. One can live in the nearby countryside which has better living condition, and go to work by bus or car. The fresh food such as fresh milk can be delivery farer, thus it provide the benefit to both the farmer and custom. Furthermore, the automobile can be designed to special application, thus brought daily life great advantage as well as change. For example the ambulance was designed for saving the life, it help patient to survive from acute disease or accident while it contributed to shape up the modern emergency treatment system.

Beside the directly changed, the automobile has also changed the human society indirectly. The wildly distributed gas station and well developed high way system were good examples. Furthermore, the blooming of the vehicle manufacture industry had stimulated the related industry, such as iron and steel industry, and petroleum industry; the raising industries stimulate the development of corresponding techniques. As a result, new towns roused in the place where resource was found; new plant was set up; new technologies were developed.

The change which taken by the automobile are not all positive. The traffic accidents can bring more seriously damage than former vehicle, and unfortunately, accompany by the Sales Volume increasing the automobile vehicles the number and rate of such accident were increased. Another example of the negative change was the greenhouse effect.

All above, demonstrated the change brought by the automobile were profound.

Writing Feedback / I would like to meet Jim Thorpe, the 1912 Olympic Gold Medal winner. [4]

please help to make it better.
thanks
Ruo Ming

If I were afforded the opportunity to meet a famous athlete, I would like to meet Jim Thorpe, the 1912 Olympic Gold Medal winner, whose medal was striped soon after the game, and an Indian athlete, whose ancestry eventually lead to poverty and alcoholism.

About Jim, one of his attractive was his sport talent and achievement; Jim had shown his outstanding sport talent in the Indian Carlisle School. When he walked past the track and beat the school's high jumpers with an impromptu 5-ft 9-in jump while still wearing street clothes. It was the 1912 Olympic game Jim wrote his legend. In the game, he won the both of pentathlon and decathlon game, and in the decathlon , his recorded of 8,413 points stood for nearly two decades, even converts to 6564 points on the current tables, still a very respectable score a nearly century later.

His answer to the King of Sweden also impressed me deeply. When awarding Thorpe his prize for his win in decathlon in 1912 Olympic game, King Gustav said, "You, sir, are the greatest athlete in the world," to which he replied, "Thanks, King". The simply and honestly reply didn't like the one will be standing on the ceremony which great success can bring.

If many repellent human traits surfaced during a tragedy, that tragedy will be absorbing and worth profoundly considering. Thorpe's story was one. In early 1913, U.S. newspapers found and announced that Thorpe had played professional baseball. At that time the player should be amateur status according to the Olympic rule. Thorpe had indeed played professional baseball, what he was done what other college men had done, except that they did not use their own names. Not for the first or last time, a sports organization stuck to the letter not the spirit of the law. The International Olympic Committee (IOC) demanded its medals back.

From a disadvantaged child to the greatest athlete of the first half of the 20th century, Thorpe's succeeded. As in that age racism was rife in the United States, he failed in enjoying real American freedoms. One person with Such strong contrast succeed and fail , that fetches me deeply, if I can talk to him ,I would like to know his view of his life and let him know the IOC had acknowledged that they had erred, and declared you are co-champion.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL - 'Meng Zi Story'; Classmates are a more important influence [4]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When it comes to whether classmates exert more influence than parents on a child's success in school, I certainly believe that parents play a more important role than classmates on a child's success in school.

First, small children can often be seen as blank paper; the environment created by a parent would have implicit, but significant influences on children before their school ages. Favorable environment created by parents will increase the odds for children to success in school. There is a story about Meng Zi who was an eminent philosopher in ancient China. When Meng Zi was a child, his mother did not wish small Meng Zi to grow up to be a common illiterate civilian. She believed that if her son grew up amongst illiterate men then he too would be as illiterate as them. Thus she moved the houses several times and finally settled down near a private school , where Meng Zi could easily access knowledge and make contacts with intellectual.

In addition to that, compared with classmates, parents have long term effective impact on the children. When children were very small, they obeyed what parent said, as they used to fully rely on parents. When they grow up, they will find there are some similarities with classmates and classmates begin to exert influence on them. Although in a certain period, children spent more time with classmate and got a better understanding from classmates. Parents still have the most effective impact on their children in long term. Familiar classmates will leave them after a few years, but to be success in the school needs long term unremitting effort, thus continuous encourage and support from parent will have more opportunities to make important influence for a long term.

Finally, although classmates have similar experience and psychology, that do not mean children can only be well known by his peers, actually it should be easier for children to communicate with their parents. Before the school ages, children and parents had built close relationship, and parents would live with children until they grew up. In long term, parents have more time to get in touch with children than any other single classmate, thus parents have more opportunities to be the person who has the best understanding on their children.

In conclusion, neither the role of parents nor classmates should be denied, but I believe that the children's success is affected more by their parents than by their classmates.