Writing Feedback / The percentage of Australian children aged 5-14 years and their activities [2]

The bar chart illustrates the percentage that australian children in 5-14 years old do in their spare times on various activities. Overall, it can obviously seen that with the exception of watching TV or videos and doing art and craft, boys always have more percentages than girls.

Closer look at the data reveals that 100% girls and boys prefer to watch TV or videos in their free time which the most popular activities that they do most in their free time. Boys are also many more than double the number of proportion than girls doing skateboarding or rollerblading with 39% and 22% respectively. Apparently the number of boys spend their spare time by playing electronic or computer games is more than riding bike while girls have fairly similar proportion for both activities with a gap of approximately 1%. Afterwards, compared to art and craft, is the only one activity that is predominantly undertaken by girls rather than boys with 59% and 38% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Clear plastic dome. IELTS Writing Task 1 [2]

The diagram presents the method to transform sea water into drinking water by using a simple device which is called a floating solar still. Overall, it can be obviously seen that drinking water can be produced with just a few simple steps which is accomodated into drinking water collector in the final stages.

First, make sure the device ready to use that consist of clear plastic dome, a rubber tube, and smaller container which is called as distilled water collector. When a part on the bottom device which is larger container that is partly loaded by sea water which means the process begun. after being loaded, the clear dome is passed through by sun's rays which sea water will be evaporated in the inside of the dome due to heat from sunlight. Once the sea water have been evaporated , it is also condensed. Finally, the water flows down until the rubber tube is passed through and is poured into water collector. It is ready to drink.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - the most general things that people like and dislike about Fairmont Island [NEW]

The pie charts show the most general things that people like and dislike about Fairmont Island based on observation of visitors. Overall, it be obviously seen that the highest proportion of general profit and general loss are the people and high cost of living respectively.

Move to more detailed analysis, the proportion under half of the total, people in Fairmont Island become the main reason of most common advantages among visitors which is 40%. It is the highest percentage of general advantages which means almost four times higher than good accomodation which has the lowest percentage. Then the scenery has 37% that make it as three times higher than culture proportion which becomes the second reason to encourage visitors come to this place. Culture and good accomodation only have a fairly similar percentage which are 12% and 11% respectively.

However, there are also drawback because of visiting Fairmont Island. Surprisingly, the quality of food becomes the lowest percentage that visitors dislike in this place with proportion at 5%. It means ninefold lower than high cost of living as the highest proportion. The percentage at around a third of total, entertaiment in this place get the second highest proportion with percentage at 30% and is followed by weather which has a gap of 10%. It makes entertaiment percentage higher than weather percentage as visitors claimed to dislike about this place.

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