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|The bar charts compares the percentage of Australian men and women who do regular exercise
4 - hi Chi Han. glad to read your writing, you wrote more than 150 and you sometime using well grammar...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|IELTS Task 2: Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug
6 - you're writing is not full chaotic, such as you used several correct grammar and you wrote more than 250...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 16, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 18, 2017
|The unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school
3 - Hello hiimsandra, Here are some small possible corrections: free labor replaces get a lower wage more opportunities...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 17, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS] We lived in a world of technology these days. Opinion essay.
4 - Few corrections:- information is more significant (information is singular) it raised concerns over the way of military having...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017 / itsme2216 - Oct 17, 2017
|Nowadays, a lot of new, big supermarkets are appearing every day - what about local business?
4 - Hi just_writer. You have a lot of comma splices and run-on sentences in your essay. A comma splice is...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 17, 2017 / TJLuschen - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS Task2] learning a different language benefits our lives apart from working and traveling
7 - Hi Katty, from what I can see from your essay is that shorten the paraphrasing. State your opinion in...
Writing Feedbackkatty1234600 - Oct 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 17, 2017
|Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
3 - Bezhab, you can very well use the word "However" in your paragraph presentation because it is meant to break...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|The developments of West Park Secondary School, from 1950 when it was erected, to 2010.
2 - Na, your summary overview doesn't really appear to be complete. It only has a basic description of the image...
Writing FeedbackNanadinh - Oct 17, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK II - TRADITIONAL AND MODERN MUSIC; each type has different purposes and style
2 - Lubis, what you wrote is not an IELTS task 2 essay. You wrote a research paper complete with references...
Writing FeedbackLUBR2310 - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|[Task 1] The two maps show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
9 - @Holt Thank you for your advice. I'll improve my English proficiency accordingly. I'm glad to take you up on...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Jul 25, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 17, 2017
|I disagree that university should accept same number of men and women in each subjects.
3 - Lu, since this is an "extent" essay, you cannot simply say that you disagree. There has a to be...
Writing FeedbackChi Han - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 17, 2017
|[IELTS] The percentage of female employees in major tech companies in the US
7 - Hello namibdesert, Like many people have said, you need to add the word to the minimum requirement of 150,...
Writing Feedbacknamibdesert - Oct 12, 2017 / Chi Han - Oct 16, 2017
|Writing Task 1: incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transport
2 - FBG, I cannot continue assessing your essay at this point because your text did not meet the minimum 150...
Writing FeedbackFlashBanG - Oct 16, 2017 / Holt - Oct 16, 2017
|ielts task 2 : - People should work a fixed number of hours per week
5 - Hi vipy, seeing it from your essay, in the second paragraph, avoid using the personal pronoun to convey your...
Writing Feedbackvipy411 - Oct 2, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 16, 2017
|writing task 2 : some people think universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree
6 - Hi Alimin, I can see that from your essay, the third paragraph was a supporting point to the second...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 16, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 16, 2017
|[IELTS] Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem.
4 - hi Jimmy, glad to read you're writing because you discuss nice topic actually. it good you wrote more than...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 12, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 16, 2017
|The essay about nature and nurture kind of talent
4 - @Holt Thank you for your comments. I'm not good at writing essays so your advices are really important for...
Writing Feedbackakesha06 - Oct 14, 2017 / akesha06 - Oct 15, 2017
|There are many reasons why people should choose a specified job
4 - Also, I need to remind you that punctuation is important in IELTS and getting it wrong will lose you...
Writing FeedbackAAriel - Oct 15, 2017 / sgassani - Oct 15, 2017
|TOEFL: Advertising causing people to impulsively buy things
3 - @Holt Thank you for your response but I have a difficulty understanding the first paragraph of your feedback: ...
Writing FeedbackWriter2037 - Oct 13, 2017 / Writer2037 - Oct 14, 2017
|TOEFL - either you choose the same job as your parents do or enter a new field
Writing FeedbackFan0203 - Oct 13, 2017 / Fan0203 - Oct 13, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2: Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result.
4 - @AliminHamzah There are some mistakes on grammar and spell. And the content lack of logical, it is hard...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 13, 2017
|Social networking is a double-edged sword - people become more selfish or narrow in their lives
3 - Linh, if this is a formal research paper or school, then you will have to present the sources of...
Writing FeedbackLingMei - Oct 13, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|Should working hours be reduced?
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Oct 12, 2017 / rubychautran - Oct 13, 2017
|Agricultural land productivity - IELTS-Cambridge 8- test 1
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 12, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 13, 2017
|Co-ed college? Which esbetter for students - single-sex school or a co-ed counterpart
3 - Furqan, the first thing you have to understand is that unlike a TOEFL essay, the IELTS essay does not...
Writing Feedbackfurqanrahmat12 - Oct 13, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|Changing job; my writing should score 6 for IELTS, can you help me to improve my writing ability
Writing Feedbackintern0410 - Oct 11, 2017 / intern0410 - Oct 13, 2017
|The multi-stage process of creating a coffee (Task 2)
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Dec 6, 2015 / irfan727 - Oct 13, 2017
|The perseverance can bring us through the most difficult times. Narrative essay correction.
Writing Feedbackbenh44 - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 13, 2017
|Is paying taxes enough? Writing IELTS Task 2 attempt
4 - @rubychautran Oh sorry, here is the full prompt : Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution...
Writing Feedbackayibram - Oct 12, 2017 / ayibram - Oct 12, 2017
|More People Would Like To Pay More Attention To The Famous People. This Is A Positive or negative?
2 - Nguyen, your opening paraphrase was going so well. It was smooth, it was right on the mark, and then...
Writing FeedbackMili5464 - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|Writ. task 1: the pie chart provides information on 5 major purposes for student to study in Britain
3 - Nhu, your overview is incomplete as it does not give an accurate outline of the discussion topics as presented...
Writing FeedbackNhu Vu - Oct 12, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|City - for the young / Rural - for the old? Living in small community or not?
4 - Hi Alimin, I would recommend you to use different vocabulary to convey your message. For example: if we...
Writing FeedbackAliminHamzah - Oct 12, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 12, 2017
|The maps illustrate how Meadowside village and Fonton, which is a neighboring town - development
4 - @Holt Thank you. It is quite considerate of you to give me the advice. I would like to reassure...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 11, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 12, 2017
|Public celeberations such as festivals, holidays... shouldn't be financed by governments
5 - @Holt: Thanks so much for your detailed and useful comments and instructions. I have noted them down to practise...
Writing FeedbackThao Huong - Oct 11, 2017 / Thao Huong - Oct 12, 2017
|Topic: The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
4 - Vu, you will be losing points for task accuracy with your presentation. Your summary overview at the beginning is...
Writing Feedbackvuthanhhoa - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 12, 2017
|The invention of the Internet has had negative effects on your civilization.
4 - I was just expecting someone to view this as a free writing and give me feedback, though. and yes,...
Writing FeedbackWriter2037 - Oct 11, 2017 / Writer2037 - Oct 12, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Support opinion - Why is physical education important?
7 - hello Tran, I have read your writing, it's no bad actually such as you have written more than 250...
Writing FeedbackTran Minh Hien - Oct 6, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 12, 2017
|[TOEFL] Do students learn much when they work together on assigned projects.
3 - @Holt Thank you, I will make use of your gentle suggestion. I think my main problem is about developing...
Writing Feedbacksajastu - Oct 5, 2017 / sajastu - Oct 11, 2017
|Memoir writing draft about my memories in Korea
3 - Yongju, when you set up your first paragraph, you need to do so in a reflective manner. Ease your...
Writing FeedbackChocomint777 - Oct 11, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|History HW - One Object that Can Reflect Modern Civilization
3 - Sherry, this can only be considered a possible outline for topic discussions in your homework. I failed to find...
Writing FeedbackSherrywu - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|[TOEFL independent task] What events (experiences or ceremonies) make a person an adult?
3 - Sophia, I think you did not post the full original prompt for the discussion. The topic sentence is missing....
Writing Feedbacksophia1942 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 11, 2017
|I am more inclined to study with group of students rather than preparing to test alone [TOEFL]
Writing FeedbackKenChen - Oct 10, 2017 / KenChen - Oct 10, 2017
|Only by challenging existing knowledge, we are able to expand our thinking about the universe
2 - Since not all countries live under a democratic form of government, it would perhaps be best if you avoid...
Writing Feedbackimpatient101 - Oct 10, 2017 / Holt - Oct 10, 2017
|Parent should not pressure their children to choose particular profession.
7 - - "Children must not be forced by their parents" - " I strongly agree that children should not be...
Writing FeedbackLiAnSoh - Sep 28, 2017 / lamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|Contrast high schools and universities - Contrast Essay
6 - There are some grammatical and spelling errors . I think you mean "futher" is "further" or "shools" is "schools"...
Writing FeedbackHue Nguyen - Oct 1, 2017 / lamphuongta - Oct 10, 2017
|[IELTS writing task 1] Table: Underground railway information summary
6 - Hello hgianghgiang, based my humble opinion. your essay is not too bad actually, you wrote more than 150 words...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Sep 26, 2017 / AliminHamzah - Oct 10, 2017
|Describe a strong memory based upon a smell
2 - Dang, you need to be more descriptive of the smell that is driving this memory of yours. The reader...
Writing Feedbackdvhanh - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|Television is one of the most wonderful inventions of human. And how it influence our children?
2 - Anatasia, I wish you had provided me with the complete and original prompt requirement for this essay. It appears...
Writing Feedbacklamphuongta - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|TOEFL: Children should play and study rather than help do the household chores?
3 - Ching, your opening statement was alright until you got to the part where you were supposed to provide your...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017 / Holt - Oct 9, 2017
|More time and effort on improving the world now than it was in the past?
4 - @Holt Thank you for all suggestions! I revised my mistakes below. I would greatly appreciate it if you give...
Writing FeedbackSunnyLai - Sep 29, 2017 / SunnyLai - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 - Should the past criminal record be presented to the jury?
4 - Hi, I'd like to make two corrections for you. .., criminals involving involved in systematic crimes ... ---...
Writing Feedbackrubychautran - Sep 28, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 9, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 _Description of Graph - spending time on the phone calls
6 - Hellooo there..., it is always good to include the picture of the graph as this way helps us to...
Writing FeedbackIELTSWARRIOR - Sep 18, 2017 / eddies - Oct 9, 2017
|TOEFL: invest in infrastructure and physical plant V.S. invest in keeping the faculty satisfied
Writing Feedbackdiligentwriter - Sep 20, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017
|[task 1] The bar chart shows different methods of waste disposal in four cities
4 - @Holt Very glad to hear that. I'm so happy. Thank you for your advice. I'll pay more attention...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 8, 2017
|Moving abroad - challenge in your life that helps to overcome weaknesses and broaden horizon
3 - Naveen, your essay cannot be properly reviewed due to the lack of the original prompt requirement. Without the original...
Writing Feedbackneox3 - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 8, 2017
|Task 2: Exams - the best method of assessing educational achievement, does they?
2 - @vanslogy your opening statement is almost correct in presentation. You did a good job of rephrasing the topic for...
Writing Feedbackvanslogy - Oct 8, 2017 / Holt - Oct 8, 2017
|Effect of Single-gender schools - wrtiting task 2 for IELTS
3 - @Holt, I am really sorry that I missed writing the question fully. The complete question is: In...
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Oct 7, 2017 / IELTS_Academic - Oct 7, 2017
|The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries
4 - @Holt Thank you Marry for your clarification. In China mainland, tens of thousands of anxious IELTS applicants are baffled...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 6, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 6, 2017
|Social networking is an usefull thing if you use it in the right way.
5 - @Holt ,Thank you for your concern.. I am not very good at writting. And it it difficult for me...
Writing FeedbackEmyviadolorosa - Oct 5, 2017 / Emyviadolorosa - Oct 6, 2017
|TOEFL: Nowadays working fast has more value than high precision at job?
4 - that wining winning the... office. and you don't start with a small letter after a full stop. many company...
Writing Feedbacksasan_91 - Oct 4, 2017 / Chichi9 - Oct 6, 2017
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