Writing Feedback / The huge number of advertisement motivates customers' buying unnecessary goods. It may be true. [2]

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many companies make thousands of advertisements in order to attract consumers. Some people argue that the huge number of advertisement motivates customers' buying unnecessary goods. This argument may be true.

On the one hand, there are numerous advertisements on social medias, billboards, television programs, and other places, and most of them are attractive with stunning visual effects. Some people will have impulse to purchase things they do not need after watching these Ads. For example, a fabulous and glorious hair in a shampoo advertising, can affect some people to imagine that they enable to the same hair after washing with the same shampoo. But most of them will find that it is difficult to own a shinny hair like the shampoo-ads one.

Also, celebrity advertising can encourage many people to buy. Celebrites such as popular singers, famous movie stars, idols, have amazing numbers of fans who are willing to spend money on many products they actually do not need in order to support their favourite stars. Meanwhile, many fans want to wear the same brand clothes, drink same soft drinks like their idols and teams do.

On the other hand, many people's purchase behaviours seem cannot be influenced by ads. For instance, before purchasing, many people will investigate products' information and compare the reviews of products on different websites. Moreover, sometimes many people will ingore even dislike the advertisements. Those applications or services which need people to pay fees to advoid the advertisements on social mideas and smartphone applications, are quiet popular.

In brief, customers have their own freedom and standards to choose what kind of product to purchase; also, a product will disppear in the market if people do not need it. Therefore, neither simply blaming advertisement on motivating people's impulsive consumption, or saying that most customers are intriging by ads to buy products unsensibly is right.

Writing Feedback / Based on the previous question, what do you think XX's business will be like in the next ten years? [6]

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Based on the previous question, what do you think XX's business will be like in the next ten years? How will you build your career in the process? Please answer both questions and be as specific as possible.

As the previous answer says, XX's products are changing people's life, XX's physical stores builds a comfortable environment for customers to shop. Although the are a many obstacles such as China's knockoff. I think XX will maintain its attitude, keep exploiting more designs, and open more locations in more countries.

XX's physical stores are one of its feature, meanwhile it is easy to see that more and more retails are focusing on online sales such as Amazon. It is well known that people choose online shopping for many reasons. Some think online shopping saves their time and are more cheaper, they can also view other customers' opinions and compare the similar goods. But physical stores also have advantages, for instance, people can try on clothes and households, there must be more. So I think XX will integrate the advantages of both. For example, though the technology called VR, customers can have an experience of goods at home, they can also stand in the store and see how the furniture and household will be in their house.

Since the advanced technology is making the world change more rapidly, I think that XX will bring more electronic devices that are convenient to use and can refresh people recognition. Many excellent things have refreshed people's recognition, for example the smart phones. their appearances are quiet different from people's imagination. They change people's customs not cater customers needs, so I think XX will keep focusing on creation. Besides, XX has a wide range of products, from households to food. In the foreseeable future, XX may exploit more areas and service. For example, since the aging population is growing, more quality products may be designed to meet their needs. Meanwhile XX's policy is living a simply life, and many people still like to use natural and simply goods. For example many people still like drawing on papers not rather than on the digital tablets. Therefore I believe XX will keep its attitude, as well as bring more innovative products and service.

Also, I think XX will open more locations as many countries have a large market such as India. People in different countries have different taste and preference, so I think XX will absorb various culture and use more methods to display its characteristic for the people there.

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Writing Feedback / A Questionnaire essay : What values do you share with XX's "Pleasant Life" philosophy? [3]

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Q: What values do you share with XX's "Pleasant Life" philosophy?

Although one of XX's main concepts is "no logo, no brand", it actually has created a powerful culture that shapes its customers' life more quality and positively. Somehow it gives my friends and myself the impression of being closed with customers, not just because it has created numerous multifunctional and thoughtful goods, but also the quiet and relaxed atmosphere in its retails. With nice and polite staffs, everything being placed orderly, goods in similar colors being grouped together and gentle music being playing, it brings people in a garden isolated from the outside chaotic mall. This tranquil atmosphere makes me stop to think about the quality of life and some living moments. Sometimes when my friends and I walk into XX and see its households such as tableware, we will picture the scene we use it. It is happy to find somethings cute and talk with friends. I wish other people could feel this peace as well.

Along with the pleasant surroundings, another key characteristic also attracts me-the simple but well-designed products. When thinking about XX, it will never be too fancy, and the details of the design always make you surprised. Take a notebook as an example, a notebook is quite a basic products. But XX's notebooks are minimalist and clean. It also provides multiple sizes and types of notebook. Some sizes are slightly smaller than a A-5 paper so it is more convenient to take, some sizes are more suitable for drawing. Dot-grid papers, line papers, you can use them in multiple ways. Besides it easily to open so writing on it is comfortable. The paper inside are smooth and are not too thin; the blanks inside are well organized. Basic but make buyers feel satisfied to use it, like many other goods of XX. As for the households, many people like XX's bed sheets, I think the Stacking Shelves are interesting, they can be assembled in different ways, therefore everyone can create their own style. Furthermore, I have seen many people used XX's containers to create a lovely house; many planners used XX's diaries, list notebooks, stickers to organize and record their life. On the social network, many people sleep better or become more concentrated when they using the aroma diffusers. And that is what I think a good design is, you may do not come out with using these products in your minds before, but after using them, you find they are indispensable.

XX's life style is also about being minimalism, avoiding unnecessary. In the making process, the retail will select the materials that are recyclable and sustainable such as recyclable paper, avoid using some harmful materials. The process of producing the goods will therefore cause less harm to the environment.Package is simple and tasteful, products like The LED lightnings reduce carbon footprint. Also because of the sustainable and thoughtful design, customers do not have to purchase for a new one frequently. All of these bring me its attitude and this eco-friendly attitude has influenced me. I believe many other people also like to use environmentally-friendly things and buy things they only need now.

In conclusion, I think XX's "Pleasant Life" philosophy meets my needs.

Writing Feedback / The importance of balancing our income and expense. Money Management. [5]

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Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life.How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money?

Growing inflation rate,numerous bills,all of these show the increasing importance of balancing our income and expense.Many people,however,find it difficult to develope the skills of how to control their own finance.This essay will discuss some approaches to learning the related knowledge.

One of the practical methods is to take some classes about economic and money management.Understanding taxation,purchasing thoughfully,choosing financial products,and so on,all of these need people to be familiar with some basic financial concepts.Therefore,resigning economic classes,which can help people to bulid a systematic frame of finance,is playing a critical role in learning money management.Meanwhile,for students,there are plenty of economic lectures in the colleges,universities;for those who take part-time or full-time job,there are also online platforms providing quality lectures from excellent universities and institutions.Coursera,for example,has some economic enducations organized by the University of Illinois,the Columbia University.

Another method is to query financial institutions.Financial institutions are profitable institutions,so not only do they like well investments,but they also own some professional employees.For instance,people can seek some specialist advice on how to set up a propriate spending and saving plan from them.Althogh some of them will make profit from persuading people to purchase some unnecessary and costly financial products.

Finally,there are also some specialists analyse money management and the economic in their columns on magazines or websites;podcasts like Money Planet can also bring people some useful information.Though people have to read and listen with basic economic knowledge and critical thinking.

In conclusion,there are numerous ways to learn the skill of managing money effectively,from which people can choose based on their preference.I think people can first go for the education and then use what they learn in practical world.

Writing Feedback / Housing and economic. Summarise the information and make comparisons where relevant [3]

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The given graph shows variation of the growing rate of the economic between 1995 and 2010.The pie charts give information about the proportion of household spending.Seen together,there seems to be a link between the two tiems.

It can be seen from the line graph that the growth of economic began at nearly 0.2 percent in 1995 and then fluctuated around 1 to 2 percent during the seven-year intervals.Follwing the fluctuation,it trended up dramatically and climbed to the top point at roughly 4 per cent.However,It had fallen sharply after the peaking and bottomed out nearly -5 per cent in 2008.Since then it had recovered and reached back to 0.2 per cent.

Over the same period,the pie charts of household expense shows some features related with the economic growth.The spending on housing and food made up the main parts of the total in all the four individual pies;the two shared the least in 2000 and 2005,respectively.Compared with the essential cost for living,the expenditure of clothing,entertainment,and travel,made up three moderate parts over the time;the sum of them increased in 2005 during the economic growing period.Then the expense of the three cut from nearly 1/4 in 2005 to less than 1/4 in 2010.

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