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dibya   
Jan 16, 2013
Scholarship / Limited Resources/ Lack of funds; LETTER OF INTENT [5]

seeky
Reading the aim of the program especially the part that describes the use of the mathematics and related computational tools to bring real-world, challenging as well as important socio-economic and industrial problems into a form simple enough so that a good solution can be found in a reasonable time, I realized that it is the kind of science that we really need in this critical time in my country Syria...who does WE refer to.

rephrase it like: I realized that it is the kind of science that my country Syria needs at this critical juncture.
dibya   
Jan 16, 2013
Graduate / Indian Youth Congress; Asian Institute of Management - Contributions to community [3]

Please help proofread the essay for AIM MBA:

What school and community organizations did you join while in college and what are your major contributions to these organizations?

Politics is the sole medium through which substantive changes can be made for the welfare of the society. During my Engineering days I had joined the Indian Youth Congress .India needed and still needs infusion of youth in the political process to bring about radical reforms in the otherwise rudimentary and corrupt system. My initial aim was to garner support and persuade more students to join politics. In over a year's time I had been able to add more than fifty students in the youth wing. Along with my team, I travelled to many rural areas of my state for the Panchayat (village Council) elections and got the opportunity to address small gatherings, which was my first experience in public speaking. I was moved by the deplorable condition of people especially in the tribal areas. On directions from senior party members I urged my sub-ordinates to motivate the aggrieved people and empower them to fight for their fundamental rights. My experience in Politics transformed me and changed my perspective towards life. As my team campaigned along the length and breadth of my state I developed my interpersonal skills and came in contact with people belonging to diverse culture. Thereafter I led the Youth Council of the party for my sub-division in some political protests and campaigns. I was also involved with Green Peace for the cause of protecting Olive Ridley turtles, which are an integral part of Odisha's vibrant history.

Describe your three most accomplishments to date, and what personal traits or qualities enabled you to accomplish these?

Accomplishments are the mirror images of a person's abilities. My accomplishments bear the stamp of my exploits both in and outside my professional life.

In 2010 I had joined CRY in order to work towards alleviating the condition of impoverished children in India. I got the opportunity to lead certain notable campaigns at CRY. One of them was the "Right to Fight" campaign which was contrived out of the need for awareness among the deprived people about their Children's Rights, endowed to them by the constitution of India. My Team targeted all the parents and adults of a Tsunami Rehabilitation area where there was lack of civic amenities and education facilities. My efforts have brought about some substantive developments in reducing child labour in those areas of Chennai. The Government has also started a primary school there. My strong moral principles, leadership skills and strong interpersonal skills had helped in making the campaign a grand success. . This campaign was my brain child and has now been adopted by other CRY centers across the country. My effort towards safeguarding the future of India by protecting the children's rights is my best accomplishment till date.

My second accomplishment came through helping my organization pull back a dying project and turn it into a profitable one through proactive proposals. My clients had been using an outdated tool for the Build Management process which made the daily activities very tedious. To overcome the problem I developed one tool with the minimal help of some seniors. I submitted a White paper, which gave a detailed analysis of the problems in the existing process and how they could be resolved. Impressed by the idea, the clients asked for a Proof of Concept (POC).The POC turned out to be a successful demonstration of my ideas and hence paved the way for its implementation. I even convinced the clients to make a structural change which led to the formation of a new four member team. XXX gained additional revenue of $17,000 and also the profitability of the project jumped from 23.3% to 76.22%.My hardworking and analytical skills were put to test during this accomplishment.

My third accomplishment has been the mentoring of a group of people with the aim of making them valuable assets for the organization. Through the subtle art of persuasion and coherent argumentation I had convinced my client to restructure the Build Management Team, which eventually led to the creation of a new four member team. This team that I was leading comprised of two boys from Southern India, one boy from North-eastern part and one Mexican girl .I aimed at creating a team in which every individual would have a common goal, which could be realized only through complementary efforts and cohesiveness. Each of the associate was having unique technical skills and personality traits. However in its inception, individuals were a bit apprehensive towards approaching each other. Through democratic, delegative and authoritative leadership I motivated them to work diligently for the team. I emphasized on team based learning exercises, which helped in creating strong bonds among themselves. In spite of some escalations, the team completed and delivered the project one month ahead of time. The performance of the team vindicated my own belief in my ability to lead others and transform them into future leaders.

In addition to academic qualifications and work experience, what other personal factors can you cite to strengthen consideration for your application?

"Learning the hard way" is what characterizes my experiences in life. Born in a lower middle class Indian family, I had to face trying times during my childhood and adolescence .It didn't take much

time for me to understand the value of money and the essence of struggle in life. I have nurtured my thoughts by reading books by Vivekananda, Gandhi and even books on politics, history and religion. The stint in politics helped me in acquiring indispensable leadership and motivational skills. As a leader both in my professional life and outside it, I have led by example and with a lot of conviction. A sustainable business ideology with Corporate Social Responsibility is what I will provide to AIM. I will bring a multi-cultural mindset to AIM which is very essential in the present business world where operations are expanding beyond boundaries .My deeply embedded ethical values can be put on anvil at AIM. I have been part of NGO services that has fostered an attitude of Altruism in me and I will share my experience with my AIM's classmates. My struggles in life have made me to believe that my education is worth it only if I can help make my surroundings a better place to live in. So I would share my vision of a "Purposeful Leadership" with my AIM classmates.

Describe two business problems or opportunities you wish to investigate for your thesis. How would your investigations contribute to your community, business organization, or the national economy?

The most important issue that I strongly feel about is the Foreign Direct Investment in Retail in India. After many mammoth debates the Government of India finally got the bill cleared in the Indian parliament paving the way for retailers like Tesco and Wal-mart to open shops in India. The reform hopes to create an organized retail sector apart from creating millions of jobs. However there are concerns that the big retail farms might create a monopoly in the Indian market through strong lobbying. The monopolization may lead to the death of many small private shops that exist in each and every corner of big and small towns. In such a case millions of people from the unorganized sector will be unemployed. So I want to study the FDI in retail in details and come out with a plan that would suggest for a balance between FDI and local economy. I would like to create a roadmap for enhancing the FDI in multi-brand retail from 51% to 100% through calculated measures.

Skill and knowledge management has been one of India's perennial problems. India has more than 50% of its population below 25 years of age. Entrepreneurship epitomizes the ugly part of India's economic boom. There has been lack of Entrepreneurs in spite of a confident, educated and determined population. One of the reasons is the risk averse nature of Indians. The Government policies also haven't yet created a conducive environment for budding entrepreneurs. Rampant corruption and poor technology have added to its woes. Lack of enough funding for start-ups has been a big obstacle .Foreign Investors and venture capitalists too have failed to understand the unique market demands of India and have not been supportive to any start-ups .Entrepreneurship in India is not just a business problem rather a grand opportunity to take India forward. It is an unlocked potential that can help in contributing towards India's inclusive growth and job creation. A thesis on this will help me find out the gaps and come out with a strategy that will not only help my Business organization but also my community and country.
dibya   
Jan 10, 2013
Undergraduate / Distinctive Impression; Personal Statement for Illinois MBA program [3]

Write a personal statement that should:
Introduce yourself to the admissions committee;
contain a description of your relevant education, work experience, and volunteer activities;
outline your future professional goals;
explain why you believe the ILLINOIS MBA can help you achieve your professional goals; and
indicate what your personal contribution to the ILLINOIS MBA will be.

Please proofread my response:

Hello, my name is Dibya Ranjan Pal and I hail from India. I work in XXX as an IT Analyst .I take deep interest in Politics and History. My hobbies include bodybuilding, writing blogs and participating in debates. My friends say that my smile is contagious, and I would like to lend it to my Illinois community. I have always been motivated and guided by Swami Vivekananda's quote: "Arise, awake and Stop not till the Goal is reached."

In 2008 I completed my high school with 80% marks and enrolled myself in ITER College for a degree in Electronics and Telecommunication Engineering. During my Engineering days I joined politics as I believed that politics was the sole medium through which substantive social changes can be made for the welfare of the society. Through my stint in politics I acquired indispensable leadership and motivational skills. Along with my team, I travelled to many rural areas of my state for the Panchayat (village Council) elections and got the opportunity to address small gatherings, which was my first experience in public speaking. I was moved by the deplorable condition of people especially in the tribal areas. My experience in Politics transformed me and changed my perspective towards life. Thereafter I led the Youth Council of the party for my sub-division in some political protests and campaigns.

In 2008 I finished my Engineering degree and joined TCS upon the completion of a 3 month initial training program. Since then, my 4 years in the IT industry has been a collection of great experiences both in Technology and in working with different clients. During my first 2 years in TCS, I gained considerable technical knowledge. In 2010 while working for Bank Of America client, I had proposed the use of a tool developed by me for which I was later rewarded. Through the subtle art of persuasion and coherent argumentation that I had gained from Politics, I convinced my client to restructure the Build Management Team, which eventually led to the creation of a new four member team. In a short period I had helped my company to salvage a dying project and churn it into a profitable one through proactive proposals to the client, eventually generating additional revenue of over $17,000. The success of the team that I had led, brought into limelight my leadership and persuasive skills as well as corroborates my ability to mentoring juniors. My appetite for challenges lured me into greater management activities like Offshore Billing and Crisis Management thereby showcasing my analytical skills. My knack for learning further pushed me into proposal writing and by now I have worked on 3 Business proposals for TCS. However lack of in depth Business management skills has proved to be a hard stop in my growth. A broader leadership role in a consulting firm will only be befitting when I have a cross-functional knowledge of the industry. Through my leadership skills and experience working across various customers, I have developed valuable MBA technical skills but they need to be honed to fine tune my Business acumen and thereby excel in the field of consulting. I have made presentations at lower management levels, but still I have a long way to go to be "Boardroom Ready.

Along with my present professional life I am involved with an NGO named CRY (Child Rights & You).I had joined CRY in order to work towards alleviating the condition of impoverished children in India. I got the opportunity to lead certain programs at CRY. As a core team member I am involved in formulating new campaigns and programs within the city to foster support for our cause. I have also been spreading awareness about Child Rights in Chennai through presentations in various colleges.

My short term goal starts with gaining in-depth business management skills, which will help me to think strategically and develop new practices to address the ever changing Business scenario. After Graduation I would like to join a premier consulting firm as a Business consultant wherein I could exploit my acquired knowledge in a Real time consulting role. The experience that I will gain will help me inch closer to my bigger goal which is to lead a Global consulting firm like Deloitte, Ernst & Young, Capgemini or KPMG one day. I would control the operations of that firm, drive its business and make sure that innovation is given utmost priority.

Illinois's MBA program is concise and enriching in content. It's closed knit community of students and world class faculty will surely foster an exchange of knowledge, expertise, ideas, culture and friendliness, which seems quite tailor made for my career aspirations. The diversity in the class can be leveraged to analyze the different ways in which things are done in various parts of the world. This

will help me acquire an International perspective. The case competitions and experiential learning will help me go deeper into the realm of Business Consulting. The perfect blend of the curriculum and being in the middle of a diverse group will help me think about problems not only from a technical perspective but also in terms of its impact on the people. The Global Consulting Program program has also caught my attention and will surely provide a unique experience. In short I am sure that Illinois's MBA would provide me with the tools, network and opportunity to make an impact in the outside world.

My experience in Illinois would not be a one-way road. Through my acquired insights from the IT field I will enhance the experience of my classmates by presenting a different perspective to various Business problems. As an Indian, I will leverage my cultural and demographic diversity to bring about a different outlook to the peer learning process .A sustainable business ideology with Corporate Social Responsibility will be my contribution to the Illinois class. I have been part of Politics and NGO service that has fostered an attitude of Altruism in me, which I need to harness by being part of the Illinois's Community service. As a Part of the admissions team I would be the perfect Ambassador for Illinois's MBA program in my region and will help in bolstering its already dominant global brand value. Provided an opportunity a club like Cultural Excellence Group (CEG) can be formed to promote intercultural work

environment through experiential learning. Through my acquired experiences and strong ethical values I would like to leave a substantial and distinct impression on Illinois's community.
dibya   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / University should teach us to psychologically prepare for the cruel competitions [3]

which is the basic requirement. And also , we should know how to react when facing doubts either from our boss or partners...dont put And after period.

If the university gives us the courage to defeat difficulties, we won't fear those confusing stuffs in our work...who does "WE" refer to in this line..proper references are must.
dibya   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'organise yourself' Should teenagers work while they are students? (TOEFL) [8]

claudio94

Hi Claudio,

TOEFL prefers less complex sentences unlike the below one:
If they had something better to do, like working, then they would be gaining a lot of experience, and becoming more open-minded.
So please see if you could avoid such things...otherwise its a nice essay.
dibya   
Dec 26, 2012
Graduate / My father's precarious job; Schulich/ How you contribute to MBA class of Schulich [3]

The Schulich School of Business is Canada's Global Business School™. Each applicant has a set of unique experiences and perspectives which contribute to the program. How will your background enhance and broaden your learning and that of your classmates in Schulich's diverse environment?

Please help proofread my answer:

Born in a lower middle class Indian family, I had to face trying times during my childhood and adolescence. My family had a lot of financial constraints because of my father's precarious job. During High school I used to take private tuitions in order to support my study expenses. It didn't take much time for me to understand the value of money and the essence of struggle in life. To get rid of my anguish I nurtured my thoughts by reading books by Vivekananda, Gandhi and even books on politics, history and religion. A blend of my previous experience and thoughts emancipating after reading the books, helped me develop a new perspective about this world. I started believing that my education is worth it only if I can help make my surroundings a better place to live in. I joined politics during my Engineering days with the sole aim of creating a platform wherein I can bring widespread changes for the welfare of the society. During my stint in politics I acquired indispensable leadership and motivational skills. As my team campaigned along the length and breadth of my state I developed my interpersonal skills and came in contact with people belonging to diverse culture. The lessons from such experiences will pay off for my Schulich classmates.

In 2008 I joined TCS and started a new professional journey. It became the anvil on which my leadership traits were perfected. As a Team lead I learned how to be authoritative and democratic when situation demands. Mentoring the team helped me understand team dynamics from a closer angle. Overcoming the ethical dilemma that I had faced during the yearly team appraisal vindicated my strong ethical values. The acquired abilities will help me to create a synergy among my classmates in Schulich and be productive by emphasizing on collaborative work.

Having worked for diverse clients in an intense competitive scenario I have assessed that a company has to be nimble, opportunistic and innovative to maintain the edge in Business. Working in a team I realized that to survive and grow, companies need to institutionalize the knowledge management process. When people from different fields meet in Schulich the churning of ideas will surely foster "thought leadership".

Apart from my professional life I have been involved with CRY (Child rights and You) spreading awareness about Child Rights among citizens. To garner more support for the cause I have been giving presentations in various colleges thus enhancing my presentation and creative skills.

I will bring a multi-cultural mindset to Schulich which is very essential in the present Business world where operations are expanding beyond boundaries. A sustainable business ideology with "Corporate Social Responsibility" is what I will bring to Schulich. My deeply embedded ethical values and leadership qualities will be of great advantage to my MBA class. Through the unique experience that I have gained over the years I would leave a distinct impression on Schulich's community.
dibya   
Dec 6, 2012
Graduate / MBA Essay on accomplishments. [5]

My 4 years in the IT industry has been a compendium of great experiences both in Technology and in working with different clients. I have had the privilege to work on many intricate issues faced by the present IT industry and the opportunity to don the role of a leader. In a short period I had helped my company to salvage a dying project and churn it into a profitable one through proactive proposals to the clients eventually generating additional revenue of $17,000. The success of the team brought into limelight my leadership and persuasive skills as well as corroborates my ability to mentoring juniors. My appetite for challenges lured me into greater management activities like Offshore Billing, Risk management and Proposal writing tasks. My ambition is to lead a Global consulting firm like Deloitte, Ernst & Young, Capgemini and KPMG one day. While Working for TCS I developed valuable MBA technical skills, which needs to be nurtured to fine tune my Business acumen and thereby excel in the field of consulting.

My short term goal is to gain in-depth business management skills which will help me to think strategically and develop new practices to address the ever changing Business scenario. I will leverage the diversity in the class of Katz to gain an international perspective. After Graduation I can exploit my knowledge in a Real time consulting role which will in turn propel me towards my long term ambition.
dibya   
Dec 5, 2012
Graduate / 'difficult and ethical problems in office' - Pittsburg-Katz mba essay [3]

Please read through another situation I had faced during that project.hope it is apt for the question:

Adversities and challenges brings out the best in a person. I believe that difficult situations have been part of my learning curve.
In 2010 when I was associated with Lloyds Bank account as Build Engineer for the Build and Configuration management team, we had faced an ethical dilemma. The team comprised of 8 members of which 4 were juniors(less than 3 years experienced) including me and the rest were seniors. There was a lack of proper management in the team as a result the work was never evenly distributed among the associates on the basis of their merit. The seniors who were supposed to take up the bulk of the tasks shelved most of the activities which were then taken up by us. The juniors were asked to come on weekends for Client support. However we never complained and took it as an opportunity to learn more and get into the thick of Build activities. We were sure to be rewarded with good appraisal for our diligence, on the contrary we were given nominal appraisal ratings much below our expectations. I am never afraid of calling a spade a spade. So my ethics prompted me to escalate our grievance to our manager. The manager did have cognizance of our efforts, Our problem was not only with the appraisal but also for a streamlined process where the work would be evenly distributed among the team members without any prejudice. The Project Manager had called for a meeting with all the teammates. He did listen to our concerns and decided to act accordingly. Consequently our appraisal ratings were upgraded and the team was asked to come out with a Build Configuration Process Model.

The turn of the events taught me a bit about handling difficult and ethical problems in office. My efforts helped me garner a lot of respect among my team members too. My steps vindicated my belief that conviction on one's principles is important and that true effort is always be rewarded.
dibya   
Nov 25, 2012
Graduate / 'difficult and ethical problems in office' - Pittsburg-Katz mba essay [3]

In 500 words or less, describe a situation where you worked on a project or assignment that you did not enjoy (perhaps due to the work assigned, the team members with whom you were assigned to work or any other related circumstance). Describe the general situation, your specific role, your actions and the outcome.

Below is my essay..Please help review that..

In 2010 I was part of a 10 member team of which 3 people had less than one year of experience. On every diwali the client awards one team for best performance. That year our team won that award, where every team member was provided with a certificate and Rs 5000. Shockingly the three juniors in the team was devoid of the honors.

The juniors were an integral part of the team and had been the most honest and hardworkers in the short span of time they had worked. The success was a team effort and it is always important to boost the morale of youngsters during their early professional life. To my dismay none of the senior teammates took up this issue with the Project Manager and only sympathized with the juniors.

Business ethics was one of the courses that I was taught during my initial training in xxxx.I asked the team's Project Manager to let us know why such treatment was meted out to the juniors. The manager downplayed the issue stating that they were too young to have made any substantial contribution to the team. Failing to convince him, I decided to escalate the matter to our Delivery manager. I told him that such discrimination on the basis of age doesn't seem to be right. My courage inspired my senor teammates to back me this time. The delivery Manager did acknowledge that the discrimination was unethical. Eventually the juniors got what was rightfully theirs.

The turn of the events taught me a bit about handling difficult and ethical problems in office. My efforts helped me garner a lot of respect among my team members. My steps vindicated my belief that conviction on one's principles is important.