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All youngsters should do volunteer work in their leisure time to support the community?

2 - This is an incorrect response. The provided discussion instruction pertains to the extent of your (dis) agreement with...

Writing FeedbackMing Fuong - Nov 21, 2021 / Holt - Nov 22, 2021
WRITING TASK 1 - BAR CHART ABOUT DIVORCE RATES IN FINLAND AND SWEDEN FROM 2011 TO 2015

3 - hi Huy Vo, lemme help you to repharase introduction ... in Finland and Sweden, a period of...

Writing FeedbackHuy Vo - Nov 18, 2021 / irvan - Nov 21, 2021
The number of telephone calls minutes in Finland in three different categories (period of 9 years)

3 - @Holt thankyou for this valuable feedback...

Writing Feedbackirvan - Nov 14, 2021 / irvan - Nov 21, 2021
The average amount of carbon dioxide emitted per each individual person in four European countries

2 - Be mindful of the writing time deadline. Practice writing with a timer in an actual exam set-up. By doing...

Writing Feedbackquynhmai - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
The bar chart compares the number of 15-year old students chose to study French and Japanese

2 - Selecting to study what? The summary must be clear about its reference to the age group in relation...

Writing FeedbackMai 123 - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
Writing task 2 - A look into students poor behavior; parents support importance

2 - The prompt restatement is over presented to the point where the author already shares personal insights on the topic....

Writing FeedbackJIV - Nov 20, 2021 / Holt - Nov 21, 2021
The developments along Olive Drive before and after the construction of new facilities 1980-2010

2 - The writer opted to identify the changes based on the year representations of the urban plan and design presentations....

Writing Feedbacktrang12345 - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Discuss both view about learning with teacher and learn by internet

2 - This is a failing essay had this been an actual test. The prompt restatement + personal opinion is tremendously...

Writing Feedbackvannhan - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Writing task2 - Team/group activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities

2 - This is a personal reflection of the author. It is not an accurate prompt restatement. Kindly remember that...

Writing Feedbackellenchen - Nov 19, 2021 / Holt - Nov 20, 2021
Identify the adverse impacts of online learning and propose solutions.

NEW - Identify the adverse impacts of online learning and propose solutions Please refer to our private editing services by...

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The importance of learning English

3 - It is not recommended to describe a topic or explain it to somebody while comparing it with other topics....

Writing Feedbackcud - Nov 17, 2021 / lenjoy - Nov 19, 2021
There is an argument about whether we should protect all the fauna or not

2 - When you are asked to give both views and provide your opinion, the writing method of the task totally...

Writing Feedbackministran - Nov 18, 2021 / Holt - Nov 19, 2021
[IELTS Task1] The proportion of women's and men's driving test pass rates in one Asian country

2 - Go for a more complex sentence structure in relation to the time measurements. Itis more impressive to say" ......

Writing Feedbackclairewuwu - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
Discuss the merits and dismerits of online learning among students in the context of COVID 19.

2 - As this is an advantage versus disadvantage discussion, you are not obliged to give a personal opinion. In...

Writing Feedbackmyphan123456 - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
A survey about how people in five Australian cities bought their coffee and tea (IELTS 1)

2 - Never indicate an image position to help you avoid any referencing errors. Always assume that the reader does...

Writing FeedbackAgnes Yang - Nov 17, 2021 / Holt - Nov 18, 2021
[IELTS task 1] The line chart compares the demand for 4 different types of meat and fish

4 - @Holt Thank you very much! I have combined my writing style from many sources, and I've always tried to...

Writing Feedbackchristian281 - Nov 14, 2021 / christian281 - Nov 17, 2021
IELTS 1: How much waste was collected by a recycling centre over a period of 5 consecutive years

2 - The presentation is mostly acceptable except, the writer did not proofread the report. There is a missing period at...

Writing Feedbackbinhan - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
#ielts Some people think that changing jobs periodically is good. What is your opinion?

2 - The first few errors that caught my eye in the first paragraph are the LR and GRA mistakes. she...

Writing Feedbackbangbang83 - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
My IELTS Practice Essay: I really need to improve my work on the gap year

2 - You are not writing a mesearch paper. You are writing a personal opinion paper of no more than 300...

Writing Feedbackemm234 - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
[IELTS Task 1] The chart shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country

2 - For the summary overview. the proper approach would have been to describe itas a comparison of players vessels watchers.That...

Writing Feedbackstevehere - Nov 16, 2021 / Holt - Nov 17, 2021
Writing task 2: The main reasons to make people spend most their time working

5 - Thanks for your advice! I will read more news to collect ideas....

Writing Feedbackquynhchi61 - Nov 8, 2021 / quynhchi61 - Nov 17, 2021
The chart reperesents the amount of males and females passing their driving test

2 - First time Task 1 writers tend to limit their word count to exactly or just a little over the...

Writing Feedbacktranhin - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
Question about the advantage and disadvantage of working from home.

2 - Do not make reference to current events in your restatement. The original topic is not connected to this...

Writing FeedbackNhido - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show the most popular films by genre for men and women

3 - @hanhnguyennn you can use another vocabulary to explain film types. such as genre, category, etc...

Writing Feedbackhanhnguyennn - Nov 11, 2021 / aryabhaskara - Nov 16, 2021
IELTS 1 - The expenditure on consumed goods. The data was collected in France and the UK in 2010

6 - @Dason what the unit is used in the chart? Dollars or pounds? the number of car sales...

Writing FeedbackDason - Nov 1, 2021 / aryabhaskara - Nov 16, 2021
Today's schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today.

2 - The prompt paraphrase and opinion paragraph has deviated from the original topic and required response format. The restatement should...

Writing Feedbacknhatlam6306 - Nov 15, 2021 / Holt - Nov 16, 2021
The bar charts show the comparison of salt intake between men and women in different ages in America

3 - I think that your sentences using humans as the subject are too much in your essay. Use more like...

Writing FeedbackMay55 - Nov 11, 2021 / greencoconut - Nov 16, 2021
The energy produced by France in the course of two years (1995 and 2005)

3 - @Holt thank ya' very much....

Writing Feedbackkhangngudot - Nov 14, 2021 / khangngudot - Nov 15, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: IS GOVERNMENT RESPONSIBLE FOR TAKING CARE OF CITIZENS' HEALTH and diet?

3 - 1. I think your thesis statement in the first paragraph should not just have your opinion but also the...

Writing Feedbackkimkhue - Nov 13, 2021 / Khushi123 - Nov 15, 2021
Some have a strong preference for studying alone while others tend to go for learning in a group

2 - The essay asks for your direct opinion. So the examples must be based on first person,rather than 3rd party...

Writing Feedbackthungoc13 - Nov 14, 2021 / Holt - Nov 15, 2021
New student enrollment in Top Australian university and their applications majors

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Writing FeedbackKund7 - Nov 12, 2021 / Kund7 - Nov 15, 2021
There are serious concerns about the sale and production of genetically modified food.

2 - It is not necessary to define what genetically modified foods are to the reader. The task 2 essay...

Writing FeedbackPHAMNGOCHUONG - Nov 13, 2021 / Holt - Nov 14, 2021
Writing task 2: Students should be primarily taught academic subjects so that they can pass exams

4 - @beloyal Thank you. Can you give me some particularly example about conjuction words in this essay?...

Writing FeedbackTranThanhLuy - Nov 9, 2021 / TranThanhLuy - Nov 14, 2021
Some believe that importing foreign movies and TV programs is beneficial for their country's culture

4 - @Holt Thank you for helping me! It's a meaningful instruction :)...

Writing Feedbackslintii_302 - Nov 12, 2021 / slintii_302 - Nov 14, 2021
Is maintaining public libraries a waste of money since the Internet is now replacing their function?

2 - Review the writing instructions. The writing is to be based on "to what extent" a response that you...

Writing FeedbackNathan531 - Nov 12, 2021 / Holt - Nov 13, 2021
Data on Australia exports to four regions: Japan, US, China, and India, over the period of 22 years

2 - This is a confusing statement as there are no categories enumerated in the line graph. Percentage points we...

Writing Feedbackngthuylinh1011 - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number...) for everyday (ielts

2 - Good restatement but it should have had a direct reference to the indicated channels where the use of...

Writing FeedbackPham Ngoc Anh - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
Social Media on the Brain and Mind

2 - The introduction to the topic will be helped if a previous paragraph is presented showing the history of human...

Writing Feedbackhan2206320 - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
"Today many people are spending less and less time at home". What are the reasons and effects?

3 - 'if worse come worst' The correct idiom should be 'if worse come TO worst', or 'if the worse...

Writing Feedbackanonyhoang - Nov 10, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 11, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Celebrities' viewpoints on a wide range of matters

4 - @Holt Dear Holt, I did read samples of Ielts regarding 'Is this a positive or negative development?' before writing...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 10, 2021
New technologies have changed the way children spend their time

2 - Refrain from changing the original topic presentation by offering a testimonial about the topic. Proving the veracity of...

Writing Feedbackasdadwds28 - Nov 9, 2021 / Holt - Nov 10, 2021
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists travelling to an Caribbean island (2010 to 2017)

2 - The essay is over-analyzed at 127 words. With a writing time allowance of 20 minutes, this should have no...

Writing FeedbackLinh Tran 119 - Nov 9, 2021 / Holt - Nov 10, 2021
WRITING TASK 2 - should phones be forbidden for youngsters during the school time?

4 - In the conclusion you made a grammatical mistake. 'It is better to limit', not 'to limits'....

Writing Feedbackxuming - Nov 5, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021
lELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Televised trials shared in public

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice!...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021
Companies use a variety of methods to improve the sales of their products. What are those methods?

2 - The first paragraph is called the prompt restatement + opinion for a reason. It has to accomplish 2 things:...

Writing Feedbackchibi2004 - Nov 8, 2021 / Holt - Nov 9, 2021
Many people argue that rather than reducing climate change, we should find a way to adapt to it

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Writing Feedbackaugenstern16 - Nov 6, 2021 / augenstern16 - Nov 9, 2021
WRITING TASK 2: INTERNATIONAL SUPPORT FROM INTERNATIONAL COMMUNITY FOR LESS DEVELOPED COUNTRIES

2 - Is this your personal point of view ? If yes, then frame it as such. Respond as required...

Writing Feedbackcynthiavu1709 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
Ielts graph about gold sales in Dubai during the year of 2002

2 - The currency of sales needs to be mentioned in the summary overview. As the writer, you need to let...

Writing Feedbackkunstpm - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others

2 - When using the 2 paragraph format for this comparative discussion, you must provide your point of view for each...

Writing Feedbackleira1709 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the govern

2 - The prompt restatement is totally inaccurate. It fails to refer to the original statement as it adds a discussion...

Writing Feedbackmea1304 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
How Covid-19 have negative impact on my 12th marks

3 - Thank you Mr. Holt, I changed it a little bit ,pl. comment There was anxiety in the environment,...

Writing Feedbackawdheshp - Oct 22, 2021 / awdheshp - Nov 8, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Youngsters have problems but the government ignores this. Give solve problems?

4 - 'Adult in the house impose children their ...' This sentence is quite confusing, maybe due to the grammatical...

Writing FeedbackYu Yu - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 8, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Negative effects of fast food

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice!...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 7, 2021
IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantages of consuming organic food

2 - There is a time reference confusion in the first paragraph. refers to most recent events over the...

Writing Feedbackbon12351 - Nov 6, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
The given bar chart illustrates the number of people visiting four certain museums in London

2 - The 4 museums have reference names in the chart. For summary compliance , you have to mention the...

Writing Feedbackninhnb05 - Nov 4, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
Vietnamese blockbusters and Hollywood blockbusters

2 - The original topic basis is not clearly interpreted in the first paragraph.The writer opens with an opinion about cinematography,...

Writing Feedbacklinh_592002 - Nov 6, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
TRAFFIC CONGESTION IS BECOMING INCREASINGLY PROBLEMATIC IN MAJOR CITIES. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES?

2 - Avoid providing a personal opinion in the restatement paragraph. By changing the purpose of the orginal topic presentation...

Writing Feedbackhaneii10 - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
Task 2 question: Some people believe it would be better to build houses in existing towns....

2 - These should be restated in the paragraph.That is why it is identified as the topic restatement paragraph. The...

Writing FeedbackNguyenfromhanoi - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
ESSAY - Failure and desire. It is believed that failure is the consequence of ambitions shortage

2 - Is someone else other than you writing this essay? No? Then why are you referring to yourself in...

Writing Feedbackcallmenatie - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
Writing task 1: The bar chart below shows the number of visitors to four London museums.

2 - Since you mention 2 out of 4 museums in the tending paragraph, you may as well list all...

Writing Feedbacknguyenanhthu111 - Nov 4, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021

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