Undergraduate / "the Intensive Care Unit" - Common app short answer [6]

Hello. I'm an international student from South Korea. I do not have much background about grammar and mechanical skills. So, please help me out to make better short answer. I welcome to get every comment for this short essay thanks.

Ragged clothing, enervating appearance, and powerless hands pleaded forrelief his condition.
"Don't worry; I will do everything for you. Your job is just holding your spot for me, okay?" I said.
Then I wipe off his body to make him feel better. With a smile from a haggard face he thanked to me and he follows my direction as well to serve him easier.

As I enter into the Intensive Care Unit, people are moving busily to serve patients faster.
Other volunteers already started serving patients. At Ulsan University Hospital, I'm a volunteer, who take care patients to keep good condition for them to cure their diseases.

While, this service can be regarded as a hard work, I recognize them as extremely penetrative as I can take some time to learn how much precious our life and strike up a conversation with people from various fields.

Book Reports / Hamlet Essay - Evaluate the parenting of King Hamlet and Polonius [3]

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Topic: Evaluate the parenting of King Hamlet and Polonius as it relates to Prince Hamlet and Ophelia.

Despite, Polonius was used Ophelia to accomplish his mission, but I think that he is a good father, who gives good advice for both children, Laertes and Ophelia. Although, he used Ophelia for Claudius, he acts as a good father to Ophelia, because he does not want to hurt her by relationship with Hamlet. In the play, Ophelia is a strongly believe her father; she is going to tell everything about Hamlet. And Polonius warn to Ophelia, and he strongly believes that Hamlet does not have any affection to her. So, he explains to Ophelia "Affection, Puh! You speak like a green girl/Unsifted in such perilous circumstance./ Do you believe his "tenders," as you call them?" (1.3.110-112) this quote is supporting that he is worry about her as her father, so Polonius is good father for Ophelia.

In the play, Polonius is a good advisor to Claudius and he is a nice father to Ophelia. Although, he uses Ophelia as a point of spy for Hamlet, he still concerns about how affected to Ophelia. So, he is uncomfortable her relationship with Hamlet, when he says something nicely and giving presents to her. So, he is going to teach her about this relationship:

Marry, I will teach you. Think yourself a baby
That you have ta'en these tenders for true pay,
Which are not sterling. Tender yourself more dearly,
Or (not to crack the wind of the poor phrase,
Running it thus) you'll tender me a fool. (1.3.114-118).
From this quote, it is easy to recognize that he gives advice for her to make best decision. It looks like one of part of mission for Claudius, but he just worried about whether she is hurt or not. Technically, he is not a good person to Hamlet and using her daughter, but he wants to make best decision at each moment for her. This quote is helpful to recognize that Polonius is a normal father as others. Therefore, it looks like that he is a good parenting for his daughter for her future.

As we moving on further, He is telling to Ophelia what situation will be facing to her, and he does not believe that Hamlet does not love her purely. Hamlet is a prince of Denmark, and at that time, he has to marry a member of royal family, not general people as Ophelia. Actually, the "Hamlet" play shows one of power game in the Kingdom of Denmark. Claudius starts to kill King Hamlet to get a power, and Polonius also followed him to have benefit for the power and he wants to build a royal family when he is supporting Claudius as an advisor. So, he worried about relationship because her position is lower than Hamlet, it is hard to get marry with him. He explains about this to her:

Set your entreatments at a higher rate
Than a command to parle. For Lord Hamlet,
Be something scanter of your maiden
Believe so much in him that he is young,
And with a larger <tether> may he walk
Than may be given you. (1.3. 129-135)
If he was a royalty, he might be supporting this relationship. Both Claudius and Polonius are trying to kill Hamlet to remain their power. Also he knows what the consequence is in the future, he does not want to relate with Ophelia, because he loves her. In conclusion, he seems to be a one of good father to Ophelia, because she firmly believed that he is good father, and he always wants to protect her, like other fathers.

The King Hamlet is a good father to Hamlet. Absolutely, he is a good person in the play, but not a good person as a parent of Hamlet. Basically, he uses Hamlet revenge to Claudius. As we know, King Hamlet was died from Claudius when Hamlet was young. So, he does not have chance teaching and parenting for him as well. He only appears in specific scene, so technically it is hard to give some advices for Hamlet. In the play, he ordered to Hamlet to kill Claudius:

But this eternal blazon must not be
To ears of flesh and blood. List, list, O list!
If though didst ever thy dear father love-
O God!
Revenge his foul and most unnatural murder.
Murder?
Murder most foul, as in the best it is,
But this most foul, strange, and unnatural. (1.5. 27-34)
Technically, he was scarified in this "power game" from Claudius, so he wants to revenge to Claudius whatever the method is. The ghost came out in the Act 1 Scene 1, 4, 5, Act 3, and Act 4. The ghost is not a weighted character in this play. When we see scenes talking between King Hamlet and Hamlet, most part is re-telling the story why he died, and he ordered what Hamlet should do to revenge to Claudius. That's why I think that King Hamlet is not fit to good parents.

As we seen above, King Hamlet is not a good father to Hamlet; even he is a good person in this play. Although, he is talking with Hamlet in few scenes, but we could not see any moment giving some advices to Hamlet. Some of people little bit confused about parenting and good personality. We should be careful in this trap, because good personality and parenting to Hamlet are having a huge difference between each other. Although, Hamlet follows what his father said, but he is just going to revenge for killing his father. Unfortunately, we could not determine whether he is good father or not, because the scene is limited to analysis his character as a father of Hamlet. King Hamlet might be feeling sorry for Hamlet, but he does not give many advises to him.

In this story, King Hamlet expects that Hamlet kills Claudius, and protect Gertrude because she is a mother of him. And most of his quote in this book is a telling a story about how he died, why Hamlet should kill him, and etc. Nowhere has he looked like a father of Hamlet as well. In conclusion, the truth is that Hamlet was inspired from his father so much. However, we firmly believe that the ghost is a King Hamlet, but in this play it could not sure whether right or not. So, it might be hard to describe King Hamlet as a general father, and he could not parent him as well. Unfortunately, King Hamlet has a good character, but he is contracted with Polonius, and he did not good parenting compare than Polonius.

Undergraduate / "School of Management" -intra university transfer essay ( reasons for this request.) [2]

During the internship period, I experienced in the business sector which the subject attracts strongly. Luckily, I allocated at the administration department during the internship, and decided to study business. However, I made the decision research in various subject areas to find what subject fits to me, as well. As a result, I admitted at the Harpur College Arts and Sciences in Binghamton University as an undeclared major.

After I successfully finished the first college semester, I want to learn and research business and management area. As an undeclared major student, I would like to learn practical study in the 21st generation. I had worked at a machinery corporation for the internship, where produces machinery equipment for heavy industries. At the first time, the company needs someone who is fluent in English to communicate fluently with foreign buyers. My first job was a translator, but I desired to experience in the field of business, so I requested to the president to urge the management-related department. And begun work in the business field instead of translating language.

The other duty was that conducted affiliate marketing analysis of competitors, which requires knowledge of marketing theoretically. However, I do not have any necessary knowledge background about the business, especially marketing. At this time, I do not have any idea assist project with my colleagues due to lack of experience in the marketing field.

One day, I had an opportunity to present fluent English presentation to overseas buyers. There are some of people who can speak English, but they could not speak well. I was the only one who can speak English fluently among the taskforce team, so I successfully performed presentation to the foreign buyers. As a result, the company got a commitment from highly competitive selection process. Also, the buyer commented about my presentation was an excellent performance. About two weeks after, my colleagues realized how I motivated in this project, so they helped me a lot during the process of the marketing project, so I successfully completed the project.

During this training internship session, I have developed and demonstrated my marketing and public relation skills in my previous work experience as an intern assistant. I had planned, developed and coordinated critical business meeting also publicizing and marketing the events were an essential part of my job.

After successfully completed the internship session, I dreamed to be an experienced Chief Executive Officer (CEO) after I graduate from college and receive Master of Business Administration (MBA) degree. To earn the MBA degree, I want to study in the undergraduate courses in order to understand the fundamentals of commerce to study in the graduate courses.

Lastly, the NFL Green Bay Packers head coach Vincent T. Lombardi said that "The difference between a successful person and others is not a lack of strength, not a lack of knowledge, but rather in a lack of will." Although, the nature of Intra University Transfer into the School of Management is highly competitive, I would like to get the opportunity to learn management in the Binghamton University with outstanding faculty and students. I ensure that I can be a great CEO with successful career in after ten years. Because, I have a strong belief to myself, and I desire to study management compare than others.

Graduate / Selected field (sales / operations / experience) The internship application statement [NEW]

Why you wish to selected field

1) Sales
Sales was not my first priority when I applied to the internship program. However, I changed my mind after I finished reading the book, "Success" by Spencer Johnson. This book fundamentally defines the real meaning of "sales" by using story-telling skills. "Success" gave me a vivid inspiration, and strongly influenced me to apply to the sales field in this program.

From my personal perspective, the sales field requires specific skills, such as social networking, active participation, and etc. I had limited social skills and had not been a very active person until I went to study abroad. During my high school career, I endured hardships due to my introspective character and lack of English communication skills. Luckily, I received a great opportunity from my school to grow in character and improve my language skills, as a Counselor's Assistant. I accepted the school's proposal and worked at the school counseling office for a semester. During the semester, I had to sell myself in my role as Counselor's Assistant to counselors and other school staff to maximize my potential value in the position, in keeping with what Spencer Johnson had explained in his book.

Consequently, my English skills improved rapidly at that time, and then I successfully finished my exchange student career. With my previous experience and inspiration from the book, I would love to further build my sales communications skills and continue my personal growth in the business field. I feel strongly that obtaining the great opportunity your program has to offer will best allow me to accomplish these goals.

2) Operations
The operations field is a very interesting field among the five fields proposed by Korea University. Even though, my concentration has been in economics, I have always been interested in developing skills that will allow me to apply both the knowledge from the operations field and the economics field to generate synergy effect after I graduate from university. Generally it is often thought that the operations field is mainly applicable in management studies. However, in my opinion, the business operation skill is not only applicable to the management field but also to various industrial and business fields in real world situations.

When I was in seventh grade, I was a president of my homeroom class. At that time, I never expected to be elected to the position. It was a first time I deeply participated in a leadership role, so I felt a great deal of pressure to perform well in the position from my homeroom teachers and other classmates. The first quarter of seventh grade was a demanding period for me. After the first quarter, I was fully trained in my leadership position, with the difficulties of the learning phase behind me. As a result of my excellent peformance as a leader, I was elected vice president two times after the seventh grade.

Using my skills from my leadership experiences, I eagerly wish to intern in the operations world to gain experience and learn the working-level area. It is my hope to gain enough insight and research to further apply this knowledge when I return to college. This internship is best way for me to learn the operations field, as I am not a management major. I am sure my research to combine technology with Economics and Operations will prove enlightening and beneficial. This internship would provide a first step to increasing my operations skills and allow me to apply them in both real world situations and greatly benefit my university studies.

(2) What experience you wish to obtain

From this unique internship program, I would like to wish to gain valuable experience during my college career. When I was a high school student, my hazy dream was to intern from a company as my father had done. I was strongly affected from my father's life in home and outside. Although, he failed to become a judge after he graduated from the university with a law major, but he did his best in his position, where he served for twenty years in the Hyundai Heavy Industries. Although, my father does not want me to follow in his path, I desired to achieve at least the level of success and valuable contribution in an occupation like my father has. This valuable internship would come as a crucial turning point in my college year, greatly expanding my career options after I graduate from college. If I get this fabulous opportunity to my life, I wish to gain real-world experience from the company.

This experience is significantly relevant because the actual task will be adding heavier responsibilities than studying in school does theoretically. Even little mistakes have significant consequences in the real industrial field, because they can directly affect the company's profit, image and even morale. I desire to work at this level of accountability by serving in an internship.

Also, I wish to build a social network during my internship period. Although, the internship period is only a month, but I feel confident I can build a useful social network with coworkers in the company and the industry. A financial value cannot be set on this networking as it will offer me a means to connect my experiences directly to Korea and help further the networking there after I graduate from college.

Lastly, I also desire to define my post graduate plans and choices through the insight gained during my internship. It is my hope that by applying my skills and studies with the internship experience I will achieve a more focused view of the best career fit for my knowledge and skills. Even though, each company may have utterly different business policies and management practices, I am confident the internship will assist me to grasp a company's environment, and assist me in making the wisest career selection after I complete my bachelor's degree.