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Some people think that secondary school students should study international news

2 - Your thesis statement based upon the writer's opinion is incomplete. you will receive reduced points for presenting a...

Writing Feedbackthuyloan - Nov 5, 2025 / Holt - Nov 6, 2025
Some people think that allowing students to work part-time while studying has more advantages

2 - There are 2 immediate reasons why this essay will get an automatic failing score. The first, is the word...

Writing Feedbackannie280412 - Oct 24, 2025 / Holt - Oct 24, 2025
As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

2 - This is not acknowledged in the original prompt. It is an idea that is implied and is therefore,...

Writing Feedbackannie280412 - Oct 23, 2025 / Holt - Oct 23, 2025
Some people believe that online learning will replace traditional classroom in near future.

2 - This entry will not be considered a prompt restatement. Rather it will be read as the opinion of...

Writing Feedbacktahasid31 - Oct 20, 2025 / Holt - Oct 22, 2025
It is better for college students to live in schools than live at home with their parents.

2 - Kindly stay within suggested 300 word limitation for the Task 2 essay to ensure that you will be focusing...

Writing Feedbackscorpions009 - Oct 18, 2025 / Holt - Oct 19, 2025
A culmination of nihilism and existentialism.

2 - The essay was difficult for me to read because of the lack of pauses between the ideas presented. There...

Writing FeedbackRasberrysparkle - Oct 16, 2025 / Holt - Oct 18, 2025
International Aid - yes or no?

3 - Sounds a good essay, however you have not adhered to simple structure, thesis statement - important (what you have...

Writing Feedbackchihuahuahuahua - Oct 13, 2025 / Guest - Oct 14, 2025
It is popular in many parts of the world that young people are doing research on their ancestry

2 - Do not make any reference to age in your restatement as the original prompt did not do this....

Writing Feedbackapolaza - Oct 10, 2025 / Holt - Oct 11, 2025
VIDEO RECORDS ARE A BETTER WAY TO LEARN ABOUT THE WAY OTHER PEOPLE IN THE WORLD LIVE THAN DOCUMENTS

2 - The prompt restatement is thoroughly incorrect and does not reflect the idea behind the original prompt correctly. There is...

Writing FeedbackBao Anh - Oct 10, 2025 / Holt - Oct 11, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Essay on unwinding mind with video games or outdoor activity.

2 - The prompt restatement is incorrect. As the writer you are supposed to reframe the original topic, without changing the...

Writing FeedbackfaiqaFARHEEN - Oct 7, 2025 / Holt - Oct 8, 2025
Younger or Older Leaders in Corporations? IELTS Writing Task 2

2 - There are 2 immediate errors that will fail this essay in terms of preliminary Task Accuracy requirements. The first,...

Writing Feedbackmquan1997 - Oct 7, 2025 / Holt - Oct 8, 2025
TOPIC: Technology in education

2 - You will not gain any points for this statement because all you did was repeat the writing instructions....

Writing Feedbackquasal - Oct 6, 2025 / Holt - Oct 6, 2025
Playing freely after school or doing more organised - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - You are missing a verb here. What is it that the students should follow? More organized what? The...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Oct 4, 2025 / Holt - Oct 5, 2025
Topic: Television's relevence

2 - The task 2 essays do not and will not ask you to come to a conclusion in your presentation....

Writing Feedbackquasal - Oct 1, 2025 / Holt - Oct 2, 2025
Topic: Freedom of speech on social media

2 - Please do not post essays that are collaborative in presentation at this forum. That is because I will be...

Writing Feedbackquasal - Sep 29, 2025 / Holt - Sep 30, 2025
Some people think that genetically modified crops are a positive development.

2 - The first reason that you will receive a failing score with this sort of writing is because you have...

Writing Feedbackdavies7 - Sep 29, 2025 / Holt - Sep 30, 2025
UK pollutants chart writing

2 - I am sorry but this report will get an automatic failing score because it failed to meet the 150...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Sep 27, 2025 / Holt - Sep 28, 2025
The negative impact that AI has on contemporary society

2 - Hi, I would be more than happy to review your research paper. The problem is that you forgot to...

Writing Feedbackkganci - Sep 26, 2025 / Holt - Sep 27, 2025
The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981

2 - The summary overview lacks clarity. There should be a reference to the number of pie charts that were provided....

Writing Feedbacknguyenquynhquyen - Sep 26, 2025 / Holt - Sep 27, 2025
How to improve road safety? - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - You may gotten over excited by the topic that was provided for this exercise. It is overwritten at 377...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 17, 2025 / Holt - Sep 19, 2025
IELTS Writing Task 2 - People should follow the local customs and traditions

2 - Your opening statement is not only off the mark in terms of restating the original concept of the prompt,...

Writing Feedbackanuse25 - Sep 16, 2025 / Holt - Sep 16, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Bar chart about global mobile phone sales of five brands in various years.

2 - Kindly remember that you need to properly format the report as that is a part of your task accuracy...

Writing Feedbackquasal - Sep 14, 2025 / Holt - Sep 16, 2025
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Essay on influence of social media on today's youth in career development.

2 - No. It is not appropriate because it does not contain any information that properly highlights how the body of...

Writing FeedbackfaiqaFARHEEN - Sep 12, 2025 / Holt - Sep 14, 2025
Are museums and art galleries still important? - Opinion Essay - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - Two things are wrong in your prompt rephrase paragraph. First, you misspelled artifacts. Second, you used the phrase "I...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 11, 2025 / Holt - Sep 14, 2025
Team vs. Solitary activities - Opinion Essay - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - You cannot firmly agree with the statement as you are not provided with a solid opinion discussion instruction....

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 9, 2025 / Holt - Sep 13, 2025
Can mental strength outweight physical strength? - IELTS WARRIOR

4 - thank you...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 31, 2025 / Mr Calma - Sep 10, 2025
More abroad travellers- Opinion Essay - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - You have done a very good job writing this opinion essay. You were on point in terms of scoring...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 7, 2025 / Holt - Sep 9, 2025
some people think children should follow their parent's advice, other believe that they should think

2 - The problem with the essay is that it did not follow the single opinion presentation. The first opinion immediately...

Writing Feedbacknguyen duc huy - Sep 3, 2025 / Holt - Sep 6, 2025
University courses- Line graph - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - The summary overview is missing a proper presentation of the 4 courses and the type of measurement used to...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 3, 2025 / Holt - Sep 6, 2025
Learning history or practical subjects? - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - The way that you have your reasoning presentation structured in the restatement and writer's opinion section indicates that you...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 3, 2025 / Holt - Sep 6, 2025
Living away from family home while attending university - Advantages and Disadvantages - Task 2

2 - This should have been followed up with the 2 short reasoning presentation. It could have read; "... In...

Writing Feedbackbongmibo - Sep 3, 2025 / Holt - Sep 6, 2025
Level of satisfaction - Line graph - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - There are several types of graphs. The line graph, the bar graph, the columnar graph, to name but...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Sep 1, 2025 / Holt - Sep 2, 2025
Village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024 - Map - Task 1

2 - This is an automatic failing TA score. Why? You totally misrepresented the given image. Yes, there were 2...

Writing Feedbackbongmibo - Sep 1, 2025 / Holt - Sep 2, 2025
Total world energy consumption and electricity generation - Task 1 - Pie chart

2 - To meet the TA requirements, you need to indicate the number of pie charts. You should also enumerate...

Writing Feedbackbongmibo - Aug 31, 2025 / Holt - Aug 31, 2025
How to make a sponge cake - Process - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - There are several types of diagrams that are used for this test. You should familiarize yourself with those...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 30, 2025 / Holt - Aug 31, 2025
The diagram show how use glass bottles are recycled.

2 - A diagram is a general term for an instructional drawing. Try to be more specific when it comes...

Writing Feedbacknhinhinhi999 - Aug 30, 2025 / Holt - Aug 31, 2025
Working from Home: A Beneficial Trend in the Modern World - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - There are several prompts that use this topic as a part of the discussion point. That makes it difficult...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 30, 2025 / Holt - Aug 30, 2025
International travelers landing in the UK - Ielts Writing Task 1: Line graph

2 - The summary overview should have at least 3 sentences in it. It should restate the type of image, measurement...

Writing Feedbackgingerbelle - Aug 29, 2025 / Holt - Aug 30, 2025
Beechwood Farm - Map - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - When writing the report, you must always assume that the reader does not have a copy of the...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 28, 2025 / Holt - Aug 29, 2025
No need to go to watch live performances? - Opinion Essay - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - Incorrect time line reference. The original reference used was "These days" so the alternative reference would be "Recently"...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 27, 2025 / Holt - Aug 27, 2025
Various household goods between 2001 and 2008 - Dynamic bar chart - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - The summary overview is supposed to comprise at least a 3 sentence paragraph. The contents of that paragraph should...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 25, 2025 / Holt - Aug 26, 2025
News media have become more influential in people's lives.

2 - The essay asks you for the extent of your support for one of the 2 given public opinions in...

Writing Feedbackbtra - Aug 25, 2025 / Holt - Aug 26, 2025
What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility? - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - There is an LR problem in the first paragraph. There is a big difference between damage and desctruction. Damage...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 25, 2025 / Holt - Aug 25, 2025
Obese people overwhelm the healthcare system? - IELTS WARRIOR

2 - The reference in the sentence is incomplete. Where are the sessions to be added? It is stated in...

Writing FeedbackMr Calma - Aug 24, 2025 / Holt - Aug 25, 2025
An essay titled Social Media and Teen Mental Health

2 - Revise the first paragraph to be more of a proper thesis statement. Follow the correct format by providing an...

Writing FeedbackCJohnson1052 - Aug 24, 2025 / Holt - Aug 24, 2025
IELTS writing task 2- difference between working from home and working in office.

2 - 282 words as you have it written could have helped your score in the long run if you had...

Writing FeedbackfaiqaFARHEEN - Aug 21, 2025 / Holt - Aug 22, 2025
Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world.

2 - The opening statement will receive a failing task accuracy score because you did not respond to the questions...

Writing Feedbacktt1405 - Aug 18, 2025 / Holt - Aug 21, 2025
Looking Back at the US Civil War

2 - Remove the term infamous. There is no need to exaggerate the American Civil war. Nor is there a...

Writing FeedbackWinstonRa - Aug 17, 2025 / Holt - Aug 17, 2025
Mental game - three areas of weakness or the description of the research paper project

2 - 1. I do not believe that the research paper should indicate a focus on Beach Volleyball because the discussion...

Writing Feedbackabbiemunro06 - Aug 16, 2025 / Holt - Aug 17, 2025
Essay about the fact that celebrities earn more money than politicians, the reasons and opinions!-fb

2 - The first problem with your essay is the incorrect restatement of the original prompt. You are referring to information...

Writing Feedbackmybutmy - Aug 16, 2025 / Holt - Aug 17, 2025
IS taking regular health check-ups unnecessary if one feels healthy?

2 - You overwrote this essay. With only 49 minutes to craft a properly worded and coherent essay, you are expected...

Writing Feedbackngocbich022 - Aug 11, 2025 / Holt - Aug 14, 2025
Essay on time travelling to work or school

2 - While this essay is composed of 280 words, it does not follow the proper compare and contrast discussion for...

Writing FeedbackDUC TRAN - Aug 9, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
Equality in governments and politics (IELTS WRITING TASK 2)

2 - There are only 2 reasons that you will be discussing, you m ust indicate these as a solid...

Writing FeedbackBrian Nguyen - Aug 9, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
Climate Change's Role in Undermining Global Food Security

2 - The main problem with this essay is the lack of insight from the writer. All of the major paragraphs...

Writing FeedbackStrayKids07 - Aug 9, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
Activities - film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances

2 - Kindly remember to use a minimum of 2 sentences in the summary overview. You must summarize the information in...

Writing Feedbackdreamfulcherry - Aug 7, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
Changing rates of three different areas of crime in Newport city

2 - The presentation is well within the word count consideration for high scores in all categories. However, the lack of...

Writing Feedbacklinhchi0330 - Aug 8, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
IELTS task 2 - problems-solutions about ecotourism's effects on local cultures, people, environment.

2 - You have over written this essay. You cannot write more than 300 words for the presentation because you are...

Writing FeedbackBeamlee123 - Aug 6, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
IELTS writing task 2- opinion essay on physical and mental strength

2 - The prompt restatement is missing in this presentation. The first paragraph is expected to represent your understanding of the...

Writing FeedbackfaiqaFARHEEN - Aug 5, 2025 / Holt - Aug 10, 2025
Undocumented, Unprotected, Unjust: Destroying the American Dream

2 - The focus of this paper is all over the place. The actual topics for discussion do not come from...

Writing Feedbackvickilugo2025 - Aug 3, 2025 / Holt - Aug 8, 2025
Owing a home rather than renting one ,why might this be the case?Is this a positive or negative case

2 - You cannot refer to a particular opinion as being true in this essay. You end up misrepresenting the...

Writing Feedbacknollen - Aug 2, 2025 / Holt - Aug 3, 2025

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