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Name: Chad Donohoe
Joined: Nov 15, 2015
Last Post: Nov 24, 2015
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chaddonohoe   
Nov 24, 2015
Undergraduate / Growing up, I was raised in a conservative home and was sheltered for much of my early life. Texas [4]

Describe a setting in which you have collaborated or interacted with people whose experiences and/or beliefs differ from yours. Address your initial feelings, and how those feelings were or were not changed by this experience.

Growing up, I was raised in a conservative home and was sheltered for much of my early life. As a family, we all ate at the same dinner table every night and attended church together every Sunday. I attended a small private school from kindergarten all the way until eighth grade. Here, we were expected to follow a strict dress code and attend chapel twice a week, conformity was the norm. I was raised in a setting where everyone around me had the same beliefs and ideals, and those with differing beliefs were viewed as outsiders. Without knowing, I had taken the ideology of the environment I was raised in as my own; I never took the time to introspect and figure out who I was as a person. I enjoyed this sheltered lifestyle, I never had deep arguments with friends and family and I seemed to get along with everyone around me. Only now- as a thoughtful and self-aware 18 year old- I realize that this way of being raised was only to my detriment, and not my benefit.

In eighth grade I knew that I did not want to be stuck at a small private school for the duration of my high school career, I realized that I wanted the chance to figure out who I was on my own. After incessant begging and convincing, my parents decided to let me switch schools at the start of my freshman year of highschool. I transferred to a large public school out of my district in order to play for their basketball team. I was shocked to find out that the enrollment in my ninth grade class was bigger than all the grades combined at my previous school. I knew switching schools would force me to leave behind my sheltered lifestyle, old friends, and old ways of life, but I was excited to begin a new chapter in my life. Being very social and outgoing all my life, I knew making new friends would not be a problem, however, I was nervous to see what kind of people I would encounter.

In order to ease the transition of switching schools, I joined the Student Government, I believe doing this would allow me to meet a myriad of people while allowing me to get involved on campus. I quickly made many new friends and began helping in school activities such as brunch activities and rallies. Everything at my new school was going great, I had made great friends and I was making a difference on campus. However, I was still close-minded, and I didn't realize it until a specific interaction with a few of my friends in my Student Government class.

Winter formal was coming up and it was the Student Government's job to run the event. The members were broken up into small groups to discuss ideas and come up with ways to improve on it from the previous year. The discussion in my small group somehow shifted from winter formal ideas to hot political topics in a matter of minutes. A few of my friends mentioned that they were pro gay-marriage, and asked me what my stance was on the topic. I told them that I was against gay-marriage and quickly tried to change the subject. But one member of the group, one of my closest friends to date, asked me why I had this viewpoint. I informed him that I was raised believing this and that my religion shared the same viewpoint. He said that he believed by denying gay people the right to marry, we are denying them the right to be happy and not allowing them to live their life in the way they want to live it. I was shocked, I had never looked at it like that before, I had no reply for him and sat quiet for the rest of the period. I was upset with my friend for putting me on the spot in front of our whole group. With one statement, he made me question what I believed and why I believed it.

That night, I went home and went straight to my room, I was still deeply affected by what happened earlier in the day. I was embarrassed that I had no greater explanation for my friends question other than that someone else told me what to believe. I came to the realization that I let my early environment dictate what I believed as a person. I decided from that point on I wouldn't let anyone or anything determine my core set of beliefs. I promised myself that I would come into any situation with an open mind, not ruling out any belief or idea just because it differed from what I previously believed. Over the following weeks, my small group worked together as a cohesive unit and contributed many ideas that were eventually implemented at the winter formal.

Although the incident in Student Government did not change my view on a single political issue, it changed Who I am as a person and how I look at other's differing beliefs and ideals. I am grateful to have had many opportunities to collaborate with individuals who have had varying experiences and viewpoints from mine. Without these experiences, I would not be as complete as a person I am today.
chaddonohoe   
Nov 19, 2015
Undergraduate / Future in four years - College Application Essay [4]

Good essay! Here's some pointers.

"Being a goal of mine is to" this sounds a bit awkward, might want to reword.

"Due to the classes that truly interest me i can discover my passion that i have yet to completely uncover. "-- I would take out this sentence.

talk about a specific experience that has shaped you. Give a few specific lifetime goals.
chaddonohoe   
Nov 19, 2015
Undergraduate / I created the Investment Club for students on my campus with a passion for business - Texas Essay [4]

Describe a setting in which you have collaborated or interacted with people whose experiences and/or beliefs differ from yours. Address your initial feelings, and how those feelings were or were not changed by this experience.

As I reviewed the paper telling me the classes I was eligible to take as a junior, I noticed a void: only two business classes were offered to students, and one was for seniors exclusively. This concerned me because students on my campus with a passion for business, such as myself, had no outlet to pursue their interests. Eager to turn concern into action, I created the Investment Club, a club that allows high schoolers to simulate competitive stock market investing. I founded the club to not only to provide a resource for students to learn about business, investing, and finance, but also to create an opportunity for students to get involved on campus, fostering those with similar interests to meet and exchange ideas.

As a result of the varying backgrounds of the students in my club, I was able to interact and work alongside those who had differing viewpoints and experiences than mine. My club was comprised of students of varying grades, ethnic backgrounds, and religions. Initially, I was ecstatic to see such a wide range of people brought together by a single common factor, a passion for business. During lunch meetings, the only arguments between the members were about investment strategies and business topics, not about political issues or race conflicts. Even when our investments didn't do as well as expected, there were never any fingers pointed, the only thing that mattered was learning from our mistakes in order to be better in the future.

On one occasion, one of the members, an immigrant from Nicaragua, told the club about the daily discrimination he faced on campus and how it negatively affected him. He explained how others thought he wasn't a capable student because of the fact that he was an immigrant. However, he told us that the atmosphere of the club was an encouragement to him because no one ever doubted his ability and everyone was so confident in him.

This experience made me realize how proud I was to be the leader of a club that had such a positive impact on someone's life just by showing that person kindness and encouragement. My feelings regarding those with differing experiences and beliefs than mine remained constant throughout my time as leader of the club. I did learn, however, that when a group of people are motivated by a common goal, differences such as race and religion are meaningless. It is a leader's job to realize this and to encourage and motivate the group in order to achieve the desired goal.
chaddonohoe   
Nov 16, 2015
Undergraduate / Loving museums. I want to pursue a career in Museum Studies - Common App Personal Essay [9]

Great essay, you have some great material!

"It was like history was the greatest book I'd ever read and museums were a grand extension of the story "-- this is a great line!

They had come from an inner city school and it was likely that their parents didn't put much emphasis on school to the extent that mine did. The opportunities that I have had - to visit world class museums and explore cities across the country - wasn't something that everybody had. -- this is based on a strong and somewhat touchy assumption, be careful.

take a look at mine!
chaddonohoe   
Nov 16, 2015
Undergraduate / I want to study the Earth and learn how it can help us in the future through its gifts - Texas essay [4]

Great essay, definitely have some great material! I learned how to endure and persevere, -- get rid of the comma, its a little awkward. I would focus more on what led you to want to study geology and discuss that path in more detail. The band section is great but you are going to study geology in college, so let them see you're passionate about that.

this made me get more involved in my community. --talk about how specifically it made you more involved in your community.

My grades are what helped me get into college the first time and this time I am confident they will do the same. Going to college, learning how to be a geologist, and then becoming a working geologist are my main goals for the next few years, and I know everything I mentioned above will help me get there. -- You might want to word this a little differently, it comes off a little strange at first reading.

Great essay, give me some feed back on mine please!
chaddonohoe   
Nov 16, 2015
Undergraduate / USC undergraduate admissions - business, with a focus on finance and entrepreneurship [5]

Describe your academic interests and how you plan to pursue them at USC. Please feel free to address your first- and second-choice major selections (250 word limit).

My intended field of study at USC is business, with a focus on finance and entrepreneurship. I believe a curriculum in finance and entrepreneurship ample prepares an individual to be successful in any field of business. My interest in business developed at a young age and I haven't stopped questioning, learning, and researching business related topics since. I am eager to attend the Marshall School of Business because of its global mindset, innovative curriculum, and strong alumni network. These characteristics distinguish Marshall from other universities and prepare students for life after USC. I look forward to taking classes such as Advanced Practicum in Investment Management (FBE453a/b) and Venture Management (BAEP 453), as I believe these classes will provide me with invaluable hands-on experience in wealth management and entrepreneurship, while also improving my ability to work with others in a team. In addition, I want to explore my academic interests outside of the classroom by joining student organizations such as Marshall Business Student Government, Marshall Youth Outreach, and Entrepreneurship & Venture Capital Association (EVCA). These organizations will enable me to learn about my intended fields of study in a new manner while plugging me into the local USC community. I believe USC will cultivate my passion for business and direct it in a way that will make me a better student, leader, and member of my community.
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