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[IELTS ACADEMIC WRITING TASK 1] Participants for activities in a social house in Melbourne

2 - Try to keep your task 1 essay to under 200 words. Never cut into the writing time for the...

Writing FeedbackPikes_2006 - Aug 7, 2024 / Holt - Aug 7, 2024
Do store knowledge on the internet outweigh stored knowledge in books?

2 - It is unfortunate that you have only written 232 words for this topic. The minimum word count is 250...

Writing FeedbackTHANHNGAN241 - Aug 6, 2024 / Holt - Aug 7, 2024
The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now.

2 - There is a lack of coherence and clarity in your presentation based on these 2 problem references....

Writing Feedbackhihihihithu - Aug 5, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
How people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK - IELTS Writing task 1

2 - "Almost" means "not quite or very nearly". It is not the same meaning as "most" greatest in amount,...

Writing Feedbacklee2nhw - Aug 5, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
[WRITING TASK 1 IELTS] THE DIAGRAM SHOWS HOW LIVERTON DOCKS CHANGE SINCE 1980

2 - There are only 2 illustrations provided for this report. One from 1980 and the other, is present day....

Writing Feedbackmal880 - Aug 4, 2024 / Holt - Aug 6, 2024
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What are the problems and solutions?

2 - This is your personal opinion which is not reflected in the original discussion. You cannot make such claims...

Writing Feedbacklamlinhlinh - Aug 4, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Task 1 - The chart below gives information about the age of women in Australia had a baby

2 - Avoid using a run-on sentence for your summary overview. Concise references rely on your ability to present one idea...

Writing FeedbackUnessayforum - Aug 3, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings

2 - This is an incomplete thought. There is a missing verb here that would have completed the sentence idea...

Writing Feedbackkeylie tran - Aug 2, 2024 / Holt - Aug 4, 2024
The bar chart below shows employment figures in different tourism-related industries

2 - What sort of chart was provided? The chart type is important because it will help the reader envision...

Writing Feedbacktangthuyduong304 - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
How many overseas conferences held in Cities - IELTS 1

2 - You are missing the past tense word "were" which indicates a plural past for the conferences. This is...

Writing FeedbackLeMaiPhg - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
TASK 1: the number of people who don't have occupation

2 - Please remember that the task 1 essay will score best once you write between 175 to 200 words. These...

Writing Feedbackphuthinh - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2: Essay about healthiness problems and measures for that

2 - The paraphrasing is incorrect. It should mention, in your own words, that the weight increase is happening in some...

Writing FeedbackKitrute - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
IELTS TASK 2 [Doctors and engineers, should be required to work ....]

2 - Hello, for a review of this essay based on the band sectional scoring and possible final score, you must...

Writing FeedbackQueen02 - Jul 31, 2024 / Holt - Aug 1, 2024
It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks.

2 - The paraphrasing is acceptable, although calling this an argument is an exaggeration. A discussion would have more aligned as...

Writing FeedbackTuyet Trinh - Jul 30, 2024 / Holt - Jul 31, 2024
what do you think will be the highest-paying occupation 50 years from now?

2 - Hmmm,,, the title of the essay and the content of the paragraphs are two extremely different and highly disconnected...

Writing FeedbackJane Mai - Jul 29, 2024 / Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success

2 - The essay is lacking 2 words to meet the minimum word count. Deductions, which will be applied to the...

Writing Feedbacktrannhatminh - Jul 29, 2024 / Holt - Jul 29, 2024
Can discrimination be escaped?

3 - @Holt thanks so much on your feedback!...

Writing Feedbackquynnesanity - Jul 27, 2024 / quynnesanity - Jul 28, 2024
The future of the automotive industry

2 - I realize that this is a draft which leaves you plenty of room for improvement. I would probably start...

Writing FeedbackRcD - Jul 27, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Do people prefer arts to technology in your view?

2 - There is no need to justify the reasons why people would still look into art when you are trying...

Writing Feedbacklmaok - Jul 27, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Are famous celebrities 'role models' for young generations?

2 - You should avoid presenting information that removes the focus from the actual discussion. There is no need to...

Writing Feedbackwslgods - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Competition or cooperation in our society - IELTS 2

2 - The essay fails to use pronouns to reference the point of view being discussed in the body of paragraphs....

Writing FeedbackHoangminh06 - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day

2 - The summary overview is missing important reference information that has made it very difficult for me to understand the...

Writing Feedbackhaidang1010 - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS Academic Writing Task 1: Tables, Exports by Michael

2 - I found myself confused by the summary overview presentation. What taxes? What nations? What years were covered? There is...

Writing FeedbackMichaelc - Jul 26, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
the merits and demerits of taking a gap year and your own opinion

2 - Well, there is an inaccuracy in your presentation because this topic is not really a contentious issue. It is...

Writing Feedbacktvanh - Jul 25, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Essay about doing an enjoyable activity with a child and reading books

2 - The topic restatement is faulty. You forgot to reference that the activities are to be done with a child....

Writing Feedbackeddypham - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
Essay about the proposed new town plan

2 - I am not sure if there was only one picture provided for this analytical paper. Normally, a task 1...

Writing Feedbackindustrious - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 2: A majority of nations are striving forward to economic growth

2 - Your second reasoning paragraph has strayed from the social values discussion. Those are not really values or cultural norms...

Writing Feedbackthanhxia293 - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars, famines, accidents and crime.

2 - There is no need to indicate how the news is accessed. It is not a necessary part of...

Writing FeedbackEmilia hihi - Jul 24, 2024 / Holt - Jul 28, 2024
It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks.

2 - Kindly remember that you have to clearly format the essay using the expected paragraph presentation. You need 4 paragraphs,...

Writing FeedbackRamona07 - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 26, 2024
IELTS Writing task 1 - Production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000

2 - First of all, let me clarify the word count number for this task. You cannot write more than 200...

Writing Feedbacknhungcoi - Jul 25, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
The use of mobile phones should be banned in public places like libraries and shops. (Dis)agree?

2 - This essay meets the word requirement, but not the formatting of the page. There should be spaces between paragraphs...

Writing Feedbackthutran - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Problems with overfishing and the Environment that is impacted

2 - You have too much going on in your head that tries to translate itself onto the paper. The first...

Writing Feedbackjak001 - Jul 22, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Ielts writing task 2: To what extent has the internet made life more convenient?

2 - This is your personal opinion as the writer of this essay. It is not referred to in the...

Writing FeedbackMintlev - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 25, 2024
Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus.

2 - This is an automatic failing essay since it only has 247 words in it. The main word requirement is...

Writing FeedbackQuangTa - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
Writing Task 1: Daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004

2 - Please remember the basic rule when it comes to writing a sentence. A sentence is composed of 1 idea...

Writing FeedbackYashainu - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

2 - The summary overview needs one more sentence, that would help the paragraph achieve a 40 word presentation, to qualify...

Writing Feedbackleehyy - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
The Impact of Divorce on Children and How it Affects their Childhood Development

2 - The presentation is mostly based on theories and academic studies. What we actually need more of in this presentation...

Writing Feedbackmslifka0326 - Jul 21, 2024 / Holt - Jul 24, 2024
Many think that in today's world it is very difficult for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle.

4 - Your essay does not meet the requirement of 250 words in Ielts Writing task 2 and try to improve...

Writing Feedbackvuthuha19 - Jul 17, 2024 / Yashainu - Jul 21, 2024
Soccer journey - an identity, an interest, or a talent that defines them in an essential way.

2 - The essay is too long. I found myself becoming bored by the third paragraph and wishing you would get...

Writing Feedbacknadine_pf - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
What problem does cyber insecurity cause? How to solve it

2 - This term does not exist in the English vocabulary. Either you mean "hyper-connected" or "cyber connected". This lack...

Writing FeedbackThanhTai - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
high school entrance exam - the most difficult time in your life

2 - Is this a statement meant to respond to an English writing task or are you writing this as an...

Writing Feedbackfefeq - Jul 18, 2024 / Holt - Jul 19, 2024
Writing Task 1 - The chart below ahows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European

3 - I think once the information in your paragraph matches the information in the graph, you will be set. You...

Writing Feedbacktikafebriyani - Jul 18, 2024 / nadine_pf - Jul 18, 2024
Many people around the world use social media every day to keep in touch with other people

2 - Your essay is over discussed and will not be completed within the 40 minute time frame. Aside from that,...

Writing Feedbacktaurus - Jul 17, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the net

2 - The paraphrasing of the original topic is incorrect. You have not provided the correct field of focus for...

Writing FeedbackTong Phuong Anh - Jul 16, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals

2 - The question provided for the discussion is "To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement provided?"....

Writing Feedbackcuongng123 - Jul 17, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase.

3 - In fact, many -> Many part in -> part of police stations of Viet Nam -> police...

Writing Feedbackannguyenhoang - Jul 15, 2024 / taurus - Jul 17, 2024
Modern medical science has made it possible to combat many diseases.

3 - health care -> the health care known fatal in past time -> known as fatal in past time...

Writing FeedbackPooneh1994 - Jul 14, 2024 / taurus - Jul 17, 2024
Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athlete

2 - You are altering the original statement. There is no controversy. There is only a statement of fact. This...

Writing Feedbacktaurus - Jul 16, 2024 / Holt - Jul 17, 2024
Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Is it a positive or negative

3 - Your essay contains several grammatical mistakes, you also relies too much on providing example instead of explain your points...

Writing Feedbacksundiee ne - Jul 13, 2024 / lanadelrey - Jul 16, 2024
How an island has change before and after the construction of tourist amenities

2 - The problem with this analysis is that you are not completely analyzing the before aspect of the map illustration....

Writing Feedbacklanadelrey - Jul 15, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
[ WRITING TASK 1] The charts below show annual average spending on clothes per person in the US in

2 - Your summary overview should be at least 2 sentences long. You should add an enumeration of the sources of...

Writing Feedbackhana115 - Jul 14, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
The diagram below shows how recycled paper is made. Summarise the information.

2 - Yes, an image was provided. It may be considered a picture. However, since it explains a 4 step...

Writing FeedbackHoangPhuong2010 - Jul 13, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think

2 - This type of discussion requires you to use a comparison point of view for each reasoning paragraph. You must...

Writing Feedbacktheanh1204 - Jul 12, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...)

2 - You have actually spent too much time justifying the causes of extinction as caused by man when you should...

Writing Feedbackevelynsayhii - Jul 12, 2024 / Holt - Jul 15, 2024
The chart below shows the amount of energy generated from wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.

2 - Avoid writing in run-on mode for your summary overview. You are given a sentence allowance of 3-5 sentence per...

Writing Feedbackdaohientrang - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 14, 2024
It is predicted that with the development of technology, people in the 21st century free time

2 - You did not respond to the given writing prompt. There is a question and request for reasons that...

Writing Feedbackpnhphuong - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 14, 2024
Subjects such as Art, Sport and Music must being rejected from the school.Do you agree or disagree?

2 - The severe shortness of this discussion will ensure that it gets a failing score. Aside from the word count,...

Writing FeedbackLucasvn - Jul 10, 2024 / Holt - Jul 13, 2024
the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online.

2 - Well, your essay would get an automatic failing score because you wrote less than 250 words, did not follow...

Writing FeedbackDaz Nguyen - Jul 9, 2024 / Holt - Jul 13, 2024
Reasons and effects of income disparity between celebrities and politicians nowadays (IELTS task 2)

2 - Do not make boastful claims like these. There are some who would oppose this statement and say that...

Writing Feedbackhann130002 - Jul 7, 2024 / Holt - Jul 9, 2024
Discuss pros and cons of working or studying at home

2 - This is a misleading statement. There is no information nor reference in the original prompt that would indicate...

Writing FeedbackPerthy - Jul 7, 2024 / Holt - Jul 9, 2024

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