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|Computers are regarded as the most influential invention of the last century
3 - The whole discussion does not follow the required parameters of the original topic. I am not sure why you...
Writing Feedbackdieuthaonguyen - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|(IELTS WRITING TASK 2) Population aging: effects and solutions
3 - This is a task 2 essay. That means the first paragraph should be a paraphrase or restatement of the...
Writing Feedbacktuanhnguyen2611 - Feb 8, 2020 / Holt - Feb 9, 2020
|A survey related to studying the purpose of adults and the distribution in their academic cost
Writing FeedbackSteve Nguyen - Feb 6, 2020 / Steve Nguyen - Feb 8, 2020
|Review my essay - Under the sea - 'the mother of mysteriousness and beauty'
3 - Hi, is it possible to delete this thread since i am submitting this essay for a national writing championship....
Writing Feedbackstevennn - Feb 1, 2020 / stevennn - Feb 8, 2020
|Eating vegetarian of Vietnamese people
Writing FeedbackBig Boss - Feb 7, 2020 / Big Boss - Feb 7, 2020
|Countries should try to produce all the food for the population and imports
2 - Based on the original prompt for this discussion, it appears that you have cut and paste some references from...
Writing FeedbackEveIssabelle - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE OPINION
2 - You are still confused as to how to approach the public point of view with personal opinion essay. The...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanh96 - Feb 6, 2020 / Holt - Feb 7, 2020
|Cost of living is rising. Effects and solutions?
3 - foods resources is are becoming scarcely -> you should get rid of "is". I agree with @Holt, you...
Writing Feedbackaprilmk - Feb 5, 2020 / emailbr - Feb 6, 2020
|IELTS task 1- The places visited by different people living in Canada.
Writing FeedbackmywritingsTT - Feb 4, 2020 / mywritingsTT - Feb 6, 2020
|It is right that university graduates should earn more money than less well educated people
3 - Being a degree discussion essay, your paraphrase will be seen as lacking in addressing the task requirement. You cannot...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Feb 5, 2020 / Holt - Feb 6, 2020
|The comparison on how much the petroleum was produced and consumed in 7 areas in the year of 2002
Writing FeedbackEveGreen - Feb 5, 2020 / EveGreen - Feb 5, 2020
|The distance between the rich and the poor is enlarging due to development of technology - Ielts 2
3 - Well, in your introduction, I think you mean the fast-moving of technology has created ? Anyway, come to your...
Writing Feedbackkylie luong - Feb 4, 2020 / Samathan - Feb 5, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 1 - Pie chart about population rate
Writing Feedbackthaolinh - Feb 4, 2020 / thaolinh - Feb 5, 2020
|IELTS task 1 - comparing three types of food prices
8 - You should try some advance phrase to boost your LR score. For example, in the ovrall part, instead of...
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 21, 2020 / thaolinh - Feb 5, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 1] Australian and New Zealand children favourite activities in 2007
4 - I agree that the struture your essay was good and easy to understand. But I think it is better...
Writing Feedbackdinhnn - Jan 29, 2020 / thaolinh - Feb 4, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 TOTAL WORLD OIL RESOURCES AND CONSUMPTION
2 - The foremost concern I have with this essay is the fact that you did not bother to spellcheck your...
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Feb 4, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
|Essay on the American identity and fast-food places with image analysis
2 - There are only 2 sections of this essay that I have a problem with. The first, is the introduction...
Writing Feedbackhlatif01 - Feb 3, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. Give reasons and solutions
4 - One of the major mistakes that students make when writing these reason and solution essays is that they tend...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanh96 - Feb 4, 2020 / Holt - Feb 4, 2020
|IELTS writing task 2 - the power of spoken communication
4 - You should state your own opinion "Do you agree or disagree" and if you agree, do you agree partially...
Writing Feedbackemem123 - Feb 2, 2020 / johnle29 - Feb 4, 2020
|ietlswritask2 It is better for college students to live in schools than live at home with parent
4 - sample introduction It is true that college education is certainly important in shaping a student's personality or helping them...
Writing Feedbacktorontoontario - Jan 29, 2020 / parviz - Feb 3, 2020
|Neighbouring towns - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - MAP
4 - Hi I think your 'overall view' sentence is a bit short. e.g. Over the time period, while both areas...
Writing FeedbackChim - Feb 2, 2020 / parviz - Feb 3, 2020
|Ielts: Provide help directly to the community or give money to charitable organizations.
2 - Please remember to provide a copy of the original prompt next time so that you can receive a more...
Writing Feedbackvananh1511 - Feb 3, 2020 / Holt - Feb 3, 2020
|WRITING ESSAY (500-700 words) - Discuss the drawbacks and benefits of stress
NEW - Topic: 'Some people regard stress as a significant threat to humans' physical health and recollection. Others, however, believe that...
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|IELTS Task 1 - the regularity of eating at fast food places among people in the USA (2003-2013)
Writing Feedbackemailbr - Jan 27, 2020 / emailbr - Feb 2, 2020
|Critical judgment of work from experts has little value - GRE
2 - There is a lack of clarity in some sentences that tend to hinder the message of the writer the...
Writing Feedbackgrace85516 - Feb 1, 2020 / Holt - Feb 2, 2020
|Is better for kids to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than at secondary?
Writing FeedbackPhuongbo - Jan 30, 2020 / howardturtle - Feb 2, 2020
|Unethical methods in advertising today
3 - This essay will automatically a failing score under the TA section. You have created your own discussion requirements as...
Writing FeedbackMartinmirror - Jan 31, 2020 / Holt - Feb 1, 2020
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 The graph below shows trends in US meat and poultry consumption.
3 - While this presentation is good enough to help assess your English writing and comprehension abilities, you should have considered...
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 31, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|IELTS Writing Task I: UK Cinema Attendance of different age citizens, from 1990 to 2010
5 - Your vocaulary really makes me amazed. But I suggest that you should harmonize between 2 bodies in terms of...
Writing Feedbackkanzanism - Jan 17, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 31, 2020
|Four modes of transport in terms of the amounts of goods they conveyed in the UK from 1974 to 2002
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 30, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 31, 2020
|[ IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Topic: Obesity is a serious problem today
5 - There are 2 problems points in your presentation as I see it. The introduction paraphrase and the concluding statement....
Writing FeedbackSam an - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|The presented graph compares four types of transport in terms of the amount of goods transported
3 - You need to be accurate in your representation of the graph information. There is no reference to "mail" in...
Writing FeedbackAmanda92 - Jan 30, 2020 / Holt - Jan 31, 2020
|Aging populations in countries - WRITING TASK 1 Ielts
5 - I suggest that you should pharaphrase a few words like percentage, proportion <=> figure, then <=> over the following...
Writing Feedbackanhthythy - Jan 5, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 30, 2020
|Adult education - bar chart and pie chart for ielts writing
3 - I suggest you should use some words like: mention, quote or cite for better expression. For example, instead of...
Writing Feedbackmimiya - Jan 25, 2020 / johnle29 - Jan 30, 2020
|The proportion of visitors to England who paid a visit to four diverse attractions in Brighton
2 - I think that it is a very good essay but there are some spelling mistakes such as remaining, meantime....
Writing Feedbackjohnle29 - Jan 30, 2020 / Amanda92 - Jan 30, 2020
|The table gives information about the employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked
5 - Try to observe the data vertically (by age groups) first, then horizontally. You can start by creating general statements...
Writing Feedbackeyesliu0715 - Jan 27, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 29, 2020
|Animal products no longer needed?
4 - @wizardA Thank you for your feedback. @Holt Could you please highlight grammar issues in my essay? Thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackHanoian - Jan 23, 2020 / Hanoian - Jan 28, 2020
|Ielts essay on land availability in countryside
5 - What makes me feel positive about your essay is that you have a wide range of vocabularies, proper ways...
Writing Feedbacksv_megha - Jan 25, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 28, 2020
|Some people believe mental strength is more important for success in sports while others think...
5 - @quynhnhi2801 Your essay sounds cool, however you need to go through your grammar again as they are some errors....
Writing Feedbackquynhnhi2801 - Jan 22, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 27, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] Which is the main environmental problem?
2 - The paraphrased introduction is incorrect. There are two points of view prior to your personal opinion to be discussed....
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Jan 27, 2020 / Holt - Jan 27, 2020
|Australia and France comparison in terms of electricity production by different fuel resources
4 - I think you didn't need to split up into lots of paragraphs. Instead merge the relevant information into one...
Writing Feedbackyazan ajlouni - Jan 24, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 27, 2020
|The amount of China and India's population from 2000 until now and the predicted number up to 2050
3 - Thanks you so much dear @ Holt. Your notes can obviously improve my writings and any other reader's for...
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 24, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 25, 2020
|Export earnings 2015-2016. IELTS writing task 1
3 - I suggest you to search for more model task 1 essays to have a smoother approach in writing. You've...
Writing FeedbackTdtd10 - Jan 24, 2020 / juhuihjijuh - Jan 24, 2020
|IELTS TASK 1 - the number of live births per thousand of population per year in China and the USA
Writing Feedbackthaihuynh - Jan 20, 2020 / thaihuynh - Jan 22, 2020
|Certain talents, for instance for music and sport - acquired or learned?
3 - This is another example of a 5 paragraph essay that became tangential in response because of a misrepresentation of...
Writing FeedbackAmanda92 - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS - Discuss whether employees should be forced to disclosure their private data; job interview
2 - The paraphrasing in the first paragraph is incomplete. You omitted the paraphrase of the original instruction, which made your...
Writing FeedbackRachelrc - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|[IELTS Writing Task 2] To accept or try to improve a bad situation?
2 - You have not properly discussed the given topic. Neither did you properly respond to the task requirements. Look at...
Writing Feedbacktrvaanh - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Video games: harmless fun or useful educational tool?
6 - I think you should avoid from using the phrases '' as mentioned above" or "into something'' because i find...
Writing FeedbackNgoc Lam - Jan 18, 2020 / Hung Dang - Jan 21, 2020
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Curfew effects on teens
6 - I don't think it is necessary to write like this ... during weekdays as well as weekends. It is...
Writing Feedbackprab0694 - Jan 17, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|IELTS line graph - task 1 - thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
Writing Feedbackjuhuihjijuh - Jan 14, 2020 / trvaanh - Jan 20, 2020
|IELTS2; We should invest in advanced railway lines for fast trains to facilitate our commuting
Writing FeedbackRwannajjar - Jan 19, 2020 / Ulaai - Jan 20, 2020
|Essay about woven baskets from the prehistoric village of Palea (GRE)
Writing Feedbackchiwchang - Jan 19, 2020 / chiwchang - Jan 20, 2020
|How to Help the Impact of Social Media on Children: Rough Draft
2 - The essay lacks a range of discussion development throughout the presentation. These are not even complete paragraph presentations. It...
Writing Feedbacklauramphillips - Jan 19, 2020 / Holt - Jan 19, 2020
|The statistics of afforestation on all continents over the world
4 - It will be extremely difficult for you to gain a passing score for this type of presentation. The main...
Writing Feedbackangelaaa - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|Task 2: some people think that video games are advantageous - opinion essay
Writing FeedbackThuytran9977 - Jan 3, 2020 / Holt - Jan 18, 2020
|IELTS TASK 2: SHOULD WE ACCEPT WHAT LIFE GAVE US OR STAND UP AND FIGHT
4 - A personal opinion should not be presented int he introduction paraphrase because there isn't enough sentence space left for...
Writing Feedbackemillia2003 - Jan 2, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS WT2: Studying other country's cultures
2 - Where is your response to the prompt requirement? I do not see it in the final sentence of your...
Writing FeedbackThanghoang - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS 2. Children should always follow parents advice till they become more independent and mature
2 - One of the first things that the examiner will check for with your essay is the word count. You...
Writing Feedbackdikyung - Jan 17, 2020 / Holt - Jan 17, 2020
|Governments should not have to provide care or financial support for elderly people because ...
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comments. I was aiming for a "balanced" view response not "strong " or "partially...
Writing Feedbackparviz - Jan 16, 2020 / parviz - Jan 17, 2020
|IELTS task2: man-made activities are making global temperatures higher
3 - Thank you! That is really helpful. I will practice how to paraphrase according to you suggestion!...
Writing FeedbackAnnie97 - Jan 15, 2020 / Annie97 - Jan 17, 2020
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