Writing Feedback / 'life is the best teacher' - what about the parents? [4]

Full topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Please help my grammar and meaning. I know I have many mistakes, If you you can, correct it and support my ideas. I appreciate your efforts. Thank you!)

I disagree that parents are the best teachers unless they are responsible and have outlived many occurrence in their life. Of course, Parents have a big experience of life and can give their advice at any time because they have deep intuition about their children.

Parents are the first teachers of their children in any cases in the world. Before their children reach to school, parents teach them how to step, to walk, to speak and generally help their children to realize this world. Furthermore, children copy parents behavior step by step even though their parents do not teach it. When children begin to go to school they meet teachers of diversity directions that also responsible for betterment and maturation of children. Of course, Parents try to do their best for their children to be good and sensible person but sometimes it may cause children being spoiled. However, We should always respect them and listen to their advice attentively because of getting old, they will be conservative and try to intrude in offering their advice.

Meanwhile, We can see such cases that being a teacher of growing child become more and more complicated especially when children are in adolescence period which parents can sometimes not oversee their children. Children become more rebellious in this period even their relatives can not help them because surroundings that may be their friend, education and others make them so emotional feelings that they do not obey their parents' words in many cases. Children would slowly adapt this situation once in a while.

On the other hand, I can say that parents are not the best teachers because they teach children what they know if they can find free time for children. Children learn other things by teachers of their school or college step by step in life. Apart from, Life presents us difficult circumstances which is unavoidable and show us how to overcome.

In conclusion, I want to say that life is the best teacher that tests and teachs us many things and how to be and how to behave ourselves in different position in this world.

Writing Feedback / 'many motives' - Why go to University? [7]

People can easy find many reasons why they should attend to University. Studying at university state that people have big opportunities to improve their education and knowledge.

Students can get diploma and degree from studying at University that means people can find well-paid job after graduating university and they will have own profession. University can provide wide and high education for who crave knowledge and who want to improve intellectual ability. Students may also have a big experience for period of study. There may appear many drawbacks that people can not avoid yourself from it such as perhaps they must live far from their home and parents however it can not become a significant barrier that people should not attend to University.

So I think if people want to study at university they can find many motives why they have to go to University.

Writing Feedback / Student's main purpose in getting an education is to earn a lot of money (Toefl) [2]

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I agree with this statement that student's main purpose in getting an education is to earn a lot of money. By means of high education diploma, Alumnus' create for yourselves future great opportunities in reaching a supreme position.

In my experience people in more country need diploma if they want to get high salary although they must to pay much money for education. After graduation university, people step to big life which is violent and strict and in this life they should provide themselves for being independence. They should support their parents who support them childhood through when they can manage their lives and family because it is their duties. We know that nowadays many thing connected with money and we can not get something without money as though it can not solve all in our lives. So I think that people's main purpose in getting an education is to earn a lot of money and to get higher places

Writing Feedback / We never know the value of water until the well is dry [3]

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Water is one of the most global problems in the world nowadays. Each country spend much money for cleaning and providing water to the people. However In many cases, we can see water which is used disorderly by people because they don't take advantage of water correctly and we know that it can lead the water ending. Contrary to the water taking over third parts of four in the world,more than ninety percent is unable to drink or to use and the rest of water is limited. So we shouldn't waste water in vainly, oppositely we should take profit of water rational