marielnl94
Dec 17, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Iqbal's story' - Spanish native speaker but I am applying for a US college [10]
Hi!
I am a Spanish native speaker but I am applying for a US college. I would like some help on my essays. This is my main commonapp.org essay, and describes how a work of art (Literature) has influenced my life.
Please feel free to comment and correct grammar, vocabulary, etc. as many times as needed.
Thanks
Reading is like traveling. I agree because whilst reading one can see realities one did not know existed. This happened to me when I read Iqbal by Francesco D'Adamo in 8th grade. At that moment, I was certain the world was imperfect, but I could not see its cruelty. As I read those pages, I proved how mean it can be. Moreover, I was sure there was a world for me to explore and millions of needing children whom I was determined to aid.
The book's most important influence on me is the commitment to a cause. I learnt from this book is that no one is too young to fight. This is what schools should teach. If you are courageous and certain of your cause, it is never too soon or too late to fight. Iqbal was the first person to show me that. People often think children or teenagers are not able or should not stand up for themselves. This book shows the opposite. Who should be more committed to a cause than us? We have the power of change, we can still dream. Those dreams are never dead as long as we fight. Iqbal proved that if slavery exists nowadays, so should the dream of freedom. It does not matter if you are aged 60 or 8 as long as you still dream. In this book, a child works in a carpet factory as a slave. He barely survives. Yet he knows life is outside and it is accessible to all as long as one commits to fight for it. Thanks to his perseverance, he was able freed and continued struggling for his cause. Hope is the power of the world. We all have that power.
Yet the world is not such a perfect place. That is the other lesson I got from the novel. The murder of Iqbal and the impunity of the murderer should shock the world. They changed me. Yes, we all have that power if we commit. But the world is not always fair and just. Besides fighting for our cause, we must be prepared to defend it from those who cannot understand it. Sometimes, it will take our lives away. Nonetheless, our lives will have served a cause beyond us. They, just like Iqbal's life, will inspire thousands of other people to act. Iqbal proves death is sometimes just the mere beginning of a greater struggle: the struggle of the just in the unfair world.
This book changed me because it empowered me. It made me believe change depends on you. Because of this book, I was able to go to Kenya and see how children live in one of the most hostile regions of the world. I was able to aid them. Again, this experience showed me that there is a wide range of things to learn and of things to change. Nevertheless, you cannot always change them. They change you, and that is where it all begins.
Hi!
I am a Spanish native speaker but I am applying for a US college. I would like some help on my essays. This is my main commonapp.org essay, and describes how a work of art (Literature) has influenced my life.
Please feel free to comment and correct grammar, vocabulary, etc. as many times as needed.
Thanks
Reading is like traveling. I agree because whilst reading one can see realities one did not know existed. This happened to me when I read Iqbal by Francesco D'Adamo in 8th grade. At that moment, I was certain the world was imperfect, but I could not see its cruelty. As I read those pages, I proved how mean it can be. Moreover, I was sure there was a world for me to explore and millions of needing children whom I was determined to aid.
The book's most important influence on me is the commitment to a cause. I learnt from this book is that no one is too young to fight. This is what schools should teach. If you are courageous and certain of your cause, it is never too soon or too late to fight. Iqbal was the first person to show me that. People often think children or teenagers are not able or should not stand up for themselves. This book shows the opposite. Who should be more committed to a cause than us? We have the power of change, we can still dream. Those dreams are never dead as long as we fight. Iqbal proved that if slavery exists nowadays, so should the dream of freedom. It does not matter if you are aged 60 or 8 as long as you still dream. In this book, a child works in a carpet factory as a slave. He barely survives. Yet he knows life is outside and it is accessible to all as long as one commits to fight for it. Thanks to his perseverance, he was able freed and continued struggling for his cause. Hope is the power of the world. We all have that power.
Yet the world is not such a perfect place. That is the other lesson I got from the novel. The murder of Iqbal and the impunity of the murderer should shock the world. They changed me. Yes, we all have that power if we commit. But the world is not always fair and just. Besides fighting for our cause, we must be prepared to defend it from those who cannot understand it. Sometimes, it will take our lives away. Nonetheless, our lives will have served a cause beyond us. They, just like Iqbal's life, will inspire thousands of other people to act. Iqbal proves death is sometimes just the mere beginning of a greater struggle: the struggle of the just in the unfair world.
This book changed me because it empowered me. It made me believe change depends on you. Because of this book, I was able to go to Kenya and see how children live in one of the most hostile regions of the world. I was able to aid them. Again, this experience showed me that there is a wide range of things to learn and of things to change. Nevertheless, you cannot always change them. They change you, and that is where it all begins.