Writing Feedback / The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a University [2]

IELTS Task 2 - Education (Agree/Disagree)

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The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a University of any similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With more people receiving higher education with the aim to succeed in the 21st era, whether or not being successful is solely dependent on academic knowledge has become a widely debated topic. While many believe that tertiary education has nothing to do with personal attainment, other maintain that there is a high correlation between academic result and success. Given that luck play an essential role in most success stories and that having an effective social network is an indispensable part of success, I strongly agree that one cannot learn anything from college contributing to his or her future success.

In terms of the effect of intrinsic factor, no one could deny luck being a main element of success. For instance, one inborn with a golden key or with an endearing appearance is more likely to get the laurel. It takes a normal person a great deal of effort and tremendous time to level the playing field in order to catch up with the pace of those with luck. The invisible gap between a normal and a lucky person will only be widened if the lucky one work hard as well, and luck cannot be made up by any knowledge in school. As a result, no university course can offer luck which could exert an enormous impact on ones' success.

Regarding the importance of networking, a resourceful network, in which people could share resources and offer opportunities to each other, is invaluable. Take Mark Zuckerburg as an example, his dorm mate whom Mark has been working with on building a social platform blazed a trail for today's behemoth - Facebook. We cannot achieve anything large solely on our own, but to rely on others at least to some extent. Therefore, networking is another cardinal foundation of success, which is unrelated to the training in tertiary institutions.

Having discussed the aforementioned, I firmly believe that we cannot learn to be a successful person simply through the education in university. This is especially true for the youngsters who do not have much life experience while craving for success via fast-track. If people could be more down-to-earth and pay more attention on broadening their network, I am confident that they would soon or later reach their dreams.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2 - Career (Both views) - youngsters should be more realistic and think more about the future [4]

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IELTS Task 2 - Career (Both views)

Some people think that young people should be free to choose their job, but other people think that they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With more young people struggling to choose their future career, whether or not youngsters should pay more attention to their future when picking their jobs has become a hotly debatable topic. While many believe that freedom should be highly valued when making the decision, others maintain that the top priority should be focused on the consideration of long-term career development. Given that we should have our financial independence and benefit society at large, I strongly believe that the young should be more realistic and think more about the future.

In terms of the noticeable finance burden carried by the young in the modernized world, we have few choices but to face the reality. Instead of wandering in the job markets irrespective of on ones' future, it is our responsibilities to seek a job with clear career trajectory as early as possible in order to get rid of all the bills without concern. For instance, merely renting a small flat in Hong Kong costs more than half of the salary for most blue-collars, not to mention other miscellaneous overheads. If youngsters indulged in the dream of working freely without a meditation on their career prospect, they would be more likely to rely heavily on the financial support of their families. As a result, the constant reliance on the source of money from family without achieving financial independence will narrow the future development of the teenagers.

Regarding the societal benefits, the young things should hesitate no more to make substantial dedication to society after they graduated from colleges. As an example, young scientists can devote themselves in solving real world issues such as AIDS and COVID-19 which have been exerting pernicious influence to humanity worldwide. Young professionals are able to assist in saving untold lives and make the world a better place. Therefore, it will be beneficial to society in the long run if youngsters pay more attention on developing their career.

Having discussed the aforementioned, I reckon that our future pillars of society should not pick on their jobs without a consolidated career planning. This is especially true for the gullible and impressionable youth. As a matter of fact, if the adolescents mapped out their career paths realistically, I am confident that it would enable themselves to accomplish financial independence earlier compared with their counterparts.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 - Environment (Agree/Disagree) - Electric cars vs fossil fuel burning cars [2]

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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them.
Do you agree or disagree?

There is an opinion that primarily vehicles powered by nonrenewable fuel sources, namely petroleum and diesel oil, should be replaced by electric cars. Given that electric cars are more environmentally-friendly and that they can tackle the pollution issue, I strongly agree with this statement.

Instead of driving the traditional fuel automobiles, we can pose less harm to the environment by driving electric cars. In other words, this will emit less chemical gas which is pernicious to the Ozone Layer and contributes to global warming. Many people have been suffering from climate change and its knock-on effects, such as drought and famine. Although driving automobiles with renewable energy sources like electric cars is not a silver bullet to the deteriorating climate problem, it is irrefutable that it can help relieve the situation, at least to a certain extent.

On the other hand, restraining traditional cars can curb air pollution issues. The burning of fossil fuels in these cars produces detrimental chemicals which are the culprit of air pollution in many cities. The respiratory system of humans can be seriously harmed by these air pollutants, deterring some people from staying in metropolises. This is exemplified by the growing number of inhabitants in big cities, especially for those with respiratory problems such as asthma, choosing to migrate to the outskirts in recent decades.

In conclusion, the inhibition of fossil-fuel-burning cars can be conducive to both the environment and our health. If governments determined to limit the usage of all these cars and encourage driving electric cars, the world would be a better place to live in.