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|Task 1 The results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Australia
3 - In my personal opinion, I think using the word "illustrate" would be a poor choice when talking about...
Writing Feedbacktrucinthesky - Sep 15, 2021 / megazetz - Sep 17, 2021
|The most wanted destinations for British travellers and their purposes of travelling abroad
2 - Avoid the temptation of a run - on sentence when writing the summary overview. The rule of thumb is...
Writing Feedbackmonicaaa0017 - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 16, 2021
|The analysis regarding the income of coffee and bananas in five different areas between 1999 & 2004
2 - Incorrect. There are 2 seperate tables presented for this report. This is automatically a 4 paragraph report due...
Writing Feedbackindah13 - Sep 15, 2021 / Holt - Sep 16, 2021
|IELTS 2; What is the most appropriate place for children to study and develop - a school or home?
3 - For the conclusion you can say Although (...) method, attending schools is a way better because children can...
Writing Feedbacksamnguyen12 - Sep 14, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 16, 2021
|More Money Should Be Spent On Adult Education Than on Children's Education.
2 - The topic begs the writer to consider the importance of education based on the age of the learner. The...
Writing Feedbacktrypheenee - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 15, 2021
|Preserving friendships with our old friends or finding new friends?
2 - Well, the writer definitely makes a convincing arguement for keeping old friends and its importance to the social development...
Writing Feedbacksina_toefl - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 15, 2021
|FINANCIAL CRIME INVOLIVING IDENTITY THEFT IS INCREASING
2 - While the essay meets the word requirement, it does not meet the paragraph / response format scoring expectations. This...
Writing Feedbackheounin - Sep 14, 2021 / Holt - Sep 15, 2021
|[WRITING TASK 1] The table shows the export values of various products in 2009 and 2010.
4 - I suggest that you replace "categories of clothing and manufacturing" with "clothing and manufacturing categories"...
Writing Feedbacktan_ho - Sep 10, 2021 / Goldengoat - Sep 14, 2021
|Many people think that fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise while others disagree
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|TOPIC: What causes young people, especially university students, to feel negative?
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|WRITING TASK 2: Should government funding be used for new house instead of restoring old building ?
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|Money parents spent on their children's sporting activities and how many kids participated in sports
Writing Feedbackskinnypeter - Sep 3, 2021 / skinnypeter - Sep 14, 2021
|The global water use and the water expenditure in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo
3 - @Holt i don't think my coherence is bad, in the first chat, i illustrate the diffenrent period of the...
Writing Feedbackhoangdepzai3904 - Sep 9, 2021 / hoangdepzai3904 - Sep 14, 2021
|The statistic of ticket buying online based on age and how the internet was access in 3 countries
3 - If you want to give a comparison, you should compare between two variables only. For example, you can talk...
Writing Feedbackgreencoconut - Sep 13, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 14, 2021
|BEGINNER-WRITING TASK 1: Recycling process of aluminium cans
5 - I think for the introduction you can say The diagram gives the information of the process of how aluminium...
Writing Feedbackhominhthu15 - Sep 7, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 14, 2021
|The Importance of owning a house
2 - There are 2 seperate sentence ideas here. This run-on is not good for the idea clarity in the...
Writing FeedbackDieulinhngoc27 - Sep 12, 2021 / Holt - Sep 13, 2021
|An aging population is one of the most alarming issues among the countries in this day and age
2 - The response format of the essay does not relate to the orginal discussion topic or discussion instructions. The presentation...
Writing FeedbackAntoshi123 - Sep 12, 2021 / Holt - Sep 13, 2021
|Why owning a home rather than renting one is important for people? Is this negative or positive?
2 - The prompt restatement veers away from the orginal presentation because, rather than simply restating the topic, the writer has...
Writing Feedbacktuna0709 - Sep 11, 2021 / Holt - Sep 13, 2021
|TASK 2; The idea that people should have their own house instead of renting one
3 - I think your whole idea was correct but the way you deliver the idea was incorrect and not in...
Writing FeedbackDungBui - Sep 7, 2021 / monicaaa0017 - Sep 12, 2021
|One of the most increasingly ubiquitous trends today is online shopping
2 - - Merits and drawbacks are in plural form. Therefore the plural form of the pronoun "this" must be...
Writing Feedbackgiang12345 - Sep 10, 2021 / Holt - Sep 11, 2021
|It is true that environmental problems are not received care enough from citizens
3 - Hi, I would like to point out your errors in your essay. 1. The first grammatical mistake is noticeable...
Writing Feedbacktramtrieu - Sep 9, 2021 / huyjunnie - Sep 11, 2021
|Information regarding the proportion of energy generated from 5 sources in New Zealand and Germany
Writing Feedbackhuyjunnie - Sep 5, 2021 / huyjunnie - Sep 10, 2021
|Report: Evaluation of the 'International food' course in the Superior school of cookery.
2 - Observations should be either positive or negative. These are not references to what was learned in class. Such a...
Writing Feedbackisamj - Sep 9, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|The bar graph below shows basic information about uses of leisure time among different age group.
2 - The writer used a topic restatement + opinion presentation for the first paragraph. A discussion format exclusive to the...
Writing Feedbackiraitc - Sep 8, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit.
2 - The paraphrase does not restate the original topic, nor any responses to the direct questions. The prompt restatement +...
Writing Feedbackaanh1009 - Sep 6, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|The line graph gives information about the fluctuations of food price index and average oil price
2 - There is a correlation measurement indicated in the original image. When the writer referred to the correlation, that specific...
Writing Feedbackthewind96 - Sep 9, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|Everyone should become vegetarian because a healthy meal does not necessarily require meat
2 - This has nothing to do with the discussion provided. References must be suitable to the given topic. In...
Writing Feedbackhieuhieu - Sep 9, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|Target: Band 7- Writing Task 2: The influence of technology to lifestyle
2 - There are 3 seperate ideas presented in this long sentence. one of the ideas are properly depicted in...
Writing Feedbackchieumap2110 - Sep 9, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|What should and should not be taught at school has been a perennial debate
2 - The prompt restatement must be a factual representation of the orginal within 2 sentences. No actual opinion coming from...
Writing Feedbackdomkhoa - Sep 7, 2021 / Holt - Sep 10, 2021
|Writing Task1 - conditions of an island before and after tourist facilities development
3 - The essay is not completed, I think it maybe a report more than an essay, since in reports con...
Writing Feedbackaqua97 - Sep 6, 2021 / isamj - Sep 9, 2021
|WRITING TASK 2: UNPAID WORK
3 - I think your conclusion is incomplete as it is supposed to be at least 2 sentences. You should accentuate...
Writing Feedbackphongthanh - Sep 7, 2021 / benedictandrew - Sep 9, 2021
|The figures for acid rain emissions per million tons in four different sectors in the United Kingdom
Writing Feedbackvuvu123 - Sep 6, 2021 / vuvu123 - Sep 9, 2021
|BEGINNER- WRITING TASK 2 - Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism
2 - An economic discussion was not stated in the original prompt. The reference is for a general advantage reference....
Writing FeedbackCloudyy93 - Sep 7, 2021 / Holt - Sep 9, 2021
|Writing Task 1: The reasons why adults take part in the course and how its cost should be shared
Writing Feedbacktienhoang2912 - Sep 5, 2021 / honglam10100 - Sep 9, 2021
|Youngsters who commit crimes should be treated by authorities in the same way as adults
2 - While the opinion of the writer is required, the format used is incomplete. The extent of (dis) agreement...
Writing Feedbacknguyenhuthao - Sep 6, 2021 / Holt - Sep 9, 2021
|Many people argue that high income is far more essential than job happiness
4 - Hi, I would like to give some feedback on your essay. 1. The first sentence of your introduction is...
Writing FeedbackTnhuuu - Sep 6, 2021 / huyjunnie - Sep 8, 2021
|The authorities ought to limit individual wages at a certain level
2 - This is a redundant reference. Many countries already implies a global coverage. simply place a comma at the...
Writing Feedbackrachel18 - Sep 6, 2021 / Holt - Sep 8, 2021
|IELTS 1: The bar chart depicts data about how many tons of waste was collected by recycling centre
3 - Thank you alot for your constructive comment^^ It really helps me ^^ Wish you have a nice day...
Writing Feedbacklequelamcute - Sep 5, 2021 / lequelamcute - Sep 8, 2021
|Different views about the funding of traffic system - money on railways or on new roads?
3 - The first paragraph seem like repeat the topic without reasons why you choose to expend much more money on...
Writing FeedbackTngiabao180904 - Sep 3, 2021 / DungBui - Sep 7, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TRAFFIC PROBLEMS AND SOLUTION
Writing Feedbackquynhnhule2705 - Sep 2, 2021 / DungBui - Sep 7, 2021
|Advertising as a compelling tool for convincing people to buy even unnecessary things
2 - The discussion is presented in current time form, not past time reference. Use the correct tense as indicated...
Writing Feedbackngoclee2001 - Sep 5, 2021 / Holt - Sep 7, 2021
|It is believed that children should start learning a foreign language at primary schools
2 - This response is meant for an extent of agreement or disagreement essay. It is improperly used in this...
Writing Feedbackchisu - Sep 5, 2021 / Holt - Sep 7, 2021
|Salary issue between famous athletes and other important professionals in society
NEW - Topic: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people...
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|IELTS 1: the first place Germans and Nigerians go to in order to access the news in a a typical week
3 - You should fix some mistakes: 1.[i]two countries 2. of the people because using expressing quantity with of, you need...
Writing FeedbackLiemLe - Sep 4, 2021 / thien le - Sep 6, 2021
|Is hard work always good? Children are told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough
3 - Your writing is good. The clarity was made OK, although there are some unsuitable word usage, but it did't...
Writing Feedbacktaylortran - Aug 31, 2021 / aanh1009 - Sep 5, 2021
|The number of students graduating from university in Canada in a period of 15 years
3 - You shouldn't put too much statistics in a Writing task 1 essay because this will bring fatigue for readers...
Writing FeedbackGoldengoat - Aug 29, 2021 / aanh1009 - Sep 5, 2021
|Parents put too much pressure on their children for their future. Reasons? Positives or negatives.
3 - I think the word "socialize" in the sentence "Especially under the standard of modern socialize..." is in an incorrect...
Writing Feedbackanna ruan - Sep 4, 2021 / benedictandrew - Sep 5, 2021
|Writing task 1 give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began
Writing Feedbackkimoanhisstudyin - Sep 4, 2021 / kimoanhisstudyin - Sep 5, 2021
|Why people lack interest in appreciating arts?
2 - Please use a thesis statement here. That would be 2 sentences composed of 1 response each. These topic...
Writing Feedbacktalia108 - Sep 4, 2021 / Holt - Sep 5, 2021
|The diagram illustrates the process of producing chocolate from cacao trees
2 - What kind of diagram? It is a drawing that explains a process, an illustration. This is more accurately...
Writing FeedbackMiyas - Sep 4, 2021 / Holt - Sep 5, 2021
|(Task 2) Government should fund skills training rather than university education. Agree/Disagree?
2 - The key phrase that needs to be represented in the response is "to what extent". While the writer produced...
Writing Feedbackhoshinokaabi - Sep 4, 2021 / Holt - Sep 5, 2021
|WRITING TASK 2: BALANCE BETWEEN WORK AND OTHER ASPECTS OF LIFE
Writing Feedbackhuyjunnie - Sep 1, 2021 / huyjunnie - Sep 5, 2021
|Car-free day is an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways
Writing Feedbackgintoki7 - Aug 17, 2021 / gintoki7 - Sep 5, 2021
|A ban on dangerous sports or freedom to do any sports or activity
3 - @Holt hello, i really appreciate your comments and one thing i want to explain is that all of the...
Writing Feedbackgintoki7 - Aug 21, 2021 / gintoki7 - Sep 5, 2021
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Public Transport, convenient metro
5 - Thank you guys so much for the suggestions! I've missed that! At first, I thought lightly of the Task...
Writing FeedbackAnthracene - Sep 2, 2021 / Anthracene - Sep 4, 2021
|Graduation from college versus possession of skills and experience
Writing Feedbackchichi1234567 - Sep 2, 2021 / chichi1234567 - Sep 4, 2021
|We should not and must not replace teachers with computers
2 - The first paragraph has conjunction usage enors and punctuation mark errors. The word"because" cannot be used to start a...
Writing FeedbackMinhiagoodwriter - Sep 3, 2021 / Holt - Sep 4, 2021
|Punishment is believed as requirement in educating a child on the differences between right and wron
2 - This is not partof the orginal presentation. Due to the siteis personal opinion being included here, the prompt...
Writing FeedbackAnita25 - Sep 3, 2021 / Holt - Sep 4, 2021
|Essay about scientific research were manage by the government or the private company
Writing Feedbackluoidoitenlamroi - Sep 1, 2021 / luoidoitenlamroi - Sep 4, 2021
|IELTS WRITING TEST - accepting a bad situation or trying to solve it somehow
2 - What is the writer's opinion? After the restated public opinion, the writer must present his thesis opinion as...
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