Holt Educational Consultant
Dec 25, 2016
Graduate / Request for further improvements on my application essays (content, logic...) [6]
Yao, most of these information are profession related. I wonder if you have not already shared most of this information in your statement of purpose yet? If this essay is just an extended discussion of your professional experience as indicated in the statement of purpose then you are just wasting valuable word space. It will be considered redundant information and not be considered as additional factors in the assessment of your application.
Prompts like these often look for little known facts that you were overlooked in the other prompts that you responded to. Perhaps you have a unique quality as a student or as an employee that makes you one of the best people at your job, maybe you won some awards or accolades from the companies you represented before. Maybe you got something published in the past but forgot to mention it or did not have a chance to previously mention it. Something or any information that you feel can help your essay stand out and make the reviewers take notice of your application would be best to showcase in this essay.
Consider what makes you an extra ordinary employee in this field. Or maybe, think of how you plan to up the game in Big Data in the future. How do you conceptualize that happening? Showcase your forward thinking nature in relation to your application but base it on your previous studies and work experience in order to create the idea of "specific background information that has not yet been addressed". I think that would make this essay stand out among the other applicants in the pack.
Yao, most of these information are profession related. I wonder if you have not already shared most of this information in your statement of purpose yet? If this essay is just an extended discussion of your professional experience as indicated in the statement of purpose then you are just wasting valuable word space. It will be considered redundant information and not be considered as additional factors in the assessment of your application.
Prompts like these often look for little known facts that you were overlooked in the other prompts that you responded to. Perhaps you have a unique quality as a student or as an employee that makes you one of the best people at your job, maybe you won some awards or accolades from the companies you represented before. Maybe you got something published in the past but forgot to mention it or did not have a chance to previously mention it. Something or any information that you feel can help your essay stand out and make the reviewers take notice of your application would be best to showcase in this essay.
Consider what makes you an extra ordinary employee in this field. Or maybe, think of how you plan to up the game in Big Data in the future. How do you conceptualize that happening? Showcase your forward thinking nature in relation to your application but base it on your previous studies and work experience in order to create the idea of "specific background information that has not yet been addressed". I think that would make this essay stand out among the other applicants in the pack.