Writing Feedback / Successfull person = money? 'comfortable with itself and with the others' [2]

In the modern society the money becomes increasingly important. Everyone wants a wealthy life and everyone tries to become rich. This happens because the people wants

to live in comfortable houses, loves the comforts of flush life, dreams longer and more expensive holidays. Therefore is easy to comprehend why money is so important.

But money is not easy to earn. Well educated and high knowledge people can work in well payed jobs but the ways to earn money are multiple. There are a lot of illegal and lawless ways to make money. A person who earns money with drugs or exploitation of prostitution surely is not a successful one.

But by what is characterized a successful person? The successful person is the one who is comfortable with itself and with the others, the one who has an important purpose in his life, the one who is loved by his family and by his friends, the one who is satisfied by what he has.

Surely the money is important for everyone but a not rich person could easily be a successful one. The media give us a wrong idea of success, because show us only rich hypothetical successful people. But a real successful person is not the rich actor or singer who goes in clubs and drinks and has beautiful women, the successful person is a family man that works in a small office of a crowded city and when he returns home helps the young son with the homework. The successful person is the one who doesn't spend the Christmas at Sant Moritz or Cortina, but the one who is satisfied by a tasty Christmas dinner.

Consequently the successful people is not the one who earned a lot of money but the one who received a lot of love during his whole life.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS should fathers take care of the children while their wives work? [3]

During the last century the role of the woman changed drastically, thanks to feminist movements like the suffragettes. This led to a change in the role of the man too.

With the emancipation and the acquisition of even more rights the woman in the twentieth century became almost as important as man regarding the economic sector.

Unfortunately even today the influences of a millenarian sexist system, where the role of the woman was to grow up children and to take care of the house, precludes to her certain types of work considered male jobs.

But in the last years, luckily, the role of the man and woman had been reversed in even more families. Today is easy to find a househusband who grows up the children. This helps to create a best relationship between child and father, which usually is seen like a powerful and authoritarian paterfamilias.

Furthermore the share of the duties during the every day life can get stronger the relationships between family.

On the other hand for the man can be very difficult to renounce to his role of householder, in fact he can feel the economic importance of the woman like a demonstration of his lack of virility. This can easily destroy the relationship in particular families, especially in the Tory ones.

Despite of this surely is very important a collaboration in the family between man and woman and it can bring only to a better grow up of the child.

Writing Feedback / IELTS should be a law to control violence in tv? [5]

Everyday there are even more concerns about the violence in TV. Nowadays the TV is the most used media. It has a big influence in the modern society because of the spread of culture and information all over the world. Unfortunately the instrumentalization of the TV for the enrichment of the television corporations brings to the creation of programs and movies for the masses.

The tastes of the masses however has always been vulgar. The people loves to see on TV violence and blood because the instinct of violence is in the human nature. Thorough the centuries this thirst of blood never stopped, and some examples are the roman battles of gladiators, the medieval heretic persecutions and the inquisition. Even today the animal part and the basic instincts persist in us.

The TV give us a wrong idea of violence, seen like the only way for the hero to overcome all the difficulties, meanwhile in real life the problems can be overcome only with words and cleverness. This is very dangerous for the young generations who have a distorted perception of what is good and what is bad. A child which see the wrestling on TV, eg, will go to school and will try the wrestling moves with the classmates.

On the other hand, however, the parents can easily prohibit to the sons to see particular types of programs. Indeed on the TV there are a lot of educational and entertaining programs. Another way to avoid to see violence in TV is to read a good book and to turn off the TV for a while. If no one looked violent programs, soon this last will disappear.

Surely the violence in TV is dangerous from some points of view but is unthinkable the existence of censorship in a modern and liberal society.

All corrections are welcome... thnks!

Writing Feedback / 'Work too much?' - Ielts what contribute to job satisfaction? [4]

About 2000 years ago Seneca in his " DE BREVITATE VITAE " said that the busy man, that spent the whole life working and loosing time, dies without living. This words are incredibly actual. Nowadays the most purpose of the man is working. The modern society try to transform the child in a working machine, giving to him an utilitarian education.

Doubtless the job became the principal occupation in the everyone life. Unfortunately many people don t understand that work isn't everything in this life.

Work too much, how happens to a lot of people today, is a serious problem. The busy worker cant adequately accomplish to his family duties. This is a real problem mostly for the people who has children, indeed the absence of one of the parents can be very traumatic for youth individuals. Moreover some jobs are very stressful and can bring workers into a particular state of mind, which can be dangerous for the physical and psychic health of the person. Also the problem of all the jobs is the tiring caused by too much hour of work. This concerns are intensified by the problem that not everyone can do the job of his dreams and so have to work only for earn money. Unluckily nowadays is really easy to find people who works only to earn money, and not for personal a vocation.

On the other hand the job, for many people, is a purpose of life. For example for a medic saves life can be not only a work but also a source of happiness. Moreover do well job can be the way through a person find self confidence. Also work is important for the young generations because is a way to gain independence from the family.

All this reasons can make a job really satisfying not only regarding the economical side but also from the human point of view.

Undergraduate / 'the cosmopolitanism of UK' - Personal statement, economics university in UK [3]

Nothing so difficult as a beginning perhaps the end; so apologize my abrupt start
I want to study economy because of my passion and fondness for research and analysis of the causes.
This fondness allows me, through logic and deduction, to arrive at a conclusion or prediction usually faster then other people. Since i was a child it was simple for me the study scientific and classics subjects thanks to my ability to have a general and schematic vision of the topics.

Having a global vision of the topic and finding the effects of various causes through the logic and deduction determinate also my passions, first of all history, because doubtless is the study of the causes and effects of men s actions . Because of this I think to be suitable to a university in which give importance to the analysis of information and to the logical prediction

Even if the school I attended wasn't based on scientific subjects it had allowed me to open the mind and to see the world at 360 degrees without being influenced by the choices of other people. I am able to reason with my own head and take into account, when i have a problem to resolve, not only the most obvious information, but also less obvious and apparently useless data. Subjects such as ancient Greek and Latin allows me to have a better approach to foreign languages ​​not only thanks to the training done in studying them but also because they are the foundation of almost all European languages​​. The philosophy makes me see the world not only from mine point of view but it makes me understand it trough of the greatest minds that ever existed. The story makes me understand how operate the masses and the individual in society and how their choices affect the course of history itself. My hobbies are chess, because it is a game where you have to predict and anticipate the moves of the opponent, reading and collecting of banknotes and stamps. I have been practicing hockey for 4 years and this has improved my work team ability and my interaction with different people. I also did theater, which has helped me to express myself more clearly and without emotion in front of a large audience. Finally now I'm practicing Muay Thai, a martial art that allows distress myself and to stay calm even in the most difficult situations.

Another reason for wanting to study in your university is that I consider the education UK system better then the Italian an Romanian one. This summer I had the good fortune to spend 2 weeks in London where I had both a scholastic and human wonderful experience . In fact I did a course at British study center. What I loved of the UK is the cosmopolitanism and the multinationals of this country. I also think to be a good candidate because i m easily adaptable to a foreign country indeed as a child I already emigrated from my country of origin, Romania, in Italy and despite of the difficulties of racism and discrimination i was been able to grow in a discreet way and to attend one of the most difficult Italian school address. I passed this test that I think has strengthened my character not only allowing me to be much more easily adaptable but also to understand and fight against racism.

But by a so short description like this you can not understand a person and all his limits and potentialities, because of that I hope I have made you a glimpse of my abilities. I hope to begin an adventure that will take me away from home for 4 long years, an experience that will change my life. I do not deny that im afraid to try to rebuild all the friendships, start a new life, far from home and where no one can help me, forced to grow and perform all the daily activities that at home I delegate to my mother, but in the end, life is one and my fears will never stop me and I'll prove it if you will give me the chance to do it.