Writing Feedback / Agricultural land productivity - IELTS-Cambridge 8- test 1 [3]

IELTS-Cambridge 8- test 1_writing task1

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

reasons of infertile farmlands in different regions

Given are two figures reveal the reasons of infertile farmlands in different regions. The first one is a pie chart, which provides the proportion of each reason, including over-forestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing. Another figure is table, which provides the percentage of three reasons in three regions, namely, North America, Europe and Oceania. Overall, one particularly interesting fact highlight by figures is that cattle factory is the fatal cause for degradation.

The cattle industry stands 35% in the worldwide farmland, while the timber industry stands 30%. In addition, the agriculture industry densely cultivates the crops and vegetations, it stands 28% in the global. The deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing are the main reason lead to the global farmlands less productive, other reasons stand merely 7%.

It is noteworthy that the infertile land in Europe is more than other two regions. The proportion of three of the main reason in deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing is 9.8%, 7.7% and 5.5%, respectively. In general, Europe gains 23% infertile land in global statistics. In stark contrast, North America only gains 5% infertile land, 0.2% in deforestation, 3.3% in over-cultivation and 1.5% in over-grazing. It is obvious that the proportion of over-cultivation is 0% in Oceania. Oceania's agriculture is not the importance of their living, instead their cattle industry and timber industry support their living. The proportion of deforestation and over-grazing gain 1.7% and 11.3% in the total 13%.

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Writing Feedback / The unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school [2]

Question: Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

community service in curriculum

Nowadays, more and more people are concerning about whether the credits of community service should be forced to set in curriculum in high school or not. Some believe that this activity can help students to learn empathy while others think that it is totally wasting time. I agree with the latter notion, here are some ideas as below.

First of all, it is crucial for students to decide their future during this period. The school should provide more opportunities of field experience instead of an activity far different with studies. For example, I was confused when I was facing the option between Arts and Science. Fortunately, our high school more emphasized on practical experience, we were assigned to proper department after aptitude test. Subsequently, we explored our interest and develop skills during our short-term intern in cooperative enterprise.We cannot deny that young people should learn empathy in their age, but it is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school. School can create the club relative to volunteer activities, holding unpaid community service in weekends.

Secondly, it is negative for local unemployment rate when students work as free labor. Unpaid community service seems helpful for local citizen, in fact, free labor replace the original workers. In addition, the wage might be influenced by unpaid community service. It is indisputable fact that the citizens support unpaid community service, so they can cost down the expenditures. However, it is unfair to original workers, they accepted a series of training, but they eventually get lower wage or even are fired by employers due to this activity. The school should consider this condition when they setting the curriculum.

By way of conclusion, I once reaffirm my position that the unpaid community service is not necessary to be a compulsory program in high school because of developing the skill of future preference and avoiding the increase of unemployment.

Writing Feedback / Given are two pie charts illustrating how different languages are spoken by British students [3]

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

foreign language knowledge in the uk

Given are two pie charts illustrating how different languages are spoken by British students in a decade. Overall, one particularly interesting fact is that Spanish is the most popular language during this period.

It is obvious that Spanish gain at least 10% more than other languages, constituting 30% in 2000. English speakers (20%) were secondary, there was a bit difference with Spanish, by 10%. In addition, the proportion of French and another language gain half lower than Spanish speakers. Nonetheless, German speakers and dual-language speakers merely had one-ninths of overall British students.

After ten years, most of the item had changed except for German speakers, the proportion of German speakers retained 10%. In 2010, Spanish speakers increased to 35% while another language speakers grew up to 20%, both of these two language speakers had 5% growth. In contrast, French speakers and English speakers decreased in 2010, the former slightly fallen to 10% and so did the latter. It is noteworthy that dual-language speakers rose to 15%, this phenomenon could be connected with the decrease of French and English speakers. It is clear that English speakers learned French, meanwhile, the French speakers learned English in a decade.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS-Task2- the reason of learning a different language [8]

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign languages is in order to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

multi-language not merely for travel or work

Nowadays, more and more people are concerning the main reason for learning languages. Some people believe that traveled use or worked necessary is the only reason while others hold different notions. I personally believe that there are other reasons lead to learn foreign languages.

It is indisputable fact that language is the crucial thing for living aboard. However, I would argue that the second or third language cannot be used for each countries. For example, English is a major option of second language because of its common use, but some countries still tend to speak in their native languages. Germany, France, Spain are the most popular countries for traveling, but local citizen prefer to speak in German, French and Spanish in their daily. Nonetheless, it is unlikely that we learn each language before traveling different countries. Recently, people try to communicate with body language, which break the necessary of learning numerous languages. Therefore, language different is not the main problem in a tour.

Further and more important, though, speaking foreign languages is more easily to find local job. There is a considerable contribution - charity. People learn foreign language for being volunteers in worldwide. They accept language class and relative training before going to developing countries. Unequal distribution of resources lead to detrimental environment of education, incomplete sanitary faculties and lack of self-sufficient ability. In order to help them, volunteers use local dialect to guide local people to improve their life. Learning local language not only express clearly but also establish trust with local people. Therefore, Learning language also can be a measure of helping people who lives in remote area.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position, I believe that learning multi-language not merely for travel or work, it can care the people who need our help.

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Writing Feedback / It is equally important for the government and individuals for paying attention on healthy diet [2]

Some people think that governments should do more to make their citizens have a healthy diet. Others, however, believe that individuals should be responsible for their own diet and health.

Discuss both views and give our own opinions.

healthy diet in peoples' bill of fare

Nowadays, people have different views about the health take care. Some think the health care is the government's responsibility, while others see this as personal diet affair. However, I believe both government and individuals should equally pay attention to this issue. This essay will discuss both notions with explanations involved.

On the one hand, it is undeniable that the government have obligation to provide complete perception of healthy diet. The government can give some suggestion on organic agriculture, providing farmers to cultivate better crops. Besides, the government can also improve the sanity facilities, giving clean water for household use. For example, Taiwan government holds workshops for local farming and ranching, owners of farms and cattle ranch learn the modern measures which can grow corps without using pesticides. Subsequently,the citizens enjoy the organic food by following the government's instruction.

On the other hand, it is indisputable that the individuals should take care their own diet. In order words, the health condition only is well known by ourselves. For stark instance, the patients who have high blood pressure know which food is much more proper for them. They cannot ingest too much fried food, meat and processed food. It is better for them to eat vegetables and fruits, such as onion, tomato, corn, apple and banana, etc. However, the patients with other disease have other diet list from nutritionists. As a result, individuals know their personal diet most, they should take care of their health by themselves.

By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position. I believe it is equally important for the government and individuals to response for paying attention on healthy diet. The government support to improve the food and environment quality while the individuals ingest the nutrient foods.

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