wooleyj
Oct 19, 2010
Undergraduate / "My time at the home"- Common App short answer [9]
The word "yelled" implies anger, so the person yelling would not have a gentle face.
You can also say "possessed' instead of "was possessed of.."
Also did you volunteer at the Punjab Kesari Old Age Home this summer or 8 years ago? You switched tenses between "...choice was clear/My time volunteering..."
What was your choice that was made clear?
I think if your 'short answer" can only be 150 words, it's better to stick to the basics of how working at an Old Age Home taught you compassion, empathy and patience that made you want to be a psychologist.
I really like the description in the beginning sentences but you might want to save it for a longer essay, like the Common App Personal Essay where you can expand your thoughts a bit more.
Hope that helps ;/
The word "yelled" implies anger, so the person yelling would not have a gentle face.
You can also say "possessed' instead of "was possessed of.."
Also did you volunteer at the Punjab Kesari Old Age Home this summer or 8 years ago? You switched tenses between "...choice was clear/My time volunteering..."
What was your choice that was made clear?
I think if your 'short answer" can only be 150 words, it's better to stick to the basics of how working at an Old Age Home taught you compassion, empathy and patience that made you want to be a psychologist.
I really like the description in the beginning sentences but you might want to save it for a longer essay, like the Common App Personal Essay where you can expand your thoughts a bit more.
Hope that helps ;/