Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING STRIVING: COMPUTER GAMES AND HOW THEY AFFECT CHILDREN [4]

Is gaming good for kids?

Essay: Many parents complain that computers games have no value to their children's studies. On the contrary, those online games have produced a lot of negative effects on the mental and physical development. What is your opinion?

In the modern digital age, regardless of the widespread popularity among young teenagers, computer games have confronted numerous parents' criticism of seriously detrimental impacts on their kids' development including major problems like cognitive and physical impairments. From my viewpoint, I strongly agree with the advice on limiting children's access to those harmful online games.

Beyond their main purpose for human relaxation and entertainment, the fact that game players incline to suffer from the overexposure to the virtual world of online games has proved their highly hazardous addiction. More particularly, that adolescents spend many straight hours sitting in front of computer screens could spark several health problems like short sightedness or headaches possibly caused by their untold harmful radiation, obesity due to the lack of sufficient exercise and being unsociable because of fewer hours for extracurricular activities. Furthermore, several games with sexual and violent scenes should be banned for those in early childhood.

This may be true to some extent because the entertaining method through computers can be beneficial to the kids' mentality after schooling. However, the misleading way of excessively getting indulged in game missions has resulted in the children's neglect of their school assignments. That they usually fail to meet their exercise deadlines not only damages their study results and face the risk of losing such preciously social relationship like friendship but also leads to unnecessary worries and disappointment of their parents. Moreover, gamers are often possible victims of cyber-bullies when they join in such a virtual world with thousands of anonymous users.

From the above evidences of physiological and psychological damages, I reach the final agreement with the idea that parents having a great concern about their young teenagers' health development had better discourage their children from gaining access to this dangerous software.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: IDEAS ABOUT MESEUMS [2]

role of museums in today's world

Some people think museums should be enjoyable places to attract and entertain young people. Others think the purpose of museums is to educate, not to entertain. Discuss both two views and give your own opinion

In modern world, there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether the local authorities had better refine the initially educational function of the museums by means of additionally recreational purpose. From my perspective, I think a combination of both preferences will absolutely facilitate the youngsters' enlightenment.

To begin with, museums with tremendous collection of variously historical pieces of arts, culture, science and geology as well preserved and exhibited to general public has played such an importantly everlasting role of reminiscence in historic events to disseminate human civilization and experience towards today generations. Visiting the museums, the young can not only gain educational acknowledgement with historical records but also encourage their patriotism and respect for the liberty and sovereignty the previous generation protected by scrutinizing a wide range of relics and several devastated exhibits in wartime considered as the witness of history.

This may be true to some extent because museums should concentrate on representing their educational aims. However, in regard to the regretful lack of sufficient visits museums are believed to organize additionally entertaining sightseeing so as to either arouse teenagers' attention and curiosity or depict the ancient time authentically and interestingly rather than displaying antiquities boringly.

In conclusion, I believe that a blend of educational and entertaining purpose will improve the indispensable role of museums in current society.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: Advertising in Human Life [2]

advertisements restrictions

The society would benefit from a ban on all form of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the world of various forms of advertising, public concern has arisen about whether the government's legislation on the prohibition of pervasive advertisements due to its uselessness and even harmfulness facilitates social development. From my perspective, I strongly disagree with this subjective assumption.

To begin with, living in the age of technology advance with numerous products recently invented with distinct and revolutionary features to better our lives and solve unraveled matters we used to have has emphasized the great importance of public commercials with positive values for our society. More particularly, eye-catching images in adverts enable both manufacturers and potential customers utilizing this opportunities to introduce their products to general public and gain excess to new and advanced ones respectively. Moreover, advertisers considered as one of major sponsors for media costs contribute to pay for television programs we watch and subsidize the newspapers we read every day.

From another reason, we can deny that a large number of job opportunities in advertising have enormously contributed to the nations' economic growth. The prohibition of a variety of advertising is such a pitiful decision that the national prosperity will experience an increase in unemployment rate and a decrease in GDP in relation.

To sum up, that advertising with such undeniable social achievements has proved its essential role in human life has reinforced my belief in its long-term development.