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|Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft
2 - Good response. What is the basis? Where is the thesis statement meant to support your opinion? You should...
Writing Feedbackcrazycat1139 - Oct 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 30, 2023
|IT IS BETTER TO SPEND TIME WITH A GROUP OF PEOPLE THAN TO SPEND TIME ALONE
2 - Please rewrite this essay. It is not the kind of essay that you can complete within 40 minutes. It...
Writing Feedbackfateema - Oct 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 30, 2023
|IELTS Writing task 1:The process diagram details the steps by which pineapples are produced for sale
Writing Feedbackvinh_xuan_nguyen - Oct 25, 2023 / vinh_xuan_nguyen - Oct 28, 2023
|Should English be the official language in Vietnam? Write an 400 word essay with clear explanantion
4 - Your writing demonstrates a good level of vocabulary accuracy and coherence. However, there are a few areas where you...
Writing Feedbackwanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023 / hannah suitor - Oct 27, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - READING BOOKS AMONG KIDS IS IN DECLINE
NEW - The number of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons...
Writing Feedbackwanttobebetter - Oct 27, 2023 / — -
|WRITTING TASK 2 : OPINION ON FREE COLLEGE
3 - Besides of the length of words that insufficient for the test's standard, there are so much lacks from your...
Writing FeedbackTung VIETNAM - Oct 26, 2023 / ardiarmanto - Oct 27, 2023
|IELTS writing task 2 owing a home rather than renting one is very important
4 - It doesn't clear whether the instruction of the essay to provide the discussion between the both views or comparison...
Writing Feedbackjane223 - Oct 20, 2023 / ardiarmanto - Oct 27, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - SELF STUDY for secondary school students
NEW - "It is said that self-study is very important for secondary school students". Do you agree or disagree with the...
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|TASK 2 People are living longer after they retire. What are the problems? What can be done to solve?
3 - in the first paragraph, do not use 'I' if the question doesn't include the word 'you'. Besides, your introduction...
Writing Feedbackphamkhuyen - Oct 25, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 26, 2023
|The urbanisation rate in South Korea and Indonesia
2 - Point deductions will be applied for the insufficient image description. Majority of the images presented in a task...
Writing Feedbackkhanhvy206 - Oct 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|The graph below shows the consumption of fish and three kinds of meat from 1979 to 2004
2 - While the presentation does indicate a chart, you did not identify the kind of chart presented, which poses...
Writing Feedbacklanhoangngoc - Oct 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|IELTS task 1: The bar chart compares five countries in terms of movies' production from 2007 to 2009
2 - The essay is unnecessarily long. You wrote more than 250 words, making this a task 2 essay presentation instead...
Writing FeedbackLillingg - Oct 24, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|The graph and table shows the amount of water used for various purposes
2 - Your first paragraph is going to earn you a failing preliminary GRA score. Avoid writing long sentences in that...
Writing Feedbacknghiaphong - Oct 23, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|The line graph below shows changes in the youth unemployment rate from 2000 to 2012.
2 - The essay is overwritten. You should not be writing more than 200 words maximum for a 20 minute writing...
Writing Feedbackkrystal2023 - Oct 23, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|[WRITING TASK 1] The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 & the plan for changes in 2024
2 - This vocabulary is too simple. You want to use somewhat advanced or intermediate English vocabulary to increase your...
Writing Feedbacklaura2024abroad - Oct 22, 2023 / Holt - Oct 26, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - TRAFFIC CONGESTION ISSUE - CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS
3 - "Due to a dramatic rise in population, traffic jam has been a globally debatable issue. " In the beginning,...
Writing Feedbackwanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023 / greattako - Oct 26, 2023
|[WRITTING TASK 1-MAP] The maps show the changes that happened to an island called Paradise.
2 - You are missing an important element in this essay. Where is the summary overview? You began with the trending...
Writing Feedbackquanessayforum - Oct 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|Task1 line chart - overseas travel to an european country
2 - This is a missing element in your summary overview. You need to mention these 3 places immediately for...
Writing FeedbackCandy123 - Oct 21, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|The bar chart below shows the data about British emigration to 5 destinations between 2004 and 2007.
2 - This essay would cause you to automatically fail both task 1 and task 2 essays. That is because you...
Writing Feedbackplihg - Oct 19, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|Advantage and disadvantage of watching tv of children
2 - Okay. This is an advantage v. disadvantage essay. It is not a personal opinion essay. Therefore, you are not...
Writing Feedbackthaomya_03 - Oct 18, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|Task 2 essay on legislations against tobacco.
2 - The essay is missing an expanded discussion of your personal opinion. While you did discuss the 2 opinions as...
Writing Feedbackravan - Oct 18, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|[Writing task 1] The main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.
2 - When you summarize your presentation, make sure to indicate that the pie charts are individually assigned to each year...
Writing Feedbackhuydaoquang - Oct 15, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|The restriction of using vehicles on certain days as a way to reduce air pollution
2 - Your prompt restatement + writer's opinion is too long. It should not be more than 3 sentences in length....
Writing Feedbacknam08 - Oct 15, 2023 / Holt - Oct 25, 2023
|Children watching TV - Writing Task 2
3 - First paragraph: not good job of paraphrasing. It is clear but you will need more advanced words, for eg:...
Writing FeedbackChu Chang - Oct 13, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
|Essay about separate education for students with different academic levels
4 - There are some amendments I can give to improve your writing: (this is just my personal opinion) - Some...
Writing FeedbackAnhngoc12 - Oct 15, 2023 / wanttobebetter - Oct 21, 2023
|The bar chart shows the literacy rate (% of people who can read and write) in 2011 by regions
Writing Feedbackhtlam11 - Oct 14, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|Was the American Revolution a Civil War?
2 - The formatting of this paper is just all wrong. Paragraphs should be used to separate the idea discussions. There...
Writing FeedbackRonaldwrw - Oct 12, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|Getting information from newspapers and other media
2 - You made your position clear in the writer's opinion section. Yet you contradicted yourself in the discussion paragraphs. You...
Writing Feedbackthuyduong470 - Oct 11, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|The chart illustrates the contribution in percentage of two different sectors (Task 1 IELTS)
Writing Feedbackekko162 - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|Comparing life with parents to living on campus
2 - I cannot accurately review this essay as the word count and paragraph representations do not follow the necessary requirements...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Hoa - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|IELTS Cause/Problem Essay question on children spending less time with their parents
2 - This is personal information or a representation of your personal opinion. It is not a part of the...
Writing FeedbackDirkhammet - Oct 10, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|The proportion of population who used the Internet in three different countries between 1999 & 2009
2 - A trending statement needs to cover the most common information for the sources provided. You did that properly...
Writing Feedbacksuperattack2002 - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|Compare pie charts show the proportion of the energy produces from different sources in a country
2 - The summary overview lacks content. Always enumerate the information sources prior to setting up the trending statement. You cannot...
Writing FeedbackNgocAnk - Oct 9, 2023 / Holt - Oct 14, 2023
|IELTS Writing Task 1: three main difficulties each age has to face when they live abroad
NEW - the problems people have when they go to live in other countries The bar chart demonstrates three main...
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|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Juvenile delinquency. Cause/Solution?
NEW - IN SOME COUNTRIES, A HIGH PROPORTION OF CRIMINAL ACTS ARE COMMITTED BY TEENAGERS. WHY HAS THIS HAPPENED? WHAT CAN...
Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Oct 12, 2023 / — -
|The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. The process is quite lengthy and complicated
Writing Feedbackanhtho06 - Oct 8, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
|Why have men's sports been give far more attention by society than women's s? IELTS Writting Task 2
4 - I think you should give the essay a proper stance; either be positive about it or be negative about...
Writing FeedbackCantor Zhukov - Oct 9, 2023 / TanzeelaWasti - Oct 12, 2023
|Task 1 writing ielts - carbon dioxide released by four different countries
3 - @laiphuongthao two nations,Italy and Portugal Following up were Sweden... in the given order, respectively/correspondingly. on the other hand, You...
Writing Feedbacklaiphuongthao - Oct 3, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 11, 2023
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Begin learning a foreign language
NEW - SOME EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER...
Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Oct 11, 2023 / — -
|The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living.
3 - @Cao hong Ngoc You should be aware of the structure of sentence such as capital letters or end mark...
Writing FeedbackCao hong Ngoc - Oct 9, 2023 / Duy Dang - Oct 10, 2023
|The diagram below shows the production of olive oil. Summarize the information - 7 stages involved
2 - You have summarized the presentation too much. In your desire to present the quickest version of information possible, you...
Writing Feedbackpminhanh - Oct 7, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Present your ideas about what you should or shouldn't do to live green
2 - This is a well written essay. it shows that the writer has a good grasp of the English language...
Writing Feedbackanhthueunsung - Oct 6, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Writing task 1 Ielts: young people's expectations for change in five different areas
2 - Yes, statistics were provided in the image. However, you need to identify the type of image before you...
Writing Feedbackakane - Oct 5, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|The percentage of time adults spent on different activities in a country in 1958 and 2008
2 - You have misrepresented the number of pie charts in your summary overview. You need to use the plural form...
Writing Feedbackkhanh416 - Oct 4, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|The charts show the percentage of electricity consumed by different sectors in Eastern Australia
Writing FeedbacklemonadeA - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Reasons why friendship is gradually dying
2 - You have provided reasons for friendships ending. Those do not necessarily reflect the death of friendships. You are speaking...
Writing Feedbackkieuuoanh - Oct 3, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Global warming is one of the biggest threaten to our environment. Cause and solution ?
2 - I can understand what you are trying to tell me in the essay. The problem, is that even though...
Writing Feedbackpth1234 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Goverment should prioritize heathcare instead of orther areas. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - Do not confuse the well being of a person with healthcare. Well being is a larger field of personal...
Writing FeedbackGiahuy2107 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Construct stadium beneficial or not? IELTS Writting Task 2
Writing FeedbackOutsider_000 - Oct 1, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|WRITE A SHORT PARAGRAPH (100-120 WORDS) ABOUT HOW TO KEEP FIT AND STAY HEALTHY.
2 - You have done a good job on writing this statement. It shows that you are becoming more comfortable writing...
Writing Feedbacktranhaithien2005 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives.
2 - You are showing the reader why you partly agree with the given statement using a comparative discussion method. While...
Writing Feedbackmikey04 - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Dicussion between putting some strict controls about noise and making as much noise as possible
2 - Your prompt restatement became confusing to the reader. There is a lack of clarity and coherence in that presentation...
Writing Feedbackphuongna - Sep 29, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|What is the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?
2 - Seeing as this is a task 2 essay, you should not be coming to any conclusions or offering any...
Writing Feedbacknmint_tue07 - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|Some people feel that advertising has negative effects on our society
2 - Make sur eyou follow the writing rudiments for the English language. Every first word of a new sentence is...
Writing FeedbackHoangson - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: LOOK AFTER ONE'S HEALTH FOR PERSONAL OR SOCIAL BENEFITS
2 - This is a single opinion essay. That is why you are being asked about the extent of your agreement...
Writing Feedbackhgzxz - Sep 27, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] GETTING OLD IN THE MODERN WORLD
2 - [quote=cangusocduaaa]This essay shall conduct a thorough assessment of both viewpoints so that a reasoned conclusion can be drawn.[/quoteWhile you...
Writing Feedbackcangusocduaaa - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|[WRITING TASK 1] Percentage of passing driving license of males and females in an Asian nation
2 - The summary overview is problematic and will not deliver a good preliminary score. There are several elements missing from...
Writing Feedbackwanderinuniverse - Sep 26, 2023 / Holt - Oct 8, 2023
|AN ESSAY ABOUT THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LIVING IN THE MODERN WORLD
3 - It is very important that whenever you write pros and cons, write them in 2 separate structured paragraphs. Your...
Writing FeedbackHAPPYLE - Sep 24, 2023 / Love478 - Oct 7, 2023
|Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination
2 - You are writing a comparison essay that should focus on 2 things: 1. An explanation of the public...
Writing FeedbackVanChungNguyen - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
|Teenagers should work unpaid, do you agree with the view? Write about 250 words
2 - You will already have failed the essay with your prompt restatement and writer's opinion alone. You are presenting a...
Writing FeedbackKhanhChi2009 - Sep 25, 2023 / Holt - Oct 7, 2023
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