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Name: Ashhar Hussain
Joined: Feb 23, 2017
Last Post: Apr 18, 2017
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School: NED University of Engineering and Technology, Pakistan

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eiriashhar   
Apr 18, 2017
Graduate / An individual beyond grades and test scores; Personal Statement for Graduate Admission for Korea [4]

@Holt
Hi Holt, I know you are busy but I hope when you return, you can guide me with this. I have been provided with a new guideline for this essay from the university (attaching the images of email), according to which I only have to write on any one of the four topics in 100-200 words, which means now I only have to pick a single one among the four. To be honest, I am confused which of the four parts of my essay should I pick in order to deliver the best impression. Since, you are too much experienced in this regard, I would be really glad if you could guide me. Thanks a lot for all your help :)



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eiriashhar   
Apr 16, 2017
Graduate / An individual beyond grades and test scores; Personal Statement for Graduate Admission for Korea [4]

@Holt
OK, I have done the edits, you should check them. I would be really glad if you could tell me if there are ways to make the transitions better. Since I have to stay within the word limit (800) I couldn't be much creative, but I know you could. Thanks a lot for all your help. Here it is,

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I followed up on my innate enthusiasm for science and mathematics by attending NED University of Engineering and Technology for my undergraduate education. Overall, my life at NED University was a fulfilling journey. I was an active member of my university's Society of Polymer and Petrochemical Engineers (SPPE), a departmental society dedicated to maintain university-industry relationship. However, there was a time when balancing my studies, social life and extracurricular activities became a tough challenge for me. It also affected my grades. Although many people advised me to quit working for the society, which at that time did seem as the best possible solution, I didn't do so as I didn't want to give up. Rather, I centered my efforts to organize and prioritize my studies and extracurriculars in a way to make the most of both. With hard work and determination, I learnt to manage not only my studies and activities, but also achieved 1st position in my batch in my junior and senior year. After years of dedication and hard work, I graduated from my university standing at rank 6th in a batch of 54 students. Currently, I am expecting my B.E. degree in Polymer and Petrochemical Engineering.

As a result of multidisciplinary training, my diverse skills and perspectives have shaped my academic and career goals in unique ways. I had done internships in General Tyres Pakistan, the leading tire manufacturers in Pakistan, and in Tri-Pack Films Limited, a Pakistani affiliate of Mitsubishi Corporation. While my internship at General Tyres provided me with real-time experience of working in an industry, my experience at Tri-Pack Films taught me how greatly I can take part in solving the issues faced during production and in making the processing more efficient. At Tri-Pack, I was assigned with three projects associated with the issues they were facing at BOPP film line, namely, Fish Eye problem, MD Corrugation issue and Inadequate Cooling at Winder zone. With hard work, and with the help of my coworkers, I not only managed to provided solutions for the assigned projects successfully but also managed to accomplish two more projects within the designated tenure, which includes prolongation of corona treatment's effect and optimizing the production speed of shrink films from 250m/min to the maximum capacity of 300m/min. My efforts earned me the praises of all the executive officers along with an offer for job position at the firm once I would graduate. My internships provided me with great working experience but also left me with an unanswered question, how to deal with the tons of waste that would be generated once these materials meet their end usage? This has given me the insight to conduct research to deal with this issue in the past and is also the center of my future research goals.

At [University], innovation and future-oriented practical research is always appreciated. Furthermore, the Department of Chemical Engineering offers a radical curriculum with courses centering on organic chemistry, polymer engineering, electrochemistry, and catalysis that can provide me with knowledge necessary to carry research to promote a sustainable environment. There are also the labs dedicated to Polymer and Electrochemistry and Process Engineering that I am very interested to join. Since, my research interest is much similar to the projects at these labs, I believe they will provide me with the perfect ground to materialize my ideas. If given the chance, I would also like to assist with the existing projects in these laboratories. This will provide me with more opportunities to learn new things in the field. [University] is undoubtedly an ideal place for me to learn and make the most of my abilities. The globalized multicultural setting of [University] will provide me with many opportunities that can help to make me a better person. I have proved myself a good leader time after time until now. Emerging as a global leader in a multicultural and competitive environment as South Korea is a challenge I am really looking forward to.

After graduation, I would like to practice my profession in Korea as a researcher in an automotive industry. With Korea being a pioneer in the automotive sector, I believe working in Korea will provide me the chance to pursue my career and professional goals effectively. Primarily, I want to dedicate my time and efforts on research focused to make automobiles more durable, safe, efficient and environmental friendly. This will provide me with the opportunity to make the most of my knowledge to learn and understand the real-time practices and considerations in the industry.

Once I return to Pakistan, I would like to acquire a position as R&D manager in an automotive industry such as Indus Motors. As the current state of Pakistan's automotive industry needs much development, while the automotive market has a lot to offer, acquiring this role will provide me with the chance to introduce state-of-the-art technologies and novel techniques for the development of the country's automotive sector. I believe the training and experiences I would have in in Korea will assist me immensely in reaching this goal. Furthermore, I would also join my alma mater in Pakistan to establish bilateral relations between it and [University] as an alumnus, to bring both institutions closer while strengthening the bond between both countries for mutual growth for a prosperous future.

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I just worked on making the essay continuous, so the content is almost the same. If there are things that needs edits other than the transitions, do tell me too. I will be really grateful. Thank you once again!
eiriashhar   
Apr 15, 2017
Scholarship / Discuss the disappointments, failure, or risks in your life so far and your responses to them [5]

@Bluemoom
Hi friend. Perhaps we are on the same boat.

Anyways, its 'that I cheated' in 'even the teacher who thought at first the I cheated'.
Furthermore, it seemed to me as a bit childish. You are applying for graduate school, right? Using sentences like "they kept begging to me" or "I still remember that look my classmates had in their faces" might pass for a grade schooler but using them now at this age just shows you couldn't get over with that anger/hatred. Its not a formal way of writing. You should correct it.

Hope it helps :)
eiriashhar   
Apr 15, 2017
Scholarship / Specific examples of dealing with difficult situation, providing a good change [4]

@missayufitri
Hello Ayu, First of all, good luck for whatever the purpose you are writing this essay for.

Now, to begin with, are you still teaching at that institution? If yes, why have you selected the present perfect tense rather than the present continuous one? There are a lot of tense conflicts which are making the presentation weak. Furthermore, please write [name-1] and [name-2] for more than one institution/place (for readers ease at forum). It's quite confusing this way, specially in the second paragraph.

As for the material, I believe you need to be a bit more detailed. Rather than just saying you are equipped with various teaching and learning resources, it would be a bit better if you could explain what techniques you have used. Do you mean to say you are relying on multiple English language books while the rest of the staff uses just one? If that's the case than I would say, you haven't done anything attractive for the reader to pick his interest, its just that the rest of the staff are way too lazy. It doesn't say much about your leadership knowledge, skills or practice either. I believe, you better include some more concrete reasons in your support.

Sorry if I sound sarcastic. Anyhow, I hope it helps. See you :)
eiriashhar   
Apr 15, 2017
Graduate / An individual beyond grades and test scores; Personal Statement for Graduate Admission for Korea [4]

Hi, everyone, Hello Holt! I am back again, this time with a Personal Statement for University Admission in Korea. I am quite thankful for all your efforts last time-you are a life savior, and I hope you could help me this time as well to make this statement perfect. I would be highly grateful. Thank you :)

Describe why you are applying for [University].

What is your plan after you graduate [University]?

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P.S. When writing this essay, is it better to write it in continuum or should I write it the way I have written it above, i.e. in a question answer format. I am a bit confused with that. Thanks a lot in advance.
eiriashhar   
Mar 11, 2017
Writing Feedback / How a solar powered water pump works [5]

@eiriashhar
OK mistakenly posted only half message first. Here's the full one.

First, Solar powered pump does not generate water, they generate electricity for pump to suck water from ground level (solar power cells absorb light ...).

Second, your way of defining the process is wrong. it requires some supporting equipment. They are solar panel ... Diagrams showing a process aspect are supposed to be explained in a step by step manner. For example, in this case, When subjected to sunlight, the photovoltaic cells in the solar panel generates DC power, which is then used to drive the motor of the bore pump. The pump then sucks water from the underground well which is then collected in a storage tank before distributing it to the village.

There are some conceptional mistakes as well in your essay, such as Solar cells collect light not capture it and DC power is not an equipment but a form of electricity. Hope it helps.
eiriashhar   
Mar 11, 2017
Scholarship / Home benefits; being in a position to assist my country, Nigeria (Commonwealth shared scholarship). [5]

@ChiObi
Its the future goal essay, right? Or is it the study plan itself. It do answers the given prompt but not enough. In the first paragraph, rather than just relating your whole study plan in single line makes the presentation loose, Studying a Master's in Public Health (...) deteriorating the public health sector of the economy. Rather than just saying the masters program will help you, it would be much better if you could explain how your courses and your research/thesis would work to benefit Nigeria in a more explanatory way. Work on it and then we will see how to move forward on working on your presentation. Good luck
eiriashhar   
Mar 11, 2017
Scholarship / Repaying the gratitude and appreciation to Korea - Future Goal for KGSP Scholarship [3]

Hi guys, especially my dear friend Mary (Holt).

This is the final part of application, i.e. Future plan. I would be really glad to hear your suggestions to make it concrete and better. I would be sincerely grateful for you feedback.

I also have a question, do we need to provide a title for these essays (Study plan & Future goal)? Why is there a column given in form (picture attached for understanding).

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the bond between Pakistan and korea



After graduation, I would like to continue and practice my profession in Korea as a researcher in an automotive industry. With Korea being one of the pioneers in the automotive sector, I believe working in Korea will provide me the chance to pursue my career and professional goals. For this, I am aiming to get a position in research in a large automotive firm such as Hyundai Motors Co. or Kia Motor Corporation, that are actively participating to bring in new innovations in the field. Primarily, I want to dedicate my time and efforts on research focused to make automobiles more durable, safe and efficient as well as environmental friendly. I would also like to research on the possibility to discover practical methods to make electric vehicles more energy efficient with increased mileage to increase their popularity in public and in turn to reduce CO2 emissions. This will provide me with the opportunity and with firsthand experience to make the most of my knowledge to learn and understand the real-time practices and considerations in the industry.

Besides being a researcher, I have plans to volunteer as a lecturer to teach at an institution in Korea. As I strongly believe that knowledge once gained is deemed to be spread to others, I want to pass my knowledge of the field to the new minds. I want to motivate younger generations through my work and life experiences to apply their abilities for a better future of the country as well. This is to express my gratitude and appreciation to Korea for the scholarship opportunity that was provided to me.

While I stay in Korea, I also want to actively participate in promoting Korean Culture as I am very much attracted to Korean custom and tradition. Likewise, I would love to practice my culture as a Pakistani with my Korean friends as well to foster mutual understanding and promote friendship.

Once I return to Pakistan, I would like to acquire a position as research and development manager in an automotive industry such as Indus Motors or Pak Suzuki Motors. As the current state of Pakistan's automotive industry needs much development, while the automotive market has a lot to offer, acquiring this role will provide me with the chance to introduce state-of-the-art technologies and novel techniques for the development of the country's automotive manufacturing sector. I believe the training and experiences I would have in in Korea will assist me immensely in reaching this goal. I would also join my alma mater in Pakistan to establish bilateral relations between it and my academe in Korea as an alumnus, to bring both institutions closer while strengthening the bond between both countries for mutual growth for a prosperous future.

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Thanks a lot again :)



  • The red marked box, are they places to write titles?
eiriashhar   
Mar 10, 2017
Scholarship / KGSP Study Plan - Reducing pollution to make a better future to live in [6]

@Holt
Thanks a lot Holt. I am truly grateful for your help. Since you are saying its ready, then I am positive. As for the length, yeah its a little over a page right now, but since study plan is a part of Statement of Purpose section which includes both study plan as well as future goal and need to be within two pages, I am planning to write the future goal shorter to adjust both of them in two pages (I hope I am right). Now I will focus on the future goal section. So I will see you again there. Thanks a a lot again.

I am attaching the image of the form, and would be glad if you could tell whether I am right regarding the length theory.



  • Statement of pupose form
eiriashhar   
Mar 10, 2017
Writing Feedback / Many children have difficulty paying attention and concentrating in their classes at school [6]

@Okaeef
OK to begin with, your opening statement is grammatically incorrect. how a quite difficult to children to concentrate ..., it should be how difficult it is for children to concentrate.... To add fuel to fire, the statement is giving the wrong idea. I mean concentrate with their teacher on what? Plus, there is no such thing as 'plethora number'. Plethora itself means 'a lot of', it would be better to say 'a plethora of people', but to be honest, it feels strange rather than appealing. You can put a better impression by just saying 'plenty of people' instead.

Are you using word's Thesaurus for lexical resource? If yes then don't do it. In English, there is a thing called subject-verb agreement. Not all verbs with same meaning can be used in every context. For instance, we can say 'Cars consume fuel' but can we say 'humans consume food'? No. For humans, the appropriate word is eat, although both words have more or less same meaning.

The first para is meant to paraphrase your subject, and provide a clear topic statement on which you will further develop your essay.

Start from the beginning. It has too many mistakes to point out in a single post. Right now, the essay is hardly a 4.
eiriashhar   
Mar 8, 2017
Undergraduate / Essay for NTU SCHOLARSHIP - A value that I hold strongly to. [3]

@Jasmine855
I think you should replace the word anger with a softer one, like displeased, but angered itself is not such a bad word itself. Anyhow, your essay lacks a concluding statement. Ending it at a phase where you are criticizing others is not a good way to end an essay. Hope it helps!
eiriashhar   
Mar 8, 2017
Graduate / Autobiography for Master of the International Institute of Medical Device Innovation (MDI) [8]

@makila0123
You are actually being too honest. The review is usually not interested in your life conflicts. Moreover, including it in your essay that you were unsure whether to do masters or to pursue job is like axing your own feet. Seriously this show your lack of determination. I advice you to remove this from your essay if you are actually willing to get your essay considered.
eiriashhar   
Mar 8, 2017
Scholarship / KGSP Study Plan - Reducing pollution to make a better future to live in [6]

Hi guys,
This is my study plan for KGSP scholarship, please help me make it more compelling to the reviewer. Thanks in advanced.
@Holt Please review it, your advice alone means a lot. Thanks a million for your non-stop effort.

the path to realize my master's research



The decision of moving towards pursuing my master's degree soon after getting my bachelor's one is accompanied with a clear goal. With the strong knowledge in the field of Polymer Engineering that I have earned in my bachelor's program still fresh in my mind, and the knowledge that I would gain during my higher studies at the department of Energy and Chemical Engineering at XYZ institute, the path to realize my master's research opens greater possibilities. Hence, by learning more about inorganic and organic material chemistry through the energy and chemical engineering program, I hope my study could bring a greater benefit not only for the material industry but for the energy sector as well.

During my period as a master's student at XYZ, I am interested to do a research on exploring newer possibilities with 3D printing, particularly on the FDM technology. 3D printing is the pioneer of manufacturing industry in the present world and provides excellent results in making prototypes and custom shaped complex parts in less time and with reduced cost. According to UK Trade & Investment, 3D printing is one of the major South Korea's growth engines for the future. As 3D printing grows in popularity and with projects being scaled in every industry, it will also fuel the global consumption of polymeric products, and consequently polymeric waste materials as well. Although the plastic recycling and reprocessing rates are considerably high, physical properties and economical values of the recycled plastics are significantly low, limiting the reuse of recycled plastics in many industrial applications. Nevertheless, by integrating nanotechnology into recycling technology, we can not only enhance the quality of the recycled end products but can also make plastic recycling more commercially attractive.

3D printing has remained a focus of research since the last two decades, with studies limited to not only the material engineering sector but also in the area of chemical engineering and biotechnology. However, there remains a lot of room for further research as not many materials can be used when it comes to 3D printing due to the difficulties associated with the parameters regarding successful molding. Therefore, owing to these concerns, I am interested in working on making a nanocomposite filament for Fused Deposition Modeling from recycled commodity polymers like HDPE and PP, while also determining their processing conditions. The aim of this research is to produce economically appealing high strength filaments for 3D printing while also reducing plastic pollution.

While HDPE and PP are the most common commodity polymers, not much work has been done on them as feed for 3D printing. As the annual waste generated by these polymers is quite high, recycling them for using as 3D printing filament will not only cut down the burden on solid waste management, but will also make 3D printing cheaper for making things such as living hinges etc. that are best made from such polymers. Moreover, depending on the application, different nano filler reinforcement materials can be integrated in this study. These may range from the seemingly promising graphene nanotubes, to produce ultra-high strength filaments of excellent electrical properties that could be used for manufacturing high performance batteries, supercapacitors and aircraft parts, to inexpensive nanoclays that can be used to produce filaments of suitably high strength and toughness for its application in automotive industries. As various methods to incorporate these nano fillers in polymer matrix are already present, the research may emphasis on producing filaments from them through melt extrusion, and then studying their physical and thermal properties including tensile strength, Young's modulus and MFI for effective 3D printing.

The outcomes from this practically focused research can benefit several different industries, including aerospace industry, automotive industry, as well as electronic industry, and at the same time will reduce the impact of plastic waste on the environment.

At XYZ, innovation and research focused on practical use to build a better society is always appreciated. Furthermore, the Department of Energy and Chemical Engineering offers a radical curriculum with key courses such as Advance Organic Chemistry, Advanced Energy Materials and Advanced Rheology, that can provide me with immediate knowledge necessary for my research. There is also the Lab dedicated to Polymer Processing Research in the department that I am very interested to join. One of the main focuses of the Polymer Processing Researching Lab is the recycling of wasted polymers, which I hope will help me greatly with my research. This makes XYZ an ideal ground for me to carry on my further studies.

I sought for an institution that could offer not only great teaching, but could also provide the individual with versatility, with the capacity to add to society, and with the constant desire to grow and seek self-improvement and with the way to go after it. I believe that XYZ will help me in accomplishing this goal.
eiriashhar   
Mar 8, 2017
Writing Feedback / Car Ownership increasing big traffic jams [4]

Where are you writing this essay for? Is it for IELTS? If yes then it seems good although you can introduce better lexical resource in the context, plus its better if you could paraphase the topic sentence a bit more, something like Due to this, most metropolis these days are being marked as 'one big traffic jam'. Try not only to change the vocabulary while paraphrasing but also change the sentence structure. This shows your command and efficiency over the language.
eiriashhar   
Feb 24, 2017
Scholarship / Self-introduction Essay For KGSP 2017 _ At the doorstep of my dreams [3]

Dear all, I have written my self-introduction essay for KGSP scholarship 2017. To be honest, there is to much that I wanted to write but the essay should remain within the length of one page, and I am still not able to condense it. Since all that I have written are important experiences of my life, its hard for me to chose what should I keep and what should I remove or summarize. Please help me make my essay concrete and concise. I would be highly thankful.

my life has taught me many lessons



Born in a middle class family of five, that has always prioritized education over everything else, my life has taught me many lessons. My father is a salaryman in a private firm and the sole supporter of my family while mother is a housewife. Life was not always a bed of roses, but we're taught to remain positive through the ebbs and flows of life and take them as learning experiences. I went to a private school for my early education till tenth grade. As a child, I have noticed how my parents sacrificed their needs in order to pay for my tuition expenses on time. Although I was young, it developed a sense of responsibility in me that I should repay them by making the most of my studies, so I never gave anything less than my best. As a result, my academic achievements throughout my school life was of top grade. While my keen interest in academics is instilled in me by my mother, who had always taught me that its education that makes the difference, I have inherited my strong leadership qualities and upright character from my father. My father has always been my role model. He has always advised me to keep on working hard to fulfill my dreams, and that failure is not something to be afraid of but a lesson to learn from. His words had helped in coping up against all the hardships I have suffered and will surely be there to help me in difficult times in future.

As I grew up, I realized my keen interest in chemistry. The decomposition and recreation of matter as a kid seemed wonders to me. My fascination compelled me to delve more and more into it and by the time I gained my admission in NED University of Engineering and Technology, one of the prestigious engineering institutes of Pakistan, it become bases for me in selecting the multidisciplinary field of Polymer and Petrochemical Engineering as my Major. I have always enjoyed my field, especially because it revolves not only around the chemical industry but also deals with the environment safety and with polymeric material synthesis and processing which are indeed revolutionary in the material world.

My life at NED University was filled with many swirls and twirls but overall it was a fulfilling journey. I was an active member of my university's Society of Polymer and Petrochemical Engineers, a departmental society dedicated to maintain university-industry relationship. I was also a part of the NED Green Society. The campaigns and activities I experienced there made me realize my responsibilities as an engineer in creating a sustainable and healthy environment. At first, balancing my studies, social life and extracurricular activities became a tough challenge for me. It also affected my grades. Yet with hard work and determination, I learnt to manage not only my studies and activities, but also achieved 1st position in my batch in my fifth and seventh semester. After years of dedication and hard work, I graduated from my university standing at rank 6th in a batch of 54 students. Currently I am expecting my degree in B.E. Polymer and Petrochemical Engineering.

I have always been eager to make the most of my abilities, but due to the scarcity of funds and limited technology in Pakistan, I get forced to keep my ideas limited time and again. For my undergraduate final year project, I, along with my group members, initially wanted to work on optimizing the Reverse Water-Gas Shift Reaction to produce hydrocarbon fuel in order to find a way to make the process industrially feasible. But due to the unavailability of the required technology and with no one to sponsor the project, we had to switch to a more economical one which was developing a Durable and Eco Friendly Oil Resistive Sealant for Asphalt Pavements by Replacing Coal tar with Polymer as Additive. The idea sparked in my mind after reading an article regarding harmful effects to life and environment by PAHs released by Coal tar pavement sealants. However, this time, the availability of materials was a big issue, since our resources and time were limited. In the end, we opted to perform quantitative analysis on the effects of recycled tire rubber waste on asphalt pavement to increase its stability and water resistance - a project never before conducted domestically, keeping in mind the economic state of Pakistan and the poor condition of its road network. The project ended up as big success and is now being considered by National Highway Authority, Pakistan, for its implementation on the upcoming M9 Motorway project.

As a person, I am quite inquisitive. I have always found myself eager to learn and try everything that I found interesting, no matter how difficult or different it is. Since childhood it has been my motto that, "If somebody else can do it then why can't I?" This belief had supported me to cherish so many different hobbies that have made me now a multi-talented person. At the age of twelve, I started Making movies on fiction scripts. It began as a hobby and resulted in fostering my leadership skills, teamwork, dedication and hard work. It also honed my skills on various editing software programs including adobe after effects, premier pro and Photoshop. I have also enjoyed writing novels in English as a freelance author. This hobby of mine began as a self-challenge to my abilities, but resulted in improving not only my writing skills and English language ability drastically but also heightened my insight, and fostered philosophic thinking. Meeting the deadlines also helped me with more punctual and dedicated to work.

I had done internships in General Tyres Pakistan, the leading tire manufacturers in Pakistan, and in Tripack Films Limited, a joint venture between Mitsubishi Corporation of Japan and Packages Limited of Pakistan. While my internship at General Tyres provided me with real-time experience of working in an industry, my experience at Tripack Films taught me what as an engineer I have to offer to an industry and how greatly I can take part in solving the issues faced during production and in making the processing safer for the workers and staff. For the internship period at Tripack, I was assigned with three projects associated with the problems they were facing at BOPP film line namely Fish eye problem, MD corrugation issue, and Cooling system improvement at Winder zone. With hard work and determination, and with the help of the co-workers and staff, I managed to not only provide solutions for the assigned projects successfully, but also managed to engage and complete two more projects within the designated tenure, which includes prolongation of corona treatment's effect for film printing and proposition of values of associated parameters for increasing the production speed of shrink films from 250m/min to the maximum 300m/min. Recently, I have also experienced an industrial visit at Lotte Petrochemicals Pakistan. The environment and the state of the art technologies I witnessed there, intrigued my interest whether it was due to the influence of South Korea's robust industrial status. This made me realize how essential it is for me as an engineer to keep on learning and remaining up to date with the recent researches and technologies. It also ignited a desire in me to learn and understand more about how chemical industries in Korea do their operations and the reason as to why they do it on a certain way.

I have always taken pride in learning new languages. When I was in eighth grade, I started learning German with no resources or teacher but with a book I found in my uncle's collection. Although I could only learn bits at that time, I now am fluent in English, and can also speak and understand much of Japanese. I have also been learning Korean for some time and can now understand basic sentences and structures

East Asian cultures have never failed to amaze me. It fascinates me how Korea, being such a highly developed country, has its rich culture still vibrant throughout the state. Korean language, its festivals such as "Seollal" and "Chuseok" make me love Korean culture more and more. I believe there is too much for me to learn from it that can help to make me a better person. Furthermore, I have proved myself time after time as a good leader domestically. Emerging as a global leader in a multicultural and competitive environment as South Korea is a challenge I am really looking forward to.

South Korea has been a pioneer in research and development sector with researches spreading far and wide in every field of study. The notable researches such as the AmVeh car that fuels on ammonia, the continuous researches for capturing CO2 and converting it into fuel since early 2000 and many other prominent contributions in the field of clean energy and chemical engineering that I have come across have made me realize that more than a dream, it's my necessity to continue my studies in Korea in order to achieve what I really want to do and contribute my share to make the society a better and cleaner place to live.

If given the chance to be accepted in the program, it would not only open limitless opportunities for me to grow and continue my studies and research for developing a sustainable environment in the most efficient manner but would also help me in creating a better future for my family and for both countries.

P.S. I am applying through the university track. Do I have to include things about the university I am applying to? What should I include in it about the university to make my essay compelling?
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