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|IELTS TASK 2: Should animals be kept in zoos? Describe both views and give your own opinion
2 - There is a distinct possibility that you could score within the 5 range with this type of work. The...
Writing Feedbackbachache - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|There is disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between the countries
2 - Your response deviated from the discussion reason that was provided in the original prompt. The only perspective that you...
Writing FeedbackThien Xuan - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 26, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: different views about teaching children to become a good citizen of the community
2 - First of all, the way you divide your argument into paragraphs is not completely logical. This is a "...
Writing Feedbacknguyenanh97 - Mar 25, 2020 / taeyonieee - Mar 26, 2020
|The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom for the security of society.
Writing Feedbackducpronehaha123 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Discussion about online courses
2 - There is a slight error in your discussion instruction paraphrase. You are not going to discuss the advantages and...
Writing Feedbackjohn221 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Should museum ask for entrance fee?
2 - Never use words of uncertainty in a Task 2 test. The essay is calling for a precise description of...
Writing Feedbackpotatowee - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantges: Conveniece foods
Writing FeedbackTHC1310vn - Mar 17, 2020 / anhnn146 - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?
Writing Feedbackkaisergod47 - Mar 20, 2020 / anhnn146 - Mar 25, 2020
|Advantages of living in a large city - quality of life?
3 - @Holt Thank you very much. My writing is very bad, so I just write this thread to practice and...
Writing Feedbackhoa1128 - Mar 25, 2020 / hoa1128 - Mar 25, 2020
|Students should study whatever they like or only allowed to study subjects that will be useful
2 - This is a comparative discussion with a personal opinion essay. The one thing this is not is a personal...
Writing Feedbackminhtram166 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|The beneficial elements and the drawbacks of advertisements
2 - The discussion approach for this essay is a single opinion based defense of your opinion. That means, you respond...
Writing Feedbacknhatduy240203 - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|Government should protect environment and provide education / health care
3 - This writing is a combination of 2 different Task 2 essay topics. As such, it will be difficult to...
Writing Feedbackmohamedhashem - Mar 25, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|Essay about the benefits of completing university course for guarantee to get a good job
2 - Do you actually think that you can write 434 words during the actual test? Did you even bother to...
Writing Feedbacknqthienan123 - Mar 24, 2020 / Holt - Mar 25, 2020
|IELTS 2: encouraging businesses to relocate from metropolitans to regional areas.
3 - @Holt Thank you so much. I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback. I do really need to look into this...
Writing Feedbacktaeyonieee - Mar 23, 2020 / taeyonieee - Mar 24, 2020
|Should we apply new ways of finding the compatible person for a job, in lieu of interviews
Writing FeedbackLam Trann - Mar 23, 2020 / Holt - Mar 24, 2020
|It is better to repuire school uniforms or not. (Argumentative Essay for IELTS)
Writing Feedbackmydafne - Mar 21, 2020 / mydafne - Mar 23, 2020
|Coffee and banana sales - IELTS Cambridge 10 test 2 task 1 by Amy
4 - i think you should check your grammar carefully.Besides, you need to have the comparison between figures to gain the...
Writing Feedbackamy_nyk - Mar 23, 2020 / thuthao121 - Mar 23, 2020
|Satisfaction of a job plays a critical role in deciding one's overall happiness
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Mar 23, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Mar 23, 2020
|IELTS1: the percentage change in house price in five different urban areas in different countries
Writing Feedbackvuthuylinh2611 - Mar 23, 2020 / vuthuylinh2611 - Mar 23, 2020
|The salmon passes from infant to adult during the natural process known as the life cycle
Writing Feedbackphong3baotap - Mar 23, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 23, 2020
|"Flipped" - Write a movie review that you are interested.
3 - @Holt I'd like to thank you for your contribution. This is the first time I try to get accustomed...
Writing Feedbacklittledinosaur - Mar 22, 2020 / littledinosaur - Mar 23, 2020
|The production level of main fuels in a European country
2 - Since you did not post the image that goes with this data report, your essay cannot be reviewed for...
Writing FeedbackJannes - Mar 23, 2020 / Holt - Mar 23, 2020
|Task 2 IELTS TENDENCY TO WASTE FOOD
7 - @xtunx Dear Author, It will be better for you to add thesis statement which states the intended message...
Writing Feedbackxtunx - Feb 29, 2020 / ndhnif - Mar 23, 2020
|TASK 2 BEGINER - YOUNG PEOPLE SHOULD SPEND MORE TIME ON CULTURAL ACTIVITIES AND LESS TIME ON SPORT?
8 - Firstly, you did not write 250 words. Secondly, it isn't allow to use short form like 'can't'....
Writing Feedbacklththom - Mar 21, 2020 / amy_nyk - Mar 23, 2020
|Will printed media soon be a thing of the past? What is your opinion ?
4 - @nguyenluuphuchao Your essay is lacking example. First, you suppose that the prolonged exposure to these digital devices will take...
Writing Feedbacknguyenluuphuchao - Mar 21, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 23, 2020
|[Task 2 IELTS] Communication between employers and workers is the most important factor
3 - @lovewriting You might consider the alternative: 1) ... and present my own position. (the word "own" seemed to create...
Writing Feedbacklovewriting - Mar 20, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 23, 2020
|IELTS- Ad-Dis Essay. More and more people are starting to work from home.
2 - The response is inaccurate. You are being asked to choose only one aspect of the topic to discuss. Either...
Writing FeedbackOlivia1989 - Mar 22, 2020 / Holt - Mar 22, 2020
|Young professionals - the way of describing from the essay below:
3 - Since you did not include the image with the essay, your work cannot be reviewed in terms of content...
Writing Feedbackmiraichan19 - Mar 21, 2020 / Holt - Mar 22, 2020
|Economic globalization - IELTS Academic Writing Task 2
2 - Ok. Let's review your essay using the scoring guide. It will be easier to explain your mistakes and correcting...
Writing Feedbackhuynhmai1707 - Mar 21, 2020 / Holt - Mar 22, 2020
|Because wild creatures are on the brink of extinction so that there is no point in protecting them
2 - Aside from the fact that you misrepresented the original prompt in your introduction paraphrase, you also wrote an essay...
Writing Feedbackratter - Mar 21, 2020 / Holt - Mar 21, 2020
|DEVELOPING COUNTRIES AND ADVANCED COUNTRIES ON THE ENVIRONMENT ( IELTS TASK 2 )
2 - I think your essay has shown a standard format for a discussion essay. About the ideas, I do not...
Writing Feedbackxtunx - Mar 20, 2020 / ratter - Mar 21, 2020
|Personal Vision of an Ideal Company
3 - @Holt Wow, thank you! This is actually my first time posting a thread in this forum. Never thought that...
Writing Feedbacksuccatwriting - Mar 19, 2020 / succatwriting - Mar 20, 2020
|My poor diet - need help with grammar and sentences!
2 - Was the instruction for this exercise to have you write a statement only? The reason I ask is because...
Writing Feedbackduyendang1012 - Mar 19, 2020 / Holt - Mar 20, 2020
|Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results
2 - It is unfortunate that your body of paragraphs, as well as your prompt restatement does not follow the required...
Writing Feedbackquynhchi24 - Mar 19, 2020 / Holt - Mar 19, 2020
|DISCUSSION ESSAYS: Horizontal city vs vertical city
2 - This is a comparative essay discussion. The body of paragraphs should have been composed of 3 representations, in no...
Writing Feedbackleanhtu121 - Mar 18, 2020 / Holt - Mar 18, 2020
|Politicians or individuals? Essay about the environment protection responsibility
3 - Your prompt paraphrase is not changed enough from the original prompt to qualify as a new rendition of the...
Writing FeedbackMinh Huynh - Mar 18, 2020 / Holt - Mar 18, 2020
|Optimistic people who have more opportunities to make positive changes to the world
2 - The first 2 sentences in your prompt paraphrase are really difficult to understand. It isn't a very good re-framing...
Writing Feedbackbellapham - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 18, 2020
|Whether talents are of genetic origin or we can be taught to own that talent!
2 - Your discussion approach to the essay is incorrect. The format of your response is based on a measured extent...
Writing Feedbackdoublenok157 - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 18, 2020
|Writing task 1- <table>the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales
3 - Your trending statement does not completely represent a complete trending observation. You should have also provided the numerical data...
Writing Feedbackabbralacy - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 18, 2020
|Music being benifical to bring people of other cultures and generation together
Writing Feedbackmeoubeolu - Mar 16, 2020 / meoubeolu - Mar 17, 2020
|Task 2: Increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems.
Writing Feedbackabcxyz0987654321 - Mar 16, 2020 / abcxyz0987654321 - Mar 17, 2020
|Writing exercise : a prompt about reading.
4 - @Holt thank you very much for pointing my errors out, especially the grammar which I have a serious problem...
Writing Feedbackravatrav - Mar 17, 2020 / ravatrav - Mar 17, 2020
|Chart - the percentage of owned and rented accommodations in two regions
2 - You first two paragraphs could use some adjustment in presentation. The clarity and coherence of your information report comes...
Writing FeedbackPhuongbo - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: Physical strength and mental strength. Which is more important for success in sports?
2 - It would be unjust of me to review this essay for information, format, and quality of discussion when it...
Writing Feedbackanhnn146 - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Children and Tech - New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time
2 - Your essay should not open with a direct quote from a source. You must properly build up your thesis...
Writing FeedbackHannah21820 - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Writting essay about why action speak louder than words
2 - None of your examples illustrate or explain the meaning of the quotation through action. The first example, was about...
Writing FeedbackVin_phan11 - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Playing video games - the happiest moment of my life
2 - You need to change the verb form in your first sentence from "... when I playing the computer game..."...
Writing Feedbackchienlin92086 - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|WRITING TASK 2 ONLINE SHOPPING (damage effect)
2 - This essay will be deemed only partially responsive to the task. That is because this 4 paragraph essay is...
Writing Feedbackcewhalee - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2, effect of social networking sites
Writing Feedbackndhnif - Mar 17, 2020 / ndhnif - Mar 17, 2020
|IELTS TASK2: The imprisonment should be longer for offenders with terrible crimes
2 - Your restated prompt approach is incorrect. The proper presentation requires that you inform the reader of the two points...
Writing Feedbackmeeha - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Ielts a Film review - Aquaman
2 - IELTS does not do film review essays. The exam takers will not necessarily have all seen the movie prior...
Writing FeedbackLinhh - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Many tourists today fly straight to their holiday resort and almost never leave it.
Writing Feedbackthuannnnn - Mar 17, 2020 / Holt - Mar 17, 2020
|Responsibilities of businesses besides making money
5 - @Holt @JasmineNguyen @Phuongbo Thank you very much!!!! You accurately point out so many oversights that I have not noticed....
Writing Feedbackthuong311 - Mar 13, 2020 / thuong311 - Mar 17, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Countries are becoming more and more similar because...
Writing Feedbackphong3baotap - Mar 16, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 17, 2020
|A few languages are increasingly spoken in different countries, while the usage of others is rapidly
3 - You have amazing ideas with informative examples, but you still have some mistakes to be figured out. Firstly,...
Writing Feedbackimjanee - Mar 16, 2020 / THC1310vn - Mar 16, 2020
|Writing Task 2 Test 5 Cam 14 : Sharing information freely is the good ways ???
Writing FeedbackChung1002 - Mar 15, 2020 / Chung1002 - Mar 16, 2020
|WRITING TASK 1 of IELTS: UK TELEPHONE CALLS - the total number of minutes by three categories
3 - @vanessazhang00 One more key feature that you can add to your essay as an alternative to making the conclusion...
Writing Feedbackvanessazhang00 - Mar 13, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 16, 2020
|IELTS Task 1: Birth and Death rates in New Zealand, from 1901 to the prediction for 2101.
3 - @kerry19910620 You can use the phrase "overtake that of ... and ended up at..." as an alternative to making...
Writing Feedbackkerry19910620 - Mar 16, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 16, 2020
|Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress
7 - @yennhut Dear Author, Based on the knowledge that I know, I suggest that you compose the introduction part...
Writing Feedbackyennhut - Mar 14, 2020 / ndhnif - Mar 16, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task 1 #Antarctic ozone hole and damaging gases
6 - @Eileen0216 You can use the phrase "LAGGED THAT OF" as an alternative to making the sentence sound better and...
Writing FeedbackEileen0216 - Mar 14, 2020 / phong3baotap - Mar 16, 2020
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