Writing Feedback / why more school leavers unable find a job? [NEW]

After they complete their studies, some students are unable to find jobs that would be a common phenomenon in the nowadays society. Why these young adults cannot find a job? In my opinion, there are two main reasons, one is from the students themselves, and the other is from the society.

There is no doubt that universities or colleges cultivate a large number of outstanding students. However some students give up developing their knowledge and skills because of their lazy. By the time they reach university, they feel free and no longer spend much time on their studies. They miss too many classes and so do poorly in a course. Moreover, some students have grandiose aims but puny abilities. They believe that they should deserve better position than the employer offered. Therefore they cannot find a job when they leave school, because they have no professional knowledge and a positive attitude.

As a result of society rapid develop, more and more people get chance to go to school and develop their abilities. The society, however, cannot offer so many jobs for these high educated people. Statistics indicate that 20 years ago nearly all undergraduates could find a job when they left school, but today a lot of students after graduation cannot feed themselves. In addition, most employers will choose the employees who have relevant experiences rather than the students who just leave school. Because they have no experiences they cannot get jobs, and because they have no jobs they have no experiences. So that forms a vicious cycle.

In short, students cannot find jobs because they not work hard and the society cannot provide a lot of job positions as much as the number of the graduates. Therefore, I believe that students should improve their professional skills and get some experience on their vocations. And the society should increase the number of available jobs as far as possible and accept the graduates with no experiences understandingly.

PS. My main idea is written in Chinese, please correct my english version or give me another better one. thank u O(∩_∩)O

Writing Feedback / Rather than help their children do school work parents should encourage their do work [NEW]

Since China implements the one child policy, parents are more and more concerned about children's learning. Some parents even help children do school work. So someone suggested rather than help their children do school work, parents should encourage their do work independently. I totally agree with this point of view.

There is no denying that parents hope their children get a better future, but help them do school work that is not a good idea. Because sometimes parents see their children through the eyes of a protector, they don't want see their children unhappy or tired and they help them do directly. Sometimes parents let children misunderstand their school work is also parents'. Children will lose their abilities of independent thinking and their independent sense. Because they get answers easily from their parents they will never think about it by themselves. When they're older, they still dependent their parents and cannot solve problems.

In addition, when children don't want doing their school work, parents should encourage them and find the reasons why children don't want to do. For instance, sometimes children want to play games or watching TV, so they have no time to do school work. At this time, parents should change their study attitude and let them finish their work then can do anything they want. Every once in a while, some school work are difficult to children, they lose their interest and confidence. At this time, parents should guide them to find answers not just give them answers directly. In this way, children not only get the answers but also get the ways of thinking from parents. Moreover, the discussion between parents and children can promote the emotional communication and parents can know more about their children's thoughts.

In a sense, parents help children do school work is not real help but harm. In my suggestion, to be good parents should give children confidence and sense of responsbility and encourage them do school work themselves.

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Writing Feedback / work 3 days a week with long hours VS work 5 days a week with short hours [2]

hey guys, please help me. thank you in advance!!!

Most modern people have a busy and abustle life. They want to do very well, and they also want to get more rest. How do they balance their personal life with their job? Some suggested that people work only three days a week with long hours instead of working five days a week with shorter hours. Form my perspective, working three days a week is better than resting two days a week. My arguments for this point of view are listed as follows.

First off, for resting four days a week people can get more free time. Working three days a week can improve the quality of people's life. Because of free time, they can do whatever they want to do. They can improve their professional skills from school or learn some new content by themselves. They have more time to enjoy their life, to travel some beautiful places and communicate with family members. They work more efficiently than those who work five days a week because they have more time to release their pressure.

And, furthermore, because of working three days, the problems of the traffic jam and the employment can be both solved. As we all know, traffic congestion is a problem for modern people today. In Beijing, for example, people need to spend two or three hours on the road. It wastes a lot of time and makes people tired and upset. Working three days people go to work not at the same time, and that will reduce the number of cars on the road.

At the last, because people have short working days, employers should hire more employees to work. The data show that people work three days that the employment rate will increase thirteen percent. Thus, it will solve the problem of employment.

In conclusion, working three days a week with long hours can bring many advantages than working five days a week, such as more free time, more smooth traffic, and higher employment. We need to work hard, but more importantly we need enjoyable life.

Writing Feedback / Do not accept others' criticism cannot succeed? [2]

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Do you agree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept others' criticism can not succeed.

We all have a common feature that love to accept praise rather than criticism. When we immerse into the ocean of the praise for long time, we will lose the direction. I agree with some people believed that in a team, those who do not accept others' criticism can not succeed. And my arguments for this point of view are listed as follows.

No one in the world is perfect. Thus, to accept other's criticism, the team can achieve success, individuals can gain improvement. Once our school checked the hygiene of our room, I cleaned the window and others swept and mopped the floor. When I finished, my roommate told me there were some spots on the window. However, I refused to clean it again because I thought she had no right to criticize my work. Therefore, we missed the award of the best room because the glass was not cleaning. After this thing, I realize that a team can not succeed because someone doesn't want to correct himself/herself. On the next cleaning house competition, I accept roommates' criticism sincerely, and eventually we win the best collaboration award. Being modest to other's criticism is the biggest prize for me.

Furthermore，accepting other's criticism instead of getting everything on one's own advances the unity of team. Democracy and communication are two important elements to a team. In a team, it is necessary to give others rights and chances to point out mistakes, and if the criticism is right, mistake maker should correct their mistakes. During this process, people exchange their ideas, and enhance mutual understanding and respect. That will form a united team and can be succeed. As John F Kennedy said, together, there is little we cannot do while divided, there is little we can do.

There is an old saying that medicine is tasted bitter, but it is helpful for the health. We can treat the criticism as the medicine that makes us uncomfortable but it must be a good advice for us.

Writing Feedback / Universities should teach students about their chosen degree subject [NEW]

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working

As we all know, the job marking is filled of competition, and every graduates want get a perfect job. Therefore how can they stand out from thousands of people? Therefore, I wholeheartedly agree with the universities and colleges should provide more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working. And my arguments for this point of view are listed as follows.

To begin with, students cannot know clearly from a small number of courses offered by school what career they want to work on. Universities or colleges just require their students to have learning ability and high grade-point average. However, most schools ignore their students' career planning and the practical skills. The latest surveys show that quite a few students have no idea after graduate what job is best suited for them. My friend Natalia, for example, before she goes to college she does not know what job does she wants to get. She has no clear plan for the future, and her college has not to provide more courses about making career choices. As a result, she wastes four years to learn the knowledge which she has no interests, and cannot find an ideal job after graduate.

In addition, because of more courses, students can learn more knowledge and skills. The current highly competitive society, employer would like to hire the employees who have more skills and knowledge. Another friend Mandy, she major is English and also likes math and computer. After English classes she often studies some useful courses from the school offered, such as programming, office software, and office etiquettes. She thinks these courses are very practical and interesting, and can be used in the future. As the old Chinese saying that skill is not burden. The job seekers like the sand of the beach, and how can they let the employer find them? They should know the employers' needs and have more skills. So universities and colleges should provide more courses to students.

Therefore, Universities courses should not only prepare students by teaching them about their chosen degree subject, but also prepare them in other important areas such as making career choices, job applications and other they might need in the workplace.