Writing Feedback / TASK 1:The graph illustrates the number of Chinese, Japanese and Indian students who enrolled ... [3]

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number of students who entered the North Dean University

Topic: The graph illustrates the number of Chinese, Japanese and Indian students who enrolled at North Dean University over a five-year period. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows information about how many students of three different countries enter North Dean University from 1996 to 2003.

Overall, it can be seen from the graph that there was a considerable upward trend in the number of students of both China and India, while the amount of Japanese students experienced a sharp fall over the period in question.

Regarding the Japanese enrolments, the number started at over 100 students in 1999, then there was a dramatical decline over the next two years. Having remained stable at approximately 40 students during a next year, the figure then decreased swiftly to around 30 in 2003.

By contrast, the number of Chinese students, who opt North Dean University went in the opposite direction. This figure rose gradually between 1999 and 2000 then rocketed significantly and reached almost 100 students in 2003. Similarly, there was a gradual increase in number of Indian students, finishing at around 80 students in 2003.

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Writing Feedback / The number of people who opt to live alone are increasing in many countries around the world [4]

Topic:
In some countries, more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past.

Do you think this is positive or negative development?

These days, the number of people who opt to live alone are increasing in many countries around the world. However, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do this. From my point of view, I believe that being single brings more negatives as compared to positives and I will discuss some of the reasons below.

Firstly, it is undeniable that freedom can be considered as the greatest benefit of going solo. Almost, people can reach their decisions by their own without being hindered or disturbing by someone. For example, people are completely free in decorating their spaces, creating their daily routine, and selecting attire, even dawdling outside all night and coming home at wee hours without complaint.

Despite the advantages above, I suppose the main disadvantage of monotone lifestyle is isolation and loneliness. Without advice and support from family or roommate, many adults find hard when coping with challenges since people are not master in all concerns. It is believed that connections with friends and family are important for people's health and emotional well-being. If people maintain their solo lifestyle for a long time, they may forget how to well behave or appease the others. Also, many adults may be propelled to crime if there is no consultation or encouragement provided by their family.

In conclusion, there are both positives and negatives of living alone. But I suppose it has more ill effects than merits. Living with the others may be difficult in some situation, but people should consider about it rather than living alone due to the reasons I discussed above.

Writing Feedback / People have a tendency to involve in many particular fields and develop themselves in different jobs [3]

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Topic:
These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays, there is an enormous job market for labour due to industrialization and specialization. Thus, people have a tendency to involve in many particular fields and develop themselves in different jobs during their lifetime. However, there are both pros and cons to deciding to do this. In this essay, I will discuss some of the reasons why changing job can bring benefits and have its drawback.

Let's begin by looking at the advantages of job variety. One of the main positives of holding two or more jobs is taking an increase in salary. For many, especially young adults, supplementing income not only supply themselves essential needs but also provide them opportunities to achieve their goals. Take the blue-collar workers as an example. Manual work has always been associated with low income which may be the main cause why people seek other jobs and do more jobs at the same period. Moreover, evolving in many positions at the same or different time can help workers broaden their horizons. For the young, taxing and challenging job is more opted rather than cushy or desk job.

Secondly, ideal jobs or dream jobs for a long time can be gained by job hunters. These days, labour are more likely resign from their posts if they find themselves impossible to continue in adverse working conditions or heavy workload, which may link to strong feeling of stress or symptoms of burnout and exhaustion. People tend to look for the companies or factories which obtain job security, high income and cushy tasks. Besides, young generation often prefer companies that bring to them sense of job satisfaction, which may be considered as their incentives and stimuli for their success.

Turning to the other side of the argument, starting career in a new environment is never easy. People are not able to be skilled in all fields, therefore they will become newbies in novel areas. Thus, from unskilled worker, it takes plenty of time to learn and to improve. There is a multitude of barrier that novices have to cope with. If workers do not possess predisposition in new fields, the likelihood of resigning the job again is very high. Moreover, people who always not satisfy with the current job and seek for another ideal may never achieve high-powered job, credibility and respect.

All things considered, there are both positives and negatives to engaging in diverse fields. Personally, I believe the benefits accrued from changing job outweigh any negatives.