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Name: Hesam Samadii
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Oct 2, 2014
Writing Feedback / "in the way to success, there is no feet of lazy person" luck/hard work=Success [3]

"they will success without lucky "
they will succeed without luck

"to die from hungry like that man"
to die from hunger like that man

"It just result of hard work"
it is just result of hard work

" but don't forget how they hard work in along time"
but don't forget how hard they worked for long hours

pleas pay more attention in word orders and separate your paragraphs.
Oct 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: The chief factor of someone to prosper is the goal of that person; talent isn't a must [2]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be tough to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It has become a general belief that some people are born with certain talent, like sports or music, and others are not. On the contrary, others think that any child can be taught to become a rewarding athlete or musician. This essay will discus both these views.

There is a belief among some group of society that some people born with talent. It can be true, but having talent has just a little role on making someone athlete or musician. It is important to work on pupils and help them discover their hidden talents and after finding them out, they have to work hard on that. With talent you can precede one year's experience in one month.

On the other hand, some believe that talent is not important and with appropriate teaching everyone can be a successful athlete or musician. It is correct that almost everybody can learn everything with suitable teaching. But, the key fact is, can that person be as successful as the person with talent? The person with talent can be prosperous in the first years but, for one without talent can take more than few years.

As conclusion, some born with talent and some don't. The chief factor of someone becoming prosper is the goal of that person. I believe everyone can do everything with optimal motivation and it is not important that he/she has the talent or not. For someone can take one year but for other can take years. But at the end, both can be successful.
Oct 1, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Public health and related measurements. [6]

I think you should not put your opinion in body paragraphs it is better to write it in conclusion paragraph. " In my own perspective, the most effective measures to better the quality of health is health education, development of infectious diseases vaccinations and provision of clean water and foods for everyone."
Sep 30, 2014
Writing Feedback / Separating Male and female ! Gender Segregation in Schools [3]

"First and uppermost, tremendous people must agree with me that is it inevitable to encounter with both female and male in our society as we grew up"

that it is inevitable ...

"Then he his social skills will be pretty underprivileged"
Then he will be pretty underprivileged in his social skills
Sep 29, 2014
Writing Feedback / I strongly believe that primary school is the best time for children to learn a foreign language [2]

some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The professionals believe best time for a children to learn a foreign language is primary school not the secondary school. This essay will discuss advantages and disadvantages of this issue, and which one outweighs.

One of the advantages of this action is; because they are young their mind are more ready to comprehend new information. Even some studies illustrates that more younger the person is , more easier he/she can learn a new language.

Another benefit of learning children a foreign language in primary school instead of secondary school is , they can learn it as well as their mother tongue and they will not have problems. For example if they study it in secondary school , it will be difficult to them to start learning another language but if they commence this experience from primary school they wont have this problem.

On the contrary, some believe that because they are so young in elementary school, they can get confused if they learn a foreign language. They believe in case of confusion, they will learn neither their mother tongue nor the foreign language. Or, some say without learning mother tongue at first it is impossible to learn a foreign language. In another word they believe it is not possible to learn two language parallel to each other from beginning.

To sum up, I strongly believe that primary school is the best time for children to learn a foreign language, not the secondary school. It is true that if they get confused they wont learn anything but, I suppose with a satisfying planning we can retain children learning ability in an acceptable level or even fortify it.
Sep 29, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTs Task 1 - Map - An island before and after conctruction [NEW]

The two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrates progress that the island made after construction of some facilities for tourists. We can assume from maps that the island was an abandoned one before constructions.But then they built a peir on the south of the island that enabled boats to moor there and load or unload.It made construction possible on island and so on they built a touristic place.

In the center of island there is a reception that is surrounded with vehicle tracks that commences from pire and continues to restaurant. On the west side of island, there is accommodation places, connected to the beach by footpath and people can swim there.

Another accommodation place is in the center of island near the reception. On the north side of the island there is a restaurant where people on the island can nourish.East side of island is remained intact and no building has built there.

We can conclude that from a 250 meters wide abandoned island, they built a touristic facility where people can entertain and it can be helpful for economy.