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Does societal impact matter more than families' guidance?

2 - In my opinion, the prompt restatement is incorrect. The original prompt refers to the general development of the child...

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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a Euro countries

2 - While the word count is acceptable at 190 words, the essay is still not well presented. The summary overview...

Writing FeedbackLe Nhung - Dec 7, 2024 / Holt - Dec 9, 2024
The Importance of Ethics in Society

2 - As a research outline, I would have to say that the premise of the discussion paragraphs are sound. They...

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Narrative Essay - New beginning of my life

3 - I like the way you are able to express deep emotions and feelings in the text, as if you...

Writing FeedbackThaodang - Dec 6, 2024 / Edukid2309 - Dec 8, 2024
restaurant is my favourite place!

3 - There seem to be a lot of grammatical mistakes. Besides, you can try to clarify some points to make...

Writing FeedbackTony1324565242 - Dec 4, 2024 / Edukid2309 - Dec 8, 2024
Statement of Purpose on Computer Science, PhD

3 - @Holt Thanks for your response! I'll put it clearer about the purpose of my study. It seems that...

Writing FeedbackXrchitect - Dec 5, 2024 / Xrchitect - Dec 7, 2024
Eng102 Social media and its effects on children.

2 - In the second paragraph, you should take the opportunity to discuss the sorts of mental and physical problems that...

Writing FeedbackWebDesignStudent - Dec 4, 2024 / Holt - Dec 5, 2024
Talent vs hard wordk - IELTS 2

3 - Speaking as someone who took IELTS just a year ago, I think you could improve the writing by expanding...

Writing Feedbackhaiyen221203 - Nov 24, 2024 / jakartainrain - Dec 1, 2024
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited

2 - The response is too short and will receive word count deductions. You are not even close to the 250...

Writing FeedbackEmmachou1792 - Nov 28, 2024 / Holt - Nov 28, 2024
Should High school education be mandatory?

2 - As a task 2 essay of only 200 words, you can expect to gain an automatic failing score for...

Writing Feedbackanishawriting - Nov 27, 2024 / Holt - Nov 28, 2024
How family courts are failing domestic violence survivors and their families.

2 - Wow! You are opening with a very strong argumentative opinion here. You obviously feel so strongly about the topic...

Writing Feedbackellie1234 - Nov 25, 2024 / Holt - Nov 26, 2024
People would always choose a life without work rather than working most of the time. Agree/ disagree

2 - The prompt restatement is confusing. You seem to have suddenly changed the information presentation in the first sentence. Almost...

Writing FeedbackJohn Pham - Nov 24, 2024 / Holt - Nov 25, 2024
Free theme narrative story (Grim of the schools)

2 - The dialogue is wooden in nature. It is not natural sounding nor does it come across as everyday discussion...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Nov 24, 2024 / Holt - Nov 25, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2 : Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animals

4 - @Heidi_han Thanks for your suggestion!...

Writing Feedbacksylvie813 - Nov 11, 2024 / sylvie813 - Nov 21, 2024
Mindset for IELTS 1 (Describing maps, p.34)

2 - The summary overview is a little bit inaccurate. The map shows that the 2 versions represent the layout from...

Writing Feedbackchuduythuc - Nov 21, 2024 / Holt - Nov 21, 2024
IELTS 1 - Bar Chart (Weekly Income Change Over Time)

3 - You can try to expand the comparison range, which involves comparing not just the spending in both years in...

Writing FeedbackTaldi - Nov 19, 2024 / Edukid2309 - Nov 20, 2024
Free theme narrative story (THE RED JUICE)

2 - A narrative story is usually written from a personal perspective and uses the first person pronoun for the most...

Writing FeedbackEdukid2309 - Nov 17, 2024 / Holt - Nov 17, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems?

2 - This is your personal opinion as the writer of the opinion paper. Therefore, it cannot be mixed into...

Writing FeedbackNaomie - Nov 16, 2024 / Holt - Nov 17, 2024
Physical Education should remain in schools

2 - Since you are dabbling in the history of Physical Education, you should go to the start of the...

Writing Feedbackmartinezalex1649 - Nov 16, 2024 / Holt - Nov 17, 2024
ENG 102 - Fast Fashion Should Be Regulated

2 - Since this is supposed to be a research paper, it is important that you separate yourself as the...

Writing Feedbackacalado - Nov 14, 2024 / Holt - Nov 14, 2024
Writing task 1: The chart below shows the percentage of different types of household waste

2 - Kindly rewrite this practice test to achieve the proper maximum word count for the task 1 essay. This should...

Writing Feedbackdller - Nov 11, 2024 / Holt - Nov 13, 2024
Why are so many medical assistants and nurses facing burnout? Eng assignment

2 - Reverse the presentation. Give the signs and symptoms of a burn out first, then provide the medical definition....

Writing Feedbackarohr123 - Nov 10, 2024 / Holt - Nov 12, 2024
Argumentative Essay - Social Media is Bad for Youth

3 - @User123kad - begin by acknowledging both positive and negative aspects of social media - use this balance to lead...

Writing FeedbackUser123kad - Nov 10, 2024 / woodg - Nov 11, 2024
The importance of Preschool Education

2 - One way of improving this paper would be to introduce the importance of pre-school education in a historical context....

Writing FeedbackTICL - Nov 3, 2024 / Holt - Nov 3, 2024
Ietls writing about the consumption and production of potato

2 - Since you are giving a summary of the information provided, you always need to be specific about regional...

Writing FeedbackCrimsonHydra - Nov 1, 2024 / Holt - Nov 2, 2024
Relationship Buillding and Shared Learning; CHEVENING

2 - While I am not discounting the importance of the relationship you built while you were in college, that is...

Writing Feedbackkhadijatbello - Nov 1, 2024 / Holt - Nov 1, 2024
Leadership is about finding a vacuum and mounting the courage to fill that space. - CHEVENING

4 - Thank you for the feedback, I will effect the changes...

Writing Feedbackfaisalidina - Oct 31, 2024 / faisalidina - Nov 1, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2 : Solving environmental problems should be the responsibility of.....

2 - The work you have done deviates from the original writing instruction. You were being asked for an agree or...

Writing Feedbackhuyhuy - Oct 31, 2024 / Holt - Oct 31, 2024
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will soon be no role for the teacher

2 - The response essay is a bit too short for a task 2 essay. Yes, it does surpass the minimum...

Writing Feedbackminhngoc12 - Oct 30, 2024 / Holt - Oct 31, 2024
In most countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more available.

2 - This essay length cannot be completed during the actual test. It is almost 400 words long, which means that...

Writing Feedbacknguyenthitamthu - Oct 27, 2024 / Holt - Oct 27, 2024
IELTS writing task 1: The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold

2 - Kindly be conscious of the summary overview sentence requirement. In order to score well in terms of preliminary TA,...

Writing Feedbackkamenrider2k - Oct 24, 2024 / Holt - Oct 25, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2:People becoming interested in the history of the house or building they live in

6 - You can change the second part of the introduction to: This essay will examine the impetus behind this phenomenon...

Writing FeedbackBelinda0807 - Oct 2, 2024 / a_sm - Oct 23, 2024
Most career choices demand vocational skills or specialist knowledge.

2 - Do not place your personal opinion at the start of the prompt restatement. That will create a topic...

Writing Feedbackquansjd - Oct 22, 2024 / Holt - Oct 23, 2024
Freedom to dress, agree and disagree

2 - I am not sure if you wrote this statement as a part of your English writing exercise or if...

Writing Feedbackhado21125 - Oct 22, 2024 / Holt - Oct 22, 2024
The graph below shows the changes in UK birth rate of women in 6 different age groups

2 - There is a 40 word minimum requirement for the summary overview of the task 1 essay. In order to...

Writing Feedbackvietkit28 - Oct 22, 2024 / Holt - Oct 22, 2024
In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects.

2 - I believe that the prompt you are trying to respond to is as follows: In some secondary schools,...

Writing Feedbackbeden - Oct 22, 2024 / Holt - Oct 22, 2024
The graph shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000

2 - The summary overview is incomplete and improperly formatted. This paragraph should have a minimum of 2 sentences in it....

Writing FeedbackNguyen James - Oct 21, 2024 / Holt - Oct 22, 2024
Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.

2 - The essay will receive an automatic failing score since it only has over 230 words in it. By not...

Writing Feedbackphanhobaoan - Oct 20, 2024 / Holt - Oct 20, 2024
International tourism - Advantages/Disadvantages

2 - This response. which is not aligned with the target format for the task accuracy considerations will get the...

Writing Feedbackesswri123 - Oct 19, 2024 / Holt - Oct 20, 2024
The given line graph compares the quantities of three companies' waste output for 15 years

2 - Please be guided regarding the word count when accomplishing the task 1 essay. You should be writing within the...

Writing FeedbackDinhthy - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 18, 2024
Living in a country as a non-native language speaker

2 - Avoid referring to people using pronouns in a Task 2 essay. That is because you must write from a...

Writing FeedbackYusuf Momani - Oct 16, 2024 / Holt - Oct 17, 2024
Grandma and quilting - my personal essay for college

3 - @Holt Reflect on something that someone has done for you that has made you happy or thankful in a...

Writing Feedbackelizabethki - Oct 15, 2024 / elizabethki - Oct 16, 2024
What determines success in life? - opinion essay

3 - @Holt please help me give another essay basing on mine...

Writing Feedbackkimanhlee - Oct 14, 2024 / kimanhlee - Oct 15, 2024
The proportion of dramatic, fantasy films and comedies - Mix Bar graphs

2 - The essay is overwritten at 207 words. The maximum allowable word count for the task 1 essay is 200...

Writing Feedbacklinhiu - Oct 13, 2024 / Holt - Oct 13, 2024
Task2: Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet instead of in books.

2 - I believe that I have already warned you about including a personal opinion at the start of the...

Writing FeedbackHelen335 - Oct 13, 2024 / Holt - Oct 13, 2024
Editing help about table description "trend"

2 - Try to gain more C+C points in the summary overview section by dividing the thoughts/information into at least 3...

Writing Feedbackdieulinh0606 - Oct 10, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar -

2 - Read the original prompt. It is written in the past tense format. Therefore, your writing format should follow...

Writing Feedbackphuthanhngoc - Oct 8, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
Task 2: Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work

2 - Do not make it a habit to misrepresent the original statement in your paraphrasing. This time, the presentation...

Writing FeedbackHelen335 - Oct 8, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
Task 2: Climate change has a negative impact, while others think it providdes more opportunities

2 - This is not supported in the original statement. Examiners will view this as a personal opinion on your...

Writing FeedbackHelen335 - Oct 8, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
Task 2: In many countries, mainly tourists, but not local people, visit museums and historical sites

2 - There is no such phrase in English. Did you mean "worthy of concern" instead? Remember that just because...

Writing FeedbackHelen335 - Oct 8, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
Writing task 2: Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life.

2 - I am not sure why you are referring to the whole world and many countries in your restatement...

Writing Feedbackthaonhu - Oct 8, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
discuss: public libraries or digital information

2 - Ramifications connotes a negative or unwelcome event. You are going to find yourself with LR deductions along with...

Writing Feedbackminahtran - Oct 6, 2024 / Holt - Oct 12, 2024
The table shows information and predictions regarding the changes in percentage of the population

4 - Hello Your essay is very similar to mine when I did the IELTS test. I had 7.5 on my...

Writing Feedbackpotatogoubi - Oct 5, 2024 / Momovich - Oct 11, 2024
Writing task 2: Many people believe that there should be only one world legal system

2 - Think is not the same as "believe". The term "think" leaves room for doubt while "believe" does not....

Writing Feedbackdangnhatanh - Oct 5, 2024 / Holt - Oct 10, 2024
Communications between different parts of the world

2 - There is no need to mention individuals in this instance since there was no reference to it in...

Writing Feedbackxoeyielts - Oct 4, 2024 / Holt - Oct 10, 2024
Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news

4 - In the sentence 'In conclusion, while there are mixed opinions on determining whether using newspapers or other media for...

Writing FeedbackTuantienti - Sep 25, 2024 / Helen335 - Oct 8, 2024
Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment

3 - In the sentence 'However, humans can take measures to address these problems,' consider specifying what types of measures could...

Writing Feedbackhalinhislearning - Oct 3, 2024 / Helen335 - Oct 8, 2024
The Death Penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

5 - In the sentence 'To begin, it's undeniable that the death is penalty is partly useful for reducing dangerous crimes,'...

Writing FeedbackMandamy - Oct 3, 2024 / Helen335 - Oct 8, 2024
Why do we need music? Is a country's traditional music more important than international music

5 - In the sentence 'Firstly, Some Asian conventional styles still keep outdated lyrics that are more sexual than accepted in...

Writing FeedbackDaves - Sep 28, 2024 / Helen335 - Oct 8, 2024
In order to study at university, students is required to pay expensive tuition fees.

3 - In the sentence 'However, some individuals think that the abolition of tuition fees play an important role to make...

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