Writing Feedback / It's with God's miracle that human miracles are innovate; Human Mind vs. the Computer [8]

The Human Mind Versus the Computer

John Dryden, a famous philosopher, once said, "God never made His work for man to mend." Likewise, God never made His work for man to evaluate. The human mind is incomparable; simply because it is the creation of God, whereas the computer are the creation of man. While man's creation is deficient & imperfect, God's creation is infallible & perfect. If the human mind and the computer, however, were ever to be compared, the human mind will undoubtedly emerge victorious.

Technically speaking, the human mind has a hard disk of infinite gigabytes of memory, and its RAM is immeasurable. Its potential of processing power is overwhelming. The Computer, on the other hand, is the cheaper, less efficient imitation of the mind. It is a deficient epitome with finite gigabytes and limited Ram. Furthermore, its processing power can never be mind-boggling, because it is originally made and programmed by the human mind.

Whilst the human mind enjoys the creativity of free limitless response and reactions, the computer is restricted to pre- programmed responses and processes. We, moreover, have the ability to regenerate ourselves as well as machines. Nevertheless, the Computer and all machines in general can only auto-regenerate, if they are programmed to.

Additionally, we tend to praise the amazing inventions and forget about the truly amazing inventor. For instance, we are overwhelmed by the limited capacity of computers, while we forget about the impressive capacity their creator, the human intellect .We forget about that mind that created the concept in the first place, innovated the means, manufactured the hardware and software, arranged chips, assembled wires and connections, and finally plugged everything harmoniously into the wall! It is truly a common human flaw, not giving credit where credit is indeed due!

An interesting point of comparison is portability, in that both the human mind and the computer are portable. While we carry our minds on our shoulders, we carry (portable) computers under our shoulders .Still, the mind excels because we carry our minds spontaneously, as an essential part of our bodies. The Computer, on the other hand, is carried as an additional burden.

To talk about the human mind in such condensing terms, is like compressing a sack of flour into a thimble. We direct much admiration towards an inanimate invention that was once an idea in a brilliant mind, the true point of wonder. Samuel F.B. Morse, the inventor of the electric telegraph, understood that and put it rightly. Upon his successful transmission of the first telegraph message, he cried, "What miracle hath God wrought!" It is with God's miracle that human miracles are innovated.

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Writing Feedback / If you cannot excel in a field, simply leave it for someone who can. Decisions [9]

A Difficult Decision I Had to Make

Our lives are the sum of all our choices. The decisions we make today, may very well play a critical role in our future tomorrow. When I was at secondary school, I had to make a difficult decision concerning my academic future. I was in the scientific section during the second year. In the third year, I had to choose between remaining in the scientific section and moving the literary section.

To begin with, this cross-road appeared before me due to the impaired educational system, specifically in the scientific section. We would study chemistry, biology and physics as if we were studying history. The better you are at memorizing, not understanding, the higher grades you attain. Though supposedly scientific books, they lacked the progressive scientific way of explaining facts. There were hardly any diagrams or illustrations for better understanding. Whenever a question was raised, our teachers would usually end up shrugging their shoulders and advising us to focus on memorizing rather than wasting time in asking "futile" questions.

In addition, I was not truly fond of science in the first place. I had the curiosity to know, and the will to understand and study. My true affection, however, was for literature and literary appreciation. The main reason I joined the scientific section was to please Father, who is a doctor. He used to call me "the little doctor" when I was young, and think that I will succeed him. On my side, I had not the least intention of joining a scientific college at any rate. Apart from having no true affection for science, it was acknowledged a "universal truth" that those colleges have only the merit of the name. That is, they were scientific in theory not in practice. Besides, I believed literature was the field where I could find a room for creativity and self-learning.

Given that, I decided to enroll in the scientific section after all. I though it would be fair to satisfy my father first, then my own desire second. It would ease the shock for him, I thought, if I at least joined the scientific section during the secondary school, then entered a literary college afterwards. In the third year, however, I could no longer endure the "historical" way of studying science. It was somehow acceptable with chemistry, but a true pain with physics and biology. I made up my mind to shift to the literary section in the end. Father was disappointed at first, but being understanding enough, he accepted my decision with a good grace. He even praised me for it upon knowing the deterioration in the scientific section.

It is true that I liked chemistry and missed biology, and that neither the literary section nor the literary educational system turned out to be that wonderful after all. Still, I believe I made the right choice. I chose what I believe I can excel in, or at least do my very best to excel in. My motto is that: if you cannot excel in a field or willingly strive to excel in it, simply leave it for someone who can.

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1) Is the article written in good formal English?

2) Are ideas well - arranged? Are there any redundant or out-of-place sentences?

3) If you were to "grade" this work, what would your rating be and why? (For instance, if you choose "C", please note what an "A" grading would require and why this piece did not meet those criteria)

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Faq, Help / Passages translated into English - is it OK to post? [10]

Hello,

I would like to ask if I may post passages TRANSLATED into English here as well, not an essay. They are my translations of course. I would like to get feedback about my English if it sounds so, for my main field is translation; and I searched many language forums, but all for essay-writing not translation.

I will only post my English translation of the text to get feedback about the language. It this allowed?

Much Obliged.