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|GRE-University should require all students to take classes outside of the students' field of study
5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your recommendation. I will do so. :-)...
Writing Feedbackxuesun - Dec 15, 2016 / xuesun - Dec 16, 2016
|Advertising directed only to a particular target audiences who can make decision for their selves
3 - @Holt Thank you for your valuable feedback Mary. I realize that my essay is too rigid. I will try...
Writing FeedbackStreetwalker - Dec 16, 2016 / Streetwalker - Dec 16, 2016
|The line graph provides the information about the number of people who visit Australia
2 - Combining the information from the graph and table into the overview sentence is quite simple. You don't need to...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 15, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 16, 2016
|Working as volunteers should be taken into consideration for children - WRITING TASK 2
4 - Obviously, this concern is proliferating and gaining fame ... ... is pivotal factor to burgeon their self-development. ... interact...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 16, 2016
|Technologies such as computer benefits society
6 - In your essay, you mostly focused on the usage of computers using "the Internet". But before the Internet was...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 7, 2016 / mualla - Dec 16, 2016
|Three exported products (graph) such as meat products, dairy products, and international tourism
2 - Hi let me give you some grammar corrections and my suggestions: The given bar chart informs the comparisons about...
Writing FeedbackFatirtalent - Sep 27, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|CANADIANS SCHOLARS from a third level of education in Canada - the rising trend
3 - Initially, the female proportion broke the record as the highest one -- Well, "broke the record" is definitely not...
Writing Feedbackeve01 - Nov 10, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 15, 2016
|People tend to enjoy interaction with their friends in social networking more than in the real life
5 - @yika In my view and agree are repetitive in the starting. Tend to agree --only agree can work....
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / abdon786 - Dec 15, 2016
|Wasting production in Six different countries in twenty years period presented in Table
4 - In contrast, the 1980's waste production of (write in instead) Japan was represented ......
Writing Feedbackanggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015 / Jeremy Newcastl - Dec 15, 2016
|Almost every country consider smoking in public areas as a detrimental issue.
2 - Nur, your task accuracy score is 3. Yes, it is a failing score. Why did you fail? Consider the...
Writing Feedbackawe_28 - Feb 21, 2016 / Holt - Dec 15, 2016
|Causes of stress in society nowadays - working environment, financial condition and family issue.
2 - Hi, Although I can see your main points about stress, I believe your writing would benefit if you...
Writing FeedbackHoaidepchi - Dec 14, 2016 / mualla - Dec 15, 2016
|The length of phone calls in the United Kingdom - WRITING TASK 1
2 - Be careful in providing false descriptions because it wasn't a line graph, yet it is a bar chart. Also,...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 14, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 1 -The graph reveals the information in regard to the ownership
3 - George, you are suggested to complete the description of information in the overview / introduction part in your essay....
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Nov 30, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Writing test exercise for ielts; the number of trips to and from UK increased every year 1979-1999
3 - Resa, writing an acceptable and recommended paragraphing structure for an IELTS task 1 is not that difficult. It is...
Writing Feedbackresair - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Ielts writing task 2 - Safety standards are important when building people's homes.
3 - The thing that makes your essay seems odd is because you did not answer the question properly. Reaching band...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The alteration of an island; new vehicle track and footpath to connect the western and eastern areas
6 - I can see some improvements and that's quite good. Yet, there are still some rooms to enhance the quality...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|Businesses and their profit - they should protect the environment instead and help others in need
2 - You need to remember that any types of argumentative writing, either TOEFL or IELTS needs an outline of the...
Writing Feedbacktheunnamedfeelin - Dec 13, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 14, 2016
|The increasing number of the elderly people and its influence on society
2 - Hello Zen, Your writing is well structured, I can tell that you've planned out how to deliver the...
Writing Feedbackzen111 - Jun 18, 2015 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|IS IT ACCEPTABLE FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL? WRITING TASK 2
2 - @NinaJoesuf25 NinaJoesuf25 Needless to say; ** could you replace this with a different phrase? What I interpret...
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 13, 2016 / CDuke93 - Dec 13, 2016
|The importance of communication skills in job relation
4 - Hello, 1. ... 60 percent which it is mean(two verbs)that .. 2. types tend to increase by 1...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 6, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|I disagree with the opinion that says always telling the truth in a relationship is important.
5 - first of all, I think your typesetting is quite odd. It will be better if you can do some...
Writing Feedbacksushantpaygude - Jun 16, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 13, 2016
|IELTS task 1: How heat is lost and energy wasted since the air circulation in a house
3 - Your paragraphs are too short to be considered an actual summary of the diagram that you were provided with....
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|The proportion of water in six gulf countries in 2000, based on three main objectives
2 - Azmi, here's my feedback towards your first and last paragraph. I hope you can follow through. 1st paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackazmi23 - Sep 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 13, 2016
|Various ways of communication summary - all contribute to conveying information equally
3 - Ignacy, you neglected to represent what I consider to be the key point of the essay prompt. You failed...
Writing Feedbackwladca - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 13, 2016
|English spoken throughout the world essay
2 - Ivan, your paraphrased prompt is incomplete. You were supposed to mention that there are languages that are slowly losing...
Writing Feedbackuzbeklord - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The information about the air diffusion in a house and how it reduces heat
3 - Dear Lincoln, There are 3 main part in this IELTS part 1: 1. Introduction --> Paraphrase the...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 7, 2016 / debby17 - Dec 12, 2016
|WRITING TASK 1 Process making of bricks for building industry
2 - Sari, where did the term loam, that you keep using throughout most of the essay come from? There is...
Writing Feedbackss158284 - Dec 12, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|The Spammy Pokemon Go Apps Being Pushed to Millions of iPhones
2 - Eka, there are a number of misinformation in your current summary article. Most of them are quite serious because...
Writing Feedbackekalamarsyari11 - Sep 13, 2016 / Holt - Dec 12, 2016
|Traveling is a good way of improving our knowledge
2 - Love the last paragraph that includes your opinion along with a quote. But have you thought of bringing that...
Writing Feedbackbongxugalaxie - Jan 8, 2013 / giuzu98 - Dec 12, 2016
|Corporations should focus on taking people who are innovative and able to work self-contained
3 - I really liked the fact that you first included a background on the popular belief and then talked about...
Writing FeedbackWilyaftika23 - Nov 30, 2016 / giuzu98 - Dec 11, 2016
|Thesis for essay on Japanese internment versus the Holocaust?
4 - Hi Lily, I think the problem is that there is not enough of a backstory when it comes to...
Writing Feedbackcocobean3 - Dec 11, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|In this modern society, the more languages you can speak, the more competitive you are
3 - Arlen, what made you think that the discussion being provided by the prompt asked you to consider the age...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Nov 30, 2016 / Holt - Dec 11, 2016
|Cause and problems: Stress in your country (length of essay over 100 words)
4 - @hanhchoick yes,i live in Hanoi.U too?...
Writing Feedbackvoivua1993 - Dec 10, 2016 / voivua1993 - Dec 10, 2016
|Opinion Essay (The Athletics Centre in Georgian College)
2 - Aha, your thesis statement needs work. I am not sure what it is you are trying to present in...
Writing FeedbackAhaSeki - Dec 10, 2016 / Holt - Dec 10, 2016
|DO YOU AGREE THAT THE STUDY OF MATHEMATICS IS ESSENTIAL TO THE PROGRESS OF HUMAN RACE?
4 - In my opinion, the study of Mathematics is essential to the progress of human race. - I like this...
Writing Feedbackphamlethutrang99 - Dec 3, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 9, 2016
|The various plus points of international tourism are definitely worth the exchange.
3 - Six, ownership of the information and opinion that is presented in an opinion essay is very important. It shows...
Writing Feedbackcoucou97 - Dec 9, 2016 / Holt - Dec 9, 2016
|TED Summary - The Internet Secret
4 - Try to rephrase confide citizens the concealed (...) privacy of internet users"?, try making it easier for readers to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / kervina - Dec 9, 2016
|New Zealand: the cricket as a sport which attracted the smallest number of girls to involve in
6 - I am also interested in ilets and following up so many sources "we" language is not preffered so much. ...
Writing Feedbackhanhchoick - Dec 6, 2016 / clementiness - Dec 9, 2016
|The controversy statement that American's airport left far away from other countries' airports
2 - Lincoln, I think that you need to learn more about collocation. Your sentence structure seems quite confusing due to...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 9, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 9, 2016
|Article Summary : Longer 'Penis' drives evolution of bigger brains in female fish
2 - Some suggestions for better clarity: "...bigger genitals means more mating success. Suprisingly..." "become larger and to escape from over...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Nile River Civilization influences on the Modern World
2 - Some suggestions to help clean it up and bring more clarity: "it is undoubted that all early civilizations"...
Writing Feedbackjamiewach - Dec 7, 2016 / rousua - Dec 9, 2016
|Listening Summary : Chaos Theory - the alteration of dynamic variables
2 - #... and mathematics that focuses on the alteration of dynamic variables. #changes in environment. However, this theory > changes...
Writing Feedbacknda18 - Dec 9, 2016 / sus_007 - Dec 9, 2016
|The world in 2076: Artificial starlight has made energy free
2 - ... which appropriate with for nuclear power. ... million kilometers away from people' site, so we cannot ... ...
Writing Feedbackmem77 - Dec 9, 2016 / NinaJoesuf25 - Dec 9, 2016
|People can freely choose clothes they like, while they cannot be assessed from their appearance
3 - Aloha Kurnia, here are my thoughts for you; (1) word choices basically, it is absolutely crucial that you...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 9, 2016
|The appearance of people as one of the essential indications of what characteristics they possess
3 - hi dioba, > i found that your essay is not answer the task, because i think your idea...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / nda18 - Dec 9, 2016
|Writing Task I about the relationship between worker with their supervisor and partners.
4 - Aloha Dioba, here are my thoughts for your essay; A breakdown of the information about examination outcome of...
Writing FeedbackDioba - Dec 8, 2016 / ibe13 - Dec 8, 2016
|Where is the best place for children to learn how to be a good member of society?
2 - First of all, I do not think your introduction is appropriate for the exam. I will suggest to use...
Writing Feedbackimagenius - Dec 8, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 8, 2016
|Article Summary - New Investigation from Malaysia Airlines
2 - Lincoln, I am sure that this is too short for an article summary. You are suggested to write more...
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The average distance in miles which people drove to somewhere else in England from 1985 to 2000
3 - Mardian, apart from the above-mentioned feedback from one of EF contributors, I would like to focus on your content....
Writing Feedbackmardian24 - Dec 2, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Some people argue that judging from the clothes that they wear is not appropriate. Others disagree.
3 - Do not create a 'hung' introduction paragraph if you want to reach band 6 or above. It should be...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|The education fee should not be charged for every student with different household budget
3 - There are many IELTS candidates that have the same mistake in deciding their position towards the essay. I believe...
Writing Feedbackleeminhee - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|"The Aesthetics of Silence" My personal essay on remaining silent
4 - Is Aaron still your best friend at this point? After this falling out, did the two of you become...
Writing FeedbackRahulkb - Dec 8, 2016 / Holt - Dec 8, 2016
|The pie charts reveal about the outcome of study which was conducted in 2005 and 2009
3 - Apart from grammatical errors in the first paragraph, I can see you misinterpreted the word "pattern" and "trend". These...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / ichanpants89 - Dec 8, 2016
|Supervisor vs co-employees - the graph show about result of survey to employee
6 - There are several mistakes in your summary. 1.The graph( it only singular, but i get the picture from other...
Writing Feedbackkurnia - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|The relationship between supervisors and co-employs in the working life
4 - Hi Yuri,there are several mistakes in your summary. 1.The relationship (...) is illustrated in two (the fact, more...
Writing Feedbackyika - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|An appearance of Internet has made significant changes in the way people live
3 - @ichanpants89 Thank you for the ideas for me...
Writing FeedbackPhuong_Loan - Dec 7, 2016 / Phuong_Loan - Dec 8, 2016
|According to a study, 72 percent of old people in Glasgow (aged 75 years and more), were illiterate
5 - Hi,there are several mistakes in your summary. 1.In my point of view, better if you make 3 paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackabdik - Dec 7, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
|Learning foreign languages at childhood will maximize language skills in the future
5 - Hello, this is my suggestion and correction for you 1. you must recheck your sentence formation. you able...
Writing Feedbackabdik - Nov 26, 2016 / yika - Dec 8, 2016
|Jamie Oliver has started a social project, called food revolution.
2 - Hello faiz, Here my advice for you, hope it can help you and feel free to correction me too....
Writing FeedbackAbrahamlincoln - Dec 8, 2016 / kurnia - Dec 8, 2016
|Fashion is one of essential aspects on people characteristic.
2 - Hi,there are several mistakes in your summary. 1.It indicates that fashion is one of essential aspects on people...
Writing FeedbackUQ17 - Dec 8, 2016 / Dioba - Dec 8, 2016
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