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Pie Chart: Comparison of Household in Japan and Malaysia in 2010

6 - @septaafrian0554 Well, thank you for your advice septa :)...

Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
The pie charts presents the overall family spending in Japan and Malaysia

3 - @gribigribi First and foremost, it was such a good essay for writing task 1 IELTS, all the components have...

Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
Ielts task 1 - Information about the sales during an ordinary October week at a small restaurant

2 - Hi @krempetkov , Based on what I know, had experienced, and what has been told many times to...

Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 3, 2017 / blueknightiris - Jan 3, 2017
The data on how fast world wide population growth in numbers and statistics of urban population

3 - In your introduction, you should explain what information both graphs are presenting. The bar graph provides information about...

Writing FeedbackMuhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
"When in Rome, do as Romans do" Travelling and promotion of globalisation

2 - Well, there are a few problems with your Introduction paragraph. Your first sentence should paraphrase the question, while...

Writing Feedbackdang200993 - Jan 2, 2017 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
Ielts2 - In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment

3 - Can you jsut point out where exactly are my grammar mistakes, you will help me a lot...

Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 28, 2016 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
Zoos are capable of preserving species that are facing extinction.

2 - Hi, your grammar is very good. In your intro, I would not write "This essay will do this, this...

Writing Feedbackquora123 - Jan 1, 2017 / TJLuschen - Jan 1, 2017
Essay; Relationship between old and young people in the modern world

3 - Thank you so much for the feedback, I will try to improve my essay and present my ideas more...

Writing FeedbackAnna M - Dec 31, 2016 / Anna M - Jan 1, 2017
Bill Gates finding about effective method of teaching

3 - Mohammad, I am not sure about how to review your essay. That is because you failed to provide the...

Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 27, 2016 / Holt - Jan 1, 2017
People who live in the world and the areas

3 - Hello ayra cantik It would be better to mention the population and the year before the number among them...

Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 30, 2016 / Muhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016
The graphs exhibit the information on world population growth from 1800 to 2100 / Urban Populations

4 - hello lovely, I copied than paste your writing just in case to be you comparasion. The senstences in "()"...

Writing Feedbackl1h4h - Dec 30, 2016 / Muhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016
Comparison of the society growth and urban areas

2 - Hello, Overall, the content of this essay is good and understandable. You draw information from the graphs well...

Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 30, 2016 / lynzee22 - Dec 30, 2016
World population growth from 1800 to 2100 in developed and developing countries

2 - Since there are the graphs of developed and developing nations, it may add more to your essay by comparing...

Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 30, 2016 / jcgdbb - Dec 30, 2016
The proportion of proficient persons in a foreign language among male and female students

2 - Hi, I will try to give you a little comment. I hope it can help you. In the...

Writing Feedbackhavi105 - Dec 30, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 30, 2016
Commitment and responsibility. Leadership Essay - Leadership skill I posses

4 - Dina, the best way to start off your essay discussion is by revealing to the reviewer what your idea,...

Writing Feedbackhacchani - Dec 30, 2016 / Holt - Dec 30, 2016
IELTS Task 1 World Population and Comparison of Developed and Developing Countries

2 - Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear, but I would make the following suggestions: The line graph...

Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 30, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 30, 2016
IELTS WRITING TASK 1, Table of Proportion of children in Australia

4 - I hope I can add some correction for your writing, First I will correction your spelling. 1. "chategories"...

Writing FeedbackMuhayyun Mappare - Dec 29, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 30, 2016
The prolificity of women in their forties at the antipodes

4 - @Citra07 Hy Citra, good night, i have some corrections from grammatical error of your writing The first ...

Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 29, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 30, 2016
Mothers in Australia over forty years old. Essay Writing task 1

5 - Hallo, good night hanna, i have some corrections to you about grammatical error For the first The...

Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 29, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 30, 2016
The figure of children born to 40-44 years old women in Australia for four different years

3 - Hello Mister Dedy.. I have read your writing. In this moment, I will get an attempt to review...

Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 29, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Dec 30, 2016
[IELST Task 1] Annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

3 - @PJmustbebetter To conclude, two out of three Bakeries rose ... To conclude, profits for two out of three Bakeries...

Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 29, 2016 / serikbar - Dec 29, 2016
writing IELTS TASK 1 AUSTRALIAN WOMEN BIRTHRATE

2 - I am not sure with my comment to correct your writing, you very often repeating "same age group". If...

Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 29, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 29, 2016
Regulating killing crimes law has to be the top priority taken by officials and authorities.

10 - @ngokhoa99 thanks a lot@mualla You got a point I think I could add a third paragraph stating "why society...

Writing Feedbackahmed2016 - Dec 21, 2016 / ahmed2016 - Dec 29, 2016
Ielts writing task 1 about fish and four types of meat consumption

2 - This is pretty solid writing. There's just one thing I'd like to point out. while the consumption of beef,...

Writing Feedbackbellebelle73 - Dec 29, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 29, 2016
IELTS writing task 1 - The spending by local authorities in some land in three different years

2 - ...cost of local authorities, while transport. Transport and environmental service experienced increasing spending and, while there were gradual reducing...

Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 28, 2016 / thugzook - Dec 29, 2016
WRITING TASK 1 THE PROPORTION OF LEISURE ACTIVITIES PREFERENCE IN BOTH GENDER

2 - "A breakdown of the proportion of several ..." A breakdown of several leisure activities taken by both male and...

Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Dec 28, 2016 / thugzook - Dec 29, 2016
IELTS Task 1 The Pie Charts represent the precentages of changes in the annual dependents

3 - Hello Hana I have some advice for you : - The Pie charts represents the precentages (...) such...

Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 28, 2016 / ded15 - Dec 28, 2016
The spending for education, health and human resources, environmental services and transportation.

4 - I am afraid that in my opinion your report was not very strong. You kept repeating the phrases "increasingly...

Writing FeedbackDayat - Dec 28, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 28, 2016
LOCAL AUTHORITIES BUDGET in different lands in 1980, 1990 and 2000.

2 - Good evening Ms. Aira, I will try to correct your writing. because the pie charts is plural...

Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 28, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 28, 2016
IELTS Task 1 Annual Expenses by Local Bureaucracy in Several Lands

2 - Hallo Mr.Citra, Good night, i have some corrections for you. The correction is (Expenses of environmental services...

Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 28, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 28, 2016
IELTS TASK 2 - MEDIA CONTROL - an important privilege and tool to manipulate the public

3 - Thank you for your advice!...

Writing Feedbacklinhledieue - Dec 27, 2016 / linhledieue - Dec 27, 2016
If I would obtain a chance to go abroad then I would go to China

2 - Hey! A couple of things. First, you ought to capitalize every instance of China in the essay. It'll go...

Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 26, 2016 / YomanAwe - Dec 26, 2016
Some researchers analyse and say that, you are not too old to learn new skills

5 - you go little bit off the topic . please be stick topic ....

Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
Art can soar economy of the country - spending money for it

5 - @nandasharma thanks...

Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 25, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
Travel in a group can save money and time, it's pity though that people can't do then what they wish

4 - Especially for those are busy and are going with large number of people. -- Well, first of all I...

Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 13, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
Any new technological development in the recent years is a boon or curse for the society in general.

2 - hi @lalodhi, you have a good stand point. I'd like to give you some suggestion as follows : 1....

Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / masktaz - Dec 26, 2016
Overpopulation of urban areas - problems and solutions

3 - @nandasharma Please check my other threads. Thanks alot....

Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / lalodhi - Dec 26, 2016
The total download (in 1000s) from three computer packages in five weeks period

4 - I think you need to work on you summary sentence. ..."and Net less popular among internet users." - that...

Writing Feedbackkiemwanz - Dec 24, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
The Profit from Losing Money

39 - @Holt I am so happy, Holt! Thanks for guiding me through the essay. Without you the essay would not...

Writing Feedbackmualla - Nov 11, 2016 / mualla - Dec 25, 2016
The Personality of Candidate Requirement in Recruitment of the Company

3 - @SarlindaDS_27 Sarlinda, there are plenty of grammatical errors and subject-verb disgreements in your article which...

Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Nov 30, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 25, 2016
The information about factors influencing the work performance of the people aged 18-30 and 45-60

3 - "It is clear to see that" --> "It is clear that" "40% of people from the older group...

Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 24, 2016 / angeli6778 - Dec 24, 2016
IELTS task1: spending on different items in the UK (Table)

2 - Ali, when you write the summary overview of the chart, make sure to represent all of the sectors indicated...

Writing Feedbackali98 - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Dec 24, 2016
Writing 2: people think that men and women have different qualities to certain jobs

3 - What I didn't like about your second paragraph is that, you have mixed complex and very simple sentences. I...

Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 22, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
The electricity generation was dominated by coal in New Zealand while Germany prefered other sources

2 - while nuclear, natural gas, and coal also was popular sources in Germany. - First, the word "also" doesn't sound...

Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
Food revolution - and how the change impact on people's lives - IELTS essay

5 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. I agree partially with this statement, prepared preparing ... 2. The main...

Writing Feedbackthanhscorpia - Dec 18, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
More and more young people hold the important positions in the government.

4 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. In some countries, the youth is becoming become more and more to...

Writing Feedbacktruonglanngoc - Dec 21, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads

3 - I think your essay is really good overall- very clear points. However, if I could change something maybe I'd...

Writing Feedbackardiankrist - Dec 21, 2016 / Punn1238 - Dec 21, 2016
Urbanization is a modern disease.

4 - Vittal, I would gladly show you how to reach a band score of 7 using this essay. However, I...

Writing FeedbackVittal - Dec 19, 2016 / Holt - Dec 21, 2016
Worldwide market of hybrid vehicles in three different areas - WRITING TASK 1

3 - Hi NinaJoesuf25, As my opinion, your first sentence in the first paragraph is complex, just keep it simple....

Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / phongnam - Dec 21, 2016
"Why Mow?" What lawn means in suburban America -> Was I logical enough in criticizing Pollan's work?

3 - @Holt Holt I really appreciate your concern and advice. I will make sure that I don't repeat the same...

Writing Feedbackrealtalk - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 21, 2016
Higher fuel price to solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world

2 - @krempetkov George, No offense but hiking up the price of the fuel sounds ridiculous/childish and also not quite practical....

Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 20, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 21, 2016
IELTS -writing 2 - The most appropriate time for learning a foreign language

2 - @dianakelin The first paragraph needs a lot of work. You need to reorganize the whole passage and make it...

Writing Feedbackdianakelin - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 20, 2016
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, th

3 - Sorry me! The task: Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however,...

Writing Feedbackxenuseeng - Dec 19, 2016 / xenuseeng - Dec 20, 2016
Property ownership - justification essay

6 - @Holt I really appreciate your help Holt I was so lost preparing for this test, and your responses gave...

Writing Feedbackredjohn - Dec 18, 2016 / redjohn - Dec 19, 2016
IELTS Task 2 : Is Advertisement informative or deceptive

3 - I agree with Holt that you are well prepared to take the IELTS, but I would also like to...

Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer1 - Dec 19, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 19, 2016
Essay about the advantages of co-operation in your learning English

5 - can you help me correct the fault...

Writing Feedbacklahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016 / lahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016
We have to depend on technology which makes our life easier, but we need to use it in a proper way.

5 - Jone, your overall score for this essay could be a 5 in terms of task accuracy. That is because...

Writing Feedbackjone75 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 18, 2016
Factories not stadiums, is what we need. Do you agree? Argumentative essay

2 - Azeddine, Somehow I don't feel like you posted the complete prompt along with the essay. The reason that i...

Writing FeedbackAdam10 - Dec 17, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
TOPIC OF AN ORIGINAL ARTICLE I AM WRITING ON: THE CAREER WOMAN

5 - Go ahead and use my suggested title and topic if you wish to Chizaram. I am glad that I...

Writing Feedbackchizy7 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
GRE-University should require all students to take classes outside of the students' field of study

5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your recommendation. I will do so. :-)...

Writing Feedbackxuesun - Dec 15, 2016 / xuesun - Dec 16, 2016

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