Undergraduate / 'attracted by teacher's explaining' - A statment of purpose for teaching. [4]

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I have to write a statement of purpose to join teaching in public sector; here is the beginning of it. I hope u correct me and if possible suggest more powerful ideas.

I always remember when I was a little boy at the first grade. I was attracted by the teacher and his way in explaining. When he asked us what we want to be when we grow up, I found no other job to say than I want to be like him. It was not because I didn't know other professions, but because I felt there is no other job like teaching kids. I grow up with this dream and I met different kind of teachers till I graduated in the university. Though some teachers aren't good enough to me and my class mates, I have never felt teaching is unworthiness. This ambition pushed me to teach before even having my B.A. I have been teaching kids and teenagers in private sector for more than three years now and even if it is a bit different of what I was thinking, I love it and I find it the job in which I can help people and contribute in building our society. Knowing about the concour, I find it a good opportunity to me to join public schools where I can share my experience and benefit students from different social classes from my experience and contribute to the goodness of our nation....

Writing Feedback / Computers make some jobs easier. [4]

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Computers make some jobs easier

Few things have as much effect on our world as the computer. With the invention of computers several things in our lives, which were impossible or difficult to be performed become possible and easier. This device facilitates our lives and makes it enjoyable and much easier than it was, despite some drawbacks. This essay is an attempt to cast light on how the computers make some jobs easier.

So many products would not be in the market; in large quantities and low price if there were not computers. These products need precise calculations and skilful competences which human being can not do easily, especially if we consider the fact that we need huge number of them and also the fact that people would not afford to buy them if they are expensive. Computers on the other side can do the job easily. Suffice it to enter the data and the computer can fulfil the calculations in short time. Mass media and jobs like teaching and accounting topped the jobs that become highly developed and easier thanks to the invention of the computer.

Without computers television programmes wouldn't be easy to be produced in as good quality as they are today. Computers treat pictures smartly and adjust the voice, making it fits each situation. Concerning newspapers and other forms of writing, it is plain that typing long newspapers' articles is a work that needs tremendous time and efforts using old methods; however, typing in a computer is less frustrating and much enjoyable. Education is for sure the engine of a society. It has being benefited lot from the emerge of the computer. Students can save as much information as they life in their computers without any need to look for copy-books and coloured pens. Computers offer mise en page in different styles and colours. It doesn't take much time to write, make in a good form and save the data. Teachers also can prepare their lessons and save them easily.

The computers offer mathematical operations and make it easy for the accountants to enter the data, read it and interpret it. By using the enterprises, the heads of the enterprises save time and money. They needn't to travel far away and wait a long time to know what is happening in different departments of their companies. The central computer device enables them to see the information they want, whenever they need them. Without computers they have to spend much money and time on numerous files and documents they have to write and be careful to place them where they can find them when they need them. This obviously requires much space, time, money and hard work.

By and large, computers facilitate our lives, offering opportunities that make many jobs easier. Even though the fact that computers have got some negative aspects, I believe their advantages outweigh their drawbacks.

ladib

Writing Feedback / Tutoring in Morocco (English language essay) [3]

Tutoring becomes a phenomenon in Morocco. Not only the elite who turns towards teaching their children in private sector, paying lot for tutoring, but also the middle class people are trying to offer their children good education and additional lessons especially in foreign languages. This essay is casting light on the reasons and the advantages of tutoring in our society.

Losing trust in the public schools and state teachers, parents become more and more aware of the importance of tutoring their children in private centres or even hiring teachers home to explain properly to students. Public Schools' quality is degrading due to luck of materials and large numbers of students in classes among other problems. Knowing this besides the fact that good schools and universities in the country are more and more selective requiring high competencies, Moroccan families struggle to offer good education to their children via private sector. Like other countries, tutoring in Morocco is expensive ranging from 100 dhs to 200 dhs per hour.

Foreign languages are much more desired not only by parents but also by the whole society due to the fact that they are the key to science, business, and tourism. Despite the fact that French is the first foreign language spoken in Morocco, English is the most desired and preferred to all the majority of parents. They urge their children to learn it counting sensitizing them to the importance of this language worldwide, doing everything they can to enable their children to be good at English.

Being aware of its value, parents prefer teaching their kids in Schools where English is taught in primary grades. Moreover, some parents pay much money to bring a tutor home for their kids to better learn this language and it becomes a phenomenon nowadays in Morocco. People hire teachers to give extra lesson at home, far from bad conditions in most of Moroccan classes, where kids are comfortable and safe.

Tutoring is, indeed, a good way to save students who find difficulties in understanding the lessons given in class. As far as English language is concerned, tutoring is not merely a successful tool to recuperate the lessons students miss in their ordinary classes, but also an effective way of better know English language rules, having a good pronunciation and fluency in speaking skills.

This phenomenon of giving extra lessons in Morocco society has several advantages. Though some people consider it unhealthy because it makes students lazy and always rely on them to have good marks.

Writing Feedback / 'injustice ruins the peaceful life' - THE INJUSTICE ESSAY [3]

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People around the globe have been suffering the injustice; a disease that kills values, injures dignity and leads some people to revenge, preferring death to life. Injustice affects individuals as well as societies and the whole world. It is a disease created by human to dehumanize human. This essay is an attempt to shed light on a few injuries of this unneeded sickness.

Feeling of injustice ruins the peaceful life of every single person. Individuals sense the injustice in daily life, in things like the freedom of speech, when someone is deprived of their right to say their point of view, they feel oppressed and unwanted. This is much more offensive when the whole community is deprived the right of saying what they believe in and it becomes worse when they are told their mother tongue is unable to express things clearly. To make it practical, I bring here the example of Amazigh people in Morocco, they have to speak other languages in courts and the state offices otherwise their rights are in danger!

Internationally speaking, citizens of developing countries suffer from injustice, the root of all human mistakes. They feel they are treated rudely and exploited badly just because they are in the other side of the world. Until recently, many countries were occupied by the west, underestimating the citizens, claiming they are unable to control their own land alone. This was happened in countries such as Egypt and North African nations. The situation is still going on in bloody way in other nations like Afghanistan and Iraq.

This mother of all the crimes results in a sense of instability and bloodletting everywhere. People are ready to sacrifice their life to take revenge when they feel of injustice. Hence, we are living in a world full of daily bloody events and wars almost all of them are caused by the injustice. Therefore we are all affected by this human unwanted sin, and we must all contribute to find ways to get out of it and live in democratic world in peace.

Writing Feedback / Essay on cooperation between nations [3]

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No country can progress without cooperation with other countries.
Success is something people can achieve easier when they cooperate with one another, than running towards it individually. Countries are in need to help each other to go further and faster in the development. No country has all what it needs and every nation needs to be in cooperation with others to be strong and offer its citizens prosperity and happiness. The core of this essay is showing the advantages of cooperation between nations.

No one is perfect, and no nation can live alone in a separate land in a good conditions. People need each other and the same is with countries; they have to cooperate for the advantage of all. Many positive aspects are there to be gained in cooperation. Economically speaking, countries can work together to invest in each others land and exchange imports and exports benefiting from discounts and giving their citizens the opportunity to enjoy the other's products and ideas and, can also give chance to people to work a broad and exchange experiences.

Countries should also be open their doors to others offering them education and other services. Students can share experiences and educational resources and researches. This is a good way to enhance science and research around the globe. Moreover, there must be field of studies on cultures and religion studies that can offer to students to understand others, respect and live with others in harmony. This leads to a peaceful world where every body can live and enjoy freedom.

Political issues are also very important and countries have to cooperate in this domain. No country can defend its rights alone.
Religion and cultural studies offer different nations' students to know and better understand the others and hence living in harmony and respect. Parctising this less disagreements are to be between countries and here would be no need for wars.

in my opinion nations around the globe are in need to each other . Every body likes to live in peace and enjoyment. Cooperation among nations is, in my point of view, a perfect solution to most of the world's crisis.

Writing Feedback / 'obliged to do what you don't like' - essay on doing jobs people don't like [6]

Doing a job that you don't like is a wast of time.

Looking at the world today, there are so many people who are doing jobs they don't like and when they are asked why they simply answer there are no other choices for them. However, this creats lot of troubles and restless in these people's life. People should be in places they love and do work thay want and appreciate.

Prents puch their children to major in field they sometimes don't like which results in a total failure and leads most of the time to having jobs they don't really like and appreciate. Being obliged to do what you don't like is a catastrophe for not only people who work but also the ones they work with and the job itself. These people are not doing their correctly, they aren't going to look forwards to ameliorate it and they aren't going to feel happy about it. They give a bad image about their jobs by curcing it all the time. More than this they affect the one they work with especially if they are chiefs. The worst is the problems spread to affect the whole life of person, his wife, kids and friends.