Writing Feedback / IELTS: There have been significant developments in the field of IT! [6]

IELTS Writing Task 2:
In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, future developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive.

To what extent do you agree with this view?
AT LEAST 250 WORDS.

Thanks for reading my essay. Hope you enjoy. :D
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Decade after decade, every day, scientists discover magnificent devices in the field of IT, such as interactive boards, multicore computers and laptops, tablets, which have an incredible resolution and also mobile phones, which have the power of a computer. World Wide Web and communication via email are some of the positive sides of information technology, however, there are some negative aspects.

Firstly, connecting people by email is easy and fast. In addition, World Wide Web offers humanity to access to information, which they want to know for less than 10 seconds. These are two of the benefits, why IT is useful.

Besides, nowadays technology is entering into our society really quick and scientists develop robots, which help people cope with their problems or just invent coffee machines, engines with integrated computers and etc. For example, before centeries, there were not washing machines, which clean your clothes, while a person do another job.

Secondly, there are some drawbacks about this issue. Scientists believe that one day people will face their developments, for instance robots, and they will not succeed to control them. All this inventions will try to take control of the Earth.

In conclusion, I agree that IT discoveries are likely to have more disadvantages than benefits and people should know how to use their developments properly.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access [8]

IELTS Writing Task 2:
Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime.

Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that the jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case.

Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer. At least 250 words.

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Nowadays, crimes happen everywhere. Lawyers, today, make their decision without knowledge what is the past of the culprit, but some of them want this changed and have a chance to look at the criminal's past record before the court. I am disagree, because they can abuse with this and give an incorrect judgement.

Firstly, accessing to the data about the defendant's criminal record can cause different jury decision even if the crime is not so serious. For examle, if the jury look at the criminal's protocol and see that the culprit had robbed a bank before 5 years they can decide that the person should get more years in the jail.

Secondly, if the court see the culprit's record, they can make an easier and faster decision, which, of course, can be incorrect. For instance, giving more years in the prison, because the person had previous crimes can be unfair for the defendant.

Thirdly, if witnesses give strongly and unarguable evidence that the culprit is guilty, and the jury has an access to the defendant's information, which says that the guy is homeless or robber, they are capable to make wrong decision. Some of the witnesses give a wrong evidence that the criminal is dangerous because they were frightened. If they see the culprit trying to steal money from a guy on the street, does not mean that the person is aggressive. Maybe this guy is starving.

In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that lawyers should have an access to the defendant's record because they will make an incorrect decision and some criminals will get more years in jail, even if they do not deserve them.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of fun? [4]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1
The graph below shows how much money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five-year period.
You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart illustrate the amount of money in billion, which was spent on various types of fun in Asia, Europe and the US in the years 1995 and 2000.

Overall, in all three places, in 1995 people spent less money on entertainment than in 2000.

In Asia, in 1995, society spent on TV and publishing the most ( more than 50 billion dollars on both of them ), and on music, video and cinema only about 15 billion. After 5 years, the chart jumped to 110 billion, because spending on TV rose twofold and also publishing and music expanded slightly.

In Europe, in 1995, the bar chart started from 97.000 million dollars. It had more than 30 billion spent on TV, publishing and more than 20 billion on music. Video and cinema changed negligible in the year 2000, while television and publishing entertainment rose steeply and the figure reached a peak of 131 billion dollars invested in fun.

In the United States, it can be seen that figures were bigger than in the other places. In 1995, people spent more than 50 billion on TV and more than 70.000 million dollars on publishing. Music, video and cinema had changed slightly by 2000. In the year 2000, the bar chart reached a new high of 257 billion, because the TV fun increased to 100 billion and publishing grew up to 110 billion.

To sum up, it is clear that in Asia, Europe and the US, people invest more money on TV and publishing than the other types of entertainment.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: The number of men and women in further education in Britain [2]

Hello, everyone. Can somebody give me a band, please? (IELTS writing task 1 requirements)
Thank youfor reading my essay. :))

TOPIC:
The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of males and females in extra education in Britain in the years 1970/71, 1980/81 and 1990/91, and who of them were studying part-time or full-time.

In general, in male diagram, full-time education fluctuated slightly and part-time increased over the 20-year period, while in female chart, both, full-time and part-time education rose.

In men statistics, it can be seen that full-time started from 1 million men in 1970/71 and by 1980/81, it had decreased by over 100 thousands males. In the years 1990/91, full-time education rose negligible. However, part-time started from just under 100 thousands males and had a little increase in 1980/81. By 1990/91, it had jumped over 200,000 men.

Females data only went up over the period. Full-time education started from approximately 700 thousands women in 1970/71 and rose by about 100,000 females in the years 1980/81. By 1990/91, it had dramatic jump up to 1.1 million women. Otherwise, part-time education in 1970/71 had only 30,000-40,000 women and by 1980/81, it had increased by over 150 thousands females. In the years 1990/91, the number of women attending part-time education grew up to 200 thousands.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, .. [4]

E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive?
Do the advantages of using email outweigh the advantages?

Nowadays, most people use e-mail for communicating and sharing data with individuals in a long distance. It has an enormous influence on their social lives and careers. E-mail has more positive aspects than negative.

On the one hand, e-mail has several disadvantages, which can disappoint and annoy some people. It is possible to receive e-mails from different websites, which present some of their promotion or gifts. They are called spam e-mails. Another negative aspect can be viruses, which can be sent to every mail address. For example, they can broke into your computer system and caused many problems.

On the other hand, electronic mail has many advantages, which make disadvantages not so important. It is easy for use, fast - do not take much time, suitable - when people are far away each other and, of course, it is free. Many people prefer to write e-mails instead of making a conversation on their mobile phones or writing letters. For instance, receiving one e-mail takes 3-5 minutes and receiving one letter on the post takes much more. Also, paying for telephone calls is more expensive than typing on your keyboard. E-mail gives possibility to share your photos, music or information with friends and colleagues. For example, it is safer to send a picture on the Internet instead of attaching it in a letter, because it can be stolen, while travelling to her receiver or seen by others. People often use e-mail because its easy to create a new letter. It takes a few minutes to type something on your keyboard, whereas it can takes more than twofold to write it in a letter. Electronic mails are slower than talking on the mobile phone, but they are cheaper.

In conclusion, I am inclined to think that e-mail is beneficial for everybody and its positive sides outweigh the negative ones.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'car industry is developing extremely fast' ; traffic problems [7]

Good evening everyone,
Can somebody give me an approximate band (IELTS requirements), please?
And, of course, correct it if something is wrong.Thanks in advance

TOPIC:
In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

Nowadays, car industry is developing extremely fast and more people have a car, even more than one. Governments consider increasing car owners' taxes and invest the money, which they will earn to improve the city transport. There are some disadvantages and advantages, which will be discussed in this essay.

On the one hand, raising taxes can lead to some negative aspects. Today, income taxes, which every family pay are heavier than before and some of the people will find it difficult to accomplish paying more money for their cars. For example, if governments raise taxes, people who have difficulties with money will not be able to have enough money for everything or just stay hungry for the last days of the month.

On the other hand, positive sides are much more than drawbacks of the issue. Firstly, if taxes jump more of the citizens will reduce buying a new car, because more cars mean more money to the government. In that case, citizen will buy only one car and use it when it is necessary. Secondly, another advantage is that drivers will travel more with the public transport, which protect the Earth. Less cars means less greenhouse gas released to the atmosphere. Pollution will decrease dramatically. Thirdly, the money, which governments get from society, should improve some of the problems with buses and trains, which most of the people say are in really bad condition.

To conclude, I believe that it is beneficial to raise taxes and invest the money for traffic problems. In my view, positive aspects outweigh drawbacks.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet.. [5]

University lecturers are now able to put their lectures on the Internet for students to read and so the importance of attending face to face lectures has been reduced.

Do you believe the use of the Internet in formal education is a good idea? What future effects will the Internet have on academic study?

Nowadays, sharing lectures on the Internet is very helpful not only because graduates can read them online and study at home but also because they can read them how many times they want to.

On the one hand, there are some disadvantages about uploading lectures on the Internet. Visiting university make students more responsible and independent. They have timetable and should follow it, while, for example, graduates who study at home wake up later in the morning than those who attending university. Also, scientists believe that everybody memorize information much better if they heard it from lecturer, instead of reading it online. However, visiting university is harder than studying at home, but students can ask their lecturers some questions and get quick answer, while using google engine to search for them will take more time.

On the other hand, positive aspects are more significant than negative ones. Firstly and most importantly, everybody can try to attend university and study at home at the same time. Then it will be easier for students to get their exams. Secondly, they can search for data in Google that their lecturers did not know or just study more about the lecture online. This can only help them to prepare for their tests. Thirdly, some students forget very quickly and it is better for them to read lectures every day.

In conclusion, I am inclined to think that using Internet for uploading data and lectures is beneficial and advantages of it outweigh disadvantages.