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"A friend in power is a friend loss" - The stone angel essay [2]
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In regards to your opening statement, you don't necessarily have to "link" your introduction to your essay. An opening statement is meant to interest your readers, and quotes often do that. You can refer back to this quote later in your essay and explain why you think it is relevant to your essay, but you don't have to do so immediately.
What reference style are you required to use? (MLA, APA, etc.)
"Even though Lottie and Hagar are no longer friends, Hagar still makes a smart..."
Change "smart" to "uncouth", "uncivilized", or "coarse"
"...but chooses to ignore them, since she believes she is too good for them."
"...but chooses to ignore them, displaying haughty self-importance."
"...considering her social status is superior over Hagar."
"...considering she was of a higher social class than Hagar."
"...this represents her envy towards Lottie, due to her marrying a better man than Bram."
"...this illustrates her being envious of Lottie, because she married a classier man."
"This event suggests Lottie is no longer sorrowful, but by her treasuring the eggs, it clearly establishes, she treasures her life. By Hagar selling the eggs to Lottie, it becomes visible that Lottie is triumph in their battle, since Hagar was inferoir, having to sell the eggs to Lottie"
"This event suggests that Lottie no longer sorrowful; by treasuring the eggs it is clearly established that she treasures her life. The act of Hagar selling the eggs to Lottie illustrates that Lottie has won their battle, proving that Hagar was inferior, which is shown by her having to sell the eggs to Lottie."
"...between both women amplifies. They appear as opponents, always targeting one another. Hagar becomes..."
"...between both women becomes amplified; they appear as opponents, always targeting one another. Hagar becomes..."
"This suggest Hagar is still concerned with how Lottie feels towards her."
"This shows that Hagar is still concerned with Lottie's feelings towards her."
"At this point, both woman are depicted as fat, worried about their children, both devious, and cleverly competitive."
"Both women are now depicted as fat, worrisome, devious, and cleverly competitive."
"...for a sense of support..."
..."for support..."
"...established was no longer..."
"...established no longer existed..."
"...sense of peace..."
"...them in peace."
"...Hagar Shipley and are family, as wells as her friends..."
"Hagar Shipley, her family, and friends."
"...could be like."
"...they could be."
"When they finally realize how much in common they have, its too late to establish a friendship they lost."
"By the time these two women finally realize how much they have in common, it is too late to establish a friendship; the opportunity has already been lost."
Keep up the good work!
