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Name: Abdelmoniem Atia Abomosalam
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Last Post: Feb 16, 2017
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AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 16, 2017
Undergraduate / Something went out not like I expected [4]

What I was trying to emphasize was my self-studying journey throughout high school by showing the reader my reasons on why I took such decision and the difficulties I faced during that time. So I don't know why is it that what I wrote is irrelevant to what the question is asking for.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Undergraduate / Something went out not like I expected [4]

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation? (200-250 words)*

Autodidactism (self-education)



In 2012, my parents decided that it was time for us to leave Qatar and move to Egypt.It wasn't easy for me to live apart from my father, and I never thought that after spending there 13 years of my life, the storms could take me to my motherland, Egypt, but it happened. I lived in a countryside where people's mindset and tradition were the polar opposite of mines.

I attended school for the first two months; teachers were consistently following the method of indoctrination in teaching students. Compelling me to learn from their notes and to solve LOTS of past papers. Furthermore, their notes contained whole texts which had no technical relevance to the syllabus.To the point, where many of my friends traveled to Cairo and Alexandria specifically to enroll in courses provided by more qualified teachers. Unfortunately, I had no accommodation at that time in Cairo, so I decided to purchase the necessary textbooks for each subject I registered for to start my self-studying journey; It took a while to convince my parents at first, but they finally respected my decision and encouraged me all the way. I self-studied throughout my years in high school. Although there were plenty of resources to refer to on the internet, it took me a tremendous amount of time to sort out the ones that served my needs and eliminate other resources that were either too simple or too sophisticated. At days I progressed, some speedily, some steadily, some with pauses. Having misconceptions was regularly common, I struggled many times with not finding a resource that could unravel the knots of certain topics. However, I ended up scoring good marks on most of the subjects
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2: Presentation skills. Do you think public speaking skill is really important? [3]

It has been observed that few people face difficulties to deliver a speech or to give a demo in public. Where is the source that includes this observation? Secondly, I don't think that your opening statement is matching the task of the question (people find it very difficult to speak in public).

On your second paragraph, try to emphasize more on the point that students with proper narration skills are more likely to convince and satisfy their audience.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Scholarship / I am a 23-year-old English teacher from Termez - demonstrating myself for KGSP [6]

I was born and grown up---> I grew up
that gives me the priority to be always encouraged and motivated to study---> Where my family's number one priority is education.
Consider inserting a comma after engineer and literature in your first paragraph to separate the elements.
After your first introductory phrase insert a comma after the word father,
Which Special in teaching English language
Add a comma after lyceum
Gradually developed in these years--> was gradually shaped throughout these years.
Add a full stop after years.
"I applied to Termez State University, a higher institution in my hometown, and was accepted successfully."
This sentence is not clear
During the studies subjects concerning to methodology of teaching, languages attracted me more and I developed strong passion for teaching.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Undergraduate / How helping others helps you? MIT essay [5]

I would not have finished it earlier than I did in my previous essays without your help, thank you so much. I finished my fourth and final essay but I am waiting for others to ask questions that I could provide help on.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Undergraduate / How helping others helps you? MIT essay [5]

As a high school student, I took great pride in being a good chemistry student who had the skills to help others who found the subject difficult. It was this skill in providing assistance to students who otherwise would not pass the course that led me to join the online community called Open Study. As an independent learner who had no one to turn to, I think it's easy to deliver lectures to people in the form of a playlist of videos, but what's difficult was the scale of help you get instead, the one on one help and discussions are missing that you may get at a prestigious school or university. Through Open study, I was able to connect with users whose doubts are filled their minds about a lecture they have just finished listening to and talk to them to help clear things up. Fortunately, Many of whom I have contributed to have scored high grades through the better understanding of the topic they have developed by my guidance. Usually, I don't give away straight answers to a user instead I ask them to post their exact doubt regarding their question and from this point, the process of learning starts and finishes when his/her doubts are clear and ready to move onto the next topic. Over my time on Open study I earned a total of 732 medals on my quality of my answers.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 15, 2017
Undergraduate / How helping others helps you? MIT essay [5]

At MIT, we bring people together to better the lives of others. MIT students work to improve to their communities in different ways, from tackling the world's biggest challenges to being a good friend. Describe one way in which you have contributed to your community, whether in your family, the classroom, your neighborhood, etc. (200-250 words)*

useful answers - not only taking but giving



During high school, I personally depended mostly on my personal study the most. With it, I loved to teach and answer people's questions not for money but as something voluntary. So, I joined a website called Openstudy which helped guide users who were staying late at night burning the midnight oil working on problem sets, maybe watching a video lecture like I did too and they have their doubts and who will they turn to? Open study bridges that gap by connecting people studying the same things so that you can talk to each other and help each other. As an independent learner, I wanted to give help as well, it's nice to feel that you are not alone when you are cramming for a Math exam. I think it's easy to deliver lectures to people in a playlist of videos, but what's really hard was to scale the help you get, the small discussion, the 1 on 1 help that you may get a prestigious school or university. Many of whom I have contributed to have scored high grades through the better understanding of the topic, they have developed by my guidance. Usually, I don't straight give away the answers to a user, but I ask them to post their exact doubt regarding their question and start together from this point with the process of learning. Throughout my time in open study, I have earned a total of 732 medals on my quality of my answers.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 14, 2017
Student Talk / Hi everyone! Welcome at EssayForum thread. [414]

Hello everyone
My name is Abdelmoniem and I'm from Egypt. I found essay forum a helpful medium in which one can ask others to receive feedback in order to improve in my writing skills.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Minimizing the traffic issue - proposed ways [7]

To go to instead of to go for.
Consider replacing the adjective another with other
The amount of traffic- Traffic congestion because that's the underlying problem you should provide solutions for.
Appropriate way- Effective way
Mostly does not seem to fit in the context use Most instead
You should present your point of view in the first paragraph and solutions on why disagree with the proposed solution in the question.
*People need to go on working to fulfill an adequate standard of living needs.

The first sentence of your 3rd paragraph is considered a repetition of your last sentence in your first paragraph which from on you get to discuss why you disagree
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 14, 2017
Undergraduate / My dream school. The spirits of MIT's community is unlike anywhere else [5]

What I am trying to emphasize in my first paragraph is with such environment from people equally absorbed in what they study as I am. I won't be giving up on my passion because sometimes it's not easy to stay enthusiastic and optimistic about something.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 14, 2017
Undergraduate / My dream school. The spirits of MIT's community is unlike anywhere else [5]

How does MIT align with your goals (e.g., academic, personal, career, extracurricular, etc.)? (200-250 words)*

"One Last Chance"



There are major problems in this world that needed to be solved, and the quest for finding answers is one of the primary conditions for having a good life. However, a journey like that requires companions, living ones and not dead companions who are concerned with trivialities. The spirits of MIT's community is unlike anywhere else. One of the most interesting facts about MIT is that there is a Chemistry Club open to chemistry majors, other students, with interest in chemistry, and faculty members. With faculty members providing an encouraging environment by reflecting their enthusiasm and motivation towards students telling them about a research project they were involved in.

The chemical engineering program at MIT covers a breadth of concentrations and knowledge of the kind of depth expected to address the world's' challenges in health, energy, and other areas and allows students to choose from these various concentrations his/her area of interest rather than being offered a single major without any concentration. I value the freedom of choice available at MIT, to have control over the choices which shape my future instead of restraining me from pursuing my passion. I also think that with several concentrations, I will have enormous flexibility during my years of study.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 14, 2017
Writing Feedback / Essay - healthy lifestyle of individuals. Discuss both sides and give opinion [4]

"In my view, I have a mixed opinion and believe" In my view, In my point of view and In my opinion are 3 phases that you can use to express your opinion.

"Few people are conscious of their eating habits and are acknowledged to discriminate between foods based on the calorie content and nutritional quality". "Few people are of opinion" It's not so clear what you mean.

In your first paragraph try to emphasize the point that every body is different.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 13, 2017
Essays / Write a short paragraph about some of advantages of writing with pen and paper [3]

Here are some of the disadvantages of word processing that you could you use to support your point of view on why we should we write using pencils and pens.

1) It is sometimes not pleasing to read long documents on computer screens.
2) Not all programs are equipped with the same category of font styles which presents a large problem when sending important emails to someone else because the word document that you sent will lose its formatting.
AABMOSALAM1998   
Feb 9, 2017
Undergraduate / "One Last Chance"- Transfer essay for MIT [3]

Please discuss why you are considering transferring from your current college or university. (200-250 words)*

chance to gain experience



Everyone has their own interests, but I always find myself residing inside a bubble because the people surrounding me are concerned with trivialities, in this way, it's difficult to form new friendships. The university I am attending does not run enough clubs in which people of common interests could join to share experiences and ideas with each other through deep conversations.

During my two years as an undergraduate student at I have recognized that they put far greater emphasis on the theoretical part of science subjects which personally I resolutely disagree with such method of teaching. Illustrating my point, I will tell you a little story, this semester I am taking inorganic chemistry and unfortunately I did not stand a chance of applying my knowledge in any of the experiments; I was not satisfied with just checking demonstrations done by the teacher assistant because I was seeking individuality when working with lab equipment. Given the practice and experience of using lab equipment, I believe will be able to know what setup I will use when designing a lab experiment in my further years of study.

On my previous semester, my professor offered me an opportunity to work with him and a group of graduate students on a research project to prepare nanoparticles. However, I had to get an approval to my proposal by the head of the department of chemical engineering. My request was declined because he can't trust me to use chemicals and he insisted that no undergraduate student will engage in such projects unless he/she are in their final year of undergraduate studies. I was more sad than angry at that moment because I did not get the chance to gain experience at an earlier stage of my life and the potential to make a difference.

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