Writing Feedback / Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means [8]

Dear friends, please help me to paraphrasing some general sentences in different manners and tell me some better synonyms in this essay. Thanks in advance.

"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new way." (It's a GRE issue)

The author points out a new definition of originality. He states, although many people believe that originality is considering something that was never thought before, it means collecting ideas in new way. I strongly accede to this assertion that originality is not only gaining a new result, but also creating a new method and the way of thinking can be called originality too. Nowadays, the world around us needs more creative ideas to improve, and the first step in this process is announcing a define definition of originality to the world, which shows all critical aspects effect on it. In fact, two examples give support to my favorable attitude towards the subject, are mentioned below.

First and foremost, in the scientific area, Newton is one the best examples of a creative man. Many years ago, when Newton was alive, people had a different idea of researching. They were looking for the exceptions, and most of the aroused questions were about the reason of exceptions in the world like eclipse, earthquake and so forth. Scientists were not curious about basis reason of an issue. All their energies were put only in justifying the phenomena. In a case of need, they were not able to prove, relating the phenomena to magic and superstitions were prevalent. On that time, Newton was sitting under a tree, when suddenly an apple dropped on his head. The question of why this apple dropped was born. As a result, many fundamental laws of dynamics discovered and now the rudimentary question well-known as a turning point in the world. The most important specification of Newton was his novel attitude. He tried to prove simplest rule of nature, not paying attention only on exceptions. Then, when scientists faced with problems, they looked back on the initial assumptions and theories and tried to revise them.

Another example is about a famous cardiologist, Michael Fox, who is well-known due to his combination theories in medicine. In 1914, he was graduated as a mechanical engineer from Imperial College London. As far as, he was not interested in his major, he made a decision to further his education in medicine. At that time, a common problem among cardiologist was blood clotting disorder in heart valve replaced patient. At the first time, this surgery was done by implanting a pig's heart valve for a patient, but this valve could be used longer than one year, and then it would be rejected. Another proposed solution was using artificial valves, which could only postpone the death to more than one year after replacement. To settle this problem, Fox proposed a new design of valve that was using in evaporating machines. He did not invent a new device, he just utilized a trustworthy valve in medicine, but his proposal became a revolution in cardiovascular system. After a while, biomechanics, an interdisciplinary major, was introduced to the world. This example shows that just by looking around more precisely and combining old devices lead to cheerful invention.

To sum up, I strongly believe that originality is not only creating new thing, but also collecting old theories in new ways. Besides, revising and restating previous theories show us more practical aspects in modern technology.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Some people like to communicate by email and voice mail. Other face-to-face. [3]

Some people like to communicate by email and voice mail. Other people like to communicate by telephone or face-to-face...

Nowadays, due to saving time, many people would rather communicate by email and voice call. Although I understand them and see their limitations, I support the idea of communicating by telephone or face-to-face. I have this preference because of some reasons that is mentioned in following paragraphs.

Communication should be clearly and obvious and it can be better done by face-to-face connection. The format of the face, the way we look and our temper can be transfer only in this matter. Therefore, less misunderstanding would be happen and our connection has more guarantee. For instance, I watched a film last week, there was a woman who was too shy to accept her boyfriend proposal directly and the man thought she does not love him anymore on the internet. I think if he proposed while looking her eyes everything would have been changed. So, face-to face interacting may cause less doubt in comparison to the other methods.

We can take advantage of communicating by phone or face-to-face to allotte more time for each other. Nowadays, many people suffer from depression in the world. A pressed article in a popular magazine was describing the reasons of this happening that one of the most critical reasons was not sharing the feeling and emotions with our friends. As a result, the more allotting time, the more benefits we can reach.

As stated above, I thought we should preserve our costum and do not let technology damage our living. But, in case of need, communicating by emails and voice mails are so beneficial. It has many benefits like its price and rate, but it is not always suitable like talking with your mother. In my preservation, the advantages of face-to-face interaction overweigh the merits of connecting by emails.

Writing Feedback / Barcelona (where would you like to travel and why) [4]

Barcelona is my favorite city that I would like to travel to. This city is best place for tourism because of its monument, climate and soccer.

First and foremost, Barcelona can be described as an ancient city in Spain, rich in civilization. There are lots of memorials in its museum, covering the most of the historic events. You can enjoy its monuments too. Barcelona has been well-known by its historic buildings. There are lots of eye-catching structures visible throughout the city. Many famous architects have displayed their abilities by developing amazing buildings and make it be one of the most interesting cities for tourism interested in monuments like me.

Second, Barcelona enjoys a Mediterranean climate with mild- cool winter and warm summer suitable for sunbathing. It has several beaches around the city. Snowfalls are not prevalent in the city but those are common on the outskirts of the city. its humid weather is so pleasant and often producing no rain. It is a sunny city and suitable for me to travel.

Last but not least, Barcelona has a long sporting tradition specially soccer. FC Barcelona is a sport club best known worldwide for its soccer team and I am one of its dedicated fans. Messi, who is chosen as the best soccer player in the world, is playing in this team. "camp nou" is FC Barcelona stadium and lots of matches will be held in there every year. Being in "camp nou" and seeing my favorite player is one of my dreams that can be achieved by traveling to Barcelona.

Hope I will get enough money for traveling to Barcelona and reach one of my dreams. Then I will actually write another essay about my experiences on the trip.

Writing Feedback / If we choose an animal to like, we should do our best to protect them [4]

Nowadays, pets can be found in many houses and apartments, how to support and act them have been a controversial question among the people. Some people believe that they should be behaved like family members. Although I understand the people who are worried about this attitude, I agree with the idea of being kind with pets. There are several reasons to support my preference.

First and foremost, animals are as emotional as the human. They need our kindness, help and support. An independent study has been conducted on pets behavior recently. Based on this research, pets that were treated like family members live longer than the others. It can show us the importance of a good temper with animals. Therefore, we should be aware that how much our behavior affect the animals.

The other reason is that we should respect to animals. If we choose an animal to like, we should do our best to protect them. No one more than human kinds have been damaged their living place. Therefore, it is our duty to be with them like a lovely friend. Besides, we can teach our children to respect animals by this temper too. In the end, I hope we will have a better behavior against animal in the world and try to show a positive point of view to our next generation. After a while, by living with animals, it is necessary for us to treat them like family members. We can take advantage of this behavior to show a better way of the future in treating with animals to our children.