Writing Feedback / IELTS: 'appropriate infrastructure to spur growth and prevent the damage caused to environment' [4]

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Some people think pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing and becoming richer, and this is hard to be avoided. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Many developing countries across the world are struggling to maintain their GDP growth under the current turbulent economic conditions. Under these circumstances, countries find it difficult to sustain their growth rate and are under severe pressure to compromise in certain areas such as pollution and environment. However, I believe that authorities should think in long term and build appropriate infrastructure to spur growth and prevent the damage caused to environment.

The compromises done by authorities have direct impact on the environment and in turn affect the country in several ways. For instance, most of the cloth production and exports are manufactured in the developing countries, however, hardly people realize the harmful effects caused to the environment by this business. During the production process, poisonous dyes are directly diverted to the nearby rivers which in turn affect the water body and kill the aquatic organisms. Although developing countries should encourage exports, it should not be at the cost of abusing the environment. Therefore, authorities should devise plan to regulate these industries.

Similarly, nowadays, developing countries depends on foreign investments in this globalized world. In order to attract investments and promote business, governments are under pressure to provide leverage to customers in the form of lenient regulations and quicker approvals. Such haste approvals, without detailed research about the project, are the major reasons for deforestation in many countries and has already caused severe climatic changes in many parts of the world. This could be avoided by the developing smaller cities and providing assistance to investors by creating joint plan for improving infrastructure, thereby saving the environment and encouraging busines.

In conclusion, I strongly believe developing countries which undergo this problem of compromising the environment should think in the long term and plan innovatively to build infrastructure and promote business in order to give a better world for the future generations.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Strict regulations can effectively reduce the problem of overfishing by large corporations [4]

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Overfishing of the world's oceans threatens many species with extinction and is putting the livelihood of millions of people around the world at risk. What are the causes of this

problem and what can be done to prevent it from happening?

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

Perhaps one of the most important issues which are often ignored in this information age is the issue of overfishing and its effects. Overfishing has caused severe problems to our society in multiple ways and in this essay, I will explain these problems and some solutions to avoid this growing problem.

First of all, the prominent reason for mass fishing is the profit oriented approach of large Fishing Corporations which hardly worries about the biological imbalance caused by its actions. Such unethical approach by people with responsibility leads to considerable damage to the biological cycle, in which ocean and its living organisms play a vital part. The most significant damage done by overfishing is the danger posed to the survival of rare species. While fishing, people may not intend to catch these rare species, but naturally these rare species also get caught in the nets and face extinction. One typical example is the drastic decline in the number of a specific type of jelly fish, called sea jelly, facing extinction.

Before these problems reach extreme levels, it is our moral responsibility to identify solutions for this menace. One way to control this would be to put strict environmental regulations, and more importantly, implementing them and monitoring our oceans and fishing done by multinational organizations. This, will, in turn, curb the problems of overfishing to a major extent. Furthermore, this issue should be brought to light by the government agencies and due awareness should be raised by the media to educate the society of this problem. Additionally, impact on ecosystem should be estimated and a remedy plan should be created to the ailing rare species facing extinction.

In conclusion, strict regulations can effectively reduce the problem of overfishing by large corporations, as well as raising the awareness puts ethical pressure on these entities to adhere to the guidelines. I think these measures would effectively stop mass fishing, paralleled by the advantage of saving the species which are facing extinction.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS school non academic subjects assist in physical development and learning important life skills [2]

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With the pressures on today's young people to succeed academically, some people believe that
non-academic subjects at school (eg: physical education and cookery) should be removed from the
syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Perhaps today's youth are under pressure from many fronts to perform well than ever before, especially to excel academically. While I concede that academic subjects are of utmost importance, however, I am of the opinion that non academic activities are very vital for the overall development of the younger generation.

There are many reasons to support this opinion. It is said that academic studies help to enhance knowledge of the students in various subjects, but, at the same time, it makes one to become a bookworm and lose touch with the outside world. For example, children who do exceptionally in studies are more likely to be mediocre in physical activities and sports, with few exceptions. This produces imbalanced growth and affect children at a later stage. For this reason, schools must also include non academic lessons.

Another compelling reason why non academic subjects must be included is that it helps one to learn important life skills. There are those who say that academic subjects lay the foundation for a successful carrier, however, in this process, students should not lose certain other important aspects like physical education, cooking, drawing, dancing, etc., Ito be specific, Physical education is important for every children for the reason that it helps to rejuvenate the body and spirit, not to mention it assists in physical development of the youth. Moreover, learning various life skill subjects help one to become a well rounded personality and do well in all areas in life.

In conclusion, though academic subjects are important for better career opportunities, non academic subjects assist in physical development and learning important life skills. I strongly believe it should be continued for a better future generation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people [8]

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In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent, from time they began studies or work and until they married. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

In recent years, Major cities have seen unprecedented growth and have become land of opportunities for all of us. Consequently, youngsters from small cities or even from large cities have to relocate for work or studies. This relocation has both advantages and disadvantages, however, overall, I think the advantages are far more than disadvantages.

There are a number of reasons why it is beneficial for youngsters to stay away from parents until they get married. First of all, when youngsters start to live alone, for studies or to work, they meet several kinds of new people every day, consequently, they learn many new things from these people, which otherwise would not have been possible. These new learnings help them to enhance their world knowledge and excel not only in their studies or work, but also help to become a well rounded personality. For example, youngsters who travel to study abroad learn the local language and culture. This helps them to differentiate every culture and most importantly, respect other cultures.

Despite these positives, there are significant drawbacks too. Youngsters who start to live alone fail to get the affection and motivation from their parents, which are very important to be successful in this competitive world. As a result, they feel dejected and demotivated, which creates negative impact on their study or work. In addition, they fail in this important phase of life and spoil their future. Therefore I think youngsters should be close to their families in this important juncture of life.

In conclusion, despite these problems, youngsters living away from parents, as far as I am concerned, provide opportunity to meet variety of new people. Moreover, considering the importance of learning new things everyday at this stage of life, I firmly believe that living away from parents is one the best things to do for all youngsters, until they find their soul mate.

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled [2]

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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In recent years, governments across the world have imposed heavier tax on taxpayers, because of global recession and economic downtrend. This has impacted the citizens heavily. Under these circumstances, I think it is unethical for the government to expect tax for public education system from tax payers whose children are not registered under these systems.

There are many reasons why paying tax for public education system is not justified when one's children are not enrolled in these systems. First of all, there is a growing concern across the world that tax payers money are misused by people in power. For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts to more than $100 million of public money. Situations like these demotivate the average tax payer. Furthermore, when they have to pay tax for services which they don't use, I think it is unjustified on their part to pay tax for public education system.

Another important reason why tax should not be collected from parents whose wards are educated in private schools is that, the quality of education provided by these public education systems are deteriorating. Since these schools are managed by the government entities, teachers and staffs tend to be lethargic, owing to less accountability. Therefore, taxpayers question the need to pay taxes to such improper education system, in which their children are not enrolled.

In conclusion, improper public fund utilization and poor education system are major dampeners for average citizens to pay their hard earned money as taxes for services that they do not use. I strongly believe this is justified and correct that taxpayers need not pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled.

Writing Feedback / Celebrities are more famous for the look and wealth than for talents and contribution to their field [2]

Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, because of technological innovations, the role of media has become prominent and they project celebrities frequently for their glamour and wealth than their achievements. I strongly believe this trend is unproductive for our society and creates a bad example for our youngsters.

To begin with, there are a number of celebrities whose skills are ignored and remembered only for their appearance and money. One important reason for this is the role played by media in our society. Media projects more about the wealth and glamour of our celebrities more often than their achievements, in fact, nowadays, hardly they mention about their achievements in life. For example, Bill Gates, founder of Microsoft Corporation, is known as the richest man in the world than as the founder of Microsoft. These, in turn, create a false impression among youngsters and change their attitude towards earning money, when they should be concentrating on improving their skills.

Another point is the importance given to ones appearance these days. Celebrities, especially movie stars, are the source of new costumes and fashion, but their achievements in their field are generally ignored. For example, Amitabh Bachchan, a popular Indian movie star, is a fashion icon and his fans, most as youngsters, hardly miss to have his collections. However, these youngsters do not remember him for the number of national awards he has won for his acting skills. Thus, they do not realize the hard work behind their celebrity's fame.

In conclusion, the role of media and the failure of youngsters to understand the true reason behind the fame of their celebrities convince us that, nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their looks and wealth than for their talents and contributions to their field.