TQB
Jun 14, 2020
Writing Feedback / Task1 The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population in urban areas [4]
Hi,
I just want to give some more contribution for the overview only, aka. "Overall, all trends of the population in cities from different continents experienced gradual declining growth throughout the period". First, the sentence is neither clear nor correct in terms of the data presented in the graph. This definitely leads to lower than 5 for TA. Second, a part of this period is in a future projection but you referred the whole in past tense. For me, you should divide the sentence into two parts, one for the past and one for the future. This makes more sense regarding grammar. Finally, your word choice was inappropriate as you used "declining growth". They convey totally opposite meanings.
Best,
Tutela
Hi,
I just want to give some more contribution for the overview only, aka. "Overall, all trends of the population in cities from different continents experienced gradual declining growth throughout the period". First, the sentence is neither clear nor correct in terms of the data presented in the graph. This definitely leads to lower than 5 for TA. Second, a part of this period is in a future projection but you referred the whole in past tense. For me, you should divide the sentence into two parts, one for the past and one for the future. This makes more sense regarding grammar. Finally, your word choice was inappropriate as you used "declining growth". They convey totally opposite meanings.
Best,
Tutela