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It is argued that people should take meat out of food list and become vegetarians. Do you agree?

2 - If you notice, in the original discussion, there is no argument being presented. Only an idea is being represented...

Writing FeedbackThuTinh - Mar 7, 2021 / Holt - Mar 8, 2021
The idea of hosting an international sports events has brought several controversies. Pros and cons.

2 - You have over written this essay. You do not need more than 300 words in the presentation since you...

Writing Feedbackphung199200 - Mar 7, 2021 / Holt - Mar 8, 2021
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using intelligent robots

2 - Your first paragraph does not relate to the original topic presentation. It is not a prompt restatement but rather,...

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Igcse English as a second language (0511) article writing

2 - Since you already knew beforehand that you are allowed to write only up to 210 words, why did you...

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"Many people think there is an increase of antisocial behavior and a lack of respect to others."

2 - In the prompt restatement, you are offering a factual statement rather than a representation of your understanding of the...

Writing Feedbackanhtran98 - Mar 7, 2021 / Holt - Mar 8, 2021
The number of students who are interested in education

NEW - survey responses - charts analysis The task consists of a bar chart and a pie chart. The bar...

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Task 2 pros and cons: ocean creatures relocated in amusement parks

2 - Refrain from making factual statements in your presentations in relation to the restatements. You should not do that because...

Writing FeedbackGlenda2912 - Mar 6, 2021 / Holt - Mar 7, 2021
IELTS2 Some people believe that the best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life

2 - Scoring is a premium service. Contact us privately. Student scoring = Ban ! Your essay misses the minimum...

Writing Feedbackyuanyuan00 - Mar 6, 2021 / Holt - Mar 7, 2021
TEM AND SEM ANALYSIS IN TITANIUM DIOIXDE NANOTUBE AND GRAPHENE OXIDE COMPOSITE

2 - It is more difficult to analyze this presentation for correct references and illustrative points because you did not include...

Writing Feedbackmiigky990903 - Mar 6, 2021 / Holt - Mar 7, 2021
In some countries, men and women are having children late in life. Indicate the causes and effects.

2 - - The essence of the sentence is correct, but the reference point is wrong. It is not "couples"...

Writing Feedbacknguyenvietanh26 - Mar 6, 2021 / Holt - Mar 7, 2021
IELTS writing task 2 Advertisements are extremely successful at persuading people to buy things

3 - @Holt Thanks for your prompt feedback....

Writing Feedbacklucywjj - Mar 5, 2021 / lucywjj - Mar 6, 2021
(Task 2)Topic: Technology is being used to monitor people. Will the pros of this outweigh the cons?

2 - The first paragraph does not contain enough of a restatement presentation for it to not be judged most as...

Writing Feedbackidkwhattosay - Mar 5, 2021 / Holt - Mar 6, 2021
In last 20 century the population city increases dramatically

2 - Sorry, no scoring unless you avail of our private review services. Students who score your essay will find their...

Writing Feedbackrozajone - Mar 4, 2021 / Holt - Mar 5, 2021
Social networks are gradually replacing the direct communication among many people

2 - Okay, I am not going to review this essay beyond the task accuracy requirements and your writing response. Since...

Writing FeedbackAnhTranDs - Mar 4, 2021 / Holt - Mar 5, 2021
Making the band the best it can be. Is my drum major essay good?

2 - I am not really sure how good this essay is because I am not familiar with the writing requirements...

Writing Feedbackdexterletterman - Mar 4, 2021 / Holt - Mar 5, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: THE DIAGRAMS SHOW THE PRESENT BUILDING OF A COLLEGE AND THE FUTURE PLAN

NEW - IELTS WRITING TASK 1 24/10/2020 The maps illustrate future transformations of a college building compared to the present...

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Describe a graph about the number of common Dolphins seen in Santa Barbara Channel from 1996-2001.

2 - This type of data reporting or summary presentation will not get a passing score in an actual test. Why?...

Writing Feedbacktranminhthinh - Mar 3, 2021 / Holt - Mar 4, 2021
Informing about the latest criminal news and its impact on young members of society - IELTS 2

3 - thank you very much, I just write those sms-styled because I want to shorten it, quite lazy obliviously, therefore...

Writing Feedbackcpt_b33m0 - Feb 28, 2021 / cpt_b33m0 - Mar 3, 2021
The global sales for five different best-selling mobile phone brands: Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, ZTE

NEW - mobile phone sales statistic The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between...

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To Defund or To Not Defund The Police

2 - Try to provide a backstory in the first paragraph regarding the development of the movement to defund the police....

Writing FeedbackDrippi_Jess - Mar 2, 2021 / Holt - Mar 3, 2021
Essay about directing youngsters to be admirable global citizens

2 - Your first sentence is not in accordance with the original topic provided. There is no reference to a global...

Writing Feedbacktuinee - Mar 2, 2021 / Holt - Mar 3, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 about historical subjects

2 - - Good measured response, lacking a clear thesis presentation though. Rather than "the following reasons", providing 2 topic...

Writing Feedbackblueskysg - Mar 1, 2021 / Holt - Mar 2, 2021
Is United States prepared for the upcoming COVID-19 Vaccine demand?

2 - -Linked in is not considered a proper academic, nor journalistic reference for any opinion or research paper. You...

Writing Feedbackveronical1116 - Mar 2, 2021 / Holt - Mar 2, 2021
Advantages of living in rural areas and urban areas

2 - I cannot accurately assess your work for prompt adherence due to the missing prompt requirement. The prompt gives me...

Writing Feedbackstrawberryulala - Mar 1, 2021 / Holt - Mar 2, 2021
[Writing Task 2]Topic summarize: Some countries have many aged people. What are the effects of this?

3 - @namphong020: In my opinion, your writing is good with a lot of vocabulary. However, there are some issues that...

Writing Feedbacknamphong020 - Feb 28, 2021 / blueskysg - Mar 1, 2021
Ielts Writing: Analyze the graph - number of visitors to Brighton attractions

NEW - Tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton The line graph illustrates the figure for the...

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Conversations in person are gradually being replaced by internet communications through social apps

2 - You need to refer to the keyword from the original essay which is "outweigh". The missing synonym for this...

Writing FeedbackNorabui - Feb 28, 2021 / Holt - Mar 1, 2021
Nowadays, shopping online has been spread widely over the world

2 - For band scoring, you will need to refer to our premium services where I will privately review and score...

Writing Feedbackbngauscld - Feb 28, 2021 / Holt - Mar 1, 2021
IELTS Writing task 2- The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction

3 - @MJaylee: your essay is good with rich vocabulary. In my opinion, you should write stronger and clearer sentences instead...

Writing FeedbackMJaylee - Feb 25, 2021 / blueskysg - Mar 1, 2021
Essay about the advantages and disadvantages of Internet for Ielts Task 2

3 - Thank you @holt. I got your idea...

Writing Feedbackblueskysg - Feb 28, 2021 / blueskysg - Mar 1, 2021
IELTS Task 2: Will Computer Replace Teachers? I don't think so - they do not have emotions

6 - Scarce of= lack of Spare=replacement These are some synonyms for u...

Writing FeedbackTofy - Feb 23, 2021 / amiisareum - Feb 28, 2021
Average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line services, 2001-2010

2 - Avoid run-on sentences in your summary overview. You will lose C&C points for presenting all the information in one...

Writing FeedbackPhuongtam - Feb 27, 2021 / Holt - Feb 28, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 1 - the production of instant noodles

2 - Basic format for this presentation is 3 paragraphs. That means there needs to be: - A summary overview +...

Writing Feedbackvallo - Feb 27, 2021 / Holt - Feb 28, 2021
How can we protect biological diversity?

2 - There is a definite sense of importance to this writing. Your opening statement was imaginative, but seemingly suddenly lost...

Writing FeedbackSeanCX101 - Feb 27, 2021 / Holt - Feb 28, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010

2 - The presentation shows percentage of change, not percentage of growth. Your reference is incorrect. It should have been restated...

Writing Feedbackkarlanguyen - Feb 26, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
IELTS TASK 1 The line graph illustrates how much waste produced by three companies from 2000 to 2015

5 - your essay is good with no grammatical mistakes, one plus for that...

Writing FeedbackTrang0502 - Feb 23, 2021 / plamEK16cqt - Feb 26, 2021
Maths and business success - IELTS Writing Task 2 Opinion Essay

2 - There is a missing sentence in your thesis statement in the first paragraph. You forgot to indicate the measured...

Writing Feedbackphatblack - Feb 26, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
The high salary should be more concerned than the degree of satisfaction in job. What's your opinion

2 - When you partially advocate for the given statement, you are writing an extent essay. You are not writing an...

Writing Feedbackieltsstudent1711 - Feb 26, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
Writing task 1 table with a trend - visitor statistics in Australia

2 - All of your paragraphs should have a minimum of 3 sentences. This includes the summary overview. The lack of...

Writing Feedbackdinhminhhai - Feb 25, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] Free education irrespective of personal wealth

2 - This is not an extent essay. Therefore, your discussion approach, which is, "to an extent' response is incorrect. There...

Writing Feedbacklingling40hrs - Feb 25, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
Children must be a good members of society. What the parents and school can teach it?

2 - This is actually an IELTS Task 2 practice prompt. Were you writing in preparation for that test? Or is...

Writing FeedbackIndriani - Feb 25, 2021 / Holt - Feb 26, 2021
IELTS"Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet"

3 - @DinhHuong In my opinion, your conclusion is quite short, so that you should expand more...

Writing FeedbackDinhHuong - Feb 19, 2021 / vannn - Feb 25, 2021
Essay about banning mobile phone during schoolday

3 - @hglingg I think that you should not use word 'whatever' because it is informal. Also, you can write off...

Writing Feedbackhglingg - Feb 21, 2021 / vannn - Feb 25, 2021
The graph below shows changes in young adult unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012.

3 - Thank you so much. I will try to improve in the next essay....

Writing Feedbacknguyenanhduc1998 - Feb 24, 2021 / nguyenanhduc1998 - Feb 25, 2021
Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more popular

3 - @Holt thank you very much for your detailed and comprehensive feedback! You showed a really interesting point of view,...

Writing FeedbackGia_geeya - Feb 25, 2021 / Gia_geeya - Feb 25, 2021
"Teenage Driving Statistics" - Driving Licenses for People Under Eighteen Years Old

2 - I am confused as to whether you are writing this essay as a research paper or as a Task...

Writing Feedbackbader215 - Feb 24, 2021 / Holt - Feb 25, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Investing in science education

3 - Thanks a bunch for your feedback! It really helps!...

Writing Feedbackthienthieny13 - Feb 23, 2021 / thienthieny13 - Feb 24, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Traveling to work is a negative or positive development. Discuss both views.

2 - It is going to be better for your score if you do not make any attestations to the validity...

Writing Feedbackchicky1608 - Feb 23, 2021 / Holt - Feb 24, 2021
Two given maps demonstrate the road network around a City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010

NEW - Cambridge IELTS 13 Test 1 Writing Task 1 - road network Two given maps demonstrate the road network...

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Help for Correction my essay . Academic essay _ IELTS Academic Task 2 on a consumer society

2 - Good restatement with the slight problem of you still using the phrase "which possessing" in the presentation. The best...

Writing FeedbackMakferayd - Feb 23, 2021 / Holt - Feb 23, 2021
The affordable care act and what the solution is

2 - This is a very timely essay. However, it tends to get confusing to read because of the constantly diverting...

Writing Feedbacki90kaee - Feb 23, 2021 / Holt - Feb 23, 2021
IELTS TASK 2:Discuss pros and cons for the young between gap year and starting university studies.

3 - @Holt thank you so much...

Writing Feedbackcath1803 - Feb 22, 2021 / cath1803 - Feb 23, 2021
IELTS1: The given line graph displays the number of alumni in Canada within fiveteen years 1992-2007

3 - @Holt Hi, thank you for taking your time to evaluate my writing, but I don't fully understand what you...

Writing Feedbackkane1101 - Feb 22, 2021 / kane1101 - Feb 23, 2021
PRACTICE WRITING D1 - (Paragraph) Volunteer work

2 - In order to properly write the response paragraph, you first have to understand what response method you have to...

Writing Feedbackpeachfully - Feb 22, 2021 / Holt - Feb 23, 2021
Instead of finding measures to solve climate change problem we should find some ways to live with it

2 - Why do you totally disagree? What are the reasoning topics you will be discussing? Present the outline of topics...

Writing FeedbackNhungmeow246 - Feb 22, 2021 / Holt - Feb 23, 2021
Oil consumption of four different major consumers - Ielts task 1 - line graph

2 - The task allows only 20 minutes for total writing, that includes editing and proof reading. So the standard writing...

Writing FeedbackHainguyen88 - Feb 21, 2021 / Holt - Feb 22, 2021
Is it true that the vegetarian diet is more beneficial for health than eating meat?

2 - The subject proposed for this prompt is not being presented in an argumentative form. It is presented as an...

Writing Feedbackella_lyly - Feb 21, 2021 / Holt - Feb 22, 2021
MULTIPLE ASPECTS OF SPACE EXPLORATION AND THE PREDICTION OF ITS CHANGE IN THE FUTURE

3 - There are some position and spelling mistakes in your essay. Using 'occurred' instead of 'occured'. The 'obviously' stands in...

Writing Feedbackgingin3001 - Feb 21, 2021 / ella_lyly - Feb 21, 2021
Tell about the most interesting film you have seen recently

2 - The problem is your lack of familiarity with the English language. Specifically, how to write a movie review. You...

Writing FeedbackAlya_TS - Feb 20, 2021 / Holt - Feb 21, 2021
Cheaper international travel and more countries welcome foreign visitors. Adv outweigh disadv?

3 - Thank you a lot Holt...

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