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|IELTS TASK 1: THE NUMBER OF EMPLOYEES AND FACTORIES IN ENGLAND AND WALES
Writing Feedbackamira11545 - Sep 2, 2019 / amira11545 - Sep 3, 2019
|Life is an adventurous journey that one cannot predict any obstacles having in the future.
2 - You repeat the word 'one' too many times in your essay. Try to rewrite your sentences using other words....
Writing FeedbackHOANG17 - Aug 30, 2019 / amira11545 - Sep 2, 2019
|How to become successful in sports?
2 - @alexyale Hi there. I'll be providing you with feedback on your essay. I hope that this will somehow help...
Writing Feedbackalexyale - Aug 28, 2019 / Maria - Sep 1, 2019
|Reply to an e-mail sent by the marketing director of the Classical Shakespeare Theatre of Bardville
2 - @jaypark00 Hi there. Welcome to the forum. I hope you find this feedback helpful for your writing endeavors. ...
Writing Feedbackjaypark00 - Aug 28, 2019 / Maria - Aug 31, 2019
|IELTS 2: Will all jobs eventually be done by artificially intelligent robots? Human vs machine.
2 - @TriceLiu Hi there! Let me provide you with feedback on your writing. You do quite well to list...
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 29, 2019 / rivathh - Aug 30, 2019
|IELTS Task 2: it is important to build more public parks and sport facilities than shopping centre
3 - @kev2 Thank you very much for your help. I have a terrible tendency of randomly changing the sentence tense....
Writing Feedbackhoaiduc2010 - Aug 29, 2019 / hoaiduc2010 - Aug 29, 2019
|Some think that people need to have simpler lifestyles in order to solve the environmental problems.
5 - Hello there, I appreciate for your ideas in the essays! Here are my suggestions. Feel free to change your...
Writing FeedbackWinter - Aug 25, 2019 / rivathh - Aug 29, 2019
|IELTS - TASK1: The diagram below shows the various stages involved in the production of beer
2 - @phminh271 Hi there. Welcome to the forum. I hope you find this feedback helpful in any way. The...
Writing Feedbackphminh271 - Aug 26, 2019 / Maria - Aug 29, 2019
|The proportion of the most popular sports played by boys and girls in New Zealand (IELTS 1)
2 - @kirstenlee Hi there. Welcome to the forum. I hope you find this feedback helpful for your writing endeavors. ...
Writing Feedbackkirstenlee - Aug 25, 2019 / Maria - Aug 29, 2019
|Senior-level workers - IELTS Writing Task 2- Opinion Essay
2 - Hi there, You have demonstrated a decent vocabulary and command of grammar in the essay. However, the...
Writing Feedbackthekingmindaugas - Aug 26, 2019 / TriceLiu - Aug 29, 2019
|On Tackling Congestion in Chinese Cities
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Aug 22, 2019 / TriceLiu - Aug 29, 2019
|Government should spent sufficient amount of money on development and promotion of arts and artists
2 - I think you spent to much space in the first paragraph. The first paragraph should just be an introduction...
Writing Feedbackmathew123 - Aug 25, 2019 / razor0424 - Aug 29, 2019
|What are the most important characteristics a successful businessman has ? (~100 words)
2 - Hi @Kyle123 "Another characteristic that push an ..." The plural verb push does not appear to agree...
Writing FeedbackKyle123 - Aug 27, 2019 / cornel - Aug 27, 2019
|It is sometimes said that a high salary is the most important factor. IELTS WRITTING TASK2
2 - In modern time --> in the modern word/ in modern times Most people believed key element in all...
Writing Feedbackalmee2003 - Aug 27, 2019 / amira11545 - Aug 27, 2019
|TASK: Some people think that one should retire at the age of 65.
3 - @kev2 Para 1: reap the benefits of sth. Para 2: What did you mean "the others", better use just...
Writing Feedbackkev2 - Aug 24, 2019 / zcs2008china - Aug 27, 2019
|Both passion and colleague relationship might influence people's enjoyment of a job.
2 - Grammar error Interested in Feel the warmth In a nutshell is a informal style you should use in conclusion...
Writing Feedbackjocelyne001 - Aug 22, 2019 / Winter - Aug 27, 2019
|How the agriculture, manufacturing, business and financial services contributed to British economy
3 - @zcs2008china Thank you so much. I will more practice. Do you think this part "this situation reversed in the...
Writing FeedbackNathan_long - Aug 26, 2019 / Nathan_long - Aug 27, 2019
|Writing task 1 the charts below information about USA and marriage and divorcee
2 - As far as I concerned this is a good sample for writing task 1. However, you should consider writing...
Writing FeedbackSanis - Aug 25, 2019 / thekingmindaugas - Aug 26, 2019
|Writing part 2 IELTS , SCIENTIES TO MAKE POSITIVE CHANGES TO THE WORLD
2 - There are a number of downsides ... First, in technological development that may put people ... In fact The...
Writing FeedbackThao456 - Aug 24, 2019 / KeeneSapphire - Aug 26, 2019
|The two bar charts compare four levels of residents' weights in Charlestown by percentage
2 - Your whole essay is good, it explains the context accurately and precisely. The only thing I noticed is that...
Writing Feedbackjocelyne001 - Aug 21, 2019 / KeeneSapphire - Aug 26, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 : SPENDING ON CONSUMER GOODS IN FRANCE AND THE UK- BAR CHART
2 - I think that you should not use "opposing to" and use "while" instead in the first line of the...
Writing Feedbackamira11545 - Aug 23, 2019 / kirstenlee - Aug 25, 2019
|Ielts Writing task 2- Banning the use of mobile phones
Writing FeedbackHuyBryce - Aug 19, 2019 / HuyBryce - Aug 25, 2019
|An argument over the issue of whether teenagers should have a job while they are still students
Writing FeedbackKhanhlinh2401 - Aug 24, 2019 / Khanhlinh2401 - Aug 25, 2019
|30-year price of three food product groups and CPI in The Line Chart
2 - hi, please note the following ... fluctuated from 1978 to 2009.This statement is incorrect as all lines show...
Writing Feedbackiamxuu - Aug 20, 2019 / ahsan_daniyal - Aug 24, 2019
|IELTS task 1 - the forest areas over the world - statistics and comparison
Writing Feedbackminhnhat97hmu - Aug 24, 2019 / minhnhat97hmu - Aug 24, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1: OVERSEAS RESIDENTS VISITING AUSTRALIA IN TWO SPECIFIC YEARS
4 - @Helen Neleh the author used intro-overview-body structure to accomplish the task。It's totally acceptable。 I wouldn't use depict， this word...
Writing Feedbackamira11545 - Aug 24, 2019 / zcs2008china - Aug 24, 2019
|Besides reading, writing, and Math, the computer skills can be also necessary for a child
3 - @vuvietha There are or is， both are correct。 I searched up and asked few local friends to clarify which...
Writing Feedbackzcs2008china - Aug 22, 2019 / zcs2008china - Aug 24, 2019
|IELTS - using laptops and mobile phones, during lessons is a good way to encourage children to learn
5 - some suggestions for you. - ... gadgets like laptops, computers and mobile phones is a good ... >>the word...
Writing FeedbackJane Wong - Aug 20, 2019 / Helen Neleh - Aug 24, 2019
|Pie charts - Result of surveys of visitor satisfaction-IELTS Writing task 1
3 - Before the refurbishment, ... It should have been " the survey reported that dissatisfied people accounted for 40% of...
Writing FeedbackRhiza - Aug 18, 2019 / amira11545 - Aug 24, 2019
|Some people believe that the host country should welcome cultural differences.
7 - ... believe that tourists should ... and don't do wrong things. ( replace it by a more academic phrase...
Writing FeedbackKerlion - Aug 15, 2019 / amira11545 - Aug 23, 2019
|In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. Causes and effects?
3 - Nowadays, it is experienced that... ( I just think that using " perceived" is way better ) ... those...
Writing FeedbackVivian0209 - Aug 22, 2019 / amira11545 - Aug 23, 2019
|IELTS Writing Task 2 -Task: describe your opinion of sense of competition or co-operation is better
2 - @longman2270 Hi there. I'll assist you in this by providing feedback on this essay. I find the first...
Writing Feedbacklongman2270 - Aug 23, 2019 / Maria - Aug 23, 2019
|The line graph illustrates data on how much car commuter in Britain (1990-2030)
2 - Hello In the first paragraph, you wrote data on how much car commuter which has different meaning from...
Writing FeedbackNgocnam2k - Aug 21, 2019 / jocelyne001 - Aug 22, 2019
|The question - what is the right age for the children to start learning a new language
5 - @kev2 I think using only 2 sentences for the first paragraph is enough. Perhaps you can write like: "People...
Writing Feedbackkev2 - Aug 20, 2019 / Veranda - Aug 21, 2019
|Essay about the air pollutants in UK
Writing Feedbackanhxinh99 - Aug 20, 2019 / TriceLiu - Aug 21, 2019
|Do the advantages of learning a foreign language at primary school outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - Hello~ I only have two suggestions. I think you can add a little explanation about why people have...
Writing FeedbackVeranda - Aug 20, 2019 / jocelyne001 - Aug 20, 2019
|Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city
Writing Feedbackvuvietha - Aug 19, 2019 / vuvietha - Aug 20, 2019
|Working before studying - paper
Writing FeedbackCuong Trinh - Aug 19, 2019 / Cuong Trinh - Aug 20, 2019
|UK school spending - How to describe a pie chart in Ielts 8 writing task 1 ?
Writing FeedbackKaren Chick TY - Aug 13, 2019 / Karen Chick TY - Aug 19, 2019
|Letter to a friend asking for help with translation of documents
3 - @coke Hi there. Thanks for consistently being a member of the forum. I hope you're doing well. I'll try...
Writing Feedbackcoke - Aug 19, 2019 / Maria - Aug 19, 2019
|Ielts writing task 2 - technology impact on tradition
4 - @coke OK~thank you! I think maybe I should add more details there to explain my idea, so it would...
Writing Feedbackjocelyne001 - Aug 19, 2019 / jocelyne001 - Aug 19, 2019
|You have seen an advertisement for a weekend job as a local tour guide showing visitors the city
Writing FeedbackQuoccuong - Aug 16, 2019 / coke - Aug 19, 2019
|Work commuting transportation - Ielts writing task 1 pie charts
Writing Feedbackjocelyne001 - Aug 18, 2019 / jocelyne001 - Aug 19, 2019
|Factors contributing to job satisfaction and the prospect of job satisfaction for all workers.
Writing FeedbackVeranda - Aug 18, 2019 / Veranda - Aug 18, 2019
|Essay about climate change and bringing awareness. (Rough Draft)
3 - @landon7192 Hi. Welcome, dear! All of this feedback is geared towards helping you in your writing endeavors. I hope...
Writing Feedbacklandon7192 - Aug 17, 2019 / Maria - Aug 18, 2019
|How to convince about an Open Education Organization's activities and goals
2 - @masomakarimi Welcome to the forum! We're always open to people who are willing to learn. If you find this...
Writing Feedbackmasomakarimi - Aug 18, 2019 / Maria - Aug 18, 2019
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: children are becoming overweight and unhealthy
4 - @longbango Hi there. Welcome to the forum. If you find this feedback helpful, I hope you come back for...
Writing Feedbacklongbango - Aug 16, 2019 / Maria - Aug 18, 2019
|An opinion: if someone pays for a private school, he or she also supports the state education system
3 - @emins Hello! I have some suggestions to improve your essay. 1. You should not explain anything in the introductory...
Writing Feedbackemins - Aug 17, 2019 / Veranda - Aug 18, 2019
|IELTS Task1: the number of visitors and result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were
3 - Thank you so much Maria! Your suggestion is really helpful for me. Can you also give me some comment...
Writing Feedbackanggietw - Aug 16, 2019 / anggietw - Aug 18, 2019
|A good sports person or musician are born or can be taught?
Writing FeedbackVeranda - Aug 17, 2019 / Veranda - Aug 18, 2019
|Ielts writing task 2: education distance learning is quite efficient and convenient
Writing Feedbackjocelyne001 - Aug 17, 2019 / jocelyne001 - Aug 18, 2019
|The report about ten nations dominating the world in the rice industry in thousands of tons
Writing FeedbackHannah Trang - Aug 16, 2019 / Hannah Trang - Aug 18, 2019
|IELTS Writing TASK 1: Languages with the most native speakers
Writing FeedbackDanggDang - Aug 17, 2019 / DanggDang - Aug 18, 2019
|Families who send their children to private school shouldn't pay taxes that support education system
5 - You should try avoiding using in conclusion as a way to close your essay out you want to have...
Writing FeedbackTrinhca - Aug 14, 2019 / colt2002 - Aug 17, 2019
|IELTS Task1: Money Spent and Consumption of Fast Food in Britian
2 - @Rae Zhang Hello. Welcome here. I hope you're doing well in your learning journey. If you find this feedback...
Writing FeedbackRae Zhang - Aug 16, 2019 / Maria - Aug 17, 2019
|IELTS TASK 1 (GENERAL) You are studying for a qualification, and you need some time off work
2 - @KAURNAVI Hello. It's nice to see people constantly coming back to the forum. I hope you find this feedback...
Writing FeedbackKAURNAVI - Aug 16, 2019 / Maria - Aug 17, 2019
|Essay task 1 : the change in percentage of people joinning in seven sports in an European country
2 - @ronaldocr9803 Hi. Welcome to the forum! I hope you find this feedback helpful. If you do, you can come...
Writing Feedbackronaldocr9803 - Aug 16, 2019 / Maria - Aug 17, 2019
|ESSAY ABOUT INVESTING TO FAST-TRAIN OR PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION
2 - Hi, your writing is enjoyable to read but some suggestions are as follows: 1. A few grammatical corrections:...
Writing FeedbackGotoIelts - Aug 16, 2019 / TriceLiu - Aug 16, 2019
|The climate changing - even more crucial than species extinction?
4 - With the advent of technology, environmental problems affecting the earth inadequately. One of these troubles is the loss of...
Writing Feedbackf22542727 - Aug 14, 2019 / KAURNAVI - Aug 16, 2019
|WRITING IELTS TASK 1: The process of milk production
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