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|FCE ESSAY"Some people say that using the internet is the best way of learning things. Do you agree?"
2 - There is a specific way of discussing an FCE essay. It has to do with specific topic considerations provided...
Writing Feedbackthatkrisss - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Sports Betting essay, argumentative essay
2 - When referring to the Supreme Court decision in 2018, do not forget to die the case record including the...
Writing Feedbackmartinc2 - Oct 29, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|What are the reasons for the rise in obesity? How could it be tackle?
2 - When reading the restatement and writer's opinion, the examiner will see that the writer does not fully grasp the...
Writing FeedbackTranthitragiang - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 29, 2022
|Some believe that newspapers and TV programs are pointless because it's irrelevant to people's lives
2 - The main score reduction will occur in this essay not due to the irrelevancy of the discussion because the...
Writing Feedbackimdduongg267 - Oct 28, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|IELTS 2: Many people use written language in a less formal way and in a relaxed way than in the past
2 - There are 3 responses that need to be addressed by the first paragraph. As listed, these scoring requirements are:...
Writing Feedbackphuong132001 - Oct 27, 2022 / Holt - Oct 28, 2022
|[IELTS - TASK 1] The line graph of tourists to Scotland.
6 - "the survey's years, while the figure of " "undergoing a few minor factors, it .." => no "it", use...
Writing Feedbackhoanghailhp - Oct 16, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - I need some comments about grammar. Topic is about the use of the internet
4 - "with a dramatic rise was seen in Canada" "in Mexico was consistently the lowest" "while Mexico seen saw/witnessed an.."...
Writing Feedbacklequy1209 - Oct 18, 2022 / nataliely - Oct 27, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: OLDER GENERATIONS' TRADITIONAL MORAL CODES
3 - Add a thesis statement that summarises what your essay is about and has your view on it For the...
Writing Feedbacktheinvisible - Oct 19, 2022 / randombrowngirl - Oct 27, 2022
|Online education is becoming more and more popular. Discuss about their advantages and disadvantages
2 - Since online education is already an existing phenomenon, it is incorrect for the student to structure the introductory sentence...
Writing FeedbackSelina3010 - Oct 23, 2022 / Holt - Oct 23, 2022
|Parents who have children in private schools should be taxed to support the state education system
Writing FeedbackBer04 - Oct 22, 2022 / Holt - Oct 23, 2022
|Some workers choose to dedicate their professional life to one corporation only, others switch jobs
2 - Avoid overwriting a task 2 essay. Specially when the writer is not even sure if he is actually following...
Writing Feedbacksunrisenguyen - Oct 21, 2022 / Holt - Oct 21, 2022
|Ielts writing task 2 - pros and cons of scientific research made by private companies
Writing Feedbackhonhung - Oct 20, 2022 / Holt - Oct 21, 2022
|Should universities ensure a completely equitable distribution of students in every subject?
2 - The writer will lose points for not properly restating the simple, one liner topic sentence as provided. The first...
Writing FeedbackChu Thuong - Oct 19, 2022 / Holt - Oct 20, 2022
|Writing task2: rails or roads - what government should concentrate on?
NEW - SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE GOVERNMENT SHOULD SPEND MONEY ON BUILDING TRAIN AND SUBWAY LINES TO REDUCE TRAFFIC CONGESTION. OTHERS THINK...
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|Is international sports event suitable for a country or not? Discuss both views
3 - Here is my advice: this a discuss both views and state your opinion essay so you should discuss both...
Writing Feedbackchienng - Oct 17, 2022 / kkkfg - Oct 18, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ADVERTISING
NEW - These days consumers are faced with an increasing amount of advertising from various companies. To what extent do you...
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|[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] - NUMBER OF TOURISTS VISITING A CARIBBEAN ISLAND (2010 - 2017)
3 - I think you were misunderstanding the graph information so therefore your overview and comparison were wrong. The time in...
Writing Feedbackdarrenshan97 - Oct 12, 2022 / DanielDang - Oct 16, 2022
|The graphs below depict changes in household size, time spent cleaning, and ownership of electrical
3 - I think you have skipped too many details of the graph and therefore it made your idea become confusing...
Writing Feedbacknhinhinhi223 - Oct 13, 2022 / DanielDang - Oct 16, 2022
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Improving the environment, should individuals leave only to big corps + govs?
NEW - Question: Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference....
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|Writing task 2: Should information about scientific research business and academic world be shared?
2 - The prompt restatement will receive a failing preliminary score because of 2 reasons: 1. It does not clearly and...
Writing FeedbackNguyettrang - Oct 12, 2022 / Holt - Oct 13, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away
2 - There is no need to attest to the reality of the topic provided for the discussion. There is no...
Writing Feedbacklanlan8898283 - Oct 12, 2022 / Holt - Oct 13, 2022
|Some education systems make student focus on certain subjects at the age of 15 while others require
2 - Okay. The writer understands the subject of the discussion but did not provide the 3 explanatory statements as required...
Writing Feedbackphn0108 - Oct 12, 2022 / Holt - Oct 12, 2022
|[Ielts task 2] The most important consideration when choosing any career or jobs is having a high in
2 - The response of the writer to the question is incomplete. He ommitted responding to the "To what extent?" question...
Writing Feedbacklantern - Oct 12, 2022 / Holt - Oct 12, 2022
|[IELTS WTITING 1] the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994
2 - I would like to focus my review primarily on the summary overview presentation as this represents a large portion,...
Writing Feedbackalexwriteb - Oct 12, 2022 / Holt - Oct 12, 2022
|Katherine Johnson; pick one woman in history or fiction to converse with - Barnard College prompt
2 - My opinion is that this statement can do with some revisions. For starters, the first paragraph needs to be...
Writing Feedbacksockofate - Oct 11, 2022 / Holt - Oct 12, 2022
|Writing task2: taxing industries as a good way to protect environment
3 - You seems to overlook the clarity of your points. In the second parapraph, "these renewable...green industry" => in which...
Writing Feedbackkkkfg - Oct 9, 2022 / Charles Le - Oct 12, 2022
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] An overview on how the island has changed in the aspect of tourist facilities
2 - The immediate thing that hit me upon scanning this report is that the writer does not know how to...
Writing FeedbackTRUNG QUY - Oct 10, 2022 / Holt - Oct 10, 2022
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of children having a school uniform?
2 - The prompt restatement of the student should have been clearer in reference to the original prompt. The given sentences...
Writing Feedbackkhangpt2k6 - Oct 9, 2022 / Holt - Oct 10, 2022
|History has become a core subject at high school. However, some say it should be an optional subject
2 - The first 2 sentences in the prompt restatement could cause the paragraph to receive a failing score due to...
Writing Feedbackanh123456 - Oct 9, 2022 / Holt - Oct 10, 2022
|Teenagers spend a lot of time watching Tiktok. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
2 - The examiner may not consider this essay as properly developed and discussed as the advantage and disadvantage paragraphs were...
Writing FeedbackBuckwheat - Oct 9, 2022 / Holt - Oct 10, 2022
|[IELTS WTITING 1] the percentage of sea food imports from three countries to the UK
2 - The essay appears to be 2 words short of the 150 minimum presentation. So there will be word count...
Writing Feedbackwritea - Oct 9, 2022 / Holt - Oct 9, 2022
|Do you agree that music is a good way to bring people in different cultures and ages together?
2 - The topic is not a restatement but an opinion presentation of the writer which is not the expected interpretation...
Writing Feedbackhominhhieu2506 - Oct 8, 2022 / Holt - Oct 9, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Is the Internet "Making Us Stupid"?
2 - The writer has shown that there was no double checking of the information written prior to the submission of...
Writing FeedbackIris HSIEH - Oct 8, 2022 / Holt - Oct 9, 2022
|IELTS writing task 1 with a line graph about carbon dioxide emission
3 - This essay can not see the clear analysis or outlines of the graph, maybe because it is too detailed...
Writing Feedbacklittlered990 - Oct 7, 2022 / Iris HSIEH - Oct 8, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: ONLINE COURSES NEVER BE AS GOOD AS IN-PERSON COURSES
3 - The first paragraph is not clear and misleading. To paraphrase the question as the topic sentence will be better....
Writing FeedbackAnnaDao - Oct 7, 2022 / Iris HSIEH - Oct 8, 2022
|IELTS Task 2 - Online communication is breaking down geographical barriers and enabling people
Writing FeedbackXuan Son - Oct 8, 2022 / Holt - Oct 8, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: CHEAP TOURISM
2 - The writer has taken an incorrect approach to the discussion. This is actually a comparison essay based upon the...
Writing FeedbackAmerianna - Oct 7, 2022 / Holt - Oct 8, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: IS READING BETTER THAN WATCHING TV?
2 - The writer has not correctly represented the idea for discussion. A topic was presented as a discussion point, not...
Writing FeedbackGabriell - Oct 5, 2022 / Holt - Oct 7, 2022
|The annual rice production of 4 countries
2 - While the essay can still be completed using lesser words, the writer did a pretty good job of completing...
Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Oct 6, 2022 / Holt - Oct 7, 2022
|Ielts writing task 2 - Knowledge gained from personal experience and from classroom instruction
2 - The writer missed the point of the discussion. While his perspective tries to covers the general assessment or public...
Writing Feedbackanhvancao - Oct 6, 2022 / Holt - Oct 7, 2022
|The line chart shows the amount of income from movie theatre ticket and DVD sales in The USA
2 - The essay is overwritten and does not follow the maximum 200 word compliance for the reporting essay. While it...
Writing Feedbacknmduc1276 - Oct 6, 2022 / Holt - Oct 7, 2022
|The line graph illustrates the number of users of five (distinguish) distinguished communication
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|Writing a summary on 2 news articles about obesity
Writing FeedbackDts007 - Sep 30, 2022 / Dts007 - Oct 5, 2022
|(IELTS WRITING TASK 2) Famous for being famous
5 - Lemme help you correct some of your mistakes: 1st paragraph: not for one's accomplishments but for publicity stunts: it...
Writing Feedbackcnc1996 - Oct 4, 2022 / Gabriell - Oct 5, 2022
|Ielts Writing task 2: Factors when choosing a job; salary as the top priority?
5 - boost them to work harder -> (collocational problems) to be better versions of themself themselves My...
Writing FeedbackGiangGiang - Oct 1, 2022 / cnc1996 - Oct 5, 2022
|IElTS WRITTING TASK 2 - SUCCESS TOPIC. Do you think wealth the best measure of success?
3 - happiness are is a crucial factor a businessman who always lives in Recent marriage surveys conducted in America...
Writing FeedbackGozilla - Oct 2, 2022 / cnc1996 - Oct 5, 2022
|It is widely believed nowadays that social knowledge and the ability to adapt in a changing society
3 - I think your essay is divided into too many paragraph. To be more specific, each paragraph should contain at...
Writing Feedbackphongmai0301 - Oct 4, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Oct 4, 2022
|Some individuals like to put more effort in their work
5 - The second paragraph is somewhat weak and confusing. For example, the causality between hardworking and obesity is based on...
Writing Feedbackdinhpham - Sep 19, 2022 / Dts007 - Oct 2, 2022
|Books on online platforms or traditional, paper books (ielts essay)
2 - The essay properly responded to the discussion question. It created a very strong restatement and personal opinion. The personal...
Writing Feedbackhgthng1010 - Sep 29, 2022 / Holt - Sep 30, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TENDENCY TO BE SELF-EMPLOYED.
3 - In your third paragraph, when you said " to begin with, if someone does not have enough" This statement...
Writing FeedbackGabriell - Sep 27, 2022 / Chukwuagozie - Sep 29, 2022
|(WT2) Children spent hours on their smartphones every day
2 - This is a failing essay that will not receive a passing score based on one specific reason. The writer...
Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
|The gender distribution of Australians doing regular physical activities in 2010
3 - I think your should do your Overview more clearly. Well, I mean that in an Overview, people usually overview...
Writing Feedbackhoangtubongdem - Sep 27, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022
|The given diagram interprets the cyclical procedure of reprocessing plastic bottles. (IELTS TASK 1)
3 - Well, in my opinion, you should mix the Introduction part and the Overview together so that the essay will...
Writing FeedbackNammanly - Sep 28, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022
|[IELTS WTITING 1] the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015
Writing Feedbackchillout - Sep 28, 2022 / chillout - Sep 28, 2022
|[IELTS WT1] The Police budget for 2017-2018 in an area of Britain.
2 - The writer still has not shown an ability to create an informative report using less than 200 words. That...
Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Sep 25, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
|TASK 2: THE GAP BETWEEN RICH AND POOR
2 - It will be difficult for me to provide a proper assessment of the writer's opinion making abilities with this...
Writing Feedbackvnguyen248 - Sep 28, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Animal testing is morally wrong but it can save human's life.
3 - Lemme help you correct some mistakes: 1st paragraph: to test => delete "to" 2nd paragraph: a large amount of...
Writing FeedbackClover118 - Sep 18, 2022 / Gabriell - Sep 27, 2022
|The change in Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas - IELTS Task1 - Table
4 - 1st paragraph: UK => the UK (remember to add "the" in front of some countries such as: The Philipines,...
Writing Feedbackclancylins - Sep 27, 2022 / Gabriell - Sep 27, 2022
|The bar chart provides information how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 & 2018
2 - Incorrect use of a conjunction. This can only be used when the topics being discussed are connected in...
Writing Feedbackancle21 - Sep 26, 2022 / Holt - Sep 27, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: BAR CHART ABOUT WEEKLY EXPENDITURE.
2 - There are a few things that the exam taker can do to improve the scores for his summary overview...
Writing FeedbackGabriell - Sep 26, 2022 / Holt - Sep 27, 2022
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