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Posts by Cay nho [Suspended]
Name: Nguyendiep
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Last Post: Jul 29, 2019
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Cay nho   
Jul 29, 2019
Writing Feedback / Group learning or individual learning is better? [5]

I agree with you that your opinion should be more clearer
The last sentence in the introduction is not complete
Grammar mistakes : on their own
a group includes, others, developing
Cay nho   
Jul 28, 2019
Writing Feedback / Some people think that GM crops are a positive development. Others argue that they are dangerous [2]

GM food : benefits and drawback



Some people think that GM crops are a positive development. Others argue that they are potentially dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

With the fast development of technology, GM crops are prevalent in modern-day society. Some people argue that these crops are a significant advancement while others claim that they are associated with potential problems. Both viewpoints will be discussed and critically evaluated before a final conclusion is drawn.

On the upside, there are plausible reasons why people advocate the development of genetic modification. To begin with, it provides the food security for people all over the world. Recently, while many cities are now facing with worldwide problems such as overpopulation and catastrophe, it is essential to cater the sufficient amount of food for the underprivileged who struggle with disastrous effect and impoverished conditions. In addition, transgenic crops can promote food quality and hygiene at desirable attributes m. Since the modernization and industrialization society is developing rapidly, GE food is beneficial from enhancing higher nutrition, productivity and having longer storage time. Therefore, the standard of living considerably improves.

On the downside, there are strong arguments against the use of GM crops. Firstly, they are potentially dangerous for human health. In spite of an abundance of strict testings, scientists can not guarantee the safety of these bio-technological products. People are at long- term of risks which can raise the question of food quality. Furthermore, biotechnology can pose threat to the environment. The use of these crops can reduce the variety of strains which banishes the nutrition in soil. As a result, there is a imbalance in the ecological system which causes catastrophic consequences and other serious problems.

In conclusion, it is true that GE food is a double-edged sword that may enable or hinder development. In my opinion, people should find solutions to maximize the advantages and alleviate the disadvantages.
Cay nho   
Jul 27, 2019
Writing Feedback / Junk food is damaged to health. Some people think education is a good solution while others disagree [2]

Harmful Effects of Junk Food



Junk food is damaged to health. Some people think education is a solution while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The excessive consumption of junk food has been the subject of debate. Some people argue that raising awareness of fast food's detrimental effects is a viable solution. Others claim that this opinion is of no value. In this essay, each viewpoints will be discussed and critically evaluated before a final conclusion is drawn.

Firstly, with the advent of mass media, the dissemination of drawbacks of overeating junk food can be ubiquitous and prevalent. People can also have easily access to the information through the orientation programmes by schools and community. Because of that, education is useful and transformative with profound impacts on human behavior. By developing health consciousness, people can enrich their knowledge about the harmful effects of packaged food. Once they are fully aware, they will inspire to take actions. They prioritize the nutritious and healthy meals by consuming food which is rich in vitamins. Therefore, fast food consumption is in decline.

However, opponents argue that education fails to produce a desirable outcome for following reasons. To begin with, in modern society, people tend to be pressed for time as a result of stresses and strains at work. Thus, proper home-cooked meals are impossible, instead, convenience food is an alternative choice for people to eat at the workforce. Moreover, people's decision is another contributing factor. For some people, unhealthy food seems appealing to them although they know this food is at the expense of physical fitness. Because consuming packaged food excessively is a deeply-ingrained habit, endeavors to change may be of no use. Besides, action is a slow process so during the procedure of healthy habit, many people decide to give up and the desire to change is resistant.

In conclusion, junk food is in the detriment of people's health. In my opinion, I strongly with the latter one and some proactive measures should be taken to tackle the problem.
Cay nho   
Jul 26, 2019
Writing Feedback / Should government control excessive salaries? [5]

Grammatic errors
Afford
Put more effort into doing sth
Create some lazy people
In the second para, you should go into details the disadvantage of low tax collection
Despite these , the essay is quite relevant
Cay nho   
Jul 26, 2019
Writing Feedback / One of the major problems we are faced with today is obesity. Kids suffer from it too [2]

Obesity: causes and solutions



In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think are the causes of this what solutions can you suggest

One of the major problems we are faced with today is obesity. The number of young people who suffer from overweightness is increasing at an alarming rate. It is vitally important to know the underlying causes then find suitable solutions to alleviate the problem.

To begin with, there is a strong correlation between obesity and the excessive consumption of junk food. In the world of speed, children have difficulties in getting a nutritious and healthy eating. Therefore, the frequency in consuming sugary and fat intakes is the alternative choice to provide energy. In addition, with the proliferation of fast food restaurants, these unhealthy food is consumed on a regular basicso that the adolescents are at risk of being overweight. The problem could be solved by banning harmful junk food in places such as schools and restaurants. Moreover, a balanced diet which is high in vitamins and nutrients is also of great importance to tackle the problem. To be more specific, people should encourage students to eat in moderation by eating more vegetables and fruits and lessening the amount of high-calorie food.

The rise in obesity of teenagers an be attributed to the sedentary lifestyle. Recently, children are required to work hard and do well academically so that they hardly have sufficient time to do outdoor physical activities. They devote a great deal of time to doing the academic work instead of having a workout. Additionally, with the advent of technology, children tend to play computer games, watch television rather than play sports, do exercise. A useful suggestion would be to increase the time for sports and outdoor activities between lessons to promote the students' well-being. The amount of stressful homework at schools should be reduced for the sake of children's health to be more energetic.

To sum up, overweightness is a major issue in many countries. Some proactive measures should be taken to boost people's life expectancy.
Cay nho   
Jul 26, 2019
Writing Feedback / Waste recycling and law - Argumentative essay [5]

Some grammatic errors:
One of the major actions
Practising
Citizens claim not claims
Responsible for not to
Should be aware
In the third paragraph, you just talk about the actions of the government to encourage people cycling but the task talks about the reasons why you agree the opinion

The introduction you agree the opinion but the conclusion is rather opposite
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