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|Ad vs disad of a young population - IELTS task 2 essay
3 - @Holt I'm truly thankful for your remark. Regarding your advice on opening and concluding statements, I was following some...
Writing Feedbackxbb84 - Aug 20, 2017 / xbb84 - Aug 20, 2017
|4 creteria: Coherence and cohesion, Lexical resource, Grammar, Task respond and comment
2 - Hi wind0111, Is the essay requirement correct? In my opinion, there are basic grammar errors in this topic...
Writing Feedbackwind0111 - Aug 20, 2017 / sarahna - Aug 20, 2017
|Museums are interesting mostly for tourists not locals. Reasons and solutions?
2 - Richard, this is a good essay with some slight problems. The first problem, is that you mentioned that there...
Writing Feedbackbangyeuemlam - Aug 19, 2017 / Holt - Aug 19, 2017
|ESSAY: Downloading songs and books is considered a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
2 - Nguyen, this is a very well developed discussion of a controversial topic. Your statements have made a mark on...
Writing Feedbacktianangbandem - Aug 19, 2017 / Holt - Aug 19, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 [direct question] Why do people want to research their family history?
5 - @Danstand Thank you for your word choice corrections. I'll fix those mistakes in my second draft. Hope you can...
Writing FeedbackLinh Tran - Aug 18, 2017 / Linh Tran - Aug 19, 2017
|Ielts 2: Comic, Books, Radio, TV, Film, Theater - Advantages and disavantages.
2 - @tran14 I think your essay is good but you need to cross-check your vocabulary and sentence structure for example,...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 19, 2017 / LAudrey - Aug 19, 2017
|Should young people follow traditions of their society or be free to behave as they will?
3 - @Holt Thank you for giving me so many constructive suggestions about IELTS writing! I have been struggling for improvement...
Writing FeedbackGoldenjohnny - Aug 19, 2017 / Goldenjohnny - Aug 19, 2017
|Gender equality at schools controversial topic research
Writing Feedbacknguyenthibichhan - Aug 18, 2017 / nguyenthibichhan - Aug 18, 2017
|Map of Brandfield. New shopping mall project.
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 18, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017
|The table and the pie chart below shows the numbers of visitors and the survey of satisfaction.
5 - Hello Try In your writing has many mistakes: The table with a set of data present => presents,...
Writing FeedbackTryToImprove - Aug 12, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 18, 2017
|Working from home: Effects? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
5 - Hello Giang, Here is my view on your essay: modern employees => recent employees, conventional => general,...
Writing Feedbackhgianghgiang - Aug 16, 2017 / minhphuccttv - Aug 18, 2017
|The number of passenger in three distinct types of railway in The United Kingdom
3 - You need to attach the illustration once you submit your work because withou it, we hardly can help you...
Writing FeedbackAhmad1103 - Aug 17, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017
|(IELTS) Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities
5 - @Holt Hello Mary Rose, Thank you very much for your feedback. It is really detail and useful to my...
Writing FeedbackSerena11 - Aug 17, 2017 / Serena11 - Aug 18, 2017
|Ielts; demand for electricity in England, common consumer usage
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 16, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 18, 2017
|Some say that combative sports should be left out from the school curriculum, I disagree.
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 16, 2017 / zeal - Aug 17, 2017
|[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show the comparison of water usage for three important
3 - Abdul, your summary overview must include the type of measurement being used in the pie charts (percentages) and the...
Writing Feedbackhenryo2 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 17, 2017
|America the Land of the Confined
3 - Sage, I don't get the point of this research paper. The extremely ill formatted opening paragraph does not contain...
Writing Feedbacksagecamp - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 Topic: sports events. Type: Discuss both view
2 - Anh, there is a clear disconnection between what the original essay instructions are and what you are discussing in...
Writing FeedbackNhu Tran - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|Job satisfaction and how to have job satisfaction from all workers
3 - Annie, you misunderstood the last question in the prompt. The question relates to whether or not an employee can...
Writing FeedbackAnnie Tran 162 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. Agree?
Writing FeedbackSkynet - Aug 16, 2017 / Skynet - Aug 16, 2017
|IELTS task 2 - The pros and cons of being watched
2 - Jennie, you used the wrong representation in the final sentence of you opening paraphrase. It is important that you...
Writing Feedbackchopresident981 - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|Ielts task 2, topic: management, type, money reward: Discuss and solution.
5 - Hi @tran14, I think you essay is good,but you have some grammar mistake like: this act: this action...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 16, 2017 / Nhu Tran - Aug 16, 2017
|Methods of measuring learning in educational settings
5 - Nguyen, you are only being asked for your opinion about exams. Therefore, there was no requirement for you to...
Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 16, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|Besides making money, enterprises should also have public responsibilities
3 - Bui, here is something that you need to know about the prompt requirements. Unless the instruction says "Discuss both...
Writing Feedbackchauanhbui99 - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 16, 2017
|The benefits of teaching art, music or ports subjects at schools
4 - @Holt Dear Holt, thank you so much for your comment, I realized that I should learn more and more...
Writing FeedbackThuHangLC - Aug 15, 2017 / ThuHangLC - Aug 16, 2017
|A permanent job and work under same company for the whole life
3 - 1) Your introduction contains too many details that are not really necessary. Just paraphrase the topic and give your...
Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Aug 15, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 16, 2017
|Apartment vs. Dormitory - University student living
Writing Feedbacktrongtuan441996 - Aug 14, 2017 / trongtuan441996 - Aug 15, 2017
|I have just graduated from Hue University of Education - autopresentation
2 - @Tran Trinh the subject is Physics, with an S at the end, not Physic as you mistakenly spell it...
Writing FeedbackTran Trinh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Ban for fast food adverts? [WRITING TASK 2]The best way to prevent obesity in children!
4 - @minhphuccttv I suggest you should exploit your points deeper and make your argument clearer. Here are my suggestions...
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 15, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|How many tonnes of goods were transported in the UK over a 28-year period
2 - Anh, the presentation has a number of minor problems that need to be addressed. For the summary overview, you...
Writing Feedbacktienanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Chinese Civil War. Major historical events have powerful impact to people.
Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Working while studying pfenomenon.
3 - Liu, it would be in your best interest to always post the complete prompt and not just the discussion...
Writing Feedbacktoseanliu - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Leadership skills: Some people could be naturally good leaders. Or people just can learn leadership?
2 - Vu, when you are given a "2 points of view plus personal opinion" instruction, you must never combine your...
Writing FeedbackVu Thanh - Aug 15, 2017 / Holt - Aug 15, 2017
|Travel during Public Holidays - Problems & Solutions
4 - Holt, I'm sorry if the request mentioned above is offensive to you. I didn't mean any kind of privilege...
Writing Feedbackearlnguyen - Aug 13, 2017 / earlnguyen - Aug 15, 2017
|[Toefl] It is crucial for youngsters to have the planning and organizing skills.
4 - @Katthew Kim These are a few comments for you and I hope it is helpful. Firstly, the opening paragraph...
Writing FeedbackKatthew Kim - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|IT IS BETTER TO SPEAK WELL RATHER THAN TO WRITE WELL IN OUR WORK/LIFE
Writing FeedbackMimi123 - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|Foods preparation methods. I really appreciate if you can help me out with my essay
Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 14, 2017 / Mimi123 - Aug 15, 2017
|Modern Technology brought more comforts than simple Technology
Writing Feedbackwaseem110 - Aug 13, 2017 / waseem110 - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] contribution of three sectors < > to the UK economy in the twentieth century
4 - Hi Mao, I read your task 1 essay. I really appreciate some of your expressions but I have two...
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 12, 2017 / alishiraz - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] _Viability of GM foods to meet demand of growing population
4 - Hi @Holt, thanks a lot I really appreciate your comments. I will give foremost consideration to what you recommended....
Writing Feedbackalishiraz - Aug 11, 2017 / alishiraz - Aug 14, 2017
|Public transportation service - the role in contributing to the development of a smart city. Ielts 2
Writing FeedbackThuhuong - Aug 13, 2017 / chocuatt - Aug 14, 2017
|IELTS Task 1 - Write a report for a university lecture describing the information shown in diagram
3 - @Echu You will not get a passing score for this essay. Even without the chart, I can see that...
Writing FeedbackEchu - Aug 3, 2017 / Holt - Aug 14, 2017
|Global firms should take responsible for local communities
2 - Linh, when you write the opening statement, you need to make sure that you accurately reconstruct the original prompt...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Aug 14, 2017 / Holt - Aug 14, 2017
|Some people think that the government have the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet...
Writing Feedbacksinh - Aug 13, 2017 / chocuatt - Aug 14, 2017
|[IELTS] - Larger shopping areas or corner shops?
2 - Cu, your essay is not clearly focused on the discussion. The location being discussed is a shopping mall, not...
Writing Feedbackcuthilananh2000 - Aug 13, 2017 / Holt - Aug 13, 2017
|Different attributes of men and women at work
Writing Feedbackchocuatt - Aug 13, 2017 / chocuatt - Aug 13, 2017
|The proportion of active Australian citizens in different age groups and sex. [IELTS]
Writing FeedbackAkairoi0213 - Aug 13, 2017 / Holt - Aug 13, 2017
|[IELTS Task 2] ...reward members of staff...by giving them extra money...
Writing FeedbackAudrey01 - Aug 12, 2017 / Audrey01 - Aug 13, 2017
|[TOEFL]Some people consider that our life is more complex than it was in the past
3 - @Holt Happy to see you again, I say this because after the first you read my article titled as...
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 12, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 13, 2017
|Ielts task 2 | Health (The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems)
4 - Ngan, your essay presentation needs work. The opening paragraph does not provide an accurate outline as required for the...
Writing FeedbackDinaDinh - Aug 12, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|[Toefl] an effective leader should try to make others part of the decision making process
Writing FeedbackRoman123 - Aug 9, 2017 / Roman123 - Aug 12, 2017
|[IELTS Task 1] the trends of the accessibility of current technology in homes in the U.K.
Writing Feedbackzeal - Aug 11, 2017 / zeal - Aug 12, 2017
|Idolization and its effects
3 - Linh, this is not a comparison essay. This is a singular opinion essay as indicated by the prompt instruction...
Writing Feedbacktunglinh0907 - Aug 12, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|The pie chart compares the proportion of energy production in four different energy sources
3 - Abu, when you write the summary overview, always make sure that you do it as a complete paragraph that...
Writing Feedbackabubakar07 - Aug 11, 2017 / Holt - Aug 12, 2017
|Task 1 Ielts: Bar graphs about the sales of music albums
4 - I can only suggest you to improve visuals of statistical graphs by creating them in microsoft.com/en-gb/store/b/office because they looks...
Writing Feedbacktran14 - Aug 11, 2017 / ulanter - Aug 11, 2017
|[IELTS Task 2]Should museums charge for admission
Writing Feedbackmtnnnntm - Aug 10, 2017 / mtnnnntm - Aug 11, 2017
|Begin learning foreign language in primary school, advantages and disadvantages?
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comment. I will acquire and I will write better at next essay. Thank a...
Writing Feedbackminsam - Aug 11, 2017 / minsam - Aug 11, 2017
|Should a city try to preserve its old buildings or replace them with modern buildings?
4 - Here are a number of errors made in the essay. 1) Incomplete sentences. 2) Too simple overview....
Writing Feedbackminhphuccttv - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|Everyone should become vegetarian
Writing FeedbackAndreiWindy - Aug 11, 2017 / tran14 - Aug 11, 2017
|The emissions of carbon dioxide (CO2) in metric tonnes per person [Ielts]
4 - @wuchunhung0927 Hi. You should have given your essay a second look when you succeeded in posting your thread. Images...
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