Undergraduate / (Nerdy myself / Bicycle together) - Tufts [4]

I know this is very short notice but I just found out about this wonderful website (and tend to procrastinate). Will someone please provide editting feedback to a few supplement essays for Tufts? I will return the favor if you need. Thanks!

1. Why Tufts?

I want to go to a college where I can be my most nerdy, weird and true self. Tufts immediately captivates me because weirdness is a valued quality there. Looking at the clubs and activities Tufts has to offer turns me in to a child let loose in a candy store. I want it all - from the Harry Potter Society to the Pre-Medical Society to Club Lacrosse. Tufts will also accommodate my academic needs by delivering an education where I can foster passions in both Chemistry and English. It is my dream to add to the contagious enthusiasm at Tufts.

2. Let your life speak. Describe the environment in which you were raised and how it impacted the person you are today.

I grew up an only child in a family that loved to bicycle together. One day in the fourth grade, I arrived home from school to find my mom waiting for me at the front door. "Papi is at the hospital" she informed me without any introduction. He had been diagnosed with pancreatitis, a possible deadly inflammation of the pancreas.

As the months passed, I continued living my life normally. I would ride my scooter to school every morning, and back home every afternoon. We would eat dinner as a family, but most of the time my papi would work in the garage all day, not speaking to anyone. Eleven months after coming home from school to find my mom waiting for me at the front door, my papi moved out.

Spending half of my time with my sick father shaped me into a self-motivated, independent child. When I stayed with my papi, I would have to take care of him because his medicine sometimes made him delirious. Making dinner for us on those nights, cleaning our bathroom and reminding him to take the rest of his pills became my regular responsibilities.

Being a caregiver to someone who should have been taking care of me prepared me to be self-sufficient in solving my own problems. I am entirely comfortable in new situations. My papi's illness did not send me running to my mother's arms for protection, but instead is the foundation of the independent and adaptable person I am today.

Undergraduate / 'a law to The Ministry of Magic' - Tufts Supplement [4]

Prompt: Celebrate your Nerdy side

This is an optional essay, so aside from gramatical errors or sentace structuring, is it good enough of an idea to send in? word count: 476

I, Alex Nierlich, Mayor of Dumbletown, do hereby propose a law to The Ministry of Magic which would render the eleventh of June to be Albus Percival Wulfric Brian Dumbledore Day. Even long after the tragic death of our hero, his words of wisdom continue to give inspiration to the youth of our Wizarding World.

Albus Dumbledore is no novice when it comes to love. He knows that love is not defined by a relationship status on Facebook, or a marriage certificate from City Hall, something that our civilized society has failed to grasp thus far. He recognizes that the most powerful love is the kind that lies unspoken, expressing itself with actions rather than meaningless words. For any doubters of Dumbledore's theory, the wickedest sorcerer in history, He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named, was not destroyed because Harry Potter presented him with a marriage certificate. Harry defeated him because he possessed a love inside his soul that Voldemort knew nothing of. Clearly, Dumbledore's advanced wisdom regarding love saved half the Wizarding World.

"It takes a great deal of courage to stand up to our enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to our friends". What a wise man! How many times have we, as humans, been quick to call out the mistakes of those we detest, yet suddenly turn a blind eye when the same mistakes are made by loved ones? Albus Dumbledore is the perfect poster boy for the courage needed to stand up to friends. When he was seventeen, he became the best of friends with Gellert Grindelwald. Unfortunately, Grindelwald showed his true colors shortly afterward when his obsession for "Wizard Domination" resulted in an argument that killed Albus' sister, Ariana. Dumbledore ignored Grindelwald's evil actions overseas because he was afraid to fight with someone he had loved. Finally, he had to muster the courage to stand up to his old friend and show him that killing people was not okay. Dumbledore lead by example and defeated Grindelwald in 1945, locking him in prison for life. Dumbledore showed great bravery by once again saving the Wizarding World at a great personal cost.

Dumbledore was a brilliant and courageous man, yet still was humble and relatable. He exhibits qualities that every man and woman should aspire to possess. For this reason, we should honor Albus Dumbledore every June eleventh. This holiday would mandate that everyone eat Dumbledore's favorite jam (raspberry of course) for breakfast and finish the day with a lemon drop- his favorite muggle candy. Furthermore, everyone in the country will be given a new pair of socks because as Dumbledore once said, "one can never have enough socks". I thank you for taking this new holiday into consideration. Please contact me on the progress of this law proposal and I will present to you all of my ideas for Albus Percival Wulfric Brian Dumbledore Day.

Undergraduate / 'AT an AP Physics class my jaw dropped' - Emory Essay [3]

I love leaving things to the last minute apparently.

Prompt:
1. What are the unique qualities of Emory University, and the specific school(s) to which you are applying (Emory College of Arts and Sciences, Oxford College, or both), that make you want to become part of Emory University? In what ways do you hope to take advantage of the qualities you have identified?

On the first day of junior year I walked into my AP Physics class and my jaw dropped. Every inch of my teacher's wall was covered in banners from different colleges that past students have attended. During the break of the double period class, I roamed around the room, looking from banner to banner. One big bright, blue and white flag caught my attention. Thus began my interest in Emory University.

I had always heard of Emory as a great Business school, but when I saw students from a class of science enthusiasts found Emory to be their perfect fit, I was resolute about my decision to come here. Emory has a pre-med track plan and an excellent medical school where I can establish experience in the medical field early on. In addition to the superlative academics, the research programs offered at Emory causes me to leap with excitement. I will apply to participate in the Summer Undergraduate Research program at Emory because I cannot fathom a more interesting and fun way to spend a summer than having a mentor teach me how to conduct and carry out research that will benefit the community of science.

Giving back to my community has always been an important practice in my life. Volunteer Emory is a great program with diverse organized opportunities for service. The Action Ministries Atlanta organization grabs my attention because I believe that educating children who grow up in poverty will provide hope and inspiration for them to change their lives.

Undergraduate / 'Racing to Success' - Emory Essay [2]

What is your favorite ride at the amusement park? How does this reflect your approach to life?

Racing to Success
The light flashes green and I slam my foot on the acceleration pedal without any reservations. I turn the wheel slightly so my go-kart cuts off the person slightly behind me. Every time I am at an amusement park, I cannot leave without winning a go-kart race. Go-karting provides a rush of carefree exhilaration: I am allowed to speed past and cut off everyone blocking my success in a way that would be appalling (and illegal) in the real world.

My love for go-karting reveals a lot about my attitude in life. I often feel the need to be in control of my life, and cringe when I have to plan around things that I cannot control, such as the weather. This attribute helps me to charge after what I want instead of waiting for an opportunity to be presented to me. In addition to loving life in the driver's seat, Go-karting reflects my competitive attitude. I am always challenging myself to accomplish certain goals, such as taking all AP classes, or running a faster mile at lacrosse practice. I approach life with a positive and determined attitude, much like a go-kart race, because I know the key to success is to continue chasing my aspirations with a smile until I win.