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|Pie Chart: Comparison of Household in Japan and Malaysia in 2010
6 - @septaafrian0554 Well, thank you for your advice septa :)...
Writing FeedbackDiazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
|The pie charts presents the overall family spending in Japan and Malaysia
3 - @gribigribi First and foremost, it was such a good essay for writing task 1 IELTS, all the components have...
Writing Feedbackgribigribi - Jan 4, 2017 / Diazalichsan - Jan 4, 2017
|Ielts task 1 - Information about the sales during an ordinary October week at a small restaurant
2 - Hi @krempetkov , Based on what I know, had experienced, and what has been told many times to...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Jan 3, 2017 / blueknightiris - Jan 3, 2017
|The data on how fast world wide population growth in numbers and statistics of urban population
3 - In your introduction, you should explain what information both graphs are presenting. The bar graph provides information about...
Writing FeedbackMuhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
|"When in Rome, do as Romans do" Travelling and promotion of globalisation
2 - Well, there are a few problems with your Introduction paragraph. Your first sentence should paraphrase the question, while...
Writing Feedbackdang200993 - Jan 2, 2017 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
|Ielts2 - In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment
3 - Can you jsut point out where exactly are my grammar mistakes, you will help me a lot...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 28, 2016 / krempetkov - Jan 3, 2017
|Zoos are capable of preserving species that are facing extinction.
2 - Hi, your grammar is very good. In your intro, I would not write "This essay will do this, this...
Writing Feedbackquora123 - Jan 1, 2017 / TJLuschen - Jan 1, 2017
|Essay; Relationship between old and young people in the modern world
3 - Thank you so much for the feedback, I will try to improve my essay and present my ideas more...
Writing FeedbackAnna M - Dec 31, 2016 / Anna M - Jan 1, 2017
|Bill Gates finding about effective method of teaching
3 - Mohammad, I am not sure about how to review your essay. That is because you failed to provide the...
Writing Feedbackmdamanhuri77 - Sep 27, 2016 / Holt - Jan 1, 2017
|People who live in the world and the areas
3 - Hello ayra cantik It would be better to mention the population and the year before the number among them...
Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 30, 2016 / Muhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016
|The graphs exhibit the information on world population growth from 1800 to 2100 / Urban Populations
4 - hello lovely, I copied than paste your writing just in case to be you comparasion. The senstences in "()"...
Writing Feedbackl1h4h - Dec 30, 2016 / Muhayyun Mappare - Dec 30, 2016
|Comparison of the society growth and urban areas
2 - Hello, Overall, the content of this essay is good and understandable. You draw information from the graphs well...
Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 30, 2016 / lynzee22 - Dec 30, 2016
|World population growth from 1800 to 2100 in developed and developing countries
2 - Since there are the graphs of developed and developing nations, it may add more to your essay by comparing...
Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 30, 2016 / jcgdbb - Dec 30, 2016
|The proportion of proficient persons in a foreign language among male and female students
2 - Hi, I will try to give you a little comment. I hope it can help you. In the...
Writing Feedbackhavi105 - Dec 30, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 30, 2016
|Commitment and responsibility. Leadership Essay - Leadership skill I posses
4 - Dina, the best way to start off your essay discussion is by revealing to the reviewer what your idea,...
Writing Feedbackhacchani - Dec 30, 2016 / Holt - Dec 30, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 World Population and Comparison of Developed and Developing Countries
2 - Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear, but I would make the following suggestions: The line graph...
Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 30, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 30, 2016
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1, Table of Proportion of children in Australia
4 - I hope I can add some correction for your writing, First I will correction your spelling. 1. "chategories"...
Writing FeedbackMuhayyun Mappare - Dec 29, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 30, 2016
|The prolificity of women in their forties at the antipodes
4 - @Citra07 Hy Citra, good night, i have some corrections from grammatical error of your writing The first ...
Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 29, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 30, 2016
|Mothers in Australia over forty years old. Essay Writing task 1
5 - Hallo, good night hanna, i have some corrections to you about grammatical error For the first The...
Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 29, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 30, 2016
|The figure of children born to 40-44 years old women in Australia for four different years
3 - Hello Mister Dedy.. I have read your writing. In this moment, I will get an attempt to review...
Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 29, 2016 / akbarmappiare - Dec 30, 2016
|[IELST Task 1] Annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
3 - @PJmustbebetter To conclude, two out of three Bakeries rose ... To conclude, profits for two out of three Bakeries...
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 29, 2016 / serikbar - Dec 29, 2016
|writing IELTS TASK 1 AUSTRALIAN WOMEN BIRTHRATE
2 - I am not sure with my comment to correct your writing, you very often repeating "same age group". If...
Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 29, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 29, 2016
|Regulating killing crimes law has to be the top priority taken by officials and authorities.
10 - @ngokhoa99 thanks a lot@mualla You got a point I think I could add a third paragraph stating "why society...
Writing Feedbackahmed2016 - Dec 21, 2016 / ahmed2016 - Dec 29, 2016
|Ielts writing task 1 about fish and four types of meat consumption
2 - This is pretty solid writing. There's just one thing I'd like to point out. while the consumption of beef,...
Writing Feedbackbellebelle73 - Dec 29, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 29, 2016
|IELTS writing task 1 - The spending by local authorities in some land in three different years
2 - ...cost of local authorities, while transport. Transport and environmental service experienced increasing spending and, while there were gradual reducing...
Writing Feedbackded15 - Dec 28, 2016 / thugzook - Dec 29, 2016
|WRITING TASK 1 THE PROPORTION OF LEISURE ACTIVITIES PREFERENCE IN BOTH GENDER
2 - "A breakdown of the proportion of several ..." A breakdown of several leisure activities taken by both male and...
Writing Feedbackilankelo21 - Dec 28, 2016 / thugzook - Dec 29, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 The Pie Charts represent the precentages of changes in the annual dependents
3 - Hello Hana I have some advice for you : - The Pie charts represents the precentages (...) such...
Writing Feedbackhanasufiarahma - Dec 28, 2016 / ded15 - Dec 28, 2016
|The spending for education, health and human resources, environmental services and transportation.
4 - I am afraid that in my opinion your report was not very strong. You kept repeating the phrases "increasingly...
Writing FeedbackDayat - Dec 28, 2016 / TJLuschen - Dec 28, 2016
|LOCAL AUTHORITIES BUDGET in different lands in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
2 - Good evening Ms. Aira, I will try to correct your writing. because the pie charts is plural...
Writing Feedbackayrahumairah - Dec 28, 2016 / Citra07 - Dec 28, 2016
|IELTS Task 1 Annual Expenses by Local Bureaucracy in Several Lands
2 - Hallo Mr.Citra, Good night, i have some corrections for you. The correction is (Expenses of environmental services...
Writing FeedbackCitra07 - Dec 28, 2016 / Dayat - Dec 28, 2016
|IELTS TASK 2 - MEDIA CONTROL - an important privilege and tool to manipulate the public
3 - Thank you for your advice!...
Writing Feedbacklinhledieue - Dec 27, 2016 / linhledieue - Dec 27, 2016
|If I would obtain a chance to go abroad then I would go to China
2 - Hey! A couple of things. First, you ought to capitalize every instance of China in the essay. It'll go...
Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 26, 2016 / YomanAwe - Dec 26, 2016
|Some researchers analyse and say that, you are not too old to learn new skills
5 - you go little bit off the topic . please be stick topic ....
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
|Art can soar economy of the country - spending money for it
5 - @nandasharma thanks...
Writing FeedbackOmerzafar - Dec 25, 2016 / Omerzafar - Dec 26, 2016
|Travel in a group can save money and time, it's pity though that people can't do then what they wish
4 - Especially for those are busy and are going with large number of people. -- Well, first of all I...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 13, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
|Any new technological development in the recent years is a boon or curse for the society in general.
2 - hi @lalodhi, you have a good stand point. I'd like to give you some suggestion as follows : 1....
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / masktaz - Dec 26, 2016
|Overpopulation of urban areas - problems and solutions
3 - @nandasharma Please check my other threads. Thanks alot....
Writing Feedbacklalodhi - Dec 26, 2016 / lalodhi - Dec 26, 2016
|The total download (in 1000s) from three computer packages in five weeks period
4 - I think you need to work on you summary sentence. ..."and Net less popular among internet users." - that...
Writing Feedbackkiemwanz - Dec 24, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 26, 2016
|The Profit from Losing Money
39 - @Holt I am so happy, Holt! Thanks for guiding me through the essay. Without you the essay would not...
Writing Feedbackmualla - Nov 11, 2016 / mualla - Dec 25, 2016
|The Personality of Candidate Requirement in Recruitment of the Company
3 - @SarlindaDS_27 Sarlinda, there are plenty of grammatical errors and subject-verb disgreements in your article which...
Writing FeedbackSarlindaDS_27 - Nov 30, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 25, 2016
|The information about factors influencing the work performance of the people aged 18-30 and 45-60
3 - "It is clear to see that" --> "It is clear that" "40% of people from the older group...
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 24, 2016 / angeli6778 - Dec 24, 2016
|IELTS task1: spending on different items in the UK (Table)
2 - Ali, when you write the summary overview of the chart, make sure to represent all of the sectors indicated...
Writing Feedbackali98 - Dec 24, 2016 / Holt - Dec 24, 2016
|Writing 2: people think that men and women have different qualities to certain jobs
3 - What I didn't like about your second paragraph is that, you have mixed complex and very simple sentences. I...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Dec 22, 2016 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
|The electricity generation was dominated by coal in New Zealand while Germany prefered other sources
2 - while nuclear, natural gas, and coal also was popular sources in Germany. - First, the word "also" doesn't sound...
Writing FeedbackPramudita - Nov 1, 2015 / krempetkov - Dec 22, 2016
|Food revolution - and how the change impact on people's lives - IELTS essay
5 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. I agree partially with this statement, prepared preparing ... 2. The main...
Writing Feedbackthanhscorpia - Dec 18, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
|More and more young people hold the important positions in the government.
4 - hello, here are my suggestions, 1. In some countries, the youth is becoming become more and more to...
Writing Feedbacktruonglanngoc - Dec 21, 2016 / Arlen - Dec 22, 2016
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads
3 - I think your essay is really good overall- very clear points. However, if I could change something maybe I'd...
Writing Feedbackardiankrist - Dec 21, 2016 / Punn1238 - Dec 21, 2016
|Urbanization is a modern disease.
4 - Vittal, I would gladly show you how to reach a band score of 7 using this essay. However, I...
Writing FeedbackVittal - Dec 19, 2016 / Holt - Dec 21, 2016
|Worldwide market of hybrid vehicles in three different areas - WRITING TASK 1
3 - Hi NinaJoesuf25, As my opinion, your first sentence in the first paragraph is complex, just keep it simple....
Writing FeedbackNinaJoesuf25 - Dec 15, 2016 / phongnam - Dec 21, 2016
|"Why Mow?" What lawn means in suburban America -> Was I logical enough in criticizing Pollan's work?
3 - @Holt Holt I really appreciate your concern and advice. I will make sure that I don't repeat the same...
Writing Feedbackrealtalk - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 21, 2016
|Higher fuel price to solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world
2 - @krempetkov George, No offense but hiking up the price of the fuel sounds ridiculous/childish and also not quite practical....
Writing Feedbackkrempetkov - Dec 20, 2016 / nandasharma - Dec 21, 2016
|IELTS -writing 2 - The most appropriate time for learning a foreign language
2 - @dianakelin The first paragraph needs a lot of work. You need to reorganize the whole passage and make it...
Writing Feedbackdianakelin - Dec 20, 2016 / realtalk - Dec 20, 2016
|Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, th
3 - Sorry me! The task: Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however,...
Writing Feedbackxenuseeng - Dec 19, 2016 / xenuseeng - Dec 20, 2016
|Property ownership - justification essay
6 - @Holt I really appreciate your help Holt I was so lost preparing for this test, and your responses gave...
Writing Feedbackredjohn - Dec 18, 2016 / redjohn - Dec 19, 2016
|IELTS Task 2 : Is Advertisement informative or deceptive
3 - I agree with Holt that you are well prepared to take the IELTS, but I would also like to...
Writing Feedbackm7mdbsheer1 - Dec 19, 2016 / ngokhoa99 - Dec 19, 2016
|Essay about the advantages of co-operation in your learning English
5 - can you help me correct the fault...
Writing Feedbacklahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016 / lahavip06 - Dec 18, 2016
|We have to depend on technology which makes our life easier, but we need to use it in a proper way.
5 - Jone, your overall score for this essay could be a 5 in terms of task accuracy. That is because...
Writing Feedbackjone75 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 18, 2016
|Factories not stadiums, is what we need. Do you agree? Argumentative essay
2 - Azeddine, Somehow I don't feel like you posted the complete prompt along with the essay. The reason that i...
Writing FeedbackAdam10 - Dec 17, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|TOPIC OF AN ORIGINAL ARTICLE I AM WRITING ON: THE CAREER WOMAN
5 - Go ahead and use my suggested title and topic if you wish to Chizaram. I am glad that I...
Writing Feedbackchizy7 - Dec 16, 2016 / Holt - Dec 17, 2016
|GRE-University should require all students to take classes outside of the students' field of study
5 - @Holt Thank you very much for your recommendation. I will do so. :-)...
Writing Feedbackxuesun - Dec 15, 2016 / xuesun - Dec 16, 2016
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