Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY - GOVERNMENT SUPPORTING ARTISTS [3]

Some people think that the government should provide assistance to all kinds of artists including painters, musicians and poets, etc. However, other people think that is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is certainly undeniable that life of many are made appealing with the presence of Arts such as music, dance, and paintings. This is one of the chief reasons the society opine that the government should fund all the artists in their respective fields. I do agree to this opinion only to a certain degree as i feel that there are both positive and negative implications if the above suggestion is carried out.

First and foremost, the contributions of various artists to the society is indeed pivotal and hence, the government should take the initiative to support them. This is because, through Arts, one's creativity, views and personalities are revealed. Moreover, these aspects benefit not only the artist himself, but also his country. Take for instance the great Leonardo Da Vinci who had produced numerous magnificent and splendid masterpiece. He brought fame to his birthplace, Italy when many flock in order to witness on their own his creations. Apart from that, at the end of the day, it is Arts that provide us entertainment after a whole day of work or study.

Looking from another perspective, there are other essential fields that are either still new or waiting to be explored such as in the research sector. Research can be conducted in order to figure out the right vaccine to cure diseases that do not have any cures till now like the Dengue or AIDS. On top from that, instead of spending money on the Arts, the government can use it for more vital purposes such as to improve the nation's health and well being. Not only that, serious predicaments for instance homelessness, unemployment and illiteracy deserve to be given more attention compared to the Arts.

In my opinion, i feel that finally it all depends on the condition of a particular country. In developed countries like the United Kingdom and Australia which are well known not only for their gigantic economics but also for their generously- proportioned citizens who are well educated, the government can fund the Arts sector. On the other hand, in poor countries such as Somalia and Ethiopia where there are people dying of starvation and other diseases as well as lacking of education, other aspects comprised of education and health matters should be given priority.

To conclude, it is now evident that artists should be supported by the government. Well, if it is not the government which supports their own citizens, then who will? However, it is dependent on the ability of the countries.

Writing Feedback / ielts - what should the government do to make the country more successful [2]

What should a government do for a country to become successful?

Most countries these days are not very successful. This is due to the governments of the respective countries fail to carry out effective solutions to enable their countries to shine among the others. In my opinion, there are numerous solutions that can be executed by the governments in ensuring the success of their nations.

First and foremost, it is undeniable that the freedom to choose is one the basic needs of a man. Without it, a man cannot function in the way he is designed to be. Hence, the government must provide its citizens with rights of freedom for example to choose their own rulers provided that they have their limitations. This is the reason people in most democratic countries like Malaysia are able to live comfortably and make a difference to the world. On the other hand, in communist countries where freedom is curtailed, people are not able to live a peaceful and safe life.

On top of all, I believe that the government should provide good education to all its citizen. Teenagers today are the leaders of tomorrow. Hence, if they are exposed to proper education, they will be able to rule the country in a sensible manner. Not only that, a calibred and dedicated leader will always look after his fellow people and will ensure that he does everything and anything that will enable his nation to prosper. To cite an example, Barrack Obama who is a well-educated and a committed man, is now working hard in order to bring up his country.

Besides that, in terms of social aspect, the government should also provide sufficient amenities and infrastructures to the people of the nation so that they will be able to lead a comfortable and convinient life. In addition, I think that the natural resources in the nation should also be used wisely to prevent the depletion of those valueable resources. Not only that, if the government is able to determine and invest in lucrative fields and obtain good income in return, the money can be used for the well being of the citizens. For instance, to build more companies to provide job opportunities, to conduct researches to find cure for certain diseases and so on.

To conclude, it is certainly not an easy task to make a nation progress and flourish in a short period of time. However,I believe that nothing is impossible and if strong efforts are taken, I am sure that eventually, any nations will be successful as for changes to occur, changes must be made.

Writing Feedback / ielts - pointless to keep traditional skills alive ? [2]

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is certainly irrefutable that today there has been numerous advancements in technology. This includes progress in agriculture, infrastructure, research and a host of other essential sectors. Undeniably, these not only have changed us but also have benefited us tremendously in many ways. Indeed, our lifestyles these days are different from that of our ancestors. Therefore, some feel that, as the technology of a country develops, there is no point practising the traditional skills. However, I agree to this statement only to a certain extent as I shall discuss the reasons below.

First and foremost, there are some skills that we can neglect at this modern age. To illustrate this further, today there is an equipment called sewing machine. Hence, what is the point of continue using the traditional way of sewing clothes when there is an easier and a more convenient choice? Besides that, sewing is definitely less time consuming with a sewing machine. Apart of that, I am sure that other equipment such as blender, fan, and an array of other electrical items has indeed made human life seem comfortable.

Looking from the other perspective, it would be wrong to completely deny the importance of traditional skills and ways of life in our everyday life. In my opinion, certain aspects are worth practising. To cite an example, a day prior to Chinese New Year, family members will meet to have dinner together. This momentous event is surely essential as it strengthens the bonds among the family. Small activities like this must be preserved and passed on to our future generations so that they realize the richness of our culture.

From my perspective, it is pivotal that we have a balance between the use of the technology and traditional methods. Ways of life practised by our forefathers that are advantageous to us should be kept alive. On the other hand, if they are not that advantageous and consumes a lot of time and energy, then it is certainly better to switch to the tools that make our life trouble-free. A successful person in my opinion is an individual who knows the ways to suit himself according to the situation.

To conclude, traditional skills can be beneficial at times. It is inappropriate to say that they should be forgotten just because we have new and modern technologies emerging every day. Thus, let us keep put into practice both relevant traditional skills and ways of life and also at the same time take advantage of the technology available.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - positive aspects and drawbacks when children engage themselves in work [3]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions?

Those days whereby only adults involve themselves in the working sector were gone. Today, even children go to work and this especially true in some countries like China and India. However, many opine that this is not the right time for them to work as they are still young for that. On the other hand, some do also argue that working can provide numerous precious experiences for children. I, for one believe that there are both positive aspects and drawbacks when children engage themselves in work.

First and foremost, through working, undeniably children will be able to learn the importance of money in everyday life. It will dawn upon them that to earn a sum of money, a lot of hard work must be invested into it. Apart from that, there are other essential characteristics that children can learn through working such as co-operation as they will have to work with various people with different perspectives and time management skills. All these values can definitely benefit them in studies or in future careers.

Looking from the other perspective, if a child is involved in a paid work at such an early stage of life for example like 15 or so, they may grow up money-minded. Hence, there is a higher chance for them to deviate from studies and involve in working full-time. This was what happened to a shopkeeper at my residential area. As he worked part - time to generate extra income for his family, he felt that it made him earn more compared to studying. As a consequence, he has now opened a shop and is running it with little success. On top of all, the studies of the child can be affected if he works. This is because he would be exhausted after work and thus might not have sufficient time to spend on his studies. As a result, there may be a decline in his achievement in studies.

In my opinion, I think it is certainly not wrong for a child to work. Nevertheless, he should know his limits and therefore, balance it appropriately with his studies and work. He must ensure that his studies are not affected by his work, as of course at this age, education should be the priority compared to engaging in some kind of paid work. Perhaps, instead of working during the school period, children can do so during their long holidays so that their studies will not be disturbed.

To conclude, working is undoubtedly advantageous to children. Nonetheless, there are some negative aspects of it that is certainly preventable. A little problem will surely not diminish the benefits that working has to offer to the children.

Writing Feedback / ielts - should people be forced to stop working? [5]

People should be allowed to continue to work for as long as they want to, and not forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65. Do you agree or disagree?

The appropriate age at which a person should stop working is now a much debated issue in the society. Some opine that people should be given the option to choose when they want to call it a day while others oppose this notion. In my personal point of view, the right age for a person to retire should be around 60 years old. I, for one, strongly agree that age should be set as a criterion for people to retire at the aforementioned age due to several reasons that I shall discuss below.

First and foremost, if senior workers dominate the working sector, there will be lesser job opportunities for the fresh graduates. As a result, most of them will be forced to take up careers which are poles apart from what they had studied for. To illustrate this further, a medical graduate might find it very disheartened when he had to spend around five precious years studying medicine and at the end of the day, he will have to take up another profession rather than doctor due to the insufficient job opportunities available. On top of that, due to the lack of genuine passion on the work which was not of their option, there is a greater possibility for their performance standard to dwindle at their workplace.

Apart from that, not all elderly workers are physically well. Beyond that age, a large proportion of them have an elevated chance of contracting a multitude of health problems such as stress related diseases and cardiovascular illnesses. To cite an example, the stressful life that an aged teacher goes through will definitely take a toll on him. Consequently, they will not be able to give their best in whatever they are doing. Besides, the academic institution will have to pay for his medical bills, resulting in more loss for the institution. Thus, it would indeed be better if at an older age, opportunities are given to the younger ones.

Admittedly, the expertise of the senior workers who had retired should never be underestimated. Their invaluable experiences and knowledge in their respective fields such as engineering, medicine, and law can certainly be beneficial to the younger generation. Hence, it is highly recommended that the retiree come over to the companies or hospitals to have regular sessions with the present staffs to bridge the gap between them and to pass on their knowledge.

In conclusion, it is indeed evident that age limit should be set for retirement. There will come a certain time when the older generation should hand over the responsibility to the fresh comers who are certainly waiting to be given a choice to prove themselves. After all, retirement not only marks the end of an individual, but also gives him a chance to make up for what he has lost throughout his working life.