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|Many developing countries place a lot of importance on tourism. Positive or negative development/
2 - The prompt paraphrase section is incomplete and problematic. You need to use at least 3 sentences in this presentation...
Writing FeedbackPhuongHue - Aug 31, 2020 / Holt - Aug 31, 2020
|Essay about my experience in countryside
2 - There is a difference between an essay and a statement. An essay has at least 250 words in it....
Writing Feedbacknguyenchi - Aug 31, 2020 / Holt - Aug 31, 2020
|IELTS - Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed
3 - Good analysis paragraphs. You presented a truly analytical presentation of the information from the pie chart. However, your summary...
Writing FeedbackYetta Lin - Aug 30, 2020 / Holt - Aug 31, 2020
|This essay will outline the justification of long hours work and why this is a negative trend
2 - In the rephrased presentation, you should try to avoid making claims that are not included in the original prompt....
Writing Feedbackanniehoanganh - Aug 30, 2020 / Holt - Aug 31, 2020
|SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT CULTURAL TRADITIONS MAY BE DESTROYED WHEN THEY ARE USED AS MONEY-MAKING
4 - you should develop " cultural traditions ared used as making - money" aspect. You are very well at using...
Writing FeedbackTri Nhan - Aug 28, 2020 / PhuongHue - Aug 31, 2020
|The three pie charts show information on how three countries deal with waste products
4 - Hi @TriNhan, here are some small mistakes i found in your essay, After reading it please come and check...
Writing FeedbackTri Nhan - Aug 29, 2020 / anniehoanganh - Aug 30, 2020
|Some people think that in the future lots of changes will occur that will improve our society
4 - Paragraph 2, line 2: human Paragraph 2, line 2: i think "due to" should be change to "thanks to"...
Writing Feedbackkieumanh007 - Aug 29, 2020 / anniehoanganh - Aug 30, 2020
|Ielts Task 2: studying in a new country brings people lots of benefits with various experiences
NEW - Discuss about advantages and disadvantages of study abroad Nowaday, more and more students have demand to go oversea...
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|The bar chart below shows numbers of Australia local, national, international and mobile calls
2 - Your presentation can be clearer. In the first paragraph, you should be listing the 3 categories from the image...
Writing Feedbackmythuong13498 - Aug 29, 2020 / Holt - Aug 29, 2020
|The advances in air travel are focused only for the upper class
2 - The opening paraphrase should, as much as possible never contain any keywords from the original prompt. That means there...
Writing FeedbackTri Nhan - Aug 29, 2020 / Holt - Aug 29, 2020
|ielt task 1: the chart compare changes in the birth rate of China and US between 1920 and 2000
Writing Feedbacklhtp - Aug 25, 2020 / HolanLovesMath - Aug 29, 2020
|Some people say the fashion industry has a bad effect on people's lives. Do you agree?
4 - you should condense "there are three main ..." to become "three main reasons cause", using gerund "including", the verb...
Writing Feedbacktanganthanh - Aug 26, 2020 / Tri Nhan - Aug 29, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: bar chart about top ten countries in electricity consumption
5 - I think. Firstly, you should more pay attention to spelling "kWh". Secondly, you are missing an article with "similar...
Writing FeedbackPerry_c - Aug 23, 2020 / Tri Nhan - Aug 29, 2020
|Writing task 1: The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea
2 - I think that you make some of usual mistakes, such as using 2 prepositions in one sentence "a coffee...
Writing FeedbackQuocHuu - Aug 28, 2020 / Tri Nhan - Aug 29, 2020
|IELTS1: American consumers' average yearly expenses on moblie phone and landline phone services
3 - @Holt Thanks from the bottom of my heart 💖 This is the first time I have practised writing task...
Writing Feedbackhiimming04 - Aug 28, 2020 / hiimming04 - Aug 29, 2020
|The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
3 - The summary overview is incomplete in presentation. Always provide a run-down of the easily seen information such as the...
Writing FeedbackHolanLovesMath - Aug 28, 2020 / Holt - Aug 28, 2020
|Ielts writing task 2 - Films making
3 - The first paragraph needs to be better presented. It lacks proper discussion development in relation to how a micro...
Writing Feedbacklennie2104 - Aug 28, 2020 / Holt - Aug 28, 2020
|Task 2: who are responsible for teaching children moral principles: parents or teachers ?
3 - There are actually several prompts that relate to your given topic. As such, I cannot be sure as to...
Writing Feedbackgin 279 - Aug 28, 2020 / Holt - Aug 28, 2020
|Data regarding population structure by age and gender riding bicycles in a particular town in 2011
3 - @KurekoHikari could you kindly give some comments about my grammar range? I think I'm quite bad at grammar....
Writing Feedbackstudyingabroad - Aug 28, 2020 / studyingabroad - Aug 28, 2020
|In some countries, people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen?
3 - @Holt Firstly, thank you so much for such a detailed reply! I am still completely new to the IELTS...
Writing Feedbacknguyen19151998 - Aug 26, 2020 / nguyen19151998 - Aug 28, 2020
|Task 2: International travel is becoming cheaper than before, so more and more countries open their
2 - In general: - the best structure of an essay includes 1 introduction paragraph, 2-3 bodies and 1 conclusion. In...
Writing Feedbacktanghuong - Aug 27, 2020 / studyingabroad - Aug 28, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Positive and Negative Impacts of Globalization on Economy.
4 - Dear Holt, Thank you for your review. I find many points I have to improve in my writing. However,...
Writing Feedbacknoilamsaohetday - Aug 27, 2020 / noilamsaohetday - Aug 27, 2020
|NEW TECHNOLOGY HAS CHANGED THE WAY PEOPLE SPEND THEIR FREE TIME. ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGHT DISADVANTAGES.
3 - There is a lack of clarity in the overall presentation. The prompt paraphrase isn't really reflective of the original...
Writing Feedbacktttnjudy - Aug 27, 2020 / Holt - Aug 27, 2020
|Some people claim that we can't always expect job satisfaction and a permanent job is more important
Writing Feedbackjacky99 - Aug 27, 2020 / tanghuong - Aug 27, 2020
|Task 2: Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as
Writing Feedbacktanghuong - Aug 24, 2020 / tanghuong - Aug 27, 2020
|Review a course you took in your first year at university
2 - The review of the course should include a reference to whether this was a pre-requisite, requisite, or minor course...
Writing FeedbackTran Sim - Aug 26, 2020 / Holt - Aug 27, 2020
|Government should invest to the elderly' livings or they should save money for their future
Writing FeedbackNgocnguyen777 - Aug 25, 2020 / Ngocnguyen777 - Aug 26, 2020
|Enterprises should conduct their business in a socially responsible manner
4 - 1. As you know, your presentation are based on one famous teacher in Vietnam. However, it would help if...
Writing FeedbackPhamthihaiha - Aug 25, 2020 / jacky99 - Aug 26, 2020
|Nowadays an increasing number of students prefer to extend their studies abroad.
3 - 349 words in 40 minutes? Not bad. However, are you sure that you kept within the prompt discussion parameters...
Writing FeedbackILIJA - Aug 25, 2020 / Holt - Aug 26, 2020
|Writing task 2: people nowadays often work too much - why is that?
2 - May be you should try other structures for this essay if i said this was too long; this essay...
Writing FeedbackDiepVu99 - Aug 26, 2020 / QuocHuu - Aug 26, 2020
|Ielts Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of economic development.
5 - Comments are based on my experience and they are as follows. - Instead of economies are developing it should...
Writing Feedbackltn1234 - Aug 7, 2020 / gayan1991 - Aug 25, 2020
|Task 2: Children being told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough
2 - Hi @hangnguyenn, For my level as a learner, I found your ideas easy to follow and well-developed. However, I...
Writing Feedbackhangnguyenn - Aug 25, 2020 / maihaan - Aug 25, 2020
|Writing task 2 - The role of sport in our societies
3 - You are over reaching in your reasoning paragraphs. You need to stay within current events and explanations. While your...
Writing Feedbackjacky99 - Aug 25, 2020 / Holt - Aug 25, 2020
|Task 2: Learning English and learning local languages
Writing Feedbackhangnguyenn - Aug 24, 2020 / hangnguyenn - Aug 25, 2020
|Ielts writing TASK 1 (Cambridge 4): daily demand and uses of electricity in England
Writing Feedbackamy322 - Aug 23, 2020 / hangnguyenn - Aug 25, 2020
|Ielts writing task 1: The line graph illustrates fluctuations in China's and the US birth rates
3 - 1. Not like @ Holt feedback, I suppose that you use the structure of 4 paragraphs because I have...
Writing FeedbackPhamthihaiha - Aug 24, 2020 / jacky99 - Aug 25, 2020
|Writing: Agree or not with banning smoking in certain areas
2 - @QuocHuu Hi Quoc Huu! This is my comment for your presentation. 1. Because the title maybe related to the...
Writing FeedbackQuocHuu - Aug 24, 2020 / jacky99 - Aug 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: percentage of domestic access in the UK
2 - The most comprehensive presentation in this format is the last paragraph because it has a complete paragraph presentation of...
Writing Feedbackcamnhuq - Aug 24, 2020 / Holt - Aug 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Taks 2: Having same opinion as friends
4 - The essay is missing your personal opinion of each public point of view. While you did present an argument...
Writing FeedbackXooMG - Aug 24, 2020 / Holt - Aug 25, 2020
|Writing task 2 - Music is able to connect people from distinctive cultures and ages
2 - There is no extent response in your essay as required by the original prompt. Therefore, your essay will not...
Writing Feedbackjacky99 - Aug 24, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Most people think that the truth should be objective rather that subjective
3 - The original prompt is: Most people think that truth should be objective rather than subjective when it comes to...
Writing Feedbackkrunalbhagat8866 - Aug 24, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Children should be required to help with household tasks.
3 - The TOEFL test does not require a prompt paraphrase so do not bother to paraphrase the original discussion. For...
Writing FeedbackLaura17 - Aug 24, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|It is necessary for children to learn both local and foreign literature
4 - You did not respond to the question being asked. You changed the discussion requirements, resulting in a prompt deviation....
Writing Feedbackmanhducnguyen - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Parents should take responsibility for educating their children how to be good citizens
3 - The instruction for this essay is to discuss both public points of view, based on commonly used reasons, and...
Writing Feedbacktojitorido - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Writing: Opinion about young people want to run their own business rather than be an employee
2 - Hi, I would like to fix some grammar mistakes: when they decide to be self-employed; knowledges; they may be...
Writing FeedbackQuocHuu - Aug 24, 2020 / Laura17 - Aug 24, 2020
|Life today is much more accessible and comfortable in comparison to the past
3 - This is a TOEFL essay. It is totally different from the IELTS essay. You need not take great pains...
Writing FeedbackLaura17 - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Some people believe that team sports are very important for children to succeed in their career
4 - The discussion instructions are to compare the 2 public points of view, explain it to the reader, then offer...
Writing Feedbackhilandmark - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 24, 2020
|Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals
4 - I have some suggestions: log in people's bank accounts and take their money; ... cyber spaces brings about ...;...
Writing Feedbackproudofpeanut - Aug 23, 2020 / Laura17 - Aug 23, 2020
|Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international
4 - @Holt I understand, I think the main issue that contributed to convey this impression is the thesis, right ??...
Writing Feedbackmagdihoms - Aug 22, 2020 / magdihoms - Aug 23, 2020
|Task 1: The table gives information about five types of vehicles registered in Australia in...
Writing Feedbackann_nguyen634 - Aug 22, 2020 / ann_nguyen634 - Aug 23, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: diagram describing procedure of electricity generation
Writing FeedbackPerry_c - Aug 22, 2020 / Perry_c - Aug 23, 2020
|Ielts writing TASK 2 (Cambridge 4): Happiness factors
3 - It would be better for your presentation in the paraphrase section if you do not include information that is...
Writing Feedbackamy322 - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 23, 2020
|Writing Task 2: Museums and art galleries should be free or not?
3 - Do not make it a habit to write your word count per paragraph during the practice essays. You may...
Writing Feedbackhoanghuyebktp - Aug 23, 2020 / Holt - Aug 23, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 topic: connection of news to people's life
3 - You seem to be addicted to using apostrophes in your presentation. You are using it at every turn, every...
Writing Feedbackcamnhuq - Aug 22, 2020 / Holt - Aug 23, 2020
|Equal funding for students' sports activities and libraries.
Writing FeedbackLaura17 - Aug 22, 2020 / Laura17 - Aug 23, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 1- Line gragh shows the percentage of women employed in four country
3 - There is no comparison statement in the presentation of your summary. That should be included in the presentation. An...
Writing Feedbackthaochloe - Aug 22, 2020 / Holt - Aug 23, 2020
|IELTS task 2: Boarding schools are excellent for children, according to some people's opinion
7 - Just some confusions and suggestions: Make sure it's "dependent" or "independent" that you want to use in the second...
Writing FeedbackNguyenPhuoc - Aug 21, 2020 / amy322 - Aug 23, 2020
|The competitive sports in the school curriculum - gives confidence with abilities to reach goals
3 - When you write an extent essay, you need to first think of whether you agree with the topic. Once...
Writing Feedbackanhquoc - Aug 22, 2020 / Holt - Aug 22, 2020
|Writing: Causes of water's shortage and how to fix it
3 - In the cause and solution essay, you have to remember 2 things: 1. Never include information not found in...
Writing FeedbackQuocHuu - Aug 21, 2020 / Holt - Aug 22, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Line chart comparing international conferences in 3 cities
5 - @Holt Can you kindly suggest an acceptable opening sentence for this topic please? Sure, if this thread is...
Writing Feedbackmaihaan - Aug 21, 2020 / manutd9111993 - Aug 21, 2020
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