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IELTS Cambridge Book 1, Test 1, Writing task 1 (Survey on education)

3 - @Holt Noted, and thank you very much for the comment. Clearly identified my errors....

Writing FeedbackSaraOm - Aug 25, 2021 / SaraOm - Aug 27, 2021
In recent years, some higher education institutions have provided access to their online courses

2 - When responding to a positive or negative development prompt, the writer should take care to ensure that his opinion...

Writing Feedbacknhat_uet - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
Ielts writing task 2: Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good

2 - The writer has taken the incorrect aproach to the discussion. It has been written from a personal opinion aspect...

Writing FeedbackRachel Hoang - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
Writing task 2; As well as making financial profit, businesses should also express their social role

2 - This type of presentation will warrant an immediate failing score overall. Specifically in the TA and C+ C sections....

Writing Feedbackchungoclinh2410 - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
[Writing task 2] Publicize the violent criminals' personal information or not

2 - The writer has nto understood the discussion instructions. The prompt restatement is incomplete and so are the reasoning paragraphs....

Writing Feedbackbenedictandrew - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
The reasons for water pollution and its influence on animals and humans

3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. I'll notice your recommendation in my next essays....

Writing Feedbackjennifer97 - Aug 25, 2021 / jennifer97 - Aug 27, 2021
A number of solutions can be taken to tackle the issue of sugary beverages consumption rise

2 - In both the opinion statement and summary conclusion, the writer fails to address the reasons for his discussion presentation....

Writing Feedbackphuongthao104 - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
Task 2 - conflicting views about the purpose of films

2 - the restatement + opinion paragraph is incomplete. It does not accurately restate the prompt as the points of view...

Writing Feedbackwilloww - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
The percentages of the access to technology devices in the UK household from 1996 to 2003

2 - What the writer provided was not a trending statement but a comparative statement. A trend is a prevailing tendency...

Writing FeedbackLeakhena Bun - Aug 25, 2021 / Holt - Aug 27, 2021
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.

3 - I get the point of this essay. And well said, I agree with your point of view. But make...

Writing Feedbackpardis76 - Aug 24, 2021 / lemonadelemon - Aug 26, 2021
Some countries have introduced a law to limit working for employees. Why is the law introduced.

4 - Supporting sentences are not strong enough to clarify your main points...

Writing FeedbackJacksonHewitt - Aug 19, 2021 / thuthuy841999 - Aug 26, 2021
An increasing number of people are now using dating sites to meet their second halves

3 - Your essay format is not correct => Task achievement problem...

Writing FeedbackCongHung - Aug 21, 2021 / thuthuy841999 - Aug 26, 2021
[W task 1]The pie graphs show greenhouse gas emissions worldwide in 2002 and the forecast for 2030.

3 - You give clear structures. However, you should pay more attention to express you ideas transparently....

Writing Feedbackngoclinhhhh - Aug 23, 2021 / Goldengoat - Aug 25, 2021
The contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business for the economy in UK

4 - To me, your writing is good enough. However, you may have missed the overview part. In case you have...

Writing FeedbackNHUTQUANG - Aug 18, 2021 / Goldengoat - Aug 25, 2021
Writing task 2 about students being allowed to use their phones in schools

2 - In the opening statement, the author over presented the introduction to the point of straying from the original content.This...

Writing Feedbackaanh1009 - Aug 24, 2021 / Holt - Aug 25, 2021
Vegetarian diet is good or not; a good idea to encourage consumers to eat more plant foods

2 - The writer's response is in the incorrect format. As this is not an extent essay, he is not allowed...

Writing Feedbackdieuanh1999 - Aug 24, 2021 / Holt - Aug 25, 2021
(Write Task 2) Economic growth is ending world poverty and hunger or damaging environment.

2 - The writer has used a general discussion format to discuss both public opinions. Not once did he offer a...

Writing FeedbackThang Nguyen - Aug 24, 2021 / Holt - Aug 25, 2021
The developed world is rising life expectancy and it affects whole societies

2 - The writer has the right idea when it comes to the discussion.The problem is in the presentation of these...

Writing Feedbackalexseths - Aug 23, 2021 / Holt - Aug 24, 2021
People always hesitate when it comes to changes

2 - The writer has not provided the correct discussion response. A prompt alteration eests in the essay which will prevent...

Writing FeedbackGoldengoat - Aug 23, 2021 / Holt - Aug 24, 2021
The profits of the top five mentioned mobile phone brands made through selling their products

2 - The brand names have not been outlined in the summary yet. No mention has been made at this...

Writing FeedbackGoldengoat - Aug 23, 2021 / Holt - Aug 24, 2021
In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture.

6 - In my opinion, I think it would be better: I am an of theopinion that negative impacts of...

Writing Feedbackducman9 - Aug 13, 2021 / Victo - Aug 24, 2021
Scientists predict in the near future, cars will be driven by computers, not people. Why? Effects?

2 - Rather than saying "some reasons" tell the reader what the reasons are. That will help create the thesis statement...

Writing FeedbackDuc Manh - Aug 23, 2021 / Holt - Aug 24, 2021
It is rather usual these days for undergraduates to study overseas as part of their degrees. Ielts 2

4 - is not just beneficial only to engage in a part-time jobs While abroad for studying studying...

Writing Feedbackhaiph1805 - Aug 11, 2021 / salami - Aug 23, 2021
It is believed that colleges should equip students with the knowledge and necessary skils

5 - A particular thing I noted is the presence of numerous grammatical errors either in spelling or syntax. These are...

Writing Feedbackbebe123 - Aug 12, 2021 / salami - Aug 23, 2021
Strict controls should be applied to lessen the noise for better living environment.

4 - In my opinion, the essay is a great example for me to study for its diverse ideas. However, you...

Writing Feedbackthuong278qn - Aug 20, 2021 / Goldengoat - Aug 23, 2021
Some Countries Allow Old People To Work To Any Age That They Want.

2 - The writer is not responding to the discussion question in the opinion response sentence. A choice needs to be...

Writing Feedbackhanhhnah - Aug 22, 2021 / Holt - Aug 23, 2021
The graph compares the consumption of six different energies in the USA from 1980 to 2030 prediction

2 - The student needs to review his indefinite article usage. "A" is used before consonant sounds while "an" is used...

Writing Feedbackthanhtra - Aug 22, 2021 / Holt - Aug 23, 2021
Essay about opinion on donating a fixed sum from income to charity - IELTS writing 2

2 - Keep the sentence presentations simple. The writer is trying to unsuccessfully write advanced format and complicated word usage. The...

Writing FeedbackSuskie11 - Aug 22, 2021 / Holt - Aug 23, 2021
Writing task 1: the line graph shows the number of enquiries received in one city in 2011

2 - Be aware of English word differences. A peach is a type of fruit. A peak is the summit of...

Writing Feedbackanhquynhnguyen22 - Aug 21, 2021 / Holt - Aug 22, 2021
The line graph illustrates both fossil fuel energy and clean energy consumption in the USA

4 - feedback of ost is really useful which helps me in writing so much...

Writing FeedbackKiu1007 - Aug 4, 2021 / Chubii - Aug 21, 2021
The column chart gives information about the places visited by people living in Australia

3 - @Holt Thank you ! I really appreciate your help.🥰...

Writing FeedbackLammm - Aug 9, 2021 / Lammm - Aug 21, 2021
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The line graph shows the number of single-family homes in the United States...

4 - The phrase A glance at the graph reveals that sounds unnatural and informal in a Writing task 1 since...

Writing Feedbackkwuynh - Aug 13, 2021 / hahalolo - Aug 21, 2021
Students' mandatory volunteering in their free time to serve the communities

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your comment. I will try to improve the mistake in another essay!...

Writing Feedbacklyvlyv - Aug 19, 2021 / lyvlyv - Aug 21, 2021
Traditional subjects or a more modern approach to prepare students for today's world challenges

3 - @Holt I'm really grateful to you for your advice, I'll do my best to improve my above-mentioned faults....

Writing FeedbackBacher - Aug 19, 2021 / Bacher - Aug 21, 2021
The chart show the ratio of male and female teachers in UK schools at different education levels

3 - @Holt I sent you my post data image. Thank you very much because file is too big, I will...

Writing FeedbackLiny - Aug 19, 2021 / Liny - Aug 20, 2021
Writing Task 1 - the number of Vietnamese students studying abroad in three countries

3 - Hi, I just want to give some feedback on your essay. 1. In IELTS writing task 1, you should...

Writing FeedbackKhanh Trang - Aug 19, 2021 / huyjunnie - Aug 20, 2021
Movie fans in different age group who went to the cinema once a month in the UK

2 - There is a redundant word presentation in the essay that affects the clarity and GRA considerations. The word "...

Writing FeedbackQuynhnhu123 - Aug 19, 2021 / Holt - Aug 20, 2021
Preserve old buildings whenever possible or construct new buildings

5 - @huyjunnie It's very helpful for me, thanks...

Writing FeedbackBetrug - Aug 18, 2021 / Betrug - Aug 20, 2021
More and more students study abroad. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

3 - On the other hand, learning oversea leads to some problems. The primary one is that the students... This...

Writing FeedbackThee - Aug 15, 2021 / gintoki7 - Aug 19, 2021
IELTS Writing task 2: Living in a modern world brings both positive and negative outcomes

4 - keep going! it's going well! but remember all the tips @Holt told you, it will be very helpfull!...

Writing FeedbackKim2989 - Aug 18, 2021 / miriyome - Aug 19, 2021
Recently, more emphasis has been put on when to commence teaching foreign language to children

3 - Thanks a lot Holt, that means a lot to me....

Writing FeedbackKanu - Aug 18, 2021 / Kanu - Aug 19, 2021
Evolution of horses' hooves. How to use vocabulary more professionally in science essays?

2 - The writer has an incorrect image identification in the summary paragraph. Rather than a diagram, a physical illustration was...

Writing FeedbackWashiDJ - Aug 18, 2021 / Holt - Aug 19, 2021
Working and studying away from home due to affordable and available technology

2 - "Is" refers to a third person indicative reference. Person refers to singular reference. The phrase " bevy of advantages"...

Writing Feedbacknameduong2004 - Aug 18, 2021 / Holt - Aug 19, 2021
It is argued that parents ought to be heavily punished for letting their offspring to be fat

2 - The first reasoning paragraph is obviously researched and does not meet the public knowledge or personal insight into the...

Writing FeedbackFelix Dang - Aug 18, 2021 / Holt - Aug 19, 2021
ielts writing task 2: TOO MUCH OF A GOOD THING CAN BE BAD - overwhelming number of choices

2 - Some task questions tend to sound like research prompts, but they are not. These are all mere personal opinion...

Writing Feedbacksalsal0403 - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
Global warming is increasing day by day. What are the causes of global warming and what can be done

2 - The prompt paraphrase and thesis statement paragraph will be considered too elementary in presentation. It lacks at least an...

Writing FeedbackELENA210395 - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Should countries invite foreign companies to open their branches to boost the economy?

2 - When presenting a comparison + personal opinion essay, the writer must not be seen as trying to convince the...

Writing Feedbackngtchi - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
Cars and cycles mixed on the same roadway might cause some problems

2 - The writer has failed to consider that a major part of the globe now have bike lanes in the...

Writing Feedbackillusion311 - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
The graph demonstrates the variation in the birth rates of two countries, namely China and the USA

2 - While China is known as Chine in some parts of the world, the country must be referred to by...

Writing FeedbackDungBui - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
Children are facilitated to learn the second language at the early age

2 - The question posed for this topic is: "Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?" The response of the...

Writing Feedbackchi150901 - Aug 17, 2021 / Holt - Aug 18, 2021
The advent of TV cannot make live performance loss its value

4 - You should include include the topic accurately so that the readers can know which type of essay is required....

Writing FeedbackTrong Anh - Aug 15, 2021 / declanshelby - Aug 18, 2021
I am struggling with this essay : Agree or disagree "Watching TV is a waste of time for children" ?

3 - drawbacks that we do not know. After watching television for a long time , of course, children so they...

Writing FeedbackMinieChoco - Aug 10, 2021 / gintoki7 - Aug 17, 2021
In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because they have more children.

3 - leads to people experiencing differences in lifestyle Being a member of a large family from other individuals as...

Writing Feedbacktranthimylinh93 - Aug 10, 2021 / gintoki7 - Aug 17, 2021
The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

3 - You need to add the picture of the line graph beside your essay, which will help to understand your...

Writing FeedbackLeminh23 - Aug 15, 2021 / skinnypeter - Aug 17, 2021
Happiness is difficult to define because it is different/distinctive to each individual person

2 - It is important that the writer does not indicate any statements of fact or truth in the topic Islaliment....

Writing Feedbackrosigenious - Aug 16, 2021 / Holt - Aug 17, 2021
Tourism is becoming a good source of revenue to many countries. Discuss advantages and drawbacks.

2 - The essay is 243 words and does not meet the word requirements for the task. An addition to that...

Writing Feedbackngaaaaaaaaa - Aug 16, 2021 / Holt - Aug 17, 2021
These days, admiring celebrities are assumed to make many postitive effects on fan's living. IELTS 2

2 - The writer has offered a diplomatic response without considering that there is a scoring criteria for opinion clarity. There...

Writing Feedbacklinhnguyen123 - Aug 16, 2021 / Holt - Aug 17, 2021
TASK 1: The line graph compares the amount of waste produced by three companies over fifteen years

4 - @Holt Thank you so much!...

Writing Feedbackluffyonepiece - Aug 15, 2021 / luffyonepiece - Aug 16, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 1 : The average house expenses in England and its capital city – London

2 - When more than one image Is provided, the writer needs to properly identify and differentiale between the Images in...

Writing Feedbackhahalolo - Aug 15, 2021 / Holt - Aug 16, 2021
Food/drinks/tobacco;clothing/footwear and leisure/education - Ielts 1: "Table" essay

2 - The data analysis will be scored down immediately due to the lack of proper page formatting. The examiner is...

Writing Feedbacktuananhbmt012 - Aug 15, 2021 / Holt - Aug 16, 2021

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