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Describe an event or experience in the past 2 years that taught you a lesson.

2 - You are missing a transition paragraph in this essay. A reflection discussion should have followed the first paragraph to...

Writing Feedbackturkeshhan - Aug 26, 2023 / Holt - Sep 12, 2023
The graph below shows the number of foreign visitors to the coast, the mountains, and the lakes

2 - The main concern that I have about this presentation is that you are not writing the 3 sentence minimum...

Writing Feedbacktthaooooo - Aug 26, 2023 / Holt - Sep 12, 2023
Many people across the globe are consuming an exorbitant amount of sugar-based beverages

2 - When asked to discuss the reasons for a problem, the assumption of the examiner is that you shall be...

Writing Feedbackanielts7239 - Aug 26, 2023 / Holt - Sep 12, 2023
Writing Ielts task 1, decribe the manufacture of frozen fish pies

NEW - the process of making fish pies The diagram below describes the process of making processed fish pies. Take...

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[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] More and more students at university today are not chosing to study science

5 - @Giangtrankim Thank your for your comment!...

Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Aug 16, 2023 / Duy Dang - Sep 1, 2023
[IELTS-Opinion Essay] Parents should spend more time with children helping them with their homework.

4 - I like your ideas ,however, I think you should use more compound sentences in order to enhance grammatical requirements,...

Writing Feedbackboreddao - Aug 23, 2023 / luuyennhi - Aug 31, 2023
ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS CAUSED BY HUMAN ACTIONS AND SUGGESTED SOLUTIONS

NEW - You have such a good range of vocabulary and collocations. However, I can give you some advices : -...

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The amount of phone usage time by teenagers is increasingly rising

2 - In my opinion, you are having some grammatical errors. - "lead to" should be followed by a noun or...

Writing Feedbackserenitytran - Aug 29, 2023 / luuyennhi - Aug 30, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1 - Bar graph: Multiple social networking sites used in Canada 2014-2015

3 - In the second paragraph " a decrease to 28%" should be changed to "a gradual decrease to 28%" ...

Writing FeedbackIlearnhowtowrite - Aug 22, 2023 / kainan - Aug 29, 2023
Agree/disagreeScientific research should be controlled by the governments rather than individuals?

3 - I think that at the end of this topic if you add "it seems to me that" after "In...

Writing FeedbackTra Tac - Aug 20, 2023 / kainan - Aug 29, 2023
Cramming and immersion are becoming increasingly recognised as methods of gaining knowledge.

NEW - Cramming and immersion in education Although cramming and immersion have earned a reputation as favored and commonplace study...

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Will schools be a thing of the past?

NEW - In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through the internet...

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The widespread use of the internet has caused many problems. What are these? What solutions

3 - you should outline several solutions outright in the introduction and wrap them up when concluding....

Writing Feedbacktaljahy - Aug 22, 2023 / tinnucbebe - Aug 29, 2023
What are the advantages and disadvantages of exams as a form of assessment?

3 - refrain from using "we", "i", "our", "my"..., especially in an example. They will make your evidence less objective and...

Writing Feedbackmee_lina07 - Aug 26, 2023 / tinnucbebe - Aug 29, 2023
[IELTS T. 2] Remote working has its own pros and cons, but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

NEW - Recently, some office workers have begun to work from home instead of commuting to an office each day, and...

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Different perspectives about the role of taking risks in both; their professional and personal lives

7 - Overall, good organization of the essay. I recommend to add 1 sentence of example to explain this point "Those...

Writing Feedbackvietnguyen2306 - Aug 25, 2023 / kn197 - Aug 28, 2023
Some people believe it is better to work out in a gym, while others prefer to exercise outdoors.

8 - 1. Many sentences are grammatically incorrect. First, use free "Grammarlly" to correct your sentences. 2. In terms structuring your...

Writing Feedbackphudainguyen - Aug 25, 2023 / kn197 - Aug 28, 2023
IELTS: Environment is damaged by human. Which human activities damage environment, what can be done?

NEW - environmental problems caused by human actions and suggested solutions It is undoubted that Human activities have a damaging...

Writing FeedbackGiangtrankim - Aug 28, 2023 / — -
Do you think it's essential for young people to learn about history?

NEW - is it essential for young people to learn about history? In the contemporary world, more and more young...

Writing Feedbackdaqhauu - Aug 27, 2023 / — -
Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that govern

3 - For me, the most obvious minus is the TA. Your examples seem to deviate from the focus of the...

Writing Feedbackmahns - Aug 24, 2023 / Camlinh22 - Aug 27, 2023
IELTS essay on health-related subject - is there anyone who doesn't mind leaving some comments?

NEW - Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their...

Writing Feedbackhaiyen080122 - Aug 27, 2023 / — -
The percentage of people born in and outside of Australia living in cities, towns, and rural areas

3 - @Holt Thank you for your comment!...

Writing Feedbacktthaooooo - Aug 24, 2023 / tthaooooo - Aug 26, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 1] UNEMPLOYMENT RATE AND PEOPLE LEAVING IRELAND FROM 1988 TO 2008

3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback!...

Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Aug 26, 2023 / Duy Dang - Aug 26, 2023
Describe a situation when you had to make a difficult decision. How did you make your decision?

2 - It did not seem like this was a difficult decision for you to make. You seemed comfortable in the...

Writing Feedbackturkeshhan - Aug 26, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
[IELTS Task 2] Discuss about the positive & negative effects of working/studying from home

2 - This is not the writing instruction. You were given a specific question to respond to as the basis...

Writing FeedbackHauau123456 - Aug 26, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
The opinion that we are getting more changes of choices in every field of our life

3 - Your overview : To show the reader your perspectives at the beginning and not simply merely paraphrase the question,...

Writing FeedbackBrianWang - Aug 21, 2023 / Duy Dang - Aug 26, 2023
In at least 150 words, write an opinion paragraph about the topic below. Some parents teach their ch

2 - The topic for writing is not complete. Where is the writing instruction? I cannot really assess what you are...

Writing Feedbackvivify - Aug 25, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
The pie chart compares the difference in expenditure of two countries Japan and Malaysia (2010)

2 - The essay is short of the minimum 150 word count by 9 words. Percentage points will be deducted from...

Writing Feedbackthwchage - Aug 24, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
Describe differences in an island which has undergone a lot of changes

2 - When used as a simple writing exercise, this piece of writing could be judged as a good effort. It...

Writing Feedbackhongdao0301 - Aug 22, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
The layout of the city of Nelson in the past and its transformation to the present day

2 - You cannot complete 242 words in 20 minutes. The task requires a maximum of 200 words based on the...

Writing Feedbackminh2306 - Aug 21, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
People who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009 in 3 countries including USA, Canada, and Mexico

2 - You cannot say "including" because there are only 3 countries represented in the image. You should be referencing...

Writing Feedbackchaungoctoan - Aug 21, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
More people for less traffic?

2 - This is not a totally acceptable writer's opinion. While the response would immediately be perceived as correct, you...

Writing Feedbacktinnucbebe - Aug 21, 2023 / Holt - Aug 26, 2023
The reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000

NEW - what drove people to visit uk's art museums The pie chart illustrates the purpose of people visiting art...

Writing Feedbackkimanh15072007 - Aug 24, 2023 / — -
IELTS - Unpaid community service as a part of schools compulsory section

2 - The task 2 essay is a mere 4 paragraph essay at any given time. You have written 6 paragraphs,...

Writing Feedbacktuanh181006 - Aug 21, 2023 / Holt - Aug 22, 2023
The transformation that Dubai has undergone over the time

2 - The essay will have a difficult time achieving a passing score. It is less than the mandatory 150 words....

Writing Feedbackdollydorrie - Aug 20, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial

2 - Do not merge your personal opinion with the public discussion points. The format for your response paragraph, based on...

Writing Feedbackha1406 - Aug 20, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books

3 - @Holt Thanks for your comment! I'm trying to improve my LR....

Writing FeedbackDuy Dang - Aug 15, 2023 / Duy Dang - Aug 21, 2023
Many people believe that, by taking risks, ones are much more likely to be successful in their lives

2 - It is not going to be proper for me to review the quality of your writing based on an...

Writing Feedbackqihale - Aug 20, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Online games should be banned. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Justify your answer.

3 - Some of word-choice errors like excessive approach (should be over-exposure) + language learning (not studying) process. Besides, you're a...

Writing Feedbackhali7016 - Aug 16, 2023 / tinnucbebe - Aug 21, 2023
IELTS:In some places,young people find it difficult to communicate with older people? Why? Solution?

2 - This statement will immediately result in a failing score for this particular paragraph. You have informed the examiner...

Writing FeedbackRarmi - Aug 19, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
The line graph depicts three companies in terms of tonnes of waste produced, over 15 years; TASK 1

2 - Please be consistent with your use of punctuation marks. You have some ommitted punctuation marks, as well as some...

Writing Feedbackcindyhoang - Aug 18, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
IELTS task 1 (The line graph reveals information on the waste output of three selected businesses)

2 - The presentation has an error in the final presentation. You should have separated the trending sentence from the actual...

Writing FeedbackLily Eilish - Aug 18, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
How individuals can contribute to environment protection.

2 - The prompt restatement is incorrect. You are expected to reword the whole original topic presentation in your version. Do...

Writing Feedbackhungdepzaivcl - Aug 18, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
How does it feel moving towards the twilight?

2 - Please note that you only have 40 minutes to write a simple discussion for this topic. You will not...

Writing Feedbacktinnucbebe - Aug 17, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

2 - Good work. However, since there are 2 images involved, you should have used the 4 paragraph presentation. That way...

Writing FeedbackStacyNguyen - Aug 17, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem.

2 - Your paraphrasing was off to a good start. The basis for the succeeding discussions were also well established. However,...

Writing Feedbackthanhbui64 - Aug 17, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
[IELTS WRITING TASK 2] EDUCATION - vocational training

2 - This is not an extent essay. You need not over state your opinion. Just keep it simple. You...

Writing Feedbackbhan - Aug 16, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
The chart below show reasons why Americans travelled and the pie chart what problems concerned them

2 - There is an immediate problem to be found in the summary overview presentation. The first, is that you wrote...

Writing Feedbackntoaht17 - Aug 16, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
SHOULD SCHOOL CHILDREN BE GIVEN HOMEWORK (OPINION)?

2 - What do you think about homework? Do you see it as a necessary part of learning? Why did you...

Writing Feedbackminwy - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Nowadays, mobile phones and internet have become increasingly important in people's social life

2 - The advantages presentation is far better than the disadvantages discussion. You clearly have a better idea of how to...

Writing Feedbackjadenguyen252 - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
The graph below show the number of overseas tourist to three paricular areas

2 - The task is to complete a simple analysis of the given image. That should be completed within 200 words...

Writing Feedbackthuylinhdo - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Essay about behavior in schools is getting worse.

2 - Do not refer to a particular educational level in your restatement. This was not indicated in the original...

Writing Feedbacktrangnt - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Task: In the past lecture was the traditional method of teaching a large number of students

2 - It is not necessary to indicate how the essay will be written. You already made that clear in...

Writing Feedbackbuiha02 - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Writing task 2: Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad.

2 - You are missing the personal opinion. The first paragraph is therefore incomplete. You cannot receive full scoring considerations...

Writing Feedbackdaniellee94 - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
Historical information of residential areas is fascinatedly looked for by recent inhabitants

2 - There is no argument referenced in this discussion. An idea or public opinion was presented for discussion. Examiners...

Writing Feedbackquinlinn_21 - Aug 15, 2023 / Holt - Aug 21, 2023
IELTS Writing Task 1 - The use of water by four different countries (%)

3 - Thanks for your feedback. I've made some changes to my report as below: "The table gives information about the...

Writing FeedbackTonynhan - Aug 14, 2023 / Tonynhan - Aug 20, 2023
Task 1 (barchart): Percentage of Canadians which gave money to charitable organisations by age

2 - The trending statement is too over emphasized. You do not need to present the middle part. The trend is...

Writing Feedbackeya123456 - Aug 14, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
The questions received by the tourist information office by letter or email, and by telephone

2 - I am not sure if you can complete this essay within 20 minutes. You wrote almost enough words for...

Writing Feedbackhung12345612 - Aug 14, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
IELTS TASK 2 ACADEMIC - TOPIC: EDUCATION; In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary

2 - The first sentence of your prompt restatement is unnecessary. You need to be more focused on presenting the actual...

Writing FeedbackLinh1601 - Aug 14, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023
Write essay about consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

2 - Always present a complete summary. Your information is good, but lacking one vital piece of information. You did not...

Writing Feedbackckhanb - Aug 13, 2023 / Holt - Aug 20, 2023

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