Writing Feedback / Online video games become is part of most children life these days. IELTS TASK 2 [2]

Some people regard online video games as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the young people who play them. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of computer and give your own opinion.

Online video games become is part of most children life these days. As per some experts, it should not be a problem to let young people playing online games since it can be an educational tool for learning additional language, while others believe that such online games will give dire effect on children. i personally argue that such idea has merit and demerit.

Needless to say, the main advantage of playing online video games on education for young people is they learn more about second languange since most of them are presented in English. According to Bayu, Indonesia young children, states that he can speak english fluently since he often communicates with people using English when he is playing online games. Unconsciously, this habit gives positive effect on his knowledge with having more vocabularies rather than children who do not play the games. However, parents and teachers should keep their eye on young children since playing online game can make them to be addicted

Despite the benefit, we can not reject that such this notion has demerit as well. This is because young teenagers tend to spend much time on computer which lead to a sedentary lifestyle. A 2015 recent Harvard University study reveals that 50% of young teenagers who spending their time on online games have health problems due to lack of activity. This leads them to obesity which can increase the possibility of getting heart attack and susceptible to disease. There is no doubt that playing online games for the long term can affect on young children health.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although such a foreign language can be learned by children while playing computer games, unhealthy lifestyle become a huge problem at the same time. i strongly believe that such bad impact should be minimized by parents with limiting the time children play the games.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: USING INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY TO WORK SAVES ENERGY AND TIME [2]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

The development of information technology becomes trending topic these days. As seen, this notion brings people into a better life especially workers since they can do their task at their own home. Some people argue that it is really helpful for people who live far away from their workplace due to the time they can save, while others believe it would be not effective. I personally argue that such an idea has merit and demerit.

Needless to say, this issue seems to be able to make a possibility for people to use their time effectively by doing their duty at home since they can submit their task by using the internet. A 2012 recent Harvard study reveals that 95%of companies in England had used the internet connection to find out information for business purpose so employees can complete their job at home. This resulted in workers saving much valuable time and energy as they did not have to go to office.

Apart from previous discussion, staying at home for extended period of time leads workers to have less conversation with their colleague directly. This leads them to lack of communication since they communicate rarely. This was illustrated in New York Times poll that 50%of employees who did their duty at home regularly were more likely to make mistakes. As a result, most of them had a tendency to have misunderstanding with co-workers. However, it is not a big deal as the advanced of technology these days provides long distance communication which is extremely useful for workers to keep in touch with their boss or co-workers to prevent such misconception.

The aforementioned evidence shows that information technology provided to workers and a plenty energy saved plus less time spending at work far outweigh the supposed disadvantages of misunderstanding with the others. Where possible, some serious consequences should be taken into consideration.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: APPROPRIATE FORM OF PUNISHMENT FOR DRUG USERS [4]

Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated? Discuss both views and give your opinions.

More attention should be paid on addicted people to narcotics. As seen, they have a tendency to use drugs in the wrong path. Some people believe that government should send them into prison, while others suggest that it would be much better to put them into the hospital. Therefore, I believe i stand in the latter idea since hospital is the best place to rehabilitate them while the former method is utterly unacceptable as it can not helped them.

The general view has been that drug addicts should be arrested in order to prevent them influencing other people using narcotics. For example, BNN, one of the government institution that handle drugs cases in Indonesia, states that there is an increase in the number of addicted people in Indonesia since ordinary people are influenced utilizing heroin by drug users. However, I believe this is not the best way to solve such a problem since drug addicts have vulnerable mentality that should be helped by introducing the danger of drugs

Apart from the previous discussion, some people argue that government should put addicted people into the hospital so as to gain rehabilitation intensively. Hopefully, drug users can realize the huge dire effects on narcotics. A 2012 recent Harvard University study reveals that more than 90%of drugs addicts in the rehabilitation institution in England realized their own mistake and they were cured for 1-2 years. This resulted in the number of drug addicts decreased significantly. I am bound to choose this method since they are not crime suspects but they are the real victims of bad environment.

The aforementioned evidence shows that it would be great if drug addicts sent into rehabilitation center since this methods help them free from drugs. This is really more useful than the former method as throwing them to the prison does not break the problem. Where possible, drug addicts have to have strong commitment to be free from drugs.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: PROBLEM AND SOLUTION IN CAREER AND FAMILY [2]

Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems can this situation create? What are the possible solutions?

It is hard to be a successful person. As seen, this notion brings a big problem such as stress due to the difficulty to split their time between working and family. However, i believe some viable solutions should be taken to tackle this problem.

Keeping a successful career and having happy family at the same time seems to be impossible since there is a problem preventing this notion such as feeling stressful. Feeling stressful is when people are in the situation such having bad emotional and mentality. This results in people being unstable emotion which can give additional effect like household rift and the decline in the quality of work. A 2012 recent Oxford University study reveals that 80%of divorce cases happened since spouses were likely to have less quality time with their family so as that they felt extremely tired when they were arriving at home.

To tackle this problem, government should make a new regulation to set working hours effectively for people in order to prevent the danger of working for long hours. As a result, they will have enough time to spend with their own family and keep their career in the right path as well. A 2014 recent New York Times poll reveals that there was a decrease in the number of people got depressed and divorce since such a strategy was started by government so as that they can manage their time much more easier.

In conclusion, it seems to me that the main problem of this issue is dealing with stress since the less hours they spend with family due to the high pressure at work. Where possible, possible the government should make a regulation to arrange office hours in order to resolve this problem.

Writing Feedback / One of favorite tourist destination is museums and local sites history. IELTS 2 [3]

Many museums and history sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than local people why is this? What can we done to encourage people to visit museums and historical sites?

One of favorite tourist destination is museums and local sites history. As seen, majority of visitors are foreign society since they have high interested in local culture while local residents are not. Therefore, the most viable solution is conducting special fee for native in particular day.

The main cause of this problem is about the curiosity. According to tourists, they have a tendency to find out the information about culture and local history while they are traveling since museums provide an effective way of learning. A 2012 recent Harvard University study reveals that 90%of people visiting museum tend to remember all of things about the history easily due to the direct experience they got. However, indigenous people are less likely to visit the museum since they have known about the history. This was illustrated in New York Times poll in 2013 that more than 90%of local people were more likely to spend their free time at home rather than at museum as it can't attract them. As a result, this brings museums into lack of attraction for local society.

To tackle this problem, something has to be done by government such encouraging local people to visit museum by reducing the ticket price. This method is believed for some people as the best way to drive people paying a visit to the museums. For example, Angel, an Indonesian psychologists, states that people are bound to be more interesting when they are facing with discount or special price. This results in local people interesting to see the museum.

The aforementioned evidence shows that this notion is caused with the different level of curiosity between tourists and local residents. However, it can be addressed through reducing museum admission price in order to attract people attention.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: RUNNING OUT NATURAL RESOURCES - we have started to look to space for solutions [2]

As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting space for natural resources?

More attention should be paid on natural resources. As seen, several space programs are made in order to look for another energy to satisfy people needs, while others argue that people should develop renewable energy on the Earth. In my view, the latter method is much better instead of the former one.

Needless to say, the massive exploitation of natural resources on the Earth by people is the reason why natural resources will run out soon. This situation push people to find out the alternative on the space since there are lots of fuels, minerals, metal outside the Earth. A 2010 recent NASA study reveals that asteroid had potential to be used for human needs since it had fairly similar content with minerals on the Earth. This resulted in governments trying to take those sources from the space. However, substantial funding should be taken into account due to the cost of space travel.

Apart from previous discussion, others believe that people should find out the alternative on the Earth because amount of energy is not used by people such wind, water, solar as much as possible yet. According to Professor Smith, an expert from Harvard University, states that water can be used as power plants which can supply amount of electricity for human life and does not give rise to pollution since it does not burn such fossil fuels. As a result, people can gain their needs without earning much money and keeping environment at the same time.

The aforementioned evidence shows that although space exploration can be a solution but it will be wasting much money and time as well. Instead, people should use renewable energy on the Earth within make a great effort in order to find out new technology which is appropriate with the renewable energy.

Writing Feedback / It's no longer a dream today. SPACE EXPLORATION WITH NATIONAL PRIDE RATHER THAN INTERNATIONAL EFFORT [2]

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

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Space travel is no longer a dream today's. As seen, many people can go to outside the Earth due to the sophisticated technology. However, some people believe that such activity should be done with national pride rather while i personally argue that space exploration brings countries together so as to reach particular purpose, exploring space.

Needless to say, space exploration become a place for several countries to compete in the advanced of technology since they want to impress others by rising flag on the moon or particular planet and exploring space. According to proffesor Lambert, a lecturer in Harvard University, states that not every country can travel to outside space, so it would be national pride when a country can send their local people to the space, like America, for instance. As a result, others will regard its as a powerful country. However, in my opinion, it would be better if such space project is carried out together with other countries.

Apart from previous discussion, the reason why space exploration becomes international effort is not only the high cost to carry out this project but also the lack of equipment. A recent 2012 MIT University research reveals that 20 countries in this world invest their money and do research together to develop rocket space to another planet with Uni Soviet supplies rocket equipment regularly. As a result, many people have a high chance to go to the space in the future since their country get involved in this projects, so they can get the opportunity easily.

The aforementioned evidence shows that space exploration is no longer done with national pride. However, more countries should take a part in this project due to the paramount of importance knowing the space. Where possible, a strong commitment from country is needed in order to make its successfully.