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Joined: Jan 30, 2012
Last Post: Mar 15, 2012
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jajadiba   
Mar 15, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Earth is the only planet' - Planet Earth essay [3]

well i must say i dnt really like the topic, but still i cn give some suggestions 4 u...when i read the topic, i was imagined that maybe u want to elaborate more on the layers provided in the earth...i thnk u should write more on the types of layers in the earth...

or maybe u cn write about how to save earth campaigns...this will be more interesting topic to write...

this will b only my suggestions....
jajadiba   
Feb 27, 2012
Research Papers / Global Warming - need to come up with a question for my research paper [12]

there r many u can write bout global warming....maybe u can talk on what causes the global warming, eg: the over emission of gases, u can elaborate frm this points....lastly u can give the steps to be taken to curb global warming problems, eg: plant more trees, then elaborate the points....

actually my suggestions also can relate to human activities on global warming...if u hve a problem 2 write the essay, y dnt u search in the internet, u will receive a lot of information on global warming...
jajadiba   
Feb 27, 2012
Writing Feedback / An essay on "Protecting the Environment" campaign [4]

Write an essay on "Protecting the Environment" campaign

Nowadays,there are many stories in the news occurring environment problems for such acid rain, global warming and depleting of ozone layer. Where are the community who are concern on the environment's condition? What do we need to do to inculcate them with environment saving habits? Actually there are many steps can be taken to encourage others in nurturing the environment. One of the step is by introducing a "Protecting the Environment" campaign. As usual the campaign will educate people to be more concern on the environment's condition. However, from this campaign, many new rules imposed and also activities that will heartened others on protecting the environment together.

Through the campaign, we introduce a ruling that drivers who park their cars are not allowed to leave their engines running. This is because it can help to reduce the emission of carbon monoxide from vehicles. Furthermore, security guards are tasked to advise those waiting in the car to turn off their engines. Besides that, for those who purchase a hybrid car are entitled to three months of free parking in the city. With these rules, there will be many people concern on the effects of using excessive of petrol to the environment.

A talk on how to practice green lifestyles at home also will be held to instil them on environment saving habits. Through the talk, we can encourage them to live healthy lifestyles such as use energy saving bulbs and low energy appliances. For those who love planting, insist them to plant certain herbs that repel mosquitos. As a result, it can help to avoid using harmful chemical insecticides that endangered other living life.

The authorities also need to play their roles in enforcing strict law to those who do not care on the cleanliness of the environment. They can imposed fine of RM 50 on the spot for those who caught littering. Moreover, operators who do not keep their premises clean could be fined up to RM 1,000. By imposing fine to the offenders, it can give them a lesson and they will be afraid to repeat their mistakes again.

Everyday there are many wastes thrown either domestic waste or industrial waste. On top of that, there must be a proper treatment for these wastes, so that, it will not pollute the environment. Another step can be done is recycle all non-biodegradable materials such as plastic bottles, cans and newspapers, instead of sending them to garbage bin. In addition, the recycle materials will be produce into new products.

To end, the recognition will be given to individuals who have contributed towards environmental conservation. Besides that, a reward of rebate up to RM 500 on yearly assessment also given to those who follow a green lifestyle. This will be another step to catch more people to be a part of the campaign.
jajadiba   
Feb 21, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'College pressures' - on Illustration, narrative, cause, effect, contrast, compare. [3]

Illustration
i thnk ur introduction is 2 simple....u should choose one topic 2 discuss on the problems faced by the teenagers for such school related problems...i thnk i'll be much better...

Narrative
sorry 2 say bt it seems dat ur story is not interesting...

i thnk wat is meant by ur lecturer is dat u should write a simple essay bt it doesnt mean dat u have 2 write it very short....maybe a simple paragraph for such like 3 paragraphs maximum...u should refer 2 ur lecturer...
jajadiba   
Feb 21, 2012
Essays / Ideas about a topic of local/national/international issue of concern? [4]

i thnk 2 enhance ur knowledge, u should read some local newspapers...i believe it can help u....there r many issues nowadays...u cn write a lot of things in terms of politic, social & economy...eg: critical of social problems among youth, maybe u cn talk about da effects & steps to help the youths....its very general...u also can search through internet 2 get more points for ur essay...
jajadiba   
Feb 10, 2012
Writing Feedback / Causes of loafing among youths, essay [6]

i thnk i hve recheck it twice, i m nt sure which words that could be wrongly spelled....maybe u cn show me some words....asap
jajadiba   
Feb 9, 2012
Essays / How to write effective concluding paragraphs? [2]

1) It is an important to be selective about the people we mix with

To end, in terms of relationships, we pretty much select who we would like to be friends with. It is different from family since we do not get to pick our relatives. Then most people would say that why not take advantage of this and choose to be constantly surrounded by 'wonderful people'?

2) Malaysians should take seriously the problem of global warming. Comment.

On the whole, I would like to suggest that all Malaysians should live a green lifestyle, for example, use energy saving bulbs and low energy appliances at home. Furthermore, instead of using a car which requires a lot of petrol, it is better to use a hybrid car. Besides that, give a reward for those who follow a green lifestyle, so that, they will be concern on the environment saving habits.

Any suggestions that can help me improve my English is needed...

Does anyone have the ideas to write concluding paragraph for these questions????

1) Through its awkward transmission times, Educational TV (ETV) seems to be missing its target group.
2) In an effort to promote domestic tourism, the government has implemented a five day work week for government offices. Do you think the government's objective has been achieved?

3) Unless students inculcate the reading habit, they will not be able to develop their critical thinking skills effectively. Do you agree with this statement?

jajadiba   
Feb 8, 2012
Letters / 'further academic and professional qualification' -Recommendation letter [4]

My suggestions;

Mr. XXXX achieved brilliant results with highest grade in the the Master's degree of International Relations. I had personally followed the preparation of his thesis on "The public spaces" which was discussed in the XXX on May 2011.

Following Mr. XXX's preparation of the thesis, I am very of his strong motivation, his autonomy in the self-organization of his work and his ability to rework external inputs.

In terms of content, Mr. XXX's thesis is considered an excellent result
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jajadiba   
Feb 8, 2012
Essays / Differences between 'to cow' and 'to bull' - Examsmanship & the Liberal Arts [14]

to improve ur reading, u should read more on english novels or story books which is easy for u to understand....another tips u should at least watch english movies without its subtitles in order to help you improving your understanding in reading the lips as well as to have effective listening...hope this tips can help u....
jajadiba   
Feb 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / Causes of loafing among youths, essay [6]

Causes of Loafing Among Youths

Nowadays, there are many news regarding teenagers problems occurring such as bullying and committing suicide. Loafing among youth is a common problem happening to students in schools during the class sessions. There will be many places that are normally favoured by them such as shopping complexes, fast food stalls and cybercafes which are near to school. There are some causes of loafing among youths and the steps should be taken to curb and reduce this problem.

Loafing among youths happened due to inattention from parents. This is because some parents are too materialistic and they just care about jobs and money. There are also some parents are poor, so that, to earn extra money, they do part time jobs in a day in order to cope with their financial expenses Because of busy with their jobs, they only spend less time with their children. As a result, the children end up involved in loafing problems.

Another causes of loafing among youths is because of they let themselves to befriend with the wrong peers. As a result, they are easily influenced by the negative mode. Sometimes youth's thinking is not strong enough to differentiate between right and wrong. It is not denial that friends are important for us, so choosing good friends is a steps to bring us to the right way.

Parents play an important roles as good leaders to help to overcome loafing problems among youths. Parents should spend quality time with their children, so that, they can get to know each other very well. Parents can do many activities such as watching movies in cinema, go for picnic and even doing chores together. When the children get close to their parents, then, they will discuss and speak about their problems.

The school authorities should also enforce strict law to eradicate loafing problems. the school should cane the students in front of other students if they being indiscipline, so that, they feel embarrassed and would not commit the same mistake again. Furthermore, it can also be a lesson to other students too.

On the whole, everyone must be involved in the fight against loafing problems among youths before it becomes worse. If parents, teachers and school authorities are committed, but without help from the youths, the objectives to fight against loafing problems could not be achieved. The youths should realize that they are the next generation to lead the country. Because of that, they need to spend time on studies instead of loafing.
jajadiba   
Feb 8, 2012
Writing Feedback / 250 Word Essay on Education Reform [2]

This is my suggestions....hopefully it can help you....

However, there are students below the average of....( better to state the range) who lack of strong foundation in the basics...(seems that your sentence is not complete). In addition, seventy-five percent of high school students are unprepared to go to college or university.

My plan is to establish a tutoring center for local high school students in my community. My aims to provide the center is to achieve the main goals:

1) Improving writing in English and math, science, and technology skills.
2) Provide students with a collaborative environment to help them become active in class and independent learners.
3) Assist bilingual students.
4) Guide students in application process for college & university
5) Inspired the students to share their knowledge with others

Tutors are selected through interviews and then assigned to appropriate subjects based on their qualfications. The $5,000 will be used to advertise and recruit for the center, through means of such flyers and newspapers. A public talks regarding the program's details will take place biannually.

jajadiba   
Feb 1, 2012
Essays / I'm going to sit speaking test for muet... how to write essay effectively? [9]

i m going to sit muet dis month....till now i m very scared because i m weak on in speaking English....because of that i really need any tips that can help me to improve my English

if its fine, i need some help on how to write essay effectively too....what do i need in order for me to write the essay?
jajadiba   
Jan 30, 2012
Letters / 'Miss Avsever greatly desires to go to U.S.A' Letter of recommendation to art gallery [2]

you may have to check on your spelling especially exhibition.

Moreover, she is motivated and hardworking person too

On our collective activities, I realize that she is good in group works.

As an architectural student, she needs aesthetical care on her masterpieces because she studied a master of basic art and architectural conceptions and materials. Especially for her project 'see you camouflage', which is against war. Combination of these materials have given such a significant importances due to its huge impact to visitors. Miss Avsever is my assistant in creating our projects and help me to plan and coordinate exhibition field. She has also social responsibility regarding environmental and cultural issues. Another our collective is Munzur Performance Workshop .We organized the workshop to inculcate environmental distraction and cultural assimilation of religion in Munzur region. Furthermore, the project is supported from the government. When we arranged the activity, Avsever is a leader of the art workshop. In the workshop, she and her team have had produced creative and colourful models to describe the damage of the region. After the workshop, a manifesto is declared and the projects will be exhibit in Ankara, a capital of Turkey.

you should also check on your grammar. hope that my comments can help you to write better.
jajadiba   
Jan 30, 2012
Undergraduate / 'I researched registered nurse' - career project [6]

i think that there shouldn't be full stop at the end of your sentence "i learned a lot about myself", if you want to mention the examples. From what i learnt, it is not an effective sentence to start with "For example". You should write it like this "First of all, I actually was satisfied with the assessment test because I learned a lot about myself, for example, I love helping and being surrounded with people, as well as socializing". This is only suggestions from me.
jajadiba   
Jan 30, 2012
Essays / Question on how to write effective introductory? (thinkers / Malaysian censorship) [2]

Q: This is the examples of how i write my introductory paragraph. Feedbacks, comments critique and tips are greatly appreciated.

1) Public examinations have bred a generation of rote-learners, but not thinkers. What are your views on this? Write a suitable introductory paragraph.

Students are oblige to sit on public examinations. Due to the examinations, there are many stories of successful students pass with flying colours spread in the TV news. Because of the situation, people believe that the improvement of their children's knowledge is based on the examinations. But, do the successful students can really think outside of the box? Or do they can be the next generation who invent a sports car that can be move under the water? A public examination is not necessarily will produce the generation with a good thinker.

2) Many Malaysian viewers feel that censorship laws are too strict and should be abolished. Do you agree?

The government or certain organizations do really have the right to censor and remove certain forms of media by their own beliefs? Or these decisions should be left up to you and that adults and parents should be making the decisions on what they themselves and their children should be watching and hearing? Some people believe that this is true and others like the government and other types of organizations believe that these restrictions and limits must be pressed on the media to protect their households from types of media that they feel may be inappropriate to them. However, the censorship in the media is too strict and not well handled that have to be abolished.
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