Undergraduate / child trafficking as a form of marriage, Whitman essay [6]

PLEASE HELP WITH MY PAPER, IT'S DUE MARCH 1ST. PLEASE HELP I REALLY NEED SOME FEED BACKS
THANKS ALOT YOU GUYS

During your time at Whitman, how do you envision engaging with a current local, national, or global issue that is important to you?
I was eight years old, when I witness Isata; my best friend beaten to the point of unconsciousness as her father forcefully dragged her away to be sold off. Her mother clutched on her husband's garment, crying out "mepa wo kyÎľw yÉ› fa mi babaa" (please don't take my daughter). She was silenced with a hit to the face, while the village people passed by. I was scared, confused, angry and disgusted as I watched helplessly. I can still hear the voice of Isata, pledging and crying "NOOOOO". This repugnant image was the last memory I have of her, as she was sold as a bride, into child trafficking.

To know that society stood by and watched this act being committed against an innocent child antagonized me. This obnoxious practice is being committed in most regions in Africa, and society masked it up by calling it "traditions" or "culture." To this day, elderly still believe that "it is the duty of a female to grow up ripe in order to be plugged." Those that grew up and live in these societies are blindfolded by the teaching of the old ways, which results in innocent females being sold as brides as a source of income for their family. Many of these children are seen on the streets, as prostitutes, in polygamist marriage with many children, and uneducated. When a child makes a decision to run away from home, to prevent being married off, she is considered a pariah within the village. Isata, has made me realized the importance of making my contributions to the struggle of child trafficking alleviation in my region, where the prevailing trafficking rate is high.

With my interest in Economics and International Studies, Whitman's Economics program will prepare me for my future career as a UN Women Representative; changing foreign policies centering on women and children developments. As a student at Whitman, I will join the national World Concern organization, to help promote and advocate cases of child trafficking. At Whitman, I envision creating a nonprofit organization, which will provide direct services such as awareness training in villages in Africa, to discuss issues on child abuse and children's rights. This organization will also provide shelters for those that run away from these abusive homes. Whitman College will enhance my confidence, and equip me with the support needed to advocate in the local community concerning the treatment of females in Africa. I also hope to start a campaign that will bring attention on Africa's educational system. This campaign will be a call to action, in changing the educational laws concerning K-12, to guarantee that all children are enrolled in school. I strongly believe that through education, the traditional cycle of these practices will be put to end.

My passion to eradicating this issue in Africa cannot be accomplished alone. Whitman's vibrant community will help me achieve my academic and career goals. I will thrive and succeed in this institution, so that the next time a child is being forcefully dragged away, society won't turn their backs on these children.

Undergraduate / "If you could wish for one thing, what would it be?" ; Whitman College Essay [5]

Hi, everyone
please help me on my college supplementary essay, the deadline is March 1st, and I really need all the help I can get
Thanks everyone for your kindness and taking the time to read and comment on my essay.

During your time at Whitman, how do you envision engaging with a current local, national, or global issue that is important to you?

"If you could wish for one thing, what would it be?" I was asked this question by a friend of mine whose mother recently passed away. At first, I was startled by her question, wondering why she would ask this. She said, "Do you know what I would do, if I had a wish?" I looked at her, wondering if she has finally reached her breaking point, she continues "I would go back in time, and erase my mother's pains, before her death". When I heard her answer, I was surprised, I expected her to say, "Bring my mother back to life", but instead, she only wished for a moment of joy. If I was asked this question, two years ago, I would probably say "wealth" or "power". Not knowing the extent of a wish, or things that could be accomplish by such wish. To know that if this question was asked by many people, they too would probably wish for wealth or something similar. And knowing that many people will choose "I" instead of "we", really made me think of the purpose of my existence, and what I would do if I had a wish.

So what would I do if I had a wish? There are so many things I would wish for, the list is endless. I could wish to end poverty; wars, social injustice, wish for peace or to put an end to the extent of human's ability to commit evil. But if I wish for all those problems to be gone, would humans still repeat their actions? Would they ever learn from their mistakes? or would my wish be nothing but a waste? Growing up in West Africa, I have lived through poverty, wars, social injustice and human's atrocities. So it's only naturally for me to want to eradicate these problems that are polluting Africa, and limiting the ability for the continent to transcend. However, if I had one wish I would wish for the social justice concerning children educational rights.

Females in Africa are view as nothing more than child-bears. Most parents don't education their girls' children, not because they don't have it, but because they believe it's a waste of money, and instead makes profits from their child through arrange marriages. These Practices are seen all over Africa. Children at the age of 6 are given up for marriage to adults, old enough to be their father, without any say in their future. To know that females are being treated in such ways really impact my aspect of life, and I realized the importance of making my contributions to the struggle of social injustice in my region. I hope to underline the causes and side effects of children that were raised in sure homes, and open an education institution for these children. I will promote awareness to mostly low-income families that tend to practice this ritual. I believe that by providing opportunities like these will decrease the amount of children that are being "sold" into arranged marriage as well create a future for these innocent souls. I will strive to be the voice for these children so they would come to appreciate their own worth. They too can grow up and hope to eradicate issues like these that are according all over Africa. In this process, I will transform myself into an individual, who view the world as "we" instead of "I", so that the next time I am asked, "If you could wish for one thing, what would it be?" I would say simple, wish for me "we" instead of "I".

Undergraduate / "annyeonghaseyo" studying in a multicultural environment; Whitman C (Community FA [4]

Please help with my Whitman college essay, plan on turning it in 2 days from now.
please be honest and thanks in advance

Choose a facet of your current community that inspires you. How will you bring this sense of inspiration to life as you transition to your new Whitman community? (word limit 500)

"Nǐ hǎo" "annyeonghaseyo" "Kon'nichiwa" "Salam wa aleikum" "sat sri akal." As I walk through the doors of the cafeteria at Highline Community College, the sound of diversity echo's in my ears, and the voice of the students becomes my classical tune. I am astonished at how every word spoken on our campus, represent our uniqueness and difference. When I turn to my left, I hear the musical tone of East Asia, to my right the sounds of the Middle East, and all around me; I see the world cultures comes to life. To study in an environment where every single individual identify as a student of color is a blessing. Environment like these teaches the tenet of diversity and celebrates difference that can't be learned in books, but only through personal experience. As an African refugee, I have traveled to many different countries, and each country unique features makes up who I am. Studying at Highline community college really brings those features alive, because our institution is a global melting pot, and the students understand and takes great pride in our eclecticism. With my background and knowledge about diversity, I believe I can carry on my experience to Whitman, were I can grow and strive as a strong African woman. I know that Whitman College is the ideal institution, where I can flourish as a student and an individual who represents the world's culture.

When researching Whitman College, I realized your institution values diversity, to enrich the community and enhance intellectual and personal growth. As a student of color, I want to indulge myself in a community that values individual difference, as well as practice global citizenship. As I transition to Whitman college, I will bring alone with me the values and knowledge of Highline Community College and the programs we have at our intuition that focuses on diversity. I will start a Global awareness club to help increase awareness concerning the economic-development of Women and children in developing countries. Additional, as a student, I would start a lets eradicate poverty program that will directly link Whitman college students, with women and children in developing nation to help underline the causes of poverty. It would provide students with the opportunity to see pass the community, and think on a global skill. This would combine my career interest in economics and International Relations, to strive for the economic-empowerment of women in Africa and hope to eradicate the injustice these women face. I hope to be a voice for these women, and Whitman would help enhance my global perspective and provide me with confidence I need in order to succeed. Its summer study abroad program in Cambodia will allow me to compare women's economic-developments in Southeast Asia and Africa. Whitman's curriculum will challenge my capacities to critically think about the world around me. Its rigorous courses will equipment me with a future career in the global world. Furthermore, its strong commitment to the principle of nondiscrimination, tells me that it is an institution that is dedicated to educating its students on issues of diversity.

To have the opportunity to be part of such a prestigious environment and be a member of a strong supportive community would be a blessing. Being a member of Whitman community will help me achieve my academic and career goals, as well as supply the tools necessary for me to succeed.

Undergraduate / Student Government, Meetings, Elaborate on extracurricular activity (Common app) [3]

PLEASE HELP WITH MY ACTIVITIES ESSAY FOR THE COMMON APP.
please be honest and I am open for critiques good or bad, let them flow :)
Thanks a lot, I really appreciate the help.

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

"Squeak" "Squeak" it is the sound of my pen, as I scribble down notes in my notepad during a student government meeting. "Tap-tap" it is the sound of my fingers clicking away on the keyboard as I try to schedule appointments with co-workers. For me, I take pleasure in those consecutive meetings. I find comfort in creating collaborative programs with faculties. I take great pride in listening to the voice of club leaders as they conduct their club meetings. Sometimes I enjoy the stress that is put upon me as I fill out paper works, send out emails or prepare meeting's agenda. As the Speaker of the Caucuses, I value the students that walk in the office seeking leadership opportunities. I get intrigue, facilitating caucuses' events which discuss issues concerning us the students. During those events, my passions, desires and motivation kick in and take over my body. As my day comes to an end in the office, and I shut my computer off, I usually make my way toward the glass window, and stare outside as the sun reaches its zenith point, while I reflect on the day, anticipating on what tomorrow's might bring.

Undergraduate / An encounter with a Beggar and her starving child; Seattle U - Good Match [3]

Why do you feel Seattle University is a good match with your educational goals?

PLEASE HELP, I FEEL LIKE IT'S TOO LONG, although there is no word limit.
also please be honest. Thanks :)

(Psalm 72:12-14) "For he will deliver the needy who cry out, the afflicted who have no one to help. He will take pity on the weak and the needy and save the needy from death. He will rescue them from oppression and violence, for precious is their blood in his sight."

As a child, I have always known that a single individual can be a servant of change. This epiphany was realized in the crowded and hot market place in Ghana West Africa, when I encountered a beggar and her child. The child was about three years old. She was thin and fragile, with ribs penetrating out. Her body was nothing but bones and she looked like she was on the brink of death, fighting starvation. Many people passed by the family, without a second thought, yet I stood before them, impulses rushing through my body, as I wept in their presence. I mumbled to myself "Poverty is a curse". I looked down at the mother, and saw pain in her eyes, as the sun descended upon us, waiting to devour her in its blaze. At that moment I felt compelled to help.

With the little money my mother gave me, I knelt down and placed it in the mother's hand. She looked at me, with tears falling down her face, "aseda wo", "thank you" she said. Those words echoed in my ears, and I saw my reflection in the eyes of the mother. I knew there was more to life than just living, and I wanted to provide for people like the beggar and her daughter; I want to serve deprived developing countries, with extreme poverty rate. These desires have driven me to pursue a career in Economics and International Studies, and Seattle University's International Studies and Global Awareness Program will be the perfect place to fulfill my academic goals and my desire to eradicate poverty.

When researching Seattle University, I realized your institution values excellence and educational achievement. SU prides itself on the community and Jesuit tradition, which promotes independent critical thinkers and openness to finding and serving God. As a Pentecostal Christian, I have always led my life in line with SU values, which is why SU is the ideal place for me. Its service of faith and promotion of justice to address issues of poverty and injustice will connect me back to the beggar, her child and the reason why I choose this institution. SU's well-rounded undergraduate program will provide me with a variety of courses to broaden my academic perspective. Its myriad of programs and opportunities will allow for involvement within the community. SU's International development internship program will provide me with a sense of responsibility for social justice with acquired leadership skills needed to move toward action. Besides that, its Global Awareness Program will enhance my major and provide me with global experiences and opportunities. I also look forward to joining the SU Human Trafficking Awareness Club to get a different perspective on issues concerning social injustice. Additionally, local organizations such as Swedish Medical Center, Harborview and Child Haven will provide the perfect environment bursting with opportunities to volunteer, and help those in need. SU combines academic excellence with an unpretentious northwest culture and an engaging community.

Seattle University is not only a place of beauty and community, it is a university dedicated to educating the whole person and empowering leaders for a just and humane world. To have the opportunity to be part of a strong supportive community that will help me achieve my academic and career goals is a blessing. I will thrive and succeed in this institution because the sight of the beggar and her child will always weight upon me. I will always wonder: what if the child was me? What if the beggar was my mother? Would there be someone with a giving hand, or would I have to look into the eyes of the people as they pass by while I take my last breath?

Undergraduate / Women's intellectualism; Smith college transfer - Specific aspects [5]

Hope to turn this in on Friday Feb 15!!
What specific aspects of Smith College will better meet your academic goals? (Limit your response to 100 words.)

I envision studying in the midst of superbly knowledgeable and competent women who desire to study in an environment acknowledging women's intellectualism. To study in a prestigious institution where ambitious women are tomorrow's leaders would be a blessing. As a strong African woman studying economics, Smith's rigorous courses and in-depth research will prepare me for graduate studies. Its Women in Public Service Project will train me as a voice for women in Africa, while the study aboard program in Southern India will allow for comparison of women's economic-development in India and Liberia. As an individual demanding change in women rights, Smith is the perfect institution to accomplish my academic goals.

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