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|Free education without any tuition for those who can't afford it
2 - Sayed, while your thought organization can possibly score up to a 4 in this essay, your overall score cannot...
Writing Feedbacksaleme - Apr 8, 2017 / Holt - Apr 9, 2017
|Undergraduate essay on sleep deprivation and doctors.
2 - Rio, your thesis statement is not very clear. You make a statement of fact within the paragraph without an...
Writing Feedbackalannahmills - Apr 8, 2017 / Holt - Apr 9, 2017
|Task 1 IELTS Australian teenager's eating fast food
2 - Amjad, the essay that you wrote could have been better if you had followed the format requirements for the...
Writing FeedbackAmjad_345 - Apr 8, 2017 / Holt - Apr 8, 2017
|Child Education / Parents / Social Institutions
2 - Nguyen, the opening statement which is supposed to be a paraphrasing of the original prompt is not very clear....
Writing Feedbackmuathuthattuyet - Apr 8, 2017 / Holt - Apr 8, 2017
|Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?
Writing Feedbacksamanhb - Apr 5, 2017 / samanhb - Apr 8, 2017
|Energy Production Chart In America
Writing Feedbackgiahuy141 - Apr 3, 2017 / muathuthattuyet - Apr 8, 2017
|IELTS - Task 1 - movie theater attendance by age group in Great Britain
Writing FeedbackLynapharma - Apr 7, 2017 / Lynapharma - Apr 7, 2017
|Some believe that studying at university or college is the only, proper way to have a good career
2 - Nguyen, you almost got the opening paraphrasing of the instructions completely right. You made a mistake when you said...
Writing Feedbackmuathuthattuyet - Apr 7, 2017 / Holt - Apr 7, 2017
|The cities are becoming busier, the traffic jams are more often..
3 - Nowadays, it is obvious that traffic jam is a regular occurrence as cities are becoming more and more populated...
Writing Feedbackimlost88 - Apr 4, 2017 / muathuthattuyet - Apr 7, 2017
|Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relation
Writing Feedbackmuathuthattuyet - Apr 2, 2017 / muathuthattuyet - Apr 7, 2017
|The controversial issue of whether the arts have to be governmental funded for flourishing or not
4 - you could replace governmental funding with fiscal aid, monetary support from the government, financial aid coming from the national...
Writing Feedbacksssasss1 - Apr 5, 2017 / muathuthattuyet - Apr 7, 2017
|IELTS Task1 writing British donating people
2 - Hello Amal, I have read your review in this writing. I found many improvements you need. Please, you meet...
Writing Feedbackamal_93 - Apr 6, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 6, 2017
|GRE topic Some people believe that in order to be effective, political leaders
1 - leaders must yield to public opinion Some people believe that in order to be effective, political leaders must...
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|The attendance of Higher education students in the class
3 - Hi Sriwidayani, I have read your writing closely. Turning to a detailed description, I have found you have needed...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Apr 6, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 6, 2017
|Which factor is important to stop the poverty and hunger in a country.
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Apr 6, 2017 / frenchfries - Apr 6, 2017
|Natural Versus Nurture, which do you consider to be the major influence?
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 4, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Apr 4, 2017
|IELTS: energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household
7 - @matteo1222 I have red your essay, and I think you should make comparison among the feature as overview in...
Writing Feedbackmatteo1222 - Mar 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 4, 2017
|Smartphone today - how to live without them?
Writing Feedbackhoanglong - Mar 31, 2017 / kacanakya - Apr 4, 2017
|Writing task 1 in ielts about the table of poverty people in Australia in 1999.
2 - Nguyen, we require that all students seeking IELTS Writing Task 1 advice upload the image along with the essay...
Writing FeedbackBLUESTONE - Apr 4, 2017 / Holt - Apr 4, 2017
|Both views betweeen having an enjoyable life and making a lot of money
2 - Agus, the essay cannot receive a score higher than a 4 due to the missing elements of the prompt...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Apr 3, 2017 / Holt - Apr 3, 2017
|Writing Task 1: Two mail companies: TNT and FedEx
6 - hy meirkhan,, this is my suggestions: firstly, you have to introduce the graph by paraphrasing the question. i think...
Writing Feedbackmeirkhan - Mar 28, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 3, 2017
|England female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom
Writing FeedbackEmma Nguyen - Mar 27, 2017 / Emma Nguyen - Apr 3, 2017
|Process of producing tealeaves
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 3, 2017 / Holt - Apr 3, 2017
|The line graph show the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007 - TASK 1 IELTS
4 - @mygoals I suggest to you for following Writing Task I format such as introductory paragraph and body paragraph. You...
Writing Feedbackmygoals - Apr 3, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 3, 2017
|Two maps show an island before and after development - IELTS TASK 1
3 - @NataliiaNechv Based on your essay, I think you should mention key feature of the map, it could be similarities...
Writing FeedbackNataliiaNechv - Apr 3, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 3, 2017
|Driver's license - should or should not?
Writing Feedbacktrnngcmnh - Apr 2, 2017 / trnngcmnh - Apr 3, 2017
|Main Reason for Studying Based on Age
2 - Andi, how many times have I told you that one of the most important considerations in this summary essay...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 2, 2017 / Holt - Apr 3, 2017
|The line chart illustrates the number of viewers for channel one news during 12 months.
3 - hay syamsiahRahim i have read your essay, in the beginning paragraph, your introduction is too similar with the question....
Writing FeedbacksyamsiahRahim - Apr 1, 2017 / agus_mono - Apr 2, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2 - Punishments for environmentally unfriendly acts
4 - With the rapid growth of population, many problems such as water shortage and energy pollutionare beginning to surface. These...
Writing FeedbackMikaTan - Apr 1, 2017 / muathuthattuyet - Apr 2, 2017
|Donating Fixed Amount of Income
2 - Lizara, when you are asked to discuss how far you share a point of view, your opening statement should...
Writing Feedbackararara07 - Apr 2, 2017 / Holt - Apr 2, 2017
|Cheerleading Is a Sport - 7th grade essay worth 20% of my grade
2 - Ayeshah, when you write a debate paper, you cannot just write the reasons that justify your claim. You must...
Writing Feedbackcassiecat - Jun 12, 2014 / Holt - Apr 2, 2017
|TOEFL: Why go to university? It is important for our future.
Writing Feedbackdaonguyen123 - Mar 31, 2017 / daonguyen123 - Apr 1, 2017
|Each roles are significant - who should teach kids how to be good members of the society? IELTS W2
4 - take such responsibility=sense of responsibility a worth discussing=a heated debate/discussion equally important roles and reasons are following=increasingly important role...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Apr 1, 2017 / MikaTan - Apr 1, 2017
|The information about the average viewers number of daily program Channel One News
2 - Reza, the information that you provide in the summary is incomplete. The line graph information indicates the start of...
Writing FeedbackReza_Hidayat - Apr 1, 2017 / Holt - Apr 1, 2017
|Inner city traffic congestion is still a serious problem in many cities. IELTS writing task 2.
Writing FeedbackMikaTan - Mar 31, 2017 / MikaTan - Apr 1, 2017
|Ielts task 1 Wi-fi café, internet express and café cool in New York
7 - @Maitouyen282 Your overview was very detail, you only need to mention the general trend and make comparison, it is...
Writing FeedbackMaitouyen282 - Mar 28, 2017 / Reza_Hidayat - Apr 1, 2017
|City life is complicated or comfortable
2 - Rodiah, the essay clearly states that you are supposed to discuss both public views before your discuss your personal...
Writing Feedbackjalancinta - Apr 1, 2017 / Holt - Apr 1, 2017
|Information Technology brings a work flexibility
6 - Furthermore, some jobs ... That is why they ... This is because the artist ... You can combine...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 29, 2017 / imlost88 - Apr 1, 2017
|New technologies have developed dramatically in the recent years. IELTS, task2 writing module
5 - Hello, To be honest, I think your structure is good and I can understand what you want to express....
Writing Feedbackjason_alan - Mar 31, 2017 / Arlen - Apr 1, 2017
|Population in U.S state of Oregon - three counties over sixty years timeline
2 - Hermin, in order to create a proper overview summary of the line graph you were provided, you need to...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|What are pros and cons of job hopping ?
6 - @HolyzNero Your essay inspire me alot. Thanks so much. According to above guys, you must check your spelling to...
Writing FeedbackHolyzNero - Mar 30, 2017 / vynguyn - Mar 31, 2017
|Influences of advertising - are these ads really necessary?
2 - Linh, a quick point of correction in the paraphrased opening statement. You contradicted yourself when you said that you...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|The alteration of US Oregon's state inhabitants in three counties
2 - Sriwidayani, I am not sure if your tutor had told you this but, one of the scoring considerations in...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 31, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|Great role of big sporting competitions in our world
5 - I think your essay is good, but you should have 3 sentences in your conclusion. I think ''Firstly" should...
Writing Feedbackimlost88 - Mar 29, 2017 / frenchfries - Mar 31, 2017
|writing Task 1: Oregon Population in three counties
3 - Agus, you cannot score higher than a 4 with this essay because of a number of reasons. The first,...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 30, 2017 / Holt - Mar 31, 2017
|The comparison of local government expenditure in each category in Someland
2 - Hi Tami, I have read your writing closely. Following this, I found a few things you have to fix...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 30, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 30, 2017
|IELTS TASK2: Dangers of the Internet - is it an excellent means of communication?
2 - halo @Mayank7g I have read your essay and I found some mistakes. In the first paragraph, you wrote...
Writing FeedbackMayank7g - Mar 30, 2017 / tamtamii - Mar 30, 2017
|Writing Task 2: art-based subject can improve students' performance in secondary school.
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 28, 2017 / Mayank7g - Mar 30, 2017
|Sorrel Cottage Development - Map
3 - Phuong, your presentation lacks coherence and your sentences vary from hanging to run - on sentences. As a rule...
Writing Feedbackphuongphuong - Mar 30, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|Non-scientific subject is not important?
4 - Sriwidayani, it seems to me that you discussed the wrong prompt requirement in this essay. Were you practicing by...
Writing FeedbackAnhy chan - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|Technology has helped us to have a more convenient life." Discuss
3 - Vy, you make some pretty valid discussion points in your essay. Just one point for correction though. In an...
Writing Feedbackvynguyn - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|The alteration of expenditure in local government of Someland over 30-year period
3 - Restuan, please take note that you should only use the information provided to you within the pie charts and...
Writing Feedbackrestuanlubis - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 30, 2017
|IMPORTANT FACTORS TO CHOOSE A JOB.
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your suggestions and your advice, I will practice writing the essays in the...
Writing Feedbackfrenchfries - Mar 29, 2017 / frenchfries - Mar 29, 2017
|Employee Benefits - Information Technology help people for working outside their workplace
3 - Hermin, you have really tried to apply yourself to the writing of this essay. Unfortunately, it still was not...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|How to produce variation tealeaves
4 - hai @tamtamii I have read the whole of your essay. As I know, in the diagram process, you have...
Writing Feedbacktamtamii - Mar 29, 2017 / Anhy chan - Mar 29, 2017
|Annual expenditure in Scotland - comparing pie charts
2 - Hi Agus, I have read your writing closely. There I found a few things you are supposed to fix...
Writing Feedbackagus_mono - Mar 29, 2017 / akbarmappiare - Mar 29, 2017
|Argumentative essay "International students should not be allowed to work while study in Aus."
3 - Philip, your essay has a number of grammatical problems. The first problem, is your fondness for using the word...
Writing FeedbackPhilipfeng - Mar 29, 2017 / Holt - Mar 29, 2017
|The advantages of current twenty-first-century technological developments on the society
2 - @venkat_writting hay Venkat, your idea on your essay quite good, but there are several problems that i found on...
Writing Feedbackvenkat_writting - Mar 29, 2017 / agus_mono - Mar 29, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2: environmental topic, fossil fuels / other forms of energy
6 - For help use these websites : 1. ieltsmaterial (Writing task 1 and 2 samples are really good) 2. ielts-mentor...
Writing FeedbackemIELTS - Mar 29, 2017 / Doel Hasan - Mar 29, 2017
|Minority Languages to Die Out? - IELTS, task2
3 - @Holt :( I was confused about the requirement of the question between giving an evaluation for it and consider...
Writing Feedbacknoura_ama - Mar 29, 2017 / noura_ama - Mar 29, 2017
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