Writing Feedback / Toefl - "not everything in life is according to our wish" [2]

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Do you agree or disagree? "It is sometimes important for people to do things that they do not enjoy doing".

I agree that people should sometimes do things that they don't enjoy doing. This is basic part of our life. There are many things in our life which are forced to do, but that are the part of our responsibilities. Moreover, sometimes doing such activities prove beneficial for us and we start learn to like them.

Most people personal and professional live are filled with various tasks which they really don't like to perform. For instance, visiting to a doctor, working with someone whom you don't like to work with at office and so on. But we do this because we know that it is our necessities and responsibilities in life. Furthermore, we understand the relationship of such work with other things in our life. If a person does not visit to a doctor, he might not get well, this would affect his professional life too. Thus, performing such activities would lessen other problems in their life.

On the other hand, sometimes doing such things prove beneficial for them. Suppose a student don't like to study, but if he/she does it then it would provide betterment in his/her life. Furthermore, sometimes people are forced to do certain things they don't like. For example, some don't like to eat certain vegetables , but if someone forced them to taste, then they might feel that they were wrong. This is good for health and add nutritious values to their health. Thus, they actually end up simply by liking it. Therefore, a person should sometimes perform such thing they don't prefer so as to get advantages in their life.

Thus, not everything in life is according to our wish. We have some responsibilities and necessities in life we could be fulfilled sometimes by doing such tasks. Also provide betterment to our lives.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Integrated task" William shakespeare" [2]

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"Authenticity of work done by William Shakespeare"

The author claims the authenticity of work done by William Shakespeare by referring various theories. In contrast, the lecture on the other hand, refutes the passage by mentioning the facts significant to the truth ness of his work.

First, the reading passage claims that William Shakespeare was not a wealthy aristocrat and had never been to school. Therefore, an uneducated person cannot write the plays related with understanding of politics and literature. The lecture refutes this view by suggesting that although he was poor but he has attendant school with his fellow mate at Strart ford. Furthermore, Shakespeare has worked in theatres and gain experience about aristocrat manner from his acted role. Thus his writing can be justified.

Second, The author states that no records or facts has been found in evidence of Shakespeare written work. In addition to this, some theory mentions that similarities has been found between the plays of one of the popular writer Sir Francis bacon and Shakespeare .In addition to this, some scholars believes that recorded evidence were destroyed to hide the true identity of other authors. However, the lecture opposes this point and explain the fact that written records has been lost over a period of time. Furthermore, quick comparison between the two writers work can easily discriminate the differences in their style of writing.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay - "Learning about past has its significance" [2]

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Learning about the past has no values for those of us living in the present. Agree or disagree.

Can knowledge about the past for those of us living in present would be beneficial? Some people thinks that this information is useless because the past is passed present. While others believe that it is advantageous for our present as well as future. I agree with the later opinion. Learning about past would give opportunities for new invention, prevent us from repeating same mistake and provide better understanding about the existence of particular purpose.

Various discoveries and inventions took place in field of science and technologies. This would have never been possible without the knowledge of prior achievements. For instance, certain epidemic diseases, such as polio, cancer etc. would result in the discoveries of newer antibiotics to prevent them. If suppose, no record of such evidences were found ,then no one would ever get benefited with this inventions. Furthermore, new achievements lead to the betterment of our live by providing more comfort such as machines as replaced the old pattern of hand work.

Besides with the opportunities, learning about past would prevent us to perform the same mistake again. For example, one of my friend was unable to clear the medical exam. Although he prepared very hard for it but result was unfavourable. During the next time, he took all the precautions about his previous mistakes and than gave exam with full confidence and received higher score. Thus, past experiences help us to improve our future performances.

In addition to this, past knowledge would provide better understanding of the present situations and their existence. Culture, rituals and beliefs still have their existence till today. This is because there is some basis of their beliefs which is still passing to generations. If nobody would learn about their existence then slowly it would loose their significance. Furthermore, in a country nobody could be able present their culture and tradition.

Therefore, learning about past has its significance. Its provide opportunities to developed ourselves in further discoveries. Also, help us to improve our mistake from previous experience and would provide the better understanding of present situations.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different [4]

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"It i better to marry someone who is similar to you rather than who is different from you. Give reasons for your choice."

Marriages are made in heaven. This phrase is most commonly used by everyone at the time of discussion about the marriages. Some believes that marrying a person similar to you in nature would built successful relationship between them. While other believes that opposite attracts each other and complete each other, therefore make a happy and healthy relationship between them. In my opinion, the former view of similar nature would be the key of successful marriage.

First, similar nature would result in less conflicts and arguments between a couple. For instance, if a couple would like to purchase home then they would make certain crirteria for their choice. And if,there choices are similar then they would agree with same option with no compromises. Moreover, they save time of discussion about each other other opinion.

Second, their would be better understanding between couple. In a similar nature marriages each person would understand others opinion at the time of decision making. For example, me and my husband, both have the habit to watch television with the lights off. We think that its give better impact while watching. Therefore, we understand each other feelings and follow the same choice. This makes us live more comfortably with each other.

In addition to this, similar nature results in better handling of future situation. In such marriages person can assume about others opinion for particular instance. Very simply, I can assume that if I ask my husband for dinner tonight then he will definatly say yes to me. Furthermore, their would be more chances to predict situation.

All in all, if someone marry with a person of same interest then they would live more comfortably with less arguments. Furthermore, they can predict about each other nature in more proper manner and understand each other.