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IELTS Writing Task 2 - Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed

2 - Keep your personal opinion to yourself. Do not use it as the introduction to the topic in the prompt...

Writing Feedbackmohanta12 - Apr 23, 2022 / Holt - Apr 24, 2022
Tell us about a thing you try to unlearn.

2 - I am not sure that one would want to unlearn obedience. For all the reasons you presented, one thing...

Writing FeedbackMiTu - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 23, 2022
IELTS Writing T2: In some countries, schools are open till late so that children can be looked after

2 - The prompt restatement is a problem because it contains too much of the original keywords, phrases, and references to...

Writing Feedbackbigbadmonster - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 - History vs Science and Technology in High School

2 - The first sentence is an incomplete thought. It should not be presented in the paragraph for 2 reasons: -...

Writing Feedbackashik35 - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
Essay about high desire to keep pets at home. What are the causes and effects of this?

2 - The prompt restatement paragraph is faulty as the writer repeats himself over several sentences. It also shows that the...

Writing FeedbackNguyenAnh260 - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
Some people believe that professional workers such as doctors and teachers should be paid more

2 - The writer has turned the essay into a vocabulary usage exercise that does not meet the discussion requirements at...

Writing FeedbackEdShira - Apr 22, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
Electricity Production and Consumption - IELTS Writing Task 1; The bar chart report

2 - Avoid stating all the summarized information in one sentence. Such a format does not properly showcase your sentence structure...

Writing Feedbackashik34 - Apr 21, 2022 / Holt - Apr 22, 2022
Essay about GDP (Gross domestic product) annual growth in three groups of nations

3 - @Holt Thanks so much for your comments, however I can't make sense of the +S rule that your referred...

Writing Feedbackhellomynamthu - Apr 19, 2022 / hellomynamthu - Apr 21, 2022
Traveling in a group or alone?

2 - This is a word phrase error. Going outside means that one merely steps outside of the home. It...

Writing FeedbackZustK - Apr 19, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - CRIME AND THE LAW - THE DEATH PENALTY

2 - The prompt restatement should not include a reference to the global scale of death penalty agreement as that is...

Writing FeedbackKhoa Le - Apr 19, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
Benefits of learning English

3 - That's great! Keep it up! I reckon that you should learn how to use compound and complex sentences to...

Writing Feedbackchurongcon - Apr 12, 2022 / Khoa Le - Apr 19, 2022
Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adults. Agree or Disagree?

4 - If I were you, I would write my conclusion with 3 sentences. One is paraphrased from the topic, then...

Writing FeedbackThhuytien - Apr 12, 2022 / Khoa Le - Apr 19, 2022
IELTS Task 1 essay about regular physical activity of different age groups with both genders

4 - Do not fool yourself. Since you committed the same errors as the last time, you cannot make any claims...

Writing FeedbackLemonade312 - Apr 15, 2022 / Holt - Apr 19, 2022
The chart compares the outcomes of a research on the customers' buying and drink habits in Australia

6 - @elalan You're welcome! I'm glad I could help you....

Writing Feedbackelalan - Apr 16, 2022 / Lemonade312 - Apr 19, 2022
The expansion of multinational companies produces positive effects for everyone. Agree or disagree?

2 - This is a single opinion essay that bases the opinion defense paragraphs on the agreement or disagreement of the...

Writing Feedbacklinlin8 - Apr 17, 2022 / Holt - Apr 17, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Revenues and Expenditures of a Children's Charity in the USA.

2 - The opening summary will immediately result in a lower GRA consideration due to the run-on nature of the presentation....

Writing Feedbackmahfuj840 - Apr 16, 2022 / Holt - Apr 16, 2022
Give the cause and solution of pneumonia and diarrhea in children

2 - This essay is suitable only as an English writing exercise and not an IELTS Task 2 essay. The reason?...

Writing FeedbackNtrang1510 - Apr 16, 2022 / Holt - Apr 16, 2022
Hosting an international sporting competition is a beneficial chance for a country; true or false?

2 - The restated opinions must be presented as 2 stand-alone sentences. These separate sentences will allow the reader to better...

Writing FeedbackTruong Bao Long - Apr 13, 2022 / Holt - Apr 14, 2022
Living on their own or living at home during school days.

2 - Good work on the prompt restatement. It is a well integrated sentence presentation that shows control over sentence structuring....

Writing Feedbackjdchan - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
The differences in ownership of technology devices and the number of hours spent doing households

2 - The writer should be able to create a shorter report for these 2 images. Due to the 20 minute...

Writing FeedbackRosalie Yang - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
Causes of crime and activities to prevent this rise in criminal activity. Reasons with examples.

2 - We are in the 21st century, not the 20th century. To avoid such mistakes, do not try to make...

Writing Feedbackrussia autumn - Apr 12, 2022 / Holt - Apr 12, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 The graph shows the value in US dollars (in millions of dollars) of investment

2 - The summary overview is best presented over 2 sentences or more. The sentences must separately indicate the following data:...

Writing Feedbacknamle - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
Increasingly large numbers of students are undertaking their higher education in other countries.

2 - Do not keep writing just for the sake of writing more words in the essay. Make sure that you...

Writing FeedbackPhuonghoaneu - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
Many people complain about teenagers' lack of moral and self-discipline. Write causes and solution.

2 - The last part of the restatement paragraph is called the opinion statement for a reason. The writer is expected...

Writing Feedbackngmngoc9269408 - Apr 11, 2022 / Holt - Apr 11, 2022
IELTS writing task 2: Some universities offer online courses. Is this positive or negative?

2 - The writer responded to the discussion question in the concluding paragraph. That was the only part of the essay...

Writing FeedbackVanan - Apr 10, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
Compulsory study. Young people should be forced to stay in full-time education until they are 18.

3 - I think "knowledge" is an uncountable noun so you should use "is" instead of "are in that sentence. Another...

Writing Feedbackthuongha - Apr 9, 2022 / Vanan - Apr 10, 2022
Many people suggest that instead of celebrities the media should focus on the public interest

4 - "The life of ordinary people will be improved ..." I think instead of this sentence you should write "...

Writing Feedbackdominic2795 - Apr 4, 2022 / Vanan - Apr 10, 2022
Does a country benefit from a large proportion of young university students?

2 - Do not provide your personal opinion in the opening statement. Always integrate that into your personal opinion as the...

Writing FeedbackLingDung - Apr 10, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
International exchange visits will benefit teenagers. Advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

2 - The writer has not taken his time allotment and editing considerations into account while writing this essay. The essay...

Writing Feedbackyondolly123 - Apr 9, 2022 / Holt - Apr 10, 2022
Only governments and large institution can create new development for the society, not individuals.

2 - The writer has not responded to the question in the expected format. Although he did an excellent job in...

Writing Feedbackdinhngocthu18 - Apr 9, 2022 / Holt - Apr 9, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 about patriotism.

2 - It is important that no additional information that represents the writer's opinion integrates itself into the prompt restatement. The...

Writing Feedbackldt0931117093 - Apr 8, 2022 / Holt - Apr 9, 2022
The line graph illustrates the amount of meat and poultry that US residents consumed

2 - The topic summary is incomplete as it does not refer to the measurements provided being indicative of per capita...

Writing Feedbackmanphuongdoan - Apr 7, 2022 / Holt - Apr 7, 2022
The amount of goods transported in the United Kingdom over the course of 28 years

3 - thank you for your useful feedbacks...

Writing Feedbacklily1996 - Apr 6, 2022 / lily1996 - Apr 7, 2022
Nowadays, some people presume that sports have a big impact on the progression of society

3 - 1. You use words that don't flow naturally, it seems that you use some words just to " show"...

Writing FeedbackHoang1 - Apr 5, 2022 / britonnn - Apr 5, 2022
The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

2 - The writer wrote only 146 out of the required minimum of 150 words. There will be percentage deductions for...

Writing FeedbackHong Ngoc - Apr 5, 2022 / Holt - Apr 5, 2022
Fewer young people do farming work in rural areas Why?

2 - An accurate prompt topic restatement will not include the writer's opinion as to whether or not the proposed topic...

Writing Feedbackminhminhmoemoe - Apr 4, 2022 / Holt - Apr 5, 2022
Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people

2 - The prompt restatement is fine. The opinion statement is non-existent as there are no responses to the 2 direct...

Writing Feedbackphuongngoc27 - Apr 2, 2022 / Holt - Apr 3, 2022
Some people believe that Art gives our lives meaning and purpose

2 - It will be better for the exam taker to avoid using memorized and exaggerated phrases such as "In this...

Writing Feedbackscarlettttt - Apr 2, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
Nowadays, a lot of offices have open-space designs instead of separate rooms

2 - The writer shows a high level of academic writing through his use of college level words and sentence representations....

Writing Feedbackphuongngoc - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
Essay topic: Making films and the advancement of digital technology

2 - Restate the prompt topic accurately without providing any opinion. The topic restatement loses accuracy when the writer claims "accuracy"...

Writing Feedbacktina1120 - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 2, 2022
Learning culture in 21st century

2 - There is no reference to the 21st century in the original topic. A strong recommendation does not exist as...

Writing Feedbackanhlele - Apr 1, 2022 / Holt - Apr 1, 2022
We live in an age when unnecessary things are our only necessities - CBEST Writing Test

4 - Although I do agree with your statement, the smartphones topic is playout. we know the damages and quite frankly...

Writing Feedbackzwan - Mar 28, 2022 / Megymarj - Mar 31, 2022
Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job, but other people think they

2 - The first paragraph contains several reference errors that will force the examiner to award a failing TA score to...

Writing FeedbackTracey Tran - Mar 31, 2022 / Holt - Mar 31, 2022
IELTS Writing task 2 - young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way

2 - Band score estimates are provided as a part of our private services. Kindly contact us privately to inquire about...

Writing Feedbackcandylee1711 - Mar 31, 2022 / Holt - Mar 31, 2022
Data on the bird population essay

3 - You repeated the same structure "In...(year), the number of...." You can replace "the number of" with "the figure for",...

Writing FeedbackAdley - Mar 29, 2022 / fuckincute - Mar 31, 2022
Writing Task2: The advantages and disadvantage of children's horticulture and livestock activities

4 - @Thaoami412 These arguments are well described. The structure is clear and the essay is brief. The tone of your...

Writing FeedbackThaoami412 - Mar 23, 2022 / candylee1711 - Mar 31, 2022
Internet users as percentage of population. Summarise the information and Write at least 150 words.

2 - In the summary overview, the information regarding the list of countries in relation to the years indicated should have...

Writing FeedbackVanan - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 30, 2022
Opinions about traditional and modern medicines

2 - Do not get into the habit of affirming statements within the opening sentence of of the restatement. It unnecessarily...

Writing Feedbackmewo23 - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 29, 2022
Essay about ex-prisoner are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of crime

2 - The summary restatement is incorrect in format because the first sentence includes an attestation where it is not needed....

Writing Feedbackcandylee1711 - Mar 29, 2022 / Holt - Mar 29, 2022
Being able to speak a foreign language is an advantage these days

2 - The prompt restatement needs more accuracy. The exam taker is expected to rephrase the whole of the original discussion...

Writing Feedbackdang3cvt - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2 Is technological development positive or negative for distant work and learning

2 - When writing an opinion essay, the writer must realize that he has to target the completeness by which he...

Writing FeedbackKhoa Le - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
The consequences of competing between older people and young ones for the same type of occupations

3 - I think the first point in body 1 should be explained a little bit more, why ' the consequence...

Writing Feedbackhb_bap - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
The question whether rising price of fuel is the best solution to environmental issue

3 - Hello, I suggest using the structure PEER in each of your point in the body. P: point of view,...

Writing Feedbackqunhu270 - Mar 28, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS TASK 1: The provided illustration depicts the information about the making of leather prced.

3 - I think your writing would look better when being devided into 2 main bodies (with 1 introduction and 1...

Writing Feedbacknavjot789 - Mar 27, 2022 / huoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Are newspaper the best way to learn news?

2 - The prompt restatement contains information inaccuracies and a lack of personal opinion presentation that forces it to receive a...

Writing Feedbackhuoqtruc2405 - Mar 28, 2022 / Holt - Mar 28, 2022
Museums in London and tourists - IELTS writing part 1 (bar chart)

5 - @Holt First and foremost, I'd like to say thank you because of your detailed comments and I also have...

Writing Feedbackvananhxh2005 - Mar 22, 2022 / vananhxh2005 - Mar 27, 2022
Consumption of chicken - IELTS WRITTING TASK 1: LINE GRAPH

2 - A listing of the data for comparison should be indicated in the summary overview. The listing is used to...

Writing Feedbackphuong171100 - Mar 27, 2022 / Holt - Mar 27, 2022
Travel around a city - IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The table and bar chart

2 - I am not sure what you mean by"raised" in reference to the city transportation. Since there is no image...

Writing FeedbackQuang23 - Mar 26, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
Peer Review Eliminating Medication Overload Research Paper

2 - Establish the foundation for the research paper and information in a better manner. Create a more solid and interesting...

Writing Feedbackcoralwxo - Mar 25, 2022 / Holt - Mar 26, 2022
Students should choose the subjects they like to learn

3 - If the topic is discussion about 2 views, I suppose essay are failed to convey message. If the topic...

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