Writing Feedback / An Entrance Exam to Enter a University essay [4]

An Entrance Exam to Enter a University

There are many reasons that university should be mandatory for all students to take an entrance exam. First, an entrance exam can determine how students are interested to that university and career their pursuit. There are many students applying to a wrong university and career because of their parent would like them to going to that university, or their friends are going to that university, or they can get financial aid or scholarship from that university. For a student really likes to be a student of that university, he/she will study and prepare their best to become that university's student. So, an entrance exam will not matter or too hard to him/her. On the contrary, it will not only waste their money and time but also government and others. In addition, an entrance exam can help university find out the best students. These students will be get scholarship from university, government, or companies let them can spend their time into study or innovations. Social would to train these students to be the best to help our world. Finally, an entrance exam can balance and improve work environment. Each student has different future dreams. They will look for university and career they would like to be. An entrance exam could not hinder these students' dream. It will help students take more seriously on their career and future. Even though, many students feel an entrance exam might not fair for below average students. They may not pass the entrance exam to get into the university that they dream. Nothing is impossible and your dream will come true if you do it seriously.

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Son

Writing Feedback / How Computer Affects My Life [3]

Hi there,
Can you please help my grammar or words which I used incorrect?

Computer is becoming an important part, and people have been relying on its works a lot nowadays. First, I would like to give you a short introduce what computer is. About hardware, Computer is a machine consists some of main component such as CPU (Central Processing Unit), Memory, HDD (Hard Disk Drive), and a main board. It is a programmable machine to help user transfer and receive data. Also, if your computer has a network card, you can online to surf web. About software, there are million softwares can use on computer. I would list down here some of common softwares which many people use it every day such as Internet Explorer, Microsoft Office, and Windows Media, etc.

I have a complete set computer at home. It has included a computer, a LCD monitor, a key board, and a mouse. I use it for my work, school, and entertainment every day. For example, I can communicate with my co-worker or friends via email by using Internet Explorer or Microsoft Outlook. It is very convenient and saving a lot of time. I don't have to wait or look for the person I need to contact. I do not have to do a hand writing letter, and then mail it via the Post Office. I just open the Internet Explorer from the computer; it can send an email to my co-worker or friend within a minute. Another example that computer is very important to my life is it can help me to do research and school. For research, "Google" and many other similar websites can help me whatever information that I do not understand or would like to learn. It is very great help to me and I think for most people. For school, Microsoft Office can help me do presentation documents with Microsoft Word or Microsoft Power Point. Other softwares from Microsoft Office or Windows can help me do quick calculation or organization with Microsoft Excel or Drawing with Paint software. My last example for computer affects my life is Windows Media from Windows OS. I can enjoy music on the computer or I can install other similar software to play music.

In conclusion, I believe computer is not a part of my life but also many other people on this world nowadays. It can help us do everything more organizer, faster, and eaiser.

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Son

Writing Feedback / Houston is not a Best Place to Visiting - essay [5]

I feel I got too many grammar in my essay. Can you please help?

Houston is not a Best Place to Visiting
Every country has at least a state or city for tourist its culture and traditions. Once the tourist plan to visiting US, they will think about California, New York, Nevada, Washington, or Florida. There are few tourist think about they will visit Houston, Texas unless they have relationships who are living in Houston, Texas.

I think United State government knows Houston is not a good place to developing a best resource for sightseeing. First, geography of Houston locates about 70 miles from Galveston beach. However, the Galveston beach water see is not clean and clear as other place. There is only a Movie Garden at Galveston is not enough to attract the tourist. Second, Houston weather is too inclement. Summer time temperature is always above 90 Fahrenheit degree which make people just want to stay in-door with AC. Winter time temperate never drop down under 30 Fahrenheit degree. However, windy and raining cause piercingly cold. Finally, due to not many tourists visiting, government does not build out many entertainment or place for tourist. Therefore, people seem could not learn how to treat outside of city customers.

In conclusion, Houston is not a very good place for long vacation. You can have a short tour to Houston to learn or understand about Houston, Texas culture, weather, people, or you can visit NASA if you like scientist.

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Son

Writing Feedback / 'Travel is always interesting' - Essay correction [3]

Hi,

I'm new in this forum. I see many people help to correct gramma and words using for student's essay in this forum as tutors. I'm writing a first short draft essay topic "How to prepare for a trip to a place you've never been before". Can you please help my gramma and words that I used incorrect.

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Travel is always interesting, especially, a trip to a place where you have never been before. It is very exciting and challenging. However, you should do a research and prepare well for your challenging trip. First, you should do a research whether the place you will visit is safe or not. It will be a night mare trip if there are so many crimes at the new place. Next, you need to know the place you will be visiting required the VISA or not. If yes, you must get the VISA before your trip. In addition, the Passport must be ready if your trip's place is outside of your country. If you've already had the Passport, you need to check back your Passport that must be good at least six months after your return date home from your trip. It's a law! Now, your trip date is almost close. It depends on how long your trip will be that you should prepare money, clothes, and medicines if needed. You should make a budget for spends such as tickets, hotel or rent, meal, drink, shopping, and some other activities. You should plan how many and which type of clothes should bring with you to suitably to the new place after researched. An important thing is to bring some of common symptom medicines. The last thing for once you arrived and visiting the new place is to use a notebook for where you been and what you do. Example, you should note where you parked while you were visiting the museum, or how much you have spent at a new store and write down the reference number. In conclusion, you will have a wonderful trip if you do not forget any steps above. I wish you have a great trip!

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Son