Writing Feedback / IELTS,ESSAY with topic Relationship between different countries [5]

I'm gonna take the test in next few days, I would highly appreciate ur valuable comments on it, THX :)

Some people claim that in modern world, good relationship between different countries is more important than before. To what extant do u agree or disagress?

When it comes to the discussion about whether harmonizing relationship between different countries today becomes more significant than before, people hold various kinds of views. It is high time for us to review the truth behind this issue.

On one side of the picture, some proponents reason that collaboration between countries in modern world is quiet crucial because of the promotion of economic globalization and the song of anti-war. I suppose the importance of good relationship play more dominant role than a century before. Specifically, with the pace of economic globalization, which aims to flourish the economy of entire world, each country is willing, even be force, to keep friendly toward the global market. Apparently, those countries benefit from this revolution of the whole world. The production efficiency, for instant, has been enhanced since the increasing competition pushes it and the advanced technologies benefit it. In addition, the result of economic globalization makes the fund in market runs into superior investment. With regard to anti-war, the majority of individuals call for peace today. Nothing is more adorable than peace for people in the period of postwar. Therefore, the harmonizing relationship not only improves the economy, but also keeps the world from wartime.

On the other side of the picture, though a number of critics argue that cooperation among countries was important in the last century as well and that it is the cognition of cooperation that raised the economic globalization, we can clearly find that the relationship between country to country gets better that before and that the hope of mutual communication between countries is stronger.

All in all, I suppose that good relationship between countries gets more crucial than before.

Writing Feedback / 'museum can attract visitors' - [ielts] topic with museum [8]

I have learnt 4-paragraph structure today and applied to this essay. PLZZZZZ give me some comments .

Some people believe that the purpose of museums is to entertain, while others argue that museums are built for education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some museums tend to focus on entertain, while others are more educative. Personally, I believe that museum can and should synthesis the aspects of entertain and education.

Clearly, a great number of museums, especially the kind of art, attract visitors through some entertain activities. There is no doubt that people have got sufficient theoretical knowledge in the text book and suffer from much pressure in study; therefore, few of them prefer to visit a boring place, just like extra schooling, in leisure time. In this case, providing different activities related to the exhibition, museum is more adorable towards individuals.

However, it offers a chance for people to obtain knowledge in terms of the educative kind of museums. The initial purpose of museum is showing something that visitors did not previously know and expending their outlooks. For instant, teachers will organize students to go to special museum, such as history science and finance museums, for sake of educating students by complemented knowledge.

On balance, the combination of entertain and education can best achieve the main goal of museum. It is unnecessary for people to obtain information mechanically in museum during free time. In other word, museum can attract visitors by building a relaxing atmosphere, a methodology bringing about the same result-enriching people`s knowledge. Moreover, visitors will easier to remember the information related to the activities they experienced in the exhibition. Hence, the combination caters the initial purpose of the museum more successfully, allowing people to obtain knowledge in a more easy way.

Writing Feedback / Annual spending by a British school in 1981 - ielts task1 [11]

from cambridge ielts 8 test 2

The three pie charts indicate the figure of annual spending by a certain British school in 1981, 1991 and 2001 respectively.

As is the case with teachers` salaries occupied the largest percentage in 3 years while the cost in insurance produced the smallest. However, the proportion of insurance spending was increasingly high.

In 1981, the school spent 40% cost on teachers` salaries, followed by other workers` salaries (28%). In terms of resources and furniture and equipment, both of them cost the same, with 15%. Spending in insurance only made up 2%.

After a decade, the costs of teachers` salaries and resources increased 10% and 5% respectively, while there were decreases in those of other workers` salaries and furniture and equipment.

Compared to those of 1991, the spending of salaries and resources dropped by the range of 5% to 10%. By contrast, costs in other two aspects, insurance and furniture and equipment, raised dramatically, constituting 8% and 23% respectively.

Writing Feedback / 'the development of science' - IELTS TASK2- TECHNOLOGY [10]

Some people think technology is better for improving the environment than living simpler life. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the quantity of innovation is rise and rise because of scientists` effort. While some people consider technology ought to make people`s life simpler rather than to protect and improve the environment, I suppose that technology plays a dominant role in the field of environmental friendly.

It is no doubt that our living environment has been damaged for many years. Especially in last century, government encouraged manufacturers to enlarge the scale of manufacturing blindly regardless of heavily ruining living environment. Therefore, technology, which is allocated uncountable money in, should pay for its initial responsibility-correct ancestors` wrong decision. At least, it is expected that new technology is able to better the environment as comfortable as a hundred century ago.

Moreover, with the development of science, innovation cannot meet our requirement today. Since a great number of problems involved environment are yet tackled, such as the over-rely-on the fossil fuels and discharge of waste water, technology has long way to go. First of all, high-tech innovations are proposed to find out new, clean and economical resources to alter the exited fuels, reducing CO2 and H2S. Second, purifying the waste water is also crucial. Either cleaning the materials before manufacturing or purifying the remains before discharge can address the problem efficiently. Last but not least, the efficiency of manufacturing should be enhanced, decreasing the time of producing so that can reduce the polluted air emission from the factory.

In conclusion, rather than simplify people`s life, technology is expected to improve the environment. Only having better living environment can human being live healthier and longer, an achievement that is more significant than anything.

:-)))any comments are appreciated.