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|Ielts 1 - The proportion of household expenditures between Japan and Malaysia in the same year 2010
Writing Feedbackhau15122001 - Jan 15, 2020 / hau15122001 - Jan 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - UK telephone calls, by category, 1995-2002 - local, international, mobiles
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|IELTS TASK 2: Some people think that the use of computers should be restricted. Do you agree or not?
4 - For the TA score, due to the lack of proper response to the given prompt, this will most likely...
Writing Feedbackplinh175 - Jan 1, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Day-by-day people's lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What is the reason and how to solve
3 - There are spelling errors in this essay (thier = their) which could have been caught and corrected through proof...
Writing Feedbackchloeec - Dec 31, 2019 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Writing IELTS Task 1: Line graph about the movement to urban area in 3 countries
4 - You have a tendency to write run-on sentences instead of a mix of long and short sentences to create...
Writing Feedbacktienphat - Dec 20, 2019 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|Opinion Essay. City or country?
2 - This essay is riddled with grammatical errors. The sentences do not make any sense in most instances due to...
Writing FeedbackMartaJones - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 16, 2020
|A tendency to let children approach the basic education earlier than at the average school age
3 - In your introduction paragraph, you have an incomplete sentence. You refer to 7. A reader who does not know...
Writing Feedbackpenny0127 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Task 1: the percentage of water for different purpose - industry, agriculture and domestic
2 - I cannot accurately review your work without the chart / image provided for this task. Please remember to include...
Writing Feedbackkelly33 - Jan 15, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|Task 2: The problem of child abuse. How respond to this problem?
5 - ... made people become replete with ... ... towards children- susceptible victims- are ... ..., depression, orand...
Writing FeedbackThangnguyen315 - Dec 23, 2019 / karmalea - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - FRIENDS WITH PEOPLE WITH SAME OPINION OR NOT
4 - There is a lack of clarity in the introduction paragraph. Your paraphrase does not include a reference to the...
Writing FeedbackeNVi - Dec 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.
4 - That was one heck of a confusing first paragraph. It doesn't really summarize the task well enough to score...
Writing FeedbackHirumi - Dec 21, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS task2- It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife?
3 - When you write the introduction, spend time in formulating the summary of the prompt. Avoid writing long sentence because...
Writing FeedbackOliverH - Dec 24, 2019 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|TOEFL ESSAY - About restriction for marketing strategies directed at kids (eg. TV's advertising)
2 - It is not a question of whether more regulation is required when it comes to advertising to children, it...
Writing Feedbackkokot - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|ielts task 2; Millions of people doing unhealthy activities which are harmful
3 - The introduction must accurately summarize the content of the prompt in order for it to gain a proper TA...
Writing Feedbackmichellejoy1222 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 15, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE GROWTH OF ONLINE SHOPPING
Writing FeedbackYuki Nguyen - Jan 7, 2020 / Yuki Nguyen - Jan 14, 2020
|I agree that the media coverage of celebrities have a negative impact on children
4 - Points will be deducted for the missing 25 words. The TA assessment for this essay falls under a 4...
Writing FeedbackPHANTAMANH - Dec 25, 2019 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Overpopulation in urban areas has led to some serious problems. Identify some problems and solutions
3 - Your presentation is good but the ideas are little developed. It would be better if you learn to use...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Ngoc Huon - Jan 5, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Some believe homework should be given everyday, others do not in order to success in school. Discuss
Writing Feedbackapprajapati - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|The internet provide us with easy connection to other people, however it also isolates us
2 - The complete prompt for this essay indicates that requires a clear degree of dis/agreement with the given topic. As...
Writing FeedbackMsm87 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Even in this new era, millions of people still do not have enough food to eat
Writing Feedbackbehnooshsamavat - Jan 13, 2020 / Holt - Jan 14, 2020
|Regional household recycling rates - MY FIRST IELTS WRITING TASK 1
3 - Try to write at least 3 sentences for every paragraph. That way you increase the word count and your...
Writing FeedbackTria170393 - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|People consider computers to be the most important breakthrough
3 - Well, you certainly made your opinion clear in the essay, even with the problematic grammar and sentence presentations. You...
Writing Feedbackngoan - Jan 10, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|IELTS - Task 1 - Physical Activity awareness among different sexes and age people in Australia
4 - The summary paragraph is missing a trending statement at the end. The summary paragraph is the first paragraph of...
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Dec 26, 2019 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|Goods from Japan and US - HOW TO WRITE A TASK 1 OF IELTS
3 - The introduction paragraph is incomplete. Since this is a summary of the graph information, it should contain a list...
Writing Feedbacktdung512 - Jan 9, 2020 / Holt - Jan 13, 2020
|UBC Personal Profile: Tell us about who you are. (The Idealist)
Writing FeedbackFamai - Jan 13, 2020 / karmalea - Jan 13, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Car theft, house burgling and street robbery - statistics in two countries
Writing FeedbackPsycRicky - Jan 12, 2020 / PsycRicky - Jan 13, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: the number of university graduates in Canada over fifteen years
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 11, 2020 / Annie97 - Jan 12, 2020
|@Forest Disaster in Australia
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. It is the first time I try to write something. Honestly, i don't have...
Writing Feedbackgarethhuy - Jan 11, 2020 / garethhuy - Jan 12, 2020
|People who have a lot of money are the happiest. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback. It is very useful. I want to improve my writing skills. If you were...
Writing FeedbackMaria158 - Jan 11, 2020 / Maria158 - Jan 12, 2020
|Teaching child and mental development - IELTS academic writing task 2
2 - First up, do not exaggerate the importance of the discussions being presented. The prompt offered you a simple discussion....
Writing Feedbackminhtrile010 - Jan 12, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Essay about pros and cons of moving from home country
2 - Your presentation is riddled with grammatical errors and sentence structure problems. For starters, you seem to have a problem...
Writing Feedbackhtnanh2310 - Jan 11, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people
2 - You created a contradiction in your introduction. In the first sentence, you claim that college education is important. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackRM_3313 - Jan 8, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Rules to remember when driving at high speed
2 - There are several misuses of descriptive words in this essay. Instead of "place", the correct term is "position". When...
Writing FeedbackJadeNguyen - Jan 7, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Task1: The diagram below shows the process of milk production
Writing Feedbackhahahazh - Jan 12, 2020 / hahahazh - Jan 12, 2020
|The number of Ashdown Museum visitors before and after refurbishment for a one year period each
2 - This essay is short by 2 words to meet the minimum word requirement. You will be scored down with...
Writing Feedbackminnuee - Jan 6, 2020 / Holt - Jan 12, 2020
|Topic: instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a to coexist, Agree or Disagree
2 - Your thesis paragraph, also known as paragraph one, tends to be confusing to read due to the problematic sentence...
Writing Feedbackluctuantu1990 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Developed countries should provide technical aids rather than financial aid to developing countries
2 - Right off the bat I saw some punctuation conventions that you failed to follow such as using a comma...
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Writing Task 2 IELTS Essay about having a satisfying career
2 - With only 50 minutes to complete both writing tasks, I do not advise that you write more than 275-300...
Writing Feedbacklinhlinh208 - Jan 2, 2020 / Holt - Jan 11, 2020
|Transformation in transportation infrastructures regarding the routes accessing to a city hospital
2 - 197 words can be considered an acceptable number of words to write for this task, which has a 150...
Writing FeedbackEmily Chiang - Dec 30, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|Writing Test 2: Job Subject - a work suitable for men or women
2 - Trang, your scored will be helped if you write at least 275-300 words instead of only a little over...
Writing Feedbacklavitaebella - Dec 29, 2019 / Holt - Jan 10, 2020
|Which kind of organisations should carry out scientific research?
Writing Feedbacktamtran - Dec 23, 2019 / tamtran - Jan 3, 2020
|Task 2: Should air travel be restricted due to its impact on environment?
2 - @phuongthuy1212 Hi there. Thanks for coming to the site! I hope that this feedback welcomes you properly into the...
Writing Feedbackphuongthuy1212 - Dec 24, 2019 / Maria - Jan 2, 2020
|Whole New Galaxy - Draft for ' Why NYU' essay .
2 - lol I'm also applying to NYU this year. The metaphor is perfect but I think it takes too much...
Writing Feedbacktaemy - Dec 24, 2019 / Jiaxin Ye - Dec 24, 2019
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Staying in one place or various places?
2 - @Duy Anh I don't know others but for me your writing is pretty smooth, thus its coherence and cohesion...
Writing FeedbackDuy Anh - Dec 23, 2019 / Thangnguyen315 - Dec 23, 2019
|IELTS -Writing Task 1 : One country's exports value in various categories during 2015 and 2016
3 - @kanzanism Thank you so much for all the suggestions, I really appreciate it and will definitely keep on...
Writing FeedbackEmily Chiang - Dec 20, 2019 / Emily Chiang - Dec 23, 2019
|The comparison of user involvement for four different online social platforms
3 - @Maria Thanks a lot for your advises. I will take them all into account to improve my writing skill....
Writing FeedbackWaddahHamzah - Dec 12, 2019 / WaddahHamzah - Dec 22, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Children should be free to choose activities in their free time?
2 - Dear Nguyen, Overall, it is a well-writen essay that only contains minor errors, for example: 1. "There are...
Writing FeedbackHuyen Nguyen - Dec 22, 2019 / irsaqisthi - Dec 22, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 1 : Solar Energy for Water Heating and Panels Location
4 - Hi Mr. Bilal, Thank you for providing me with insightful advices related to IELTS writing task 1. In return,...
Writing Feedbacksantrinabawi - Dec 15, 2019 / irsaqisthi - Dec 22, 2019
|SOP for my application in German university in master in mechatronics and robotics program.
Writing FeedbackRushilkumar - Dec 10, 2019 / Rushilkumar - Dec 22, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 - Are celebrities over-paid ?
Writing FeedbackThangnguyen315 - Dec 11, 2019 / Thangnguyen315 - Dec 21, 2019
|TOPIC: What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad.
2 - Be careful with your singular and plural subject agreement. When you write more/some it should be followed by plural...
Writing Feedbackjamesnguyen1st - Dec 20, 2019 / Hirumi - Dec 21, 2019
|IELTS TASK 2 on Extreme activities - people take up dangerous sports for diverse reasons
3 - I could say that you have an organized essay on your writing since I could follow the flow of...
Writing Feedbackjoypham - Dec 14, 2019 / Hirumi - Dec 21, 2019
|The environment problem is facing today's world. Responsibility of fixing the pollution problem.
Writing Feedbacksmelias339 - Dec 18, 2019 / smelias339 - Dec 19, 2019
|MONEY MANAGEMENT FOR FIRST-YEAR STUDENT
2 - @khangnguyen Welcome to the forum! Here is my feedback on your writing. While I appreciate how short and...
Writing Feedbackkhangnguyen - Dec 17, 2019 / Maria - Dec 19, 2019
|Discussing both views about the influences what children watch and the amount of time they spend on.
2 - @ratter Welcome to the forum. Here is my feedback. Ensure that you are using the appropriate sentence construction...
Writing Feedbackratter - Dec 17, 2019 / Maria - Dec 18, 2019
|IELTS writing task 2 - argumentative essay- Would life be better without sophisticated technology?
2 - @Hirumi Here's my feedback on your writing. Try your best to create simpler sentences when you can. This...
Writing FeedbackHirumi - Dec 17, 2019 / Maria - Dec 18, 2019
|Studying history to learn from it - IELTS Writing Task II - Academic
3 - In describing both views, avoid using judging words and focus on supporting each statement from positive perspective. Your Body...
Writing FeedbackSamathan - Dec 16, 2019 / Hirumi - Dec 17, 2019
|IELTS Task II; The problems of people living in urban areas - government should take some actions
4 - Organize sentences structure with appropriate verb in use more carefully. Like the phrase 'have been witnessed' should be 'have...
Writing FeedbackJealynn - Dec 16, 2019 / Hirumi - Dec 17, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 the process of solar power - energy from the sunlight
2 - @King heart Hi, welcome. Here is my feedback. There's a lot of confusion when it comes to your...
Writing FeedbackKing heart - Dec 15, 2019 / Maria - Dec 16, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - From solar panels on the roof to hot water inside a house
2 - @M_amin_N Welcome to the forum! I hope that the feedback you receive here would help you in your writing...
Writing FeedbackM_amin_N - Dec 15, 2019 / Maria - Dec 16, 2019
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