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|Obesity and fitness: cause and solution - Ielts task 2
4 - Hello susan, In my opinion, i think you should change the para below: ...so computer life and...
Writing Feedbacksmvicp - Aug 29, 2017 / minhphuc - Aug 31, 2017
|[TOEFL Writing] Which action is better for the government to take to protect the environment?
Writing Feedbacklupinwang - Aug 30, 2017 / Holt - Aug 30, 2017
|[IELTS task 1] Three bar graphs - British album buyers
2 - Giang, there is no right or wrong way of splitting the data. You are not being judged on presentation...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 29, 2017 / Holt - Aug 30, 2017
|IELTS - Business obligations that companies have toward community
3 - @chuhaiyen I believe that you did not upload the complete and proper prompt instructions for this essay. It is...
Writing Feedbackchuhaiyen - Aug 29, 2017 / Holt - Aug 30, 2017
|Writing Task 1- the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity
4 - If this a work for publication I think you can't use phrase like "Looking in to details", YOU CAN...
Writing Feedbackkevin3132 - Aug 29, 2017 / Prince Ifeji - Aug 29, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: Many workers change jobs frequently these days because of different expectations
5 - Thanks everyone, I will take the test soon. All of your suggestion is so valued for me....hope you guys...
Writing FeedbackEve0309 - Aug 29, 2017 / Eve0309 - Aug 29, 2017
|EastSouth Area Condition - TOEFL; cloud seeding can reduce the hail from forming
2 - Liu, when you post an article discussion essay, you need to give us a copy of the article either...
Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 29, 2017 / Holt - Aug 29, 2017
|Writing Task 2: Using Credit Cards or Loans to run up huge personal debts
3 - Yulia, this is one of the worst essays that you have written so far. The incoherence of your paragraphs...
Writing FeedbackYulia Indah - Aug 29, 2017 / Holt - Aug 29, 2017
|Writing task 1: the percentage of female members of parliament of euroupean countries
Writing Feedbacknhantran - Aug 28, 2017 / nhantran - Aug 29, 2017
|Should we solve problems by ourselves?
1 - PROMPT: It's more important to use your own knowledge and experience than ask others' knowledge and experience to solve...
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|Internet made a lot of changes in how we search for and spread information
4 - @ruanriying I think you offered very strong arguments in the essay, but you should try to illustrate them more...
Writing Feedbackruanriying - Aug 25, 2017 / toetoefldog - Aug 29, 2017
|I don't care how poor a person is; if he has family, he's rich - CLEP testing
4 - The love, support,and companionship of ... Since the beginning of time,manmankind or human beingshas(have) existed in a family or...
Writing Feedbackcastillope - Aug 28, 2017 / toseanliu - Aug 29, 2017
|[IELTS task 1]The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England
Writing FeedbackJohn050645 - Aug 16, 2017 / nhantran - Aug 28, 2017
|Three Yearbook Write-ups (Description of a Person)
4 - @afriawan33 Thank you, but that's not exactly what I'm looking for... :P @Holt Ah, okay. I'll try to...
Writing FeedbackArowanaPrincess - Aug 28, 2017 / ArowanaPrincess - Aug 28, 2017
|GRE Essay about what makes a nation truly great
Writing Feedbackdaniellee - Aug 27, 2017 / Holt - Aug 28, 2017
|Ietls writing task 2 - opinion eassy questions - energy and resources
3 - i think the task respond criteria isn't complete, the question is agree or disagree with find out new areas...
Writing Feedbackiammandywong - Aug 27, 2017 / vovancuong - Aug 27, 2017
|[TOEFL] A well-rounded student is more likely to obtain success in the future
6 - @toetoefldog, I do not know how people organise paragraphs in a toefl test, so I just give you advice...
Writing Feedbacktoetoefldog - Aug 25, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 27, 2017
|The funds are being exhausted un-necessarily, by the government - on the arts. IELTS Writing Task 2
2 - Mayank, while this is an opinion paper essay, the type of opinion you must discuss is clearly indicated in...
Writing Feedbackmayanknitc - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 27, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task2 - Why ppl try to find out the history of their family? Positive trend?
Writing Feedbackviolavu - Aug 20, 2017 / violavu - Aug 27, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Environment and Economy in the success
5 - Thank you all for having taken your time to provide me with your helpful corrections. Your comments are much...
Writing FeedbackDuc Dao - Aug 23, 2017 / Duc Dao - Aug 27, 2017
|Arrangement in Working Hours
3 - @Holt Dear Holt, firstly thanks for your great ideas. I am going to interest the issues that you explain....
Writing FeedbackFahri - Aug 26, 2017 / Fahri - Aug 26, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: THE ORIGIN OF SUCCESS
4 - Nemo, please disregard the example opening statement that Phuc gave you as an example. While he meant well and...
Writing Feedbackhungnemo - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|IELTS 2: Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Is it right?
2 - @Fiar the essay has a specific discussion instruction. You are to simply agree or disagree with the statement provided....
Writing FeedbackFiar - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|Writing Task 2 : The air traffic is bigger nowadays, which causes many problems
5 - @Holt thank you for your feedback. I would practice more. That advice is really essential to my next writing....
Writing FeedbackYulia Indah - Aug 26, 2017 / Yulia Indah - Aug 26, 2017
|GRE Argument Essay: Inacurate Scientific Theories?
Writing Feedbackilovechemistryha - Aug 26, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|Government role in reducing health concerns
Writing Feedbackdaikii123 - Aug 25, 2017 / daikii123 - Aug 26, 2017
|[TOEFL] CLASSMATES WIN HANDS DOWN ON THEIR INFLUENCE ON CHILDREN'S SCHOOL SUCCESS!
3 - Whoah Johnny! The essay that you wrote is not one that is easy to keep track of discussion wise...
Writing FeedbackJohnny Nguyen - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|The illustration describes the process in which bricks are made for constructing purposes
3 - Tran, your paragraphs are too short to be fully analytical of the procedure illustrated. You must use fully developed...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 26, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Opinion over providing a wide range of young people with higher education
4 - @Holt Thank you, your comment helped me a lot to better my essay particularly and my way of thinking...
Writing FeedbackFiar - Aug 20, 2017 / Fiar - Aug 26, 2017
|[writing task 2]The best way for children to read books.
5 - @minhphuccttv I can see some wrong use of tenses, phrases and prepositions here. To exemplify: - whatsoever their parents...
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017 / Fiar - Aug 26, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: Liability to support state education system
5 - Hi all, Assuming that simple sentences are the key to improve my essay, here is my edited one...
Writing Feedbacksarahna - Aug 20, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 26, 2017
|The best method to decrease the number of traffic jams.
5 - 1) communal vehicles, not communally. If you use the latter, it means that the public, as a whole, need...
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 22, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 25, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2: Discussive passage (money on road systems?)
3 - 1) Both 'incremental' and 'increase' mean rising, it is unnatural to use these next to each other. 2) Because...
Writing Feedbackcamtuvu - Aug 20, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 25, 2017
|IELTS Task2: How do you judge the higher proportion of elder people in many countries?
Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - Aug 25, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 25, 2017
|I am applying as a transfer student to A&M. SOP essay
Writing Feedbackrex123 - Aug 25, 2017 / rex123 - Aug 25, 2017
|A large proportion of budget should be diverted from treatment to spending on health and education
2 - John, this essay does not follow the required parameters of an IELTS Task 2 essay. All of your paragraphs...
Writing FeedbackIELTS JOHN - Aug 25, 2017 / Holt - Aug 25, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2: Many countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects
Writing Feedbacknldqui - Aug 25, 2017 / nldqui - Aug 25, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Internet usage across three countries
3 - Long, I have other comments: I think that your opening statement is a bit general. You should include...
Writing Feedbackhaugiangguny - Aug 24, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 25, 2017
|Don't may a mistake - stick to the one, proper job only. [IELTS Writing task 2]
4 - Hello Quyen, Your essay is 236 words so you can add one para for your opinion. The conclusion...
Writing Feedbacktuquyen11010 - Aug 24, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] The best solution for traffic jam is providing free public transport?
Writing FeedbackElizabeth0606 - Aug 24, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 24, 2017
|[TOEFL] Young People's Dependency on Changing World
3 - Alta, you failed to respond to the prompt statement at the end of your opening paraphrase. This being a...
Writing Feedbackaltaer - Aug 24, 2017 / Holt - Aug 24, 2017
|Essay about Travel to foreign countries when you are young or when you are older
3 - @Holt Thanks for taking time to give me so much insightful suggestions. I do agree with you that I...
Writing FeedbackFloraNougat - Aug 23, 2017 / FloraNougat - Aug 24, 2017
|Computer skills should also be the fourth largest branch. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Quyet, your opening statement falls short of a proper paraphrasing and opening statement. You neglected to inform the reader...
Writing Feedbackvodang - Aug 24, 2017 / Holt - Aug 24, 2017
|The Ashdown Museum After and Before
5 - @eddies Hi Eddies, I really appreciate your advice and correction, thank you for the enlightenment. It will be helpful...
Writing Feedbackmiss19 - Aug 23, 2017 / miss19 - Aug 24, 2017
|Many wildlife species worldwide are in danger of extinction. How can we protect endangered animals?
Writing Feedbackgongyoooppa - Aug 23, 2017 / gongyoooppa - Aug 24, 2017
|[TOEFL] Globalisation worldwide effect - similarities in different countries
2 - Perita, when you discuss your opening statement, after you present your opinion, do not add information to it that...
Writing Feedbackperita - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
|Travel with a Companion or Travel Alone?
2 - Amra, I would say that this is a high school level English writing. There are still a number of...
Writing Feedbackamra125 - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
|Ielts Task 2 Topic: computer skills after writing, reading and maths
2 - @Nhu Tran When you write your paraphrased statement, it would be best if you do so with a clear...
Writing FeedbackNhu Tran - Aug 23, 2017 / Holt - Aug 23, 2017
|Writing task 1 (IELTS). Process of coffee manufacturing
Writing Feedbackngangiang - Aug 21, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 23, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 2] Online shopping: discuss both sides and give your opinion.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. Your advice is really helpful and important to me. I'm desperately trying to understand...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 23, 2017
|[Toefl] Buying a new technological device right away is better than waiting until many people...
4 - Matthew, I enjoyed reading your essay, and you have a clear view of what you are stating. You do...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 17, 2017 / sumthegoat - Aug 22, 2017
|Chevening Scholarship essays on Leadership and influence; early experiences
6 - @Danstand I think, that it is better if you emphasize on your leadership experiences during high school, and how...
Writing FeedbackDanstand - Aug 16, 2017 / sumthegoat - Aug 22, 2017
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : Studying History - what's the aim of it?
2 - Valery, your essay became a personal opinion paper because you did not accurately represent the paraphrased statement as requiring...
Writing Feedbackvalerydang - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
|GRE argument essay. Prunty County and highway safety.
Writing Feedbackiaryansingh - Aug 19, 2017 / iaryansingh - Aug 22, 2017
|TOPIC - CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS OF THE RISING UNEMPLOYMENT RATE
3 - @MandyTran Hi Tran, your essay impressed me with decent vocabulary in the introduction, but as I processed through the...
Writing FeedbackMandyTran - Aug 22, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017
|(IELTS TASK 2) The public should be encouraged to use public transportation more. Give your opinio
7 - Hi Emin, your essay appears to be of low level, thus low band score for the following reasons: -...
Writing Feedbackeminhaqi - Aug 21, 2017 / hgianghgiang - Aug 22, 2017
|The share of Oscar winners by genre film for 2003 and 2008
2 - Kien, your essay is missing the most important part, the summary overview. While there is no specific spot for...
Writing Feedbacktrungkienpeter - Aug 22, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
|CAE Essay Part 1: Methods schools and universities use to help students find suitable jobs
Writing FeedbackHanh Ngoc - Aug 21, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 22, 2017
|A comparison and projection of five-decade populations between Yemen and Italy
3 - Philo, it is difficult for me to review the work that you did in this essay because you forgot...
Writing Feedbackalfabio - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
|[TOEFL] Which do you prefer, traveling with a companion or alone?
2 - Liu, when you write your essays, make sure that you always speak in completed paragraphs. That means, each thought...
Writing FeedbackJayde - Aug 21, 2017 / Holt - Aug 22, 2017
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