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|Should school leavers take a year off before going to university?
4 - Vi, your discussion is only partially correct. Only your third paragraph responds to the prompt in a correct manner....
Writing Feedbackvendetta - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|There is one activity that teenagers recently prefer, and it is purchasing goods
2 - Dimas, this essay shows that you have a problem when it comes to properly developing the sentence structure, punctuation,...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|The main role of museums - they should be enjoyable places to entertain people?
2 - Minh, the essay that you wrote does not completely cover the task requirements. The prompt instructions clearly request you...
Writing Feedbacklukaku123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|'We get educated only in school.' What are your views?
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Eductional achievements - " pen and paper" exams
2 - Hang, your essay suffers from a lack of clarity in explanation. It is not coherent nor cohesive and causes...
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|People were asked if and why they traveled abroad (1994-98)
4 - Hoang, you did right by reviewing the sample essay before you entered into writing your own analytical report. It...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|In my opinion people should prepare meal and eat at home rather than going out to restaurants
5 - Hi Lam, the essay is asking you for your personal preference or choice in this instance, as to whether...
Writing FeedbackLam Tran - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: formal academic qualifications VS life experience or personal qualities.
2 - Hey Thai, I'd like to tell you not to worry about your score. I have thoroughly reviewed your essay...
Writing Feedbackthaihoang613 - Jul 16, 2018 / Holt - Jul 17, 2018
|Some of the celebrities are younger than others, and believe this is a positive development
5 - Thank you all for spending time on my essay! I did not see these problems when I was revising,...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jul 14, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 16, 2018
|Should children be banned from playing computer games?
5 - you should built your ideas clearly following by: Main idea No.1.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main idea No.2.....detail 1.....detail 2... Main...
Writing FeedbackTemuulen - Jul 11, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
|Face to face communication with an increasing Internet connection and text messages in use?
4 - For me, your essay is poor about idea for the second paragraph which need to 2 ideas. Construction of...
Writing Feedbackbaljit2108 - Jul 15, 2018 / anhrriv - Jul 16, 2018
|Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought?
2 - Anastasia, your grammar is not perfect and your timeline in the presentation is off. However, you still managed to...
Writing FeedbackNasteaMischevca - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Young people should spend more time on cultural activities and less time on sport.
2 - Hang, In the discussion prompt, you stated that the opinion to be discussed is only the extent by which...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|The population at the age of at least 65 in some parts of the world
3 - Linh, the comparison chart would have been far more efficient with the addition of the 2 sets of overlapping...
Writing Feedbackhlt306 - Jul 15, 2018 / Holt - Jul 16, 2018
|Ielts Task 2 writing: Government is wasting money on the arts
2 - Hi @kmc, Your essay was so well-written with a wide range of complex lexical resources. I was like wow...
Writing Feedbackkmc - Jul 15, 2018 / hlt306 - Jul 15, 2018
|[Ielts task 1] 2 line graphs about expense on children's sport and the number of participants
3 - Tran, you did a very good job of developing this analytical report. If there is one observation about your...
Writing FeedbackMai Tran 1201 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 15, 2018
|Happiness is extremely crucial to people's life, there are several methods to increase it
4 - Hi Okapi99, Overall, I think that your essay is quite well-written with a wide range of vocabulary related to...
Writing FeedbackOkapi99 - Jul 11, 2018 / hlt306 - Jul 15, 2018
|Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays
Writing Feedbacktryhardboy - Jul 13, 2018 / tryhardboy - Jul 14, 2018
|Some parents are unwilling to let their children work during their studies, better focus on school
2 - Su, the reference point in your essay is off. You need make various references within the paragraphs to the...
Writing FeedbackIELTS123 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 14, 2018
|The given table demonstrates the expense on a monthly basis of a typical household in Australia
3 - Duc, you missed presenting a 4th paragraph in relation to other expenses presented in the chart. A task 1...
Writing Feedbackducanhdo22 - Jul 13, 2018 / Holt - Jul 14, 2018
|The line graph illustrates how many crime-related incidents occurred in the inner Newport city
4 - I think some words need correcting. 1. saw a decrease 2. an unchanged trend I think your writing should...
Writing FeedbackDuongYen - Jul 12, 2018 / Mai Tran 1201 - Jul 13, 2018
|Ielts 1: Pie charts. The online sale section in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
3 - thank you so much for spending time to read my essay. Your review helped me improve my skill....
Writing FeedbackMinh Thu - Jul 11, 2018 / Minh Thu - Jul 13, 2018
|Topic: universities should only offer to young students with high marks,...
Writing FeedbackDUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 11, 2018 / DUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 12, 2018
|Money plays an important role in deciding on a career. Salary importance.
3 - Nguyen, this is an extent essay that requires a measurement of response or emotional response to the prompt. This...
Writing Feedbacknhihoai - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|The number of students at university in the UK from 1991 to 2001
3 - Yen, this is a very well developed and clearly presented analysis of the pie chart, line graph, and chart...
Writing Feedbackmaxwellfriend - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|Writing task 2: It is better to live in vertical city than horizontal city.
3 - Huyen, there is no way of putting this gently. My observation is that you are capable of understanding the...
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 11, 2018 / Holt - Jul 12, 2018
|The line chart illustrates the rate of smoking among males and females in Someland from 1960 to 2000
6 - I have some recommendations for your essay. Firstly, it is vital to have a sturdy structure, you should have...
Writing Feedbackmainhn - Jul 11, 2018 / DUONGVUTUANMINH - Jul 11, 2018
|Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture
2 - Truong, this essay is only partially correct in responding to the prompt requirements. The main problems your presentation has...
Writing FeedbackTrang2810 - Jul 10, 2018 / Holt - Jul 11, 2018
|Some people were born with their special talent, others must be trained to gain such skills
4 - Tuong, you have not written the appropriate amount of words for this essay to be a completely developed and...
Writing Feedbackvyle10 - Jul 10, 2018 / Holt - Jul 11, 2018
|It is true that our waste from home we do not recycle enough in our society.
3 - @feliciatu I found some mistakes You wrote: ...short term of changes to of recycling ... To + V...
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jul 8, 2018 / Minh Thu - Jul 11, 2018
|Task 2: state-of-art-technology is changing the way we learn
5 - @Holt thank you so much for your help. Your review has been invaluable to me during this time. I...
Writing FeedbackMinh Thu - Jun 29, 2018 / Minh Thu - Jul 11, 2018
|Convenience foods and people's health
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 9, 2018 / Maithanhhang - Jul 10, 2018
|The bar graph shows the global sales of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.
4 - Tapir, the overview summary needs to be at least 3 sentences long. You do not have a complete prompt...
Writing FeedbackOkapi99 - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
|Writing task 2: Commenting and criticising in class to improve educational quality
3 - Huyen, here is my opinion / possible scoring consideration for your essay: TA - 5 Good work with...
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
|Employers should not care about the way their employees dress - the work quality is more important
3 - Nguyen, please do not write exaggerations in the essay. Unless there is actually an argument being presented in the...
Writing FeedbackNguyen Minh Nhut - Jul 9, 2018 / Holt - Jul 10, 2018
|Students should be equipped with both knowledge and practical skills during their time at schools.
4 - Merged: REWRITE - Should universities equip undergraduates with professional skills? Some people think that universities should provide...
Writing Feedbackhyperephania - Jul 7, 2018 / hyperephania - Jul 9, 2018
|Society needs to create opportunities for everyone, thus gender equality should be encouraged.
5 - @Holt I really happy when i read your comment. I will try my best to improve my writing skills....
Writing FeedbackMaithanhhang - Jul 7, 2018 / Maithanhhang - Jul 9, 2018
|Essay about how should we file the complaint that is most effective?
Writing Feedbackyanxing0506 - Jul 8, 2018 / yanxing0506 - Jul 9, 2018
|Some people think that life will be easier if there are fewer language
Writing Feedbackngocmai080301 - Jul 8, 2018 / ngocmai080301 - Jul 9, 2018
|Writing task 1: Describe the process of geothermal electricity production
2 - Huyen, you have written too many words for this essay. You need to write between 150-200 words only in...
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 8, 2018 / Holt - Jul 9, 2018
|IELTS - When it comes to recycle, only little domestic wastes have been recycled
3 - Daewi you totally missed the point of the essay discussion. Your approach to the essay is incorrect and did...
Writing Feedbackdaewi216 - Jul 6, 2018 / Holt - Jul 8, 2018
|These charts provide an overall view of how the usage of water varied among six regions on Earth
3 - Viet, always time yourself when writing your essay. You have only 20 minutes for this task. That means you...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 8, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: WHICH TO INVEST IN, RAILWAYS OR ROADS? Give reasons for your answer.
3 - Viet, with 325 words written in this essay, I can only assume that you did not bother to time...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 8, 2018
|Education should be free irrespective of students' financial background. Agree or disagree
3 - Phuong, this is an extent essay that relies on your opinion of the given topic. This is not a...
Writing Feedbackvirgobas - Jul 7, 2018 / Holt - Jul 8, 2018
|GAP YEAR BETWEEN HIGHSCHOOL AND COLLEGE. Is it a good decision?
3 - Good essay! Here is my idea of rewriting your sentences. ... graduates think agree thatthey should spend...
Writing FeedbackPhuongnguyen256 - Jul 3, 2018 / feliciatu - Jul 8, 2018
|It is increasingly concerned that the recycling of household garbage is not adequate to the needs
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 6, 2018 / feliciatu - Jul 7, 2018
|College and university fees. The tuition in tertiary education is a controversial topic.
4 - Thanh, there is a mistake in your interpretation of the prompt. You are being asked to reason out as...
Writing FeedbackThanh Hien - Jul 6, 2018 / Holt - Jul 7, 2018
|Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society.
3 - Felicia, while your discussion points for the reasoning part of the instructions are correct, your response to the prompt...
Writing Feedbackfeliciatu - Jul 6, 2018 / Holt - Jul 7, 2018
|Is internet helpful or not? A lot of people are addicted from it already.
3 - Raj, you need to make a clear reference to a thesis statement at the start of the essay. When...
Writing Feedbackrrkothari22 - Jul 5, 2018 / Holt - Jul 7, 2018
|Citizens should be able to save all the money they earn and shouldn't give tax for their authorities
2 - Phuc, you totally changed the discussion prompt for this essay. It appears to me that you misunderstood the prompt...
Writing Feedbackphucthai1215 - Jul 5, 2018 / Holt - Jul 6, 2018
|The proportions of British students at an England's school who were able to speak foreign language
Writing Feedbackthuhuyen461 - Jul 5, 2018 / Holt - Jul 6, 2018
|The proportion of families who owned and rented an accommodation in two countries
Writing Feedbacksusdoctor - Jul 3, 2018 / susdoctor - Jul 6, 2018
|Growing number of young people isn't necessarily only an advantage
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 4, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 5, 2018
|The purpose of United Kingdom residents visiting various countries between 1994 and 1998
1 - people travelling WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jul 5, 2018 / — -
|Advertisement response - Letter ielts general training
2 - Tejal, your essay is confusing to read. If you are writing in response to an advertisement, then that means...
Writing FeedbackTejalnsoni - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|The effects of the growing use of technology in classroom environment
3 - Van, you are over thinking this essay topic. Overthinking is what will cause you to fail. You do not...
Writing Feedbackvan0606au - Jul 3, 2018 / Holt - Jul 4, 2018
|Ielts task 1- usage of three spreads, including margarine, low fat & reduced spread and butter
4 - Thank you for your comment! Do you mean that I should combine the first two paragraphs into one,...
Writing Feedbackimchang - Jul 3, 2018 / imchang - Jul 4, 2018
|IELTS 1: Table showing the television viewing figures for tennis, golf, motor racing and athletics
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 3, 2018 / cao1km - Jul 4, 2018
|[IELTS]Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. Advantage or disadvantage essay.
4 - @Holt, thank you, for pointing out the problems that I have right now. The way I speak is actually...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Jul 2, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Jul 4, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 Line Graph: Customer Number Comparison from various restaurants
4 - @cao1km Thanks for your revision,and I'll check it again next time. @Holt Thanks for your advice. I'll use...
Writing Feedbackianchang - Jul 3, 2018 / ianchang - Jul 4, 2018
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