Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - A hundred years ago, people thought that the human race was steadily improving [5]

A hundred years ago, people thought that the human race was steadily improving in every area of life. Now it seems this is not certain that situation. In which area do you think we have made important progress nowadays? In which areas do you think we still need to make progress?

In the antiquity, people argued that the human race was gradually enhancing in all of life's aspects. However, the life's improvement nowadays is not gradually stable as in the past. There are some aspects that have advanced, nevertheless there are some aspects that have to be improved.

These days, technology has held an important role to human daily's pursuits. A host of cutting-edge instruments has facilitated the people in all of areas, such as communication, health and the others. In terms of communication for example, majority of the people possess their own gadget with the superb application. Now, the function of mobile phone is not only for keeping in touch any more, but also for taking picture, browsing to the internet and so forth. Thus, it is unquestionably true that technology has made progress in recent years.

However, there are some human life's aspects that need to be enhanced. As people living spread in many regions, not all of them gain the same right to have the better life. A further instance of this, is the gap between the city dwellers and the country dwellers as well as the rich and the poor. Even many states have established the regulation to give the same education to all of their societies. In fact, there are the country dwellers and the poor, who not obtain the well education. Furthermore, the facilities provided in the villages are less usable in compared to the schools in the cities. Hence, it is clear that the human right needs to be improved, therefore reducing the gap among social groups.

In conclusion, along the development of technology, the way of people's life nowadays has changed steadily. However, with all of the sophisticated instruments, many people are less aware that there are still, many the poor and the country dwellers out there, who not obtaining the same right as they do.

Writing Feedback / Many people think it is important to protect environment, but they make no effort on it themselves [3]

Many people think it is important to protect environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why it is the case and what can we do to change this situation?

Protecting environment is a human obligation, yet it is important as well. Unfortunately, many people less care on it. There are some reasons underlying, why they are to do so. Nevertheless, some possible solutions could be taken into account to address this issue.

In many countries, majority of people are lack awareness upon environmental matter, yet the earth's condition deteriorates over the year. They do not know even the consequences of their careless, towards the entire creature living in the earth. In fact, there are still furthermore, people who throw the garbage everywhere, since they think it is not a big problem as long as their litter will be taken out by cleaning service. Moreover, this bad attitude will influence other people to do similar deed, particularly the children who are sensible. Hence, for these reasons people make not effort to preserve the environment.

Turning to the possible solutions, firstly, the government should campaign regarding environmental issue and foster their societies, especially children and youngster to preserve the environment. A further instance of this, is by giving them an education, such as recycling the items, economizing the electricity and so forth. In addition, the government had better to strict regulation of the waster produced by the companies. These sovereign steps, will lead people to be more sensitive to the environmental issue and encourage them to take care of it.

In conclusion, protecting the environment is a human duty as inhabitant within it. Hence, people are supposed to spread the positive habitual in their daily pursuits to the others to be greener, so that rising people awareness to preserve the environment.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The hierarchical structure in a marketing company [5]

The hierarchical structure in a marketing company is depicted in the chart. Overall, there are eight people who hold a position in this company.

The highest position is Mr. Dobbs. He is the President and CEO of this marketing company. Mr. Dobbs possesses 3 main staffs that hold an important role in his business. The first is Mr. Fields, he is a Vice President of Marketing. Moreover, he has one subordinate that fills the position as a summer intern, he is Mr. Robbins.

The following main employees of Mr. Dobbs are Mr. Tremblay. He is a sales executive, who has two subordinates as sales managers. They are Mr. Smith and Mr. Namath. Then, the third is who fill the position as advertising executive, he is Mr. Gartner. In compared to Mr. Tremblay, Mr. Gartner only has one subordinate, wherein similar to Mr. Fields. She is Ms. Clack who occupy as an Advertising Manager.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Nowadays, a lot of charities and organizations have set up a number of days name [2]

Nowadays, a lot of charities and organizations have set up a number of days name the special day to attract people's attention, like National Children's day, National Non-smoking Day. Why do they have to do so, and what will the effects be?

These days, many charities and organizations have created the special day's name, such as National Children's Day and National Non-smoking Day to appeal societies' attention. There are some reasons and impacts of such these special days, which I will explain further in this essay.

There are some purposes, why charities and organizations have set up a special day. Take, National Children's Day for instance, it is a day, that aim to emphasis the societies to take care of children. In fact, quite a few children nowadays become the victim of their family or teacher, such as sexual abuse, human trafficking and so forth. Therefore, with this special day, the charities or organization could give the knowledge to societies regarding the children's right, and how to treat them with well-behaved in order to prevent children abuse. Furthermore, with such these special days, the charities and organizations are able to contribute to the society actively. Thus, for these reasons, the names of special days are created.

In addition, the impacts of these special days could invite the societies to be more pay attentions upon issues occurring these days. Special days campaign that arranged by some organizations and charities about what they fight upon certain issues, will influence people to be better individuals. Non-smoking Day for example, this special day, will enhance people awareness towards the dangerous of smoking to health. Hence, effect of the special days can repair moral values in societies as well.

In conclusion, it is clear that, the name of special days have contributed to societies positively. These special days possess an own purpose as reflected in the day's name itself. With host of special day's name created, it shows that there are still, people in this world that care towards each other.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The earth's atmosphere level and its relevant data are illustrated in the diagram. [6]

The earth's atmosphere level and its relevant data are illustrated in the diagram. Overall, it is noticeable that there are 5 scales of earth's atmosphere. The more length diameter of the earth's atmosphere is, the less number of the atmospheric molecule will be.

The first atmosphere is Troposphere, which is the shortest diameter throughout the others. It is only 15KM diameter. However, this atmosphere has lofty atmospheric molecule at 75%. The second is Stratosphere, wherein its diameter doubles larger than Troposphere. But, the percentage of molecules is smaller. It is twenty four percent. Then, the third is Mesosphere. The diameter is similar to the Troposphere, and it only has few molecules.

The following atmosphere is Thermosphere. Contrary to the prior atmospheres, this forth atmosphere, possess very few molecules. However, the diameter is much larger, it is 550KM. Then, the last atmosphere is Exosphere, which is the longest diameter at 65,000 KM. But, the molecules atmospheric are extremely rare in comparison to the other atmosphere.

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