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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - views on school and parents about teaching children to become a good citizen

2 - The introduction / prompt restatement is missing one sentence. While you accurately restated the topic, and you gave your...

Writing Feedbackdivine_9 - Aug 1, 2025 / Holt - Aug 1, 2025
Advantages versus disadvantages of choosing to build their own houses with their own styles.

2 - Your topic restatement is difficult to understand. You are trying to sound like a native English speaker, but, due...

Writing FeedbackZenith Peregrine - Aug 1, 2025 / Holt - Aug 1, 2025
Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences

2 - The paper is overwritten at 338 words. It will be impossible for you to write the same number of...

Writing Feedbackcuniuu - Jul 31, 2025 / Holt - Aug 1, 2025
Combating Human Trafficking - English Final Paper

2 - I can sense your familiarity with the topic. It is well researched and you portray an understanding of human...

Writing FeedbackBShaw99 - Jul 31, 2025 / Holt - Aug 1, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Effect of sleeping less

2 - You have not written enough words to aim for a band 8 score. You should write closer to 300...

Writing Feedbackdivine_9 - Jul 30, 2025 / Holt - Jul 31, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - MUSEUM AND ART

2 - It is nice to know that you side with them. However, you did not properly answer the question....

Writing Feedbackcamhoanieltswri - Jul 30, 2025 / Holt - Jul 31, 2025
Some people believe that if police force carries guns, this encourages higher level of violence

2 - Even though you wrote 283 words for this essay, it is not going to receive a passing score in...

Writing Feedbackannghin - Jul 27, 2025 / Holt - Jul 29, 2025
IELST writing task 2 - Essay about the importance of art classes

2 - While you write a clear compare and contrast essay for the given topic, there are problems with your presentation...

Writing Feedbackalazystudent - Jul 25, 2025 / Holt - Jul 26, 2025
The Impact of Technology on Characters on the Digital Era

2 - The backfire aspect of the discussion is not as well developed as the helpful aspect of the presentation. That...

Writing FeedbackYooStillLearning - Jul 19, 2025 / Holt - Jul 20, 2025
More young adults than older people — advantages or disadvantages?

2 - The format for the response to the prompt is acceptable, but not the type of explanation that would earn...

Writing Feedbackwiniari - Jul 14, 2025 / Holt - Jul 16, 2025
Children's, Family's Separation at the border

2 - I hope that this essay is only a draft and you have not submitted this to your teacher yet....

Writing FeedbackKchavez2 - Jul 12, 2025 / Holt - Jul 13, 2025
The maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development

2 - While the essay is well written and does provide the information necessary for the changes, the presentation is not...

Writing Feedbackwiniari - Jul 11, 2025 / Holt - Jul 13, 2025
Essay about Travelling alone

2 - When asked to write a compare and contrast essay, you need to provide your opinion within the discussion paragraphs....

Writing FeedbackHong2012 - Jul 8, 2025 / Holt - Jul 9, 2025
The Opioid Epidemic A National Crisis in Need of Reform

2 - While the research and opinion paper itself is well developed and presented, I feel that there is a lack...

Writing Feedbackjenniferdailyn - Jun 21, 2025 / Holt - Jun 22, 2025
The bar charts show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign languages

2 - How are the bar charts separated? Identify the bar charts per title for the clarification of the reader....

Writing FeedbackUyen Nhi - Jun 17, 2025 / Holt - Jun 18, 2025
The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different count

3 - @Holt Thank you for the valuable feedback....

Writing Feedbackkandetri - Jun 14, 2025 / kandetri - Jun 15, 2025
Learning the second language - IELTS Writing task 2: Discussion

2 - You did an almost fine job of paraphrasing the original prompt. The problem is that you retained the phrasea...

Writing FeedbackCarolinee - Jun 15, 2025 / Holt - Jun 15, 2025
Question: What are the environmental benefits of electric cars?

3 - I think it's a topic we should be aware of and clear about if we have to get to...

Writing FeedbackDuekhanh - Jun 13, 2025 / Valentina25 - Jun 14, 2025
Writing task 2: The environment.

3 - I really liked the topic. We need to be much more aware....

Writing FeedbackDuekhanh - Jun 14, 2025 / Valentina25 - Jun 14, 2025
The Benifits of Printing Press

2 - Your effort to write in English is noted. However, there are several problems that you need to address in...

Writing FeedbackDuekhanh - Jun 13, 2025 / Holt - Jun 14, 2025
Why is health detector a leading initiative to help the poor easily access healthcare?

2 - The statement lacks substance. What is the product about? What does it do? How does it do it? What...

Writing FeedbackDuekhanh - Jun 13, 2025 / Holt - Jun 14, 2025
What are the advantages of social media?

2 - Let us start with the basics of English sentence writing. The requirement for beginner English language learners is that...

Writing FeedbackDuekhanh - Jun 13, 2025 / Holt - Jun 14, 2025
Argumentative paper: The Price for Life: A Profit-Driven Healthcare

3 - @tfreeman This was a very detailed and informative script. You did well. Though you should work on the flow...

Writing Feedbacktfreeman - Jun 11, 2025 / Moon_Moon - Jun 12, 2025
Tiltle: What are the positive and negative efects of tourism on a place that you know well?

2 - Do not use an ellipses when writing an academic essay. That punctuation mark indicates that you are thinking...

Writing FeedbackKany2711 - Jun 12, 2025 / Holt - Jun 12, 2025
Adult education centre attendance - IELTS CHART

2 - Do not indicate the position of the image in the report. The reader is presumed to not have...

Writing Feedbackjulianaji - Jun 12, 2025 / Holt - Jun 12, 2025
My IELTS writing task 2 with topic about online studying and working

2 - Automatic failing score in the TA section. This is not a compare, contrast, then provide an opinion essay....

Writing FeedbackBrian Nguyen - Jun 12, 2025 / Holt - Jun 12, 2025
Students in Canada and the US by country of origin: Table graph

2 - The same error exists as in your previous essay. properly identify the image and mention the number of...

Writing FeedbackKany2711 - Jun 11, 2025 / Holt - Jun 12, 2025
Reasons for migration to and from the UK - Writing task 1: Pie chart

2 - There are 2 mistakes in this immediate presentation: 1. The proper image title was not cited (pie chart)...

Writing FeedbackKany2711 - Jun 11, 2025 / Holt - Jun 12, 2025
Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing.

2 - This is an example of an automatic failing final score essay. Once you write less than 250 words, the...

Writing Feedbacklannnnnn - Jun 10, 2025 / Holt - Jun 10, 2025
The graphs below show the different reasons of two group of students to choose Dorriford University

2 - Task 1 essays should not be more than 200 words in representation. That is because you are given 1...

Writing Feedbackhuyentran123456 - Jun 10, 2025 / Holt - Jun 10, 2025
The essay about the future diplomat! I've written many personal statement, this one calls out to me.

3 - @Holt Hi! Thank you very much for the clarification. But I had a question, should I change the whole...

Writing FeedbackAnvita1910 - Jun 10, 2025 / Anvita1910 - Jun 10, 2025
Some famous people are considered as role models, and they are having an increasing influence

2 - While you fulfilled the TA discussion requirements and properly provided a personal opinion based upon the writing instructions, I...

Writing Feedbacknailanaila - Jun 7, 2025 / Holt - Jun 7, 2025
Discuss both view on the matter of whether children should engaged in some kind of paid work.

2 - Points will be deducted from your TA score because you failed to provide a thesis statement that represents...

Writing Feedbackduydinh - Jun 7, 2025 / Holt - Jun 7, 2025
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal.

2 - You have changed the discussion prompt and therefore, failed the Tast Accuracy section of the scoring rubic. The...

Writing Feedbackwiniari - Jun 5, 2025 / Holt - Jun 5, 2025
Expenditures on food and clothes - IELTS- Writing task 1-Mixed charts

2 - The essay has too many words. You should be writing only 200 words maximum for this task since you...

Writing FeedbackSoradamouse - Jun 2, 2025 / Holt - Jun 2, 2025
IELTS Writing Task 1 (consumption of spreads)

2 - You should use an Oxford comma when enumerating related items. You partially did this in the summary overview. Points...

Writing FeedbackKellyingeneral - May 31, 2025 / Holt - May 31, 2025
The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

2 - Never use references that will require the reader to look at the image. The assumption in the task...

Writing FeedbackMinhhien - May 28, 2025 / Holt - May 29, 2025
Essay about the relationship of the technology to culture

2 - The prompt restatement has 2 problems that I immediately see. It is not correctly restating the prompt. What you...

Writing FeedbackRock Lee - May 13, 2025 / Holt - May 18, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: REDEVELOPMENT PLANS FOR A UNIVERSITY SPORTS CENTRE

2 - The report is over written. You should not write more than 200 words because this is only a 20...

Writing Feedbackalpaca - May 4, 2025 / Holt - May 11, 2025
Writing task 1 - tourists visiting four different attractions in Scotland

2 - Your report formatting needs work. You have to present your information within 3-4 paragraphs that are clearly separated by...

Writing FeedbackKany2711 - May 4, 2025 / Holt - May 11, 2025
(IELTS WRITING TASK 2) Many nations have recently decreased the retirement age

2 - Incorrect vocabulary. This should be "themselves", Them is the plural form of "himself" or "herself". Self in plural...

Writing FeedbackPPTran - May 2, 2025 / Holt - May 11, 2025
(IELTS WRITING TASK 1) ENERGY CONSUMPTION IN USA

3 - I would like you to play with the words, albeit sentences. Your writing would give you a solid 6.5....

Writing Feedbackksthuw - Apr 30, 2025 / zob00010 - May 9, 2025
Changes in the library's layout and design - ELTS - MAP

3 - @Holt Can you explain more clearly for me? What should I do to improve my score in this test?...

Writing Feedbackmai11qq - Apr 27, 2025 / mai11qq - May 4, 2025
IELTS 2: Financial and social status Vs Old-fashioned values

2 - The essay itself is too long. You only have 40 minutes to complete this writing task. You cannot write...

Writing FeedbackVinh309 - Apr 30, 2025 / Holt - Apr 30, 2025
Writing task 2: Extinct animals

2 - The essay is not long enough to receive maximum scoring consideration per rubic. if you want to achieve maximum...

Writing FeedbackKany2711 - Apr 29, 2025 / Holt - Apr 29, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: PEER PRESSURE

2 - This would be considered a failing essay because it altered the prompt discussion requirements. The paraphrasing is incorrect and...

Writing FeedbackDThanh - Apr 24, 2025 / Holt - Apr 27, 2025
Breaking Down the Divide: Understanding and Ending Gender Inequality

2 - The research is too over reaching. There are way too many topics being discussed, which has led to a...

Writing FeedbackMarvelQueen93 - Apr 21, 2025 / Holt - Apr 27, 2025
Excessive social media use causing anxiety and depression in teens

3 - Great post! Excessive social media use can indeed lead to anxiety and depression in teens, with constant comparison and...

Writing Feedbackjoie barrow - Apr 11, 2025 / emmarose55 - Apr 20, 2025
Export destinations of Vietnam's garment and textile industry

2 - The report is not maximizing the word count allowance to reach a more impressive final score. The simplicity of...

Writing FeedbackNTGB B2 - Apr 13, 2025 / Holt - Apr 14, 2025
Argumenative Essay Draft on Consumer Choice of Cultivated Meat, also known as "lab-grown" Meat

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback! That really helped me as I have been struggling with a solid thesis....

Writing Feedbackcourtneyconover - Mar 31, 2025 / courtneyconover - Apr 1, 2025
Essay about the rise in Cyberwarfare and ransomware and the solutions

2 - I believe that you could offer more of a background regarding the history and evolution of cyber attacks. What...

Writing FeedbackEHernandez97 - Mar 29, 2025 / Holt - Apr 1, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 02 - COUNTRYSIDE POPULATION

2 - You did a good job of restating the topic. The opinion you presented directly answers the question provided but,...

Writing FeedbackNguyendangquang - Mar 29, 2025 / Holt - Mar 31, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 02 - IT LESSONS AND THE USE OF COMPUTERS IN CLASSES

2 - Incorrect word usage. You are using a reference of ownership when you should be referencing the general term,...

Writing Feedbacknlbn2888 - Mar 25, 2025 / Holt - Mar 31, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 01 - MAPS - Central Library

3 - I set the alarm clock for my composition and I could complete it within about 22 minutes. I am...

Writing FeedbackNguyendangquang - Mar 19, 2025 / Nguyendangquang - Mar 29, 2025
ENG 102: Teen mental health after the pandemic

2 - You need to clarify these 2 sentences. I find these confusing and difficult to connect with the Covid...

Writing FeedbackAlejandra - Mar 23, 2025 / Holt - Mar 24, 2025
The number of old people is increasing. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

2 - The task 2 essay will never ask you to attest to the validity of a claim being made...

Writing Feedbacksweetper - Mar 17, 2025 / Holt - Mar 17, 2025
Writing task 1 (a report) The charts below show the average retirement age for men and women in 2004

2 - The report does not feel complete. Were there no age figures indicated in the bar graph? You speak of...

Writing Feedbacklenus - Mar 16, 2025 / Holt - Mar 17, 2025
Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments

2 - It is important that you use everyday English words to help increase your LR score. Other eis a misconception...

Writing Feedbacklgnueqg - Mar 10, 2025 / Holt - Mar 13, 2025
IELTS Writing Task 1: Agriculture land degradation

3 - Just some grammar checks here. I believe you meant "throughout" instead of "though out" in the first paragraph. And...

Writing Feedbackcattie_wuyn - Mar 5, 2025 / ssyynn - Mar 8, 2025
Ecotourism - TOEFL WRİTİNG TASK

2 - The word requirement for this type of TOEFL writing task is 250-300 words. You have written less than 200...

Writing Feedbackemir10 - Mar 6, 2025 / Holt - Mar 7, 2025

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