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Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: The piano, a song in many different ways [5]

Ok, I think I'm going to with this one after much deliberation. the 2nd attempt of my 6 tries at the UC prompt 2: describe a talent and how it relates to who you are.

Einstein once said "Try not to be a man of success, but a man of value". That is why my greatest accomplishment has nothing to do with winning a regional debate tournament or being recognized as an advanced member of the model united nations, but having the ability to play the piano. I value the enjoyment I get from playing songs over my academic achievements because it allows me to express who I am. The piano taught me how to live.

One can learn how to play the piano in different ways. A person may watch others and mimic their movements to produce a melody, like how a child may live in accordance to their parents. Or one could sit and tinker with the keys until the right pitches are produced, creating a personal style without guidance or knowledge. The majority, however, uses the traditional method by learning the theories and applying them on the keys with time and practice.

My method integrates all three methods. It reflects on who I am as a person, because I choose to find my own way in life. I would learn from my mistakes, but would not repeat the ones others made before me. I am proud of this strength and individuality, because this was not always the case. At first, my playing was soft and timid as I took judgments to the heart. Now, I am not afraid to raise volume and display my emotions for all to hear.

When I press upon the weighted keys, it's more than playing a score of notes. I release my feelings without restraint or worries; this is the only place where I'm always true to myself. I could play the same song countless of times and show different emotions with each round. If I'm happy, for example, one can tell despite the song being as melancholy as Beethoven's "Moonlight Sonata" or as sorrowful as Evanescence's "Hello". I believe that the pieces I play to express my soul will give comfort or inspiration to those who hear it. Sharing them in concerts is one of my greatest joys.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Accepting others [3]

Hello. I wrote 6 different topic essays for this prompt because i over think things. Since all my new ones are just hollow ramblings, I'm going to put my original one that I made a year ago up and see if that's any good.

Comments on the thought of the essay in general is appreciated.

UC Prompt 2: Describe a quality of yourself and how it relates to who you are.

Despite having a horrendous understanding of my character and its merits, I do value my ability of accepting others. It's slightly different from compassion or being nonjudgmental, whether I also hold these qualities depends on the circumstances, but regardless, I always accept a person for who they are. For example, I may come to a conclusion that a person may be too self centered or perhaps even unpleasant, but rather than rejecting or condemning them, I try to understand their background and just acknowledge it as their current state of self. It's no use evaluating or forming biased opinions, people are just people, and sometimes they deserve the benefit of the doubt.

This particular quality does not make me proud necessarily, my accomplishments in forensics, sciences, and politics may induce temporary pride in terms of accomplishment, but I believe those to be shallow qualities to describe who I am. Personally, I value knowledge and intelligence, but that is not how I gauge a person's worth. There are many instances where I am far from intelligent, so I chose a quality that would most likely remain the same throughout the years. It reflects my value of humanity, and it describes my idealistic view of a world where there are less harsh criticisms for which people are. People always make mistakes, but their true worth lies deeper than their beliefs, words, and actions. It lies in their humanity and their ability to care. Such extreme ideals cannot be explained simpler than that.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "I love languages" - Multilingualism [6]

Uwaaaaaa im going crazy. I wrote 6 different topic essays for this prompt and each got progressively worse. Its like im afraid to write about me or something.

Thank you so much for reviewing them everyone. I'm under enormous mental pressure.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "I love languages" - Multilingualism [6]

Uc Prompt: Describe a personal quality and how it relates to the person you are.

I know this has a lot of grammatical errors, and I think I need to cut it down by 200 words ;A;
Also maybe this sounds too much like a describe your world essay.

Help?


I am constantly surrounded by different languages.

During the summer, I would tell my father "ohayo" after I awake from a pleasant sleep, since it will be one of the few times I get greet him good morning as my visits to Japan are usually short-lived. When I get back home, I'd ask my mother "kumusta ka" to see how she has been in my long trip of absence, or ask my step dad if he "liked the souvenirs I got him". Hence, speaking in Japanese, Tagalog, and English comes naturally to me, as Asian blood runs through my veins and the American culture through my heart. Each tongue represents a unique aspect of who I am, because I represent the different concept and ideals of each these nationalities.

When I'm in Japan, I feel more emotional about the words spoken to me. It takes fewer phrases to relate to people, and the dramas I watch can have me crying harder than I ever could for English films. I eventually learned that it was because the Japanese language utilized the right side of the brain. I am proud that I could use an artistic tongue that held such an emotional depth. My father certainly has this trait of creativity in creating multiple businesses that deals with everything from cars to restaurants, and I can see some of this imagination in myself.

I am family-oriented due to my Filipino side. A Filipino family should be defined as a tight-knit group that extends further and deeper than blood, always accepting and friendly towards all who they meet. I often find myself at parties with many unfamiliar "uncles" and "aunts" whom I have never met, but they instantly treat me as if they've known me for years. Everyone is always concerned with my health, and likes to make sure that I'm well fed. My mother embodies this warm culture, and passes it on through me.

My English culture is just as important, as it melts all the other nationalities into one common language. Living in California, it was inevitable that I learned conversational Spanish, because then I wouldn't be able to "jajaja" with my friends. I ended up learning Telegu from my best friend, since she's practically my soul sister. She'd often make fun of my accent when I say "Dhanyavaadaalu!", or thanks, for helping me out with my homework. Sometimes, I would memorize the lyrics of a Mandarin song from an anime show I watch and recite it for my piano teacher.

I love language so much that I ended up learning survival phrases in Italian, French, and German over the summer I went to Europe. I found it empowering to have the ability to communicate with anyone, and understand what thought or emotion they were trying to relay to me. I love this part of myself because with every phrase I learn, I become a new person. As I speak the words of each culture, I become a part of them, and they, a part of me.

Awkward last sentence. Really bad use of diction, I'm sorry. It was rushed. Suggestions?
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Multilingualism (I just need a yay or a nay for the red parts) [5]

Ya, I'm going all over the place because I'm rushing, my mother wants me to turn everything in the next hour. But this really helps!

I'm fluent in Japanese, English, Conversational spanish, and basic travel phrases for Europe. Maybe I should concentrate on that and scrap out the whole Spanish trauma that I had in my moment of bitterness haha. (I ended up with a B in that class)

Then for a fleeting moment I wanted to say I want to learn more languages because understanding each other is the key to peace or something like that.

But I ended up condensing everything to make it into 400 words.

Thank you! I tend to stray from points too often.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Multilingualism (I just need a yay or a nay for the red parts) [5]

Though syntax and proper usage are important, but language extends beyond the words themselves. They allow us to truly understand each other by providing invaluable means to rely our feelings and thoughts- a way to connect with one another. With this realization, I found a stronger love for the diversity of this world. I want to value what each person has to say, and in turn I want them to understand who I am. Thus, I will not allow a few phonemes and semantics stand in my way.

Der Frieden, La Paix, Paz, Pace, Heiwa, Peace

This is my new resolve to be multilingual.

new ending
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Miss Natasha, My chiropractor - UC Prompt Number 1 and 2 ! [11]

Oh haha, I meant to say host but I just came from reading a foster essay for a friend. My bad. Xp
Too bad, I wanted to see if I can catch you, but thats about 5 hours from Osaka (I'm from Kobe though). ;A;

Sorry for holding personal conversations here, do you mind checking my new attempt at prompt 2? The one for multilingualism? its still in its baby stages but i think it has potential.

Also I noticed (while reading your essay because its fun)

"I love spending time with them; feeling connected to them while my heart bursts with pride watching them grow, knowing that I had aided in their conquests."

Is a little wordy. How about I love spending time with them. I connect to them watching them grow, and my heart bursts with pride knowing that I aided in their conquest.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Multilingualism (I just need a yay or a nay for the red parts) [5]

Very tentative 4th try at the prompt: Tell us about a personal quality or experience that is important to you, how does it relate to the person you are.

Note: I'm thinking of cutting out the stuff in red because I can only write about 450 words on this one, but am quite fond of them. Please let me know what you think.

I'm also afraid that my focus when from all my experiences in languages in general to Spanish. Maybe it's better if I kind laundry list my experience with each language?

Suggestions and edits are appreciated.

Thank you.

Dove, Dů, Donde, Saan, Doko, Where

Survival one-oh-one for when I travel, I thought.

I was constantly surrounded by languages. Japanese, English, Spanish Tagalog, Hindi, Italian, and French were some of the ones I was familiar with, since I had friends and family of these nationalities teach me a phrase or two during social events. Maybe my love of languages was innate, as my mother was once an ambassador's representative in the Philippines and can converse in roughly seven languages.

Being raised partially in Japan and America, as well as having a cultural loving Filipino mother made for a multilingual home. I also had close friends who speak Spanish, Hindi, Italian, and French, so I made myself familiar with a few of their phrases during social events. I even found a passing interest in Latin.

I had survived just fine visiting the various countries of Europe, I even picked up some German from a friendly bartender in Switzerland. While enjoying my virgin appletini, I sat entranced by his tales of travels, learning nine languages by the age of twenty-four so that he could do odd jobs to support his family and kids. I laugh as I remember the uproar I caused amongst the teachers, losing track of time and running back frantically to the hotel at midnight.


I was proud in my lingual abilities. I had a pocket full of phrases for almost all the countries I held interest in. When I became a Junior the following year, however, that confidence came crashing.

I got a C in Spanish level four.

For someone who despised Bs, I was shell shocked. The vocabulary was right and the grammar was decent, yet my teacher continually docked me off for the little articles and accents even the natural born Spanish speakers made. From using flash cards to Spanish for Dummies, I religiously studied to fill the scattered gaps in my knowledge to no avail. Those Cs kept on appearing, with occasional spurts of Bs, I despaired that she only counted a few verbal and written tests in our grade, rather than crediting any of the meticulously checked homework I did. I obsessed over that class and soon neglected my presidential duties as book club president, and stopped going to debate practices entirely. It was nearly impossible to get an A from her.

Then one day, I helped out on the Halloween arts and crafts night at the city library. A little kid stood before me, lost on what to do despite my attempts to show him how to construct a q-tip skeleton on paper. I was equally as puzzled until I head a voice fire off in Spanish across the room, delving into a fast paced instruction on how to construct a pumpkin shaped masked to a parent.

Oh. He doesn't speak English. I realized.

I was baffled, how do I explain how to make a skeleton out of q-tips and glue to a five year old? Hesitant, I looked around. "Do you want to put on little hands?" my partner asked a little girl while pointing at the skeleton.

Taking a breath, I tried softly, "Quieres poner las manitas?", and to my surprise the boy nodded his head. I learned from then on, that simplicity is the key.

Languages are more than mere words structured in grammatical rules. They allow us to truly understand each other by providing invaluable means to rely our feelings and thoughts. Now I practice Spanish like I practice Japanese. I watch soap operas.

Der Frieden, La Paix, Paz, Pace, Heiwa, Peace

I aim to be multilingual.
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / UC PROMPT 2.- Important experience. [13]

I was easily able to adapted to the American school curriculums (it comes up as red underlined on the text) that taught students to think creatively and openly for themselves. It was a new experience for me as I have learned to follow strictly from the teacher's instructions. However, the cultural barriers never slipped away in my mind. Why did Americans tip after eating at a restaurant? Why did they pay individually when they ate with a group? Thus, when my parents decided to spend the summer in Korea, I was overjoyed and thrilled.

Nice concept. I really like all the self directed questions. It really emphasized your culture and the hardships of assimilating. Good work and good luck!
Haru21   
Nov 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Review my Prompt #2 - Martial Arts? [5]

Oh very nice, I liked the similarity in the beginning and the end. I can tell you spent a lot of time on this, there isn't much grammatical suggestions I can make than the others have pointed out. Overall, I really liked this. You really showcased your talents, I should stop trying to be interesting and just do that haha. Ok, good work and good luck!
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Falling in love with Fictional Men [8]

Ooh, ouch. Haha thank you for being honest! I did write lots of bits and pieces and rewrite them to death. I'll look at that.

Just to be safe, can you rate my other UC prompt please? Just a rating will help. =D
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Falling in love with Fictional Men [8]

Thank you so much! I double checked on both and there was nothing mentioned about not being to use quotes on the application and google. Also Albeit is a word like although.

I'd love to expand, actually, I wanted to list more guys like sirius black and zack fair but my other essay is about 680 words so I'm a little strained for words. I might add a few sentences though. Thank you so much on the feedback though! (Lautner is really cute btw, I'm going to look up his movies now haha).

@gynn92: I really hope so! =D Thank you! And sure, I'll visit.

@channy: Thank you! Hmm develop the idea more? May I have an example please? XD

@Nosaga: Oh, I see. Thank you for the grammatical tips! I'll be happy to read yours. =D
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Miss Natasha, My chiropractor - UC Prompt Number 1 and 2 ! [11]

Oooh foster family huh? May I ask where? XD

And my second UC essay was slightly inspired by you, in my attempt to show more of myself, but I think I failed. Haha, good luck too! I'm sure you won't need it though.
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Short Answers -- Marching Band [7]

Yes, I liked this one a lot! It had a musical rhythm with the swaying almost.

It should be "we hold our breath"

and to dramatize you winning how about a build up? ie.) explaining how you felt and going "we did it. We won first place" on a separate line?

Good work! I could easily picture the scenario.

Good luck!
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App, Significant Expericence: Moving to Virginia [5]

I really like the imagery additions your essay, be careful not to jump from different subject matters to much. Maybe smooth out the transition it by ending the paragraph with a related sentence that picks up in the next?

Otherwise, I really like the sense of new found purpose and resolve. This is good. Keep it up. =D

People here were friendly and neighborly, and did not drive like maniacs. I didn't like it.

Wait, you didn't like the fact they were friendly?

If so, rephrase it maybe like this: I found that unlike my hometown, people were overly familiar with each other. Their driving was also unfamiliar to me, and I found myself uncomfortable to this change.

Or something like that to clarify...

Sorry it took so long. I finally got my second prompt up haha.

Good luck!
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC PROMPT #1- A Frog in a Well; I decided to hop out to a new world ending the years of hesitation [5]

Haha, I really like your metaphor, it was sweet. There were a few grammatical errors, but the overall concept is great. Sorry it took so long.

Good luck!

The tutoring finished at very late night. I managed to pull my body tired body.fromIt has been subjected to the same routine of circuiting around same daily routine -going to the school, study, go to the after school(i'm not sure, do you mean cram school?) , study, and go home and then fall asleep.

... I walked to home under the little piece of sky.
... kings that I memorized for wholeduring the day were brushed away as the night ...

... like a frog in a well, squeezed into a (subjected to might be better) standardized life routine.

I decided to hop out to a broad new world ending the years of hesitation. Holding a deep breath in my stomach, I jumped into an airplane heading to the United States. When I stepped out from the airport, I, a frog, succeeded to escape from a well that had been my shelter for 16 years. The new world was glistening just before me, pouring sunraysunshine into my darkness-accustomed eyes.

I breezily walked down the hallway figuring out where my next class was. I was amazed by the fact that people almost sounded like different species of living creature to me. On my first day of school, I failed the writing test. My ELD II teacher said I could be sent to the ELD I class. A history assignment, which was reading a couple of pages and answering few questions in the book, took me nearly three hours to complete. I realized that I was sinking to the bottom of the water gradually, heavily burdened by discouragement and loneliness. I determined to draw up all my energy, learning how to swim against the force that pulled me down.

It was a test day for U.S. history. Although I had reviewed all the chapters last night, I set my alarm clock to 4 o'clock to review again. Keeping my drowsy eyes from closing, I opened the history book. I almost burst out jumping when history teacher announced that I got the highest score in the class. Even though it was only a chapter test, I remember the day as a most rewarding moment that taught me the pleasure of accomplishment and the price of perseverance.

Now I am standing in the middle of the pond recounting the times that I have passed by. Throughout two years in America, I had fallen, sunk down and hurt by many difficulties that persistently strivedstrove? sought? to defeat me. However, I value all the struggles that rebuked me and corrected me to be thoroughlyas I am now prepared for any harder situation I will be facedadversity . I, a little frog from a well, am aiming beyond the mountain where the sea of intelligence and the jungle of challenge waiting for me to leap out again.[/quote]
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC2: Falling in love with Fictional Men [8]

Hello, I finally gotten my second UC prompt, which asks: Tell us about a personal quality or experience that is important to you. What about this quality makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

I'm afraid this one may be more vague than my last. Any edits/tips are appreciated. Thank you!

"No cause is lost if there is but one fool left to fight for it."

At that moment, I fell completely and inexplicably in love. Most would argue that almost all of Orlando Bloom's fan would share my sentiments due to his good looks and popularity. Yet, I was never drawn to his physical attraction before, albeit being handsome is an excellent quality to have, there are more pressing attributes I prefer to engage. You see, after watching Pirates: At World's End, I was not infatuated Orlando Bloom; I was taken with his character, William Turner because his words crystallized the essence of his nature, and I found it beautiful. Here was a man who was willing to literally fight against death to save a father who abandoned his family, simply because it was the right thing to do.

One of my personal qualities (quirks?) is that I place a huge emphasis on the value of morals, hence my tendency to fall in love with fictional men more often than tangible ones. Scripted, a character becomes an idea himself, representing his morals and concepts through varied acts of valor, kindness, or integrity that seems so natural, yet so rare. Thus, in movies and books, a character embodies a certain ideal or principle, displaying an unwavering resolve for a cause that exemplifies the true meaning of humanity. I fall in love with the concepts more than the man himself.

Being human is to vividly feel our passions while mediating them with reasoning. A healthy balance of both results in the creation and value of morals, commonly expressed through the way a person's eyes would light or dim with their emotions or the way their voice would tighten in rage in the moment of righteous anger.

Despite the various academic successes I've had, none of them gives me greater joys than the art of philosophy. Man is nothing without his values, for then he would end up as a mere repetition of motions. Without a cause, our life would be just as empty as our satisfaction. I am proud of this quality, because it gives me personal conviction that I speak the truth during the Lincoln Douglas debates, which deals with arguing the true meaning of morals and how they properly apply to any given scenario. My favorite philosophers: John Locke, Jean Jacques Rousseau, and Ralph Waldo Emerson may be able to define ambiguous emotions and concepts into words, but I on the other hand, have an innate feel for them, and fall in love with beautiful thoughts.
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC 1: My world is a fishbowl [9]

Ok, new 2nd paragraph. Hopefully it reveals a little more about myself.

Mine was an oriental themed bowl, adorned with cultural tales of adventures, morals, and love. Consequently, I grew up to be extremely idealistic and was fascinated with the concept of magic. The stories painted dreams of journeys filled with instant transformations appearing without rhyme or reason, powered by sheer will alone. I spent hours fantasizing on the "what ifs", years wanting an adventure of my own. Yet, I was so small and there was nowhere to go; aside taking up piano and ballet, my life followed in a habitual pattern.

Time passed, and with it came knowledge. My small confinement suddenly turned into a spacious aquarium that was high school. The world of speech and debate, model United Nations, chess, karate, books, and photography suddenly colored a permanent (i want to say something about how colorful everyone else is, like the first time i saw different types of personalities, or fish) aspect of my character. There were moments when the water turned cloudy with uncertainty and self-doubt as I drifted through new crowds and faces. Luckily, the support I received from my family was kept me going through disheartening failures and awkward faux pas. With their help, I happily learned that teamwork and friendship were just as invaluable as knowledge.

Does that make grammatical sense?

@happyhour: thanks! i'll get on it, almost done with my second prompt lol
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC 1: My world is a fishbowl [9]

Thanks everyone! this really helps. I ended up writing three essays for prompt 2: my piano in relation to lifestyle, why i fall in love with fictional men, and how i accept everyone for who they are (even if they're psychotic jerks). i like the second one personally but i think i might come off insane and ruin whatever good work i did on this one haha. sigh. decisions, decisions.

I'm thinking of integrating my personality more on 2 since im not sure how to weasel it in here.

Ok all grammatical is fixed
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App, Significant Expericence: Moving to Virginia [5]

I had never been in a situation where I was forced to meet new people or fit in; way back when on the other side of the world, I lived without a care in a comfortable, familiar environment, with good friends I had known since the first grade.

I had been constantly comparing George C. Marshall High School to my old oneschool - its remarkable diversity, its intensive IB program, and its student body of 1,300 that seemed immense compared to the 600 I was used to.

I joined clubs. I joined the marching band.

I know that in the future, with every bewildering new environment and challenge life will throw at me, people won't know who I am at first . That's fine, because I'll make sure they will.

It's nicely written, perhaps if reworded your first paragraph for a stronger hook? Something like: Nobody knew me. It made me uncomfortable not to be known, considering I came from a tight-knit community where I lived without a care in the world. The comfortable, familiar environment, with good friends I had known since the first grade were all about to change. Junior year loomed grimly before me.

Haha, sorry if i took it too out of context, tried to spice it up a little because the first paragraph is usually the deciding factor.

Good luck! I have to step out for a bit so I'll look at your other one when i get back. Good job! (and thanks for looking at mine haha). I liked how you explained being accustomed to American lifestyle without visitng the country, that was interesting.
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Miss Natasha, My chiropractor - UC Prompt Number 1 and 2 ! [11]

Wow, the two contrasting moods of your first and second essays really hit me in the face. I went from smiling like a crazy person to being serious in a flash. You really inspired me, there's no problem, with a personality as deep and caring as yours, I'm sure any UC will take you.

Just one sentence I had to read twice though:

Although I understood my mother's concern over my health, I did not understand why I had to quit what I loved and so I continued swimming-my favorite of all sports.

Maybe rephrase it like: Despite my mother's concern for my health, I could not quit my most beloved sport- swimming.

I wanted to go into psychology and get into nongovernmental programs for kids too, but I had to satisfymy traveling disease first haha. You really are a strong person, keep going Nannna-san!
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC 1: My world is a fishbowl [9]

Uwwaaaa, arigatou gozaimasu! X3

The people, the food, and the culture took some time getting used to, and I had a new family.

the "and i had a new family" part seems like it was just attached. so find a way to integrate it more to flow?

Hmm, if i talk about my step family, with all my half siblings, I would need to cut out a lot of what I already have because the word count for this is in the 660s. Should I get rid of the descriptions of Europe? I'll try to make it more personal then. Thank you!

Luckily, the support I received from my family was kept me going through disheartening failures and awkward faux pas.

Your essay was very well written, I couldn't find any mistakes other than the one I posted above. I think your conclusion doesn't to be stronger, it's right to the point.

Good luck.

Thank you! I re-edited to kind of place in the fish-temperature metaphor. Should I retract that edit?

Luckily, the support I received from my family was the perfect temperature for me to thrive in ; they kept me going through disheartening failures and awkward faux pas.
Haru21   
Nov 28, 2009
Undergraduate / UC 1: My world is a fishbowl [9]

Here is a tentative draft of my essay in response to the prompt:
Describe the world you come from- for example, your family, community or school- and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

I'm afraid my points may be unclear and the ending could be somewhat stronger. Any edits and tips are appreciated. Thank you!

My world is a fishbowl. The glass is bounded with what my parents have taught me. "Always be humble, and move forward with your head held high," they said. Aside from this, I knew very little. As a child, I had always looked through the glass, at a bigger world. When I grew older, the bowl grew with me. Ever since its slow and steady change I began to realize that there was an ocean out there, waiting for me.

In my youth, I felt as simple as a fish. Mindlessly going with the flow of events, my presence neither added nor subtracted to my surroundings. I merely enjoyed the sceneries. I remember observing that mostly everyone lived in adherence to a status quo, indistinguishable from the rest. Ironically, I was the same. I lived behind a set of glass walls like everyone else, only aware of what was present before me, unable to see or act further than what I know.

Mine was an oriental themed bowl, decorated with cultural tales of adventures, morals, and love. Consequently, I grew up to be extremely idealistic and grimaced at the thought of conformity; I wanted an adventure of my own. Yet, I was so small and there was nowhere to go; aside taking up piano and ballet, my life was in a habitual pattern.

When my parents divorced, the scenery changed. There was no longer a familiar home to return to or a familiar language to speak in. I wasn't scared, but I couldn't deny that I was a little sad. Everything was different. The people, the food, and the culture took some time getting used to, and I had a new family. It was my first taste of change, but the love we had for one another always remained a constant. It took some self sacrifice to keep both families functional as I often traveled back and forth from the States to Japan. I did not mind in the least, I was diadromous fish that enjoyed the migration between the varied waters.

Time went on, and with it came knowledge. My small confinement suddenly turned into a spacious aquarium that was high school. The world of speech and debate, model United Nations, chess, karate, books, and photography suddenly became a permanent aspect of my character. There were moments when the water turned cloudy with uncertainty and self-doubt as I drifted through new crowds and faces. Luckily, the support I received from my family was kept me going through disheartening failures and awkward faux pas. With their help, I happily learned that teamwork and friendship were just as invaluable as knowledge.

Then, the summer of my sophomore year came. I saw the beauty of Europe: the strong personalities in France, the temperamental weather of England, the lush mountains of Switzerland, and the piquant meals of Italy were all something that I never encountered before. The world kept on changing. Like a new born babe taking its breath for the very first time, I needed more. I was no longer content in my little bowl; I wanted to know what was beyond the glass, and resolved to stretch the boundaries until I couldn't see where it began or ended. Though I know that my surroundings will expand naturally in time as it had before, I wanted to use my own power to expand my own horizons since anticipation often found me restless. I desired for a world that was as vast and deep as the ocean, all encompassing with life's various aspects.

My ever-changing world led me to dream of its infinite possibilities. I wanted to travel and truly appreciate all that is offered in life. Witnessing the wonders of nature, meeting new people, seeing our history as mankind, and their architectural accomplishments would be the magical adventure I always sought for. Thus, I aspire to work in the field of international relations, so that I may freely swim without limit, while making a change of my own.
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