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|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed
2 - Keep your personal opinion to yourself. Do not use it as the introduction to the topic in the prompt...
Writing Feedbackmohanta12 - Apr 23, 2022 / Holt - Apr 24, 2022
|Tell us about a thing you try to unlearn.
2 - I am not sure that one would want to unlearn obedience. For all the reasons you presented, one thing...
Writing FeedbackMiTu - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 23, 2022
|IELTS Writing T2: In some countries, schools are open till late so that children can be looked after
2 - The prompt restatement is a problem because it contains too much of the original keywords, phrases, and references to...
Writing Feedbackbigbadmonster - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - History vs Science and Technology in High School
2 - The first sentence is an incomplete thought. It should not be presented in the paragraph for 2 reasons: -...
Writing Feedbackashik35 - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
|Essay about high desire to keep pets at home. What are the causes and effects of this?
2 - The prompt restatement paragraph is faulty as the writer repeats himself over several sentences. It also shows that the...
Writing FeedbackNguyenAnh260 - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
|Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors and teachers should be paid more
2 - The writer has turned the essay into a vocabulary usage exercise that does not meet the discussion requirements at...
Writing FeedbackEdShira - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
|Electricity Production and Consumption - IELTS Writing Task 1; The bar chart report
2 - Avoid stating all the summarized information in one sentence. Such a format does not properly showcase your sentence structure...
Writing Feedbackashik34 - Apr 21, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
|Essay about GDP (Gross domestic product) annual growth in three groups of nations
3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your comments, however I can't make sense of the +S rule that your referred...
Writing Feedbackhellomynamthu - Apr 19, 2022 / hellomynamthu - Apr 21, 2022
|Traveling in a group or alone?
2 - This is a word phrase error. Going outside means that one merely steps outside of the home. It...
Writing FeedbackZustK - Apr 19, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - CRIME AND THE LAW - THE DEATH PENALTY
2 - The prompt restatement should not include a reference to the global scale of death penalty agreement as that is...
Writing FeedbackKhoa Le - Apr 19, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
|Benefits of learning English
3 - That's great! Keep it up! I reckon that you should learn how to use compound and complex sentences to...
Writing Feedbackchurongcon - Apr 12, 2022 / Khoa Le - Apr 19, 2022
|Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adults. Agree or Disagree?
4 - If I were you, I would write my conclusion with 3 sentences. One is paraphrased from the topic, then...
Writing FeedbackThhuytien - Apr 12, 2022 / Khoa Le - Apr 19, 2022
|IELTS Task 1 essay about regular physical activity of different age groups with both genders
4 - Do not fool yourself. Since you committed the same errors as the last time, you cannot make any claims...
Writing FeedbackLemonade312 - Apr 15, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
|The chart compares the outcomes of a research on the customers' buying and drink habits in Australia
Writing Feedbackelalan - Apr 16, 2022 / Lemonade312 - Apr 19, 2022
|The expansion of multinational companies produces positive effects for everyone. Agree or disagree?
2 - This is a single opinion essay that bases the opinion defense paragraphs on the agreement or disagreement of the...
Writing Feedbacklinlin8 - Apr 17, 2022 / Holt - Apr 17, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Revenues and Expenditures of a Children's Charity in the USA.
2 - The opening summary will immediately result in a lower GRA consideration due to the run-on nature of the presentation....
Writing Feedbackmahfuj840 - Apr 16, 2022 / Holt - Apr 16, 2022
|Give the cause and solution of pneumonia and diarrhea in children
2 - This essay is suitable only as an English writing exercise and not an IELTS Task 2 essay. The reason?...
Writing FeedbackNtrang1510 - Apr 16, 2022 / Holt - Apr 16, 2022
|Hosting an international sporting competition is a beneficial chance for a country; true or false?
2 - The restated opinions must be presented as 2 stand-alone sentences. These separate sentences will allow the reader to better...
Writing FeedbackTruong Bao Long - Apr 13, 2022 / Holt - Apr 14, 2022
|Living on their own or living at home during school days.
2 - Good work on the prompt restatement. It is a well integrated sentence presentation that shows control over sentence structuring....
Writing Feedbackjdchan - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
|The differences in ownership of technology devices and the number of hours spent doing households
2 - The writer should be able to create a shorter report for these 2 images. Due to the 20 minute...
Writing FeedbackRosalie Yang - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
|Causes of crime and activities to prevent this rise in criminal activity. Reasons with examples.
Writing Feedbackrussia autumn - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 1 The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment
2 - The summary overview is best presented over 2 sentences or more. The sentences must separately indicate the following data:...
Writing Feedbacknamle - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
|Increasingly large numbers of students are undertaking their higher education in other countries.
Writing FeedbackPhuonghoaneu - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
|Many people complain about teenagers' lack of moral and self-discipline. Write causes and solution.
2 - The last part of the restatement paragraph is called the opinion statement for a reason. The writer is expected...
Writing Feedbackngmngoc9269408 - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
|IELTS writing task 2: Some universities offer online courses. Is this positive or negative?
2 - The writer responded to the discussion question in the concluding paragraph. That was the only part of the essay...
Writing FeedbackVanan - Apr 10, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
|Compulsory study. Young people should be forced to stay in full-time education until they are 18.
3 - I think "knowledge" is an uncountable noun so you should use "is" instead of "are in that sentence. Another...
Writing Feedbackthuongha - Apr 9, 2022 / Vanan - Apr 10, 2022
|Many people suggest that instead of celebrities the media should focus on the public interest
4 - "The life of ordinary people will be improved ..." I think instead of this sentence you should write "...
Writing Feedbackdominic2795 - Apr 4, 2022 / Vanan - Apr 10, 2022
|Does a country benefit from a large proportion of young university students?
2 - Do not provide your personal opinion in the opening statement. Always integrate that into your personal opinion as the...
Writing FeedbackLingDung - Apr 10, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
|International exchange visits will benefit teenagers. Advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - The writer has not taken his time allotment and editing considerations into account while writing this essay. The essay...
Writing Feedbackyondolly123 - Apr 9, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
|Only governments and large institution can create new development for the society, not individuals.
2 - The writer has not responded to the question in the expected format. Although he did an excellent job in...
Writing Feedbackdinhngocthu18 - Apr 9, 2022 / Holt - Apr 9, 2022
|IELTS writing task 2 about patriotism.
2 - It is important that no additional information that represents the writer's opinion integrates itself into the prompt restatement. The...
Writing Feedbackldt0931117093 - Apr 8, 2022 / Holt - Apr 9, 2022
|The line graph illustrates the amount of meat and poultry that US residents consumed
2 - The topic summary is incomplete as it does not refer to the measurements provided being indicative of per capita...
Writing Feedbackmanphuongdoan - Apr 7, 2022 / Holt - Apr 7, 2022
|The amount of goods transported in the United Kingdom over the course of 28 years
Writing Feedbacklily1996 - Apr 6, 2022 / lily1996 - Apr 7, 2022
|Nowadays, some people presume that sports have a big impact on the progression of society
Writing FeedbackHoang1 - Apr 5, 2022 / britonnn - Apr 5, 2022
|The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
2 - The writer wrote only 146 out of the required minimum of 150 words. There will be percentage deductions for...
Writing FeedbackHong Ngoc - Apr 5, 2022 / Holt - Apr 5, 2022
|Fewer young people do farming work in rural areas Why?
2 - An accurate prompt topic restatement will not include the writer's opinion as to whether or not the proposed topic...
Writing Feedbackminhminhmoemoe - Apr 4, 2022 / Holt - Apr 5, 2022
|Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people
2 - The prompt restatement is fine. The opinion statement is non-existent as there are no responses to the 2 direct...
Writing Feedbackphuongngoc27 - Apr 2, 2022 / Holt - Apr 3, 2022
|Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose
2 - It will be better for the exam taker to avoid using memorized and exaggerated phrases such as "In this...
Writing Feedbackscarlettttt - Apr 2, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
|Nowadays, a lot of offices have open-space designs instead of separate rooms
2 - The writer shows a high level of academic writing through his use of college level words and sentence representations....
Writing Feedbackphuongngoc - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
|Essay topic: Making films and the advancement of digital technology
2 - Restate the prompt topic accurately without providing any opinion. The topic restatement loses accuracy when the writer claims "accuracy"...
Writing Feedbacktina1120 - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
|Learning culture in 21st century
2 - There is no reference to the 21st century in the original topic. A strong recommendation does not exist as...
Writing Feedbackanhlele - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 1, 2022
|We live in an age when unnecessary things are our only necessities - CBEST Writing Test
4 - Although I do agree with your statement, the smartphones topic is playout. we know the damages and quite frankly...
Writing Feedbackzwan - Mar 28, 2022 / Megymarj - Mar 31, 2022
|Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job, but other people think they
2 - The first paragraph contains several reference errors that will force the examiner to award a failing TA score to...
Writing FeedbackTracey Tran - Mar 31, 2022 / Holt - Mar 31, 2022
|IELTS Writing task 2 - young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way
2 - Band score estimates are provided as a part of our private services. Kindly contact us privately to inquire about...
Writing Feedbackcandylee1711 - Mar 31, 2022 / Holt - Mar 31, 2022
|Data on the bird population essay
3 - You repeated the same structure "In...(year), the number of...." You can replace "the number of" with "the figure for",...
Writing FeedbackAdley - Mar 29, 2022 / fuckincute - Mar 31, 2022
|Writing Task2: The advantages and disadvantage of children's horticulture and livestock activities
4 - @Thaoami412 These arguments are well described. The structure is clear and the essay is brief. The tone of your...
Writing FeedbackThaoami412 - Mar 23, 2022 / candylee1711 - Mar 31, 2022
|Internet users as percentage of population. Summarise the information and Write at least 150 words.
2 - In the summary overview, the information regarding the list of countries in relation to the years indicated should have...
Writing FeedbackVanan - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 30, 2022
|Opinions about traditional and modern medicines
2 - Do not get into the habit of affirming statements within the opening sentence of of the restatement. It unnecessarily...
Writing Feedbackmewo23 - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 29, 2022
|Essay about ex-prisoner are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of crime
2 - The summary restatement is incorrect in format because the first sentence includes an attestation where it is not needed....
Writing Feedbackcandylee1711 - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 29, 2022
|Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days
2 - The prompt restatement needs more accuracy. The exam taker is expected to rephrase the whole of the original discussion...
Writing Feedbackdang3cvt - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
|IELTS Writing Task 2 Is technological development positive or negative for distant work and learning
2 - When writing an opinion essay, the writer must realize that he has to target the completeness by which he...
Writing FeedbackKhoa Le - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
|The consequences of competing between older people and young ones for the same type of occupations
3 - I think the first point in body 1 should be explained a little bit more, why ' the consequence...
Writing Feedbackhb_bap - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
|The question whether rising price of fuel is the best solution to environmental issue
3 - Hello, I suggest using the structure PEER in each of your point in the body. P: point of view,...
Writing Feedbackqunhu270 - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
|IELTS TASK 1: The provided illustration depicts the information about the making of leather prced.
3 - I think your writing would look better when being devided into 2 main bodies (with 1 introduction and 1...
Writing Feedbacknavjot789 - Mar 27, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Are newspaper the best way to learn news?
2 - The prompt restatement contains information inaccuracies and a lack of personal opinion presentation that forces it to receive a...
Writing Feedbackhuoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
|Museums in London and tourists - IELTS writing part 1 (bar chart)
5 - @Holt First and foremost, I'd like to say thank you because of your detailed comments and I also have...
Writing Feedbackvananhxh2005 - Mar 22, 2022 / vananhxh2005 - Mar 27, 2022
|Consumption of chicken - IELTS WRITTING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH
2 - A listing of the data for comparison should be indicated in the summary overview. The listing is used to...
Writing Feedbackphuong171100 - Mar 27, 2022 / Holt - Mar 27, 2022
|Travel around a city - IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table and bar chart
2 - I am not sure what you mean by"raised" in reference to the city transportation. Since there is no image...
Writing FeedbackQuang23 - Mar 26, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
|Peer Review Eliminating Medication Overload Research Paper
2 - Establish the foundation for the research paper and information in a better manner. Create a more solid and interesting...
Writing Feedbackcoralwxo - Mar 25, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
|Students should choose the subjects they like to learn
3 - If the topic is discussion about 2 views, I suppose essay are failed to convey message. If the topic...
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