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Last Post: Dec 13, 2014
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tiyuok   
Dec 13, 2014
Letters / I enjoy my job and I am benefited from taking part in project [4]

Dear MR. vangiespen, thank you very much for your sugestions and I have make some corrections, but because of my shortage of english vocabulary, gamma, and long sentence, it still looks like a bit long and complex, would you please help me to amend it to be tighter and more informative?

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The master program of electrical engineering in **** University can help me to finish the innovation in designing new products. In May 2014, my department decided to test a scheme that transfer 4G signal in cable line, and then built small base station outside apartments to help China Mobile Communication Corp enhance coverage of 4G signal. However, during the implementation stage, we came across many challenges in lab. For example, the attenuation of the cable line, the design of power amplify and signal interference and electromagnetic radiation impact to human health. The lack of practice and knowledge in Communication, Antennas and RF circuit made me difficult to solve these problems. The programs including but is not limited to Advanced analog design, Advanced Modulation and coding, High-speed Electronic, HF Systems will trained me having technique ability to implement my innovation in electronic products rather than let the innovation stagnate in conception stage.

The higher level of learning in ****** University will help me to focus on researching and developing ICT technologies of the future. From March 2014, I involved some projects about 4G mobile communication and WIFI. Our clients have already applied our network equipment and image system in telesurgery system and public transport system. I know that ICT have closely connected with other fields such as medical, transport and business and it is engines of innovation in other fields. This trend will make ICT networks bear the burdens of more-more devices, more content and more uses. And I also believe that the demand for ICT network resources will be urgent as the need for oil or electricity. Facing these challenges, the development of 4G, high performance WIFI, the Internet of Things, or big data will help alleviate these burdens. The future development of ICT is exciting, flourishing and full of chances, so I am eager to solve these underlying challenges and devote my innovation in future ICT technologies.

Besides the suitable master programs, another reason I choose to study in c University is that I will have chances to work or internship in the top institutes in the world. Belgium's information and communication technology sector is flourishing and Flanders is also home to several ICT institutes, such as IMEC and iMinds. ****** University is an active research partner of these institutes so I can took part in the most advanced project. And I will work with the most excellent electronic engineers in Europe so both my ability to research and work habit will benefit from the experience. I also know that Belgian are kind and receptive to people from different culture, this atmosphere will contribute to good teamwork which is a very important fact for research.

My work experience and knowledge of electronics laid the foundation to do further research. And also, I am good at studying on my own. The clients of our company keep raising new requirement for our production. They want to have network equipment with wider bandwidth, more stable and more functions. In order to do my job successfully, I kept learning every day. Truly hope that I was given the chance to to learn the program of electronic engineering in ****** University.
tiyuok   
Dec 7, 2014
Letters / I enjoy my job and I am benefited from taking part in project [4]

The following is my Motivation letter, and please feel free to give me any comment!! Thank you very much !!

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My name is Gavin and I am an electronic hardware engineer. My major is Electronic Science and Technology in university. Since I graduated from Dongnan University in 2012, I have been working as a hardware engineer in Shenzhen-the electronic industry center of China. In my two years working experience, I have immersed myself into researching and developing network equipment products and triple play technology. I enjoy my job and I am benefited from taking part in communication and Internet equipment project. From my working experience, I can see the promising development of ICT, which played an important role in other fields such as business, transport, medical and entertainment. Now I have had a clear vision on my career plan and I know that it is necessary for me to perform higher learning in electronic engineering because my further research and development of ICT will benefit from my broad scope and implementation of advanced technology.

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tiyuok   
Dec 27, 2013
Grammar, Usage / Can I use "I" rather than "The author"? [6]

I am not a native speaker and just post my suggestion

Do not think about going out, rather focus on staying home

Do not think about going out, just focus on staying at home
or delete rather
tiyuok   
Dec 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. [5]

It's my task 2 in the IELTS test, I got 5.5 finally. I wonder why my score is so low. Anybody help me to check it and give my some comments? very appreciated!

More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In modern societies, it is true that many people are tending to buy some famous brands such as clothes and cars. Whenever you talk to them about this item, they are likely to tell you which brand is popular because they are so familiar with.

What are the reasons of this phenomenon? As far as I concern, there are two main reasons. Firstly, people are exposed to millions of advertisements, and each commodity is always showed with a slogan: we are famous brand. Most people, especially the youngster, are more likely to buy what they told to be famous and cool. Moreover, many people are likely to compare with their peers with famous commodities. They are tending to buy what is popular and show off by this way.

The phenomenon will definitely produce bad influence. If people buy everything on the advertisement, they will be more likely to buy the fake, instead of a good quality and what they really need. Moreover, if people always show off by famous brand of commodities, they will be depressed one day, because if they find that they fall behind with others, they will emerge a mental-imbalanced in mind, what finally do harm for their personality.

My view is that people should buy something based on what they need, and happiness of people should come from their families and friends, instead of showing of by famous brand.
tiyuok   
Dec 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-task1-the table below gives information related to population growth... [7]

Here is my writing in IELTS, finally I got 5.5. Is there anybody help me to correct it and tell me why my score is so low? Feel free to give me your suggestions! I will be appreciated very much!

The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004

Given in the table describes how the population growth, average birth each woman, life expectancy at birth changed from the period of 2000 and 2004 in countries of three different levels, that is, high level, middle level and low level.

According to the population growth, there were a slight drop happened in the high income countries and low income countries in the year of 2002 and 2004, with from 0.8% to 0.7% and 2.0% to 1.8 respectively, while the middle class countries stay at the same level, at 0.9%.

Moving on to the average birth each woman, the period from 2002 to 2004 saw a gradual decrease in the middle income countries and low income countries, which is 2.2 to 2.1 and 3.9 to 3.7 respectively. The high income countries was stable at 1.7 in the year of 2002 and 2004.

Regarding to the life expectancy at birth, there was a small rise happened among all the countries, with an increase at 0.7 to 0.8.




tiyuok   
Dec 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / Do you agree that every organization has a right to set age maximum for the candidates ? [6]

I wonder why you had "contemporary world" in this sentence. What does it refer to? For me, I find those words redundant and do not add any meaning to this sentence

Hi, Dumi, I agree with your comments very much, I usually used this kind of opennings: "In our contemporary world" or "In our modern societies". I think it makes no sense and it is very boring. However, I don't know how to change this situation. Could you please give me some examples about how to give a hook?

Thank you very much!
tiyuok   
Dec 1, 2013
Student Talk / Listening: 8.5 - I got my IELTS result today [12]

Hi, Misterwandering

I heard about your good results in IELTS and I am stuck in my speaking now. Would you please give me some suggestion on Part3? I don't know how to answer leading a high score.
tiyuok   
Dec 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Freedom, economics and education in China [5]

there are al lot of people believe economic must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best, because the economic has a power to change financial live for people by give them many opportunity for jobs

there are al lot of people believe beliving that economic economy must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best, because the economic economy has a power to change financial live for people by give giving them many opportunity for jobs
tiyuok   
Nov 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth [14]

Hi, Pahan,
I want to consult you a troublesome problem:

"Both of which need a discussion ." or " i will analyse it in my essay " or other similarities are extemely boring to give an end in my first paragraph. However, my tutor suggested me not to present a personal opinion at the first paragraph regarding to this topic: " discuss both points of the view " .

so i wonder what should i say to replace "i will analyse it in my essay"?

looking forward to your instruction and thank you in advance!
tiyuok   
Nov 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Some business prohibits smoking in any of their offices [4]

There is no doubt that smoking or in other words cigarettes is a hot topic in today's world. As a solution for this controversial matter, some governments have imposed strict rules to stop smoking in public while some companies have restricted smoking in their office premises.

Hi, Kumkap,
Based on my limited experience, your introduction didn't present your dintinct opinion, which should be a need for those topic with" agreed and disagreed"

there are those who oppose the limitation of smoking for several reasons

There are several resons for those who oppose ...may be better

One main reason is that the health problems which results from cigarettes

very confused
tiyuok   
Nov 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth [14]

Hi, gtamani, thanks again! I correct them below. Could you help me check if any mistakes?

1, the youth deserve moreyouth the youth deserve more worth
2, there are more experienced than the youth:
they are more experienced than the youth
3, Which is the most important reason for companiespreferential the old than the young people.:
Which is the most important reason why companies prefer the old than the young people.
4, Surveymade by an financial magazine:
what is wrong with made?
5, young people because who are easy to make more mistakes.
young people because they are easy to make more mistakes.
6, For example, young people are tending to be of somewhat creativity
For example, young people are tending to be of much creativity
7, the youth are more ambitiousfor who are always lacks of money and authorities
the youth are more ambitious than the old because they are always lacks of money and statue
tiyuok   
Nov 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth [14]

Thank you so much for your suggestion and comments. Acctually, i am going to paticipate the IELTS exam at 30. November. So, I have juse a short time to improve my wrighting and I have to restrict the time to 36 minutes.

Can you specify what is the problem of wrong usage of articles and words . I can't find out it myself. Hope you can give me some detailed instruction!
tiyuok   
Nov 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS-In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth [14]

Hi, i came across this website which i found it very useful. Below is IELTS composition of my friend and I. We wrote less than 40 minutes. Response greatly appreciate! Feel free to give me any comments

In some countries, the old age is more valued, while in some countries the youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

My writing:

In comparison with the old and the youth, some culture believes the old age is worthier, however, others consider the youth deserve more youth. Both of which needs a discussion.

In terms of the old people, apparently, there are more experienced than the youth. Which is the most important reason for companies preferential the old than the young people. Survey made by an financial magazine showed that the multinational companies are likely to hire old age rather than the young people because the old with full of experience are more trustworthy. However, they draw less attention to the young people because who are easy to make more mistakes.

However, the youth have the advantages while the old are lacking of, someone argued. For example, young people are tending to be of somewhat creativity while the old people are more likely to obey their experience, thus the youth will come out with more creative new idea to meet the need of marketing when develop a new project. Moreover, the youth are more ambitious for who are always lacks of money and authorities. Therefore, they will be hardworking in fight for their future in order to win the promotion, leading to a sense of competition among their ages, consequently, bring the profit to company.

As for as I concern, all ages, either youth or old, are donating their contribution to the society. So both of which are value and deserve our respect and attention.

My friend's wrighting:

Different countries have different values of old age and young man. Someone believe that the elderly, who are wise and experienced, have made a great contribution to our society. While in some countries, the position of teenagers are paid attention to as they are considered to be the further of a country.

There are few question on which the old age have many advantage in work experience. Statistics in the labor market indicate that in the mechanical industry, the employer prefer employ the elderly making higher level of production more efficient rather than young man. In most cases, old man will make less mistakes than the youth as they have done the work for many times. The company do not have to train these experienced employees.

However, in some high-tech field such as internet and computer science, young people are becoming popular. New technology is emerge everyday, the youth have more energy to learn these knowledge. Admittedly, they are good at in doing innovation jobs. For another reason, the workload in many computer company is very heavy, some old man may not adapt to the heavy work.

My view is that both old age and the youth should be valued. The difference is that they should be assigned different jobs to satisfied their ability. For old man, they could be asked to train new employees how to do job efficiently. For young people, they should undertake some heavy work.
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