Writing Feedback / Sport events in countries / economy - Argument: the logical fallacy of the proposal [4]

The country of Bonaria held a major soccer event five years ago. Therefore, if the country continues to hold major sport events, tourism will increase rapidly in the country and thus bring benefits to the country's economy.

The Bonaria cites the past experience to conclude that if the sport events can be holed again in the country, the country's economy will be boosted. However, even though the argument, at first glance, appears to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it leaves out some significant factors that should be addressed to substantiate the argument. Moreover, the post hoc fallacy makes the argument invalid.

First of all, Bonaria cannot simply build the connection between the major soccer event and the increase in tourism, because those two events may not have direct causal relationship. That is to say, one thing happening before another cannot be took as a cause for the later. For example, John ate a fish in the morning, and then he got sick in the night. Can we just simply make the conclusion that the fish is not fresh? What if the reason why he is sick is due to swimming in a cold sea last night? Thus, Bonaria should analyze the whole situation first, and then try to find out the supportive evidence to prove that the connection between sport event and tourism is highly related.

In addition, Bonaria also fails to consider other factors that might affect the tourism. The economic trend changes all the time, and there are plenty of ways to boost the country's economy. The success of soccer event five years ago may not bring the same effect under today's situation. In other words, what works for past might not work for now as well. For instance, people were enthusiastic in sport before, but now they are more interesting in the technology. Thus, the best way to improve Bonaria's economy is to hold a high-tech exposition, rather then have a sport event. Therefore, it is better for Bonaria to do more researches in order to find out what is the real factor that influences the economy the most.

In conclusion, the argument is not logically convincing. Bonaria not only fails to consider other factors before planing a proposal, but also forgets to clarify the causal relationship. To strengthen the argument, Bonaria would have to provide additional evidence for its proposal that holding a sort event can really boost its tourism.

Writing Feedback / Should school reduce the time of teaching the arts and humanities? [3]

"Since science and technology are becoming more and more essential to modern society, schools should devote more time to teaching science and technology and less to teaching the arts and humanities."（37）

Views differ greatly when it comes to the issue of whether schools should devote more time to teaching science and technology rather than to teaching the arts and humanities. Many people hold that science and technology deserve to gain more attention in nowadays world, since our world is dominated by the technology. However, even though science and technology are becoming more important now, school should not reduce the time on teaching the arts and humanities because those two things can not only enrich our spirit, but also stimulate our creativity, which is a key factor for improve the technology.

First of all, the art comforts our soul and spirit, bringing us the force to against the stresses and giving us the ability to understand the beauty of the world. In the world of today, there is tension everywhere: tons of works, burden of mortgage, pressure from competitors, and so on. People living in such anxiety for too long may be unhappy and upset. Through the arts, people can find another world, which is different from the reality, to relax their stress. For example, when feeling lonely and depress, people are able to create a comfortable space in their mind by placing themselves in front of a painting filled with warm sunlight, blooming sunflowers, and many joyful kids. Such painting always brings us the energy to fight with reality and creates a feeling of hope. Therefore, school should not cut the time of art teaching, since it may give us another way to heal the spiritual pain and suffering.

In addition, learning the arts and humanities can also trigger our creativities. Many philosophies and art works are based on the sophisticated mathematics. That is, when doing an art work or discussing the philosophy, we will elaborate our thought and do some brainstorming. In such process, people can develop their creativities, thereby stimulating the sense of mathematical. For instance, Leonardo da Vinci, one of the greatest painter, was renowned by those excellent master piece, such as The Last Supper, Mona Lisa, Vitruvain Man, and so on. However, he was also a talented mathematician and scientist. He learned of many mathematics theories and engineer structure by observing and painting the natural or the creatures. As the result, it is better to add more art and philosophy courses in order to boost students' creativities.

In conclusion, although the science and technology become an important issue and an unresisted trend in the world of today, we still need the arts and humanities to compensate our life. The arts and humanities offer us not only a channel to relax our nervous spirit, but also an alternative way to stimulate our creativities. Therefore, I hold that schools should not cut the time on arts and humanities, since they definitely enrich our life and mind.

Writing Feedback / Avia Airlines Argument: Finding the logical fallacy of the memo. [3]

The following appeared in an Avia Airlines departmental memorandum:
"On average, 9 out of every 1,000 passengers who traveled on Avia Airlines last year filed a complaint about our baggage-handling procedures. This means that although some 1 percent of our passengers were unhappy with those procedures, the overwhelming majority were quite satisfied with them; thus it would appear that a review of the procedures is not important to our goal of maintaining or increasing the number of Avia's passengers."（39）

The memorandum shows an impressive statistics that only 9 out of every 1,000 passenger filed a complaint about Avia Airlines's baggage-handing procedures. The Avia Airline cites the low rate to conclude that they do not have to review the procedures. However, I do not find this memo persuasive and well reasoned because the statistics presented here might not reflect the real situation, and even overlook seriousness of the problem.

First of all, the rate, at first glance, appears to be an low rate, but what if it is the highest rate when compared with that of other airlines? An absolute number cannot help a company to realize the actual situation. For example, if most airlines have only 0.1 percent of their passengers are unhappy with the service, 1 percent dissatisfied rate is definitely an warning singanal that Avia Airline has to remedy. Thus, it is better to consider other companies' data when using a single number to make the decision.

In addition, the overwhelming people who do not express their opinion does not necessarily mean that they are satisfy with the service. There may be many reasons for those people to choose not reply their unhappiness, such as no time to file a complaint, forget to do so, or too shy to express their feelings. On the top of that, people who choose not to report their discontents may switch to aboard other airlines next flight. Therefore, for maintaining or increasing the number of passengers, Avia Airline should engage in improve the service to please more passengers when it is not able to gather all passengers' opinions.

Finally, those one percent complainants might spread their feelings or experiences to their friends via mouth, e-mail, or even Facebook! Nowadays, the internet is popularized, so the speed of spreading information is tremendous fast. Through such spreading, more and more people will have a negative image about Avia Airline, and will, in turn, choose not to take Avia Airline. As the result, Aia Airline may loss lots of potential passengers. Hence, one percent complaints deserve to gain more attention, since it may cause a serious consequence.

In conclusion, it is dangerous for Avia Airline to use only one single number to make a decision because the company does not consider the seriousness of the problem brought by those complainants. Moreover, an absolute number cannot represent the whole figure of situation unless it can be compared with other companies' data. Therefore, Avia Airline should interpret the data by comparing with those of other companies, and pay more attention on those dissatisfied people.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - Technology offer a place to involve children to share their unique ideas [5]

Views differ greatly when it comes to the issue of whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Many people might think that technology brings too many conveniences to the kids, so the kids lose the chance to do brainstorming to get the answers. However, to my way of thinking, I do not agree with the statement, since I can see much more benefits from using technology.

To begin with, technology builds a more creative environment for children. Through the improvement of technology, kids have opportunity to touch the three-dimensional graphs and movies with which those little kids visual ability can be stimulated. This means that kids would develop a new way to see and search for the objects around their environment. The paintings and artifacts they made would be more flexible and creative, since kids already know how to extend those works and to bring the visual shock to other people. That is to say, they would have more abilities to envision untraditional method for their productions by the progressing technology.

In addition, with the improvement of technology, children have more channels to communicate with other people, searching for some hottest fashion and exchanging their ideas through the Internet. For example, kids can publish their artifact photos or science projects on the public forum to obtain various suggestions from the Internet. Doing so definitely enables them to refine or alter their works. Not only getting the advice, using the Internet also can cluster those people who have the same interest. They are able to form a club or forum, discussing and sharing some excellent ideas on it regardless of the different countries they live. In other words, technology pulls whole world closer and offers people a place to interact and exchange their thoughts. Therefore, children can enhance their creativity by absorbing others viewpoints, internalizing it as a resource of inspiration.

To sum up, technology can not only be a useful tool to create special works, but also offer a place to involve those children to share their unique ideas. It is as plain as a pike staff that in such process the kids will be more creative and learn more knowledge and skill by interacting with other people. Thus, I hold that the technology does not restrain the creativity, in contrast,it definitely boosts it up.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL- Should young people take several jobs before they take a long-term one? [5]

Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term?

Views differ greatly when it comes to the issue of whether that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term. Many people might hold that the young should express their loyalty and consistency in their job, so switching from job to job is not an ideal situation. However, to my way of thinking, having several various job experiences is preferable before the young decide their entire life career. There are some reasons to support my idea.

To begin with, taking different jobs can help the young to find out their real interest. Through diverse job experiences, young people are able to figure out what the substantial content of a job is and whether the job really match their habits. For example, a student who's major was finance just graduated from the college. In order to show the loyalty, he decides to dedicate his whole work life to the financial industry immediately. What if he finds out that the financial industry is not exactly his interest? What if he just encounters a depression? He might feel frustrated! Upset with the work, this worker may lower his work pace and lose ability to tackle with the problem. However, everything is too late, since he already makes up his mind to work there until he retires. Therefore, if he has chance to experience several jobs, he will be able to find out the true habit with which he can enjoy the work and then get promotion.

In addition, switching from job to job may give young people more chances to face different work problems and to meet lots of people coming from various background, so they will learn how to solve the problems and to stay with acquaintance. With more different job experiences, young people will enhance their abilities to cope with those unfamiliar problems and to improve the stress-resistant. Moreover, in this process, an intensive relationship network will be molded, and some of them, if any, can even offer those young people a special channel to find certain nice job opening. Thus, the young can increase their working capacities and social skills.

To sum up, taking several different kinds of job not only makes the young develop their real interest, but also helps them to equip themselves with strong resilience and broaden their vision. It is as plain as a pike staff that young people should try to work through various kinds of jobs for raising their ability to against stress and being well-prepared for their long-term career. Consequently, taking different jobs before deciding a long-term job is always a preferable choice to me.

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