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Salikron   
Oct 27, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Positive, acceptable, truthful, and loyal' - a good friend essay [3]

I never learn English before.This is my first time. So, I can't write English correct. cause I learned it myself .I don't have a teacher to teach. But I never give up. I spend my free time after work. read this web everyday. I'm trying to see many eassy here and comment for improving in learning my english. I'm feeling thank you this web and everyone that devote the time to check my eassy. Yours kindness make me want to improve my english more. Thank you. ThANK YOU. ^^

The characteristics of a good friend.

There's no denying that friends have a tremendous impact on preple lives. Good friend makes the good times even better,and the bad times more beareble. They encourage when one is sad and entertain when one is lonesome. Moreover, they listen when one has problems and suggest those solve problems. We can say that a life without friend is no life at all. However, friends could faking it or been concealing some secrets too. So, it is very important for one to recognize all the friends has because good friend are hard to find. In my opinion, good friend must have three characteristice are position thinking, not try change the other and loyal.

The first characteristics of a good friend is positive thinking. She should be positive person. That is, she must see a good think in the others. She must support when they need it. For example, perhaps they always wanted to be a writer, she will give them the emotional push you need to go after what they want in life. Moreover, she must help they when they're feeling down or need some extra speacail. For example, when they're feeling to lack the confident themselves, she should be side them and encourage untill they're feeling better. She should be a good listener and a good person.

The second characteristics of a good friend is she must not try to change the others. She should accept what they are. For example, they like to eat meat, she should not tell they have to be vegetarian, or anything else like that. She must be generous and respect others. Futhermore, she should always invite they to try something new, but don't want to try to control them. Being a good friend with the other because of who they are now, not because of who she want them to be.

The three characteristics of a good friend is loyal. This is one of the biggest signs of a good friend. She must be loyal and trustworthy. For example, she must avoid gossip or speaking badly about others. She should be reliable. She must protect they's secrets under any conditions. Moreover, she should be honest and not measured.

In conclusion, the above paragraphs have discussed three characteristics of a good friend. The first characteristics, the good friend must be positive: being support and help when they're in troble. The second characteristics, the good friend should not change other and accept what they are. The last characterists, the good friend must loyal, trustworthy and honest.
Salikron   
Nov 27, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'Positive, acceptable, truthful, and loyal' - a good friend essay [3]

Thank you so much Scientiana. ^^
I really appreciate it for your revising.
Thank you again for your worth time to check my eassy.
I will keep up my good work. Thank you Thank you Thank you >//<

Thank you a lot Dumi ^^
I'm thankful for your kindness and the topic that you picked for me.
Thank you again for your help.I will do what you suggest.Thank you so much. ^^
Thank you Thank you Thank you.
Salikron   
Nov 28, 2012
Undergraduate / Personal Statement for Fashion Schools - 'I am ready' [4]

This is great story.!!
your eassy is very elaborate.
I'm very impressed the way to describe about your last success. ^^

But I have a few suggestions for you.
Born into a middle class family whose parents run a pharmacy, I had grown relatively affluent. Thanks to my parents, I was able to afford any fashion items I wanted. It was feasible for me to be interested in fashion and I took it gratefully. In my opinion , this paragrapt is unnecessary . I think you can delete it altogether, because it making your eassy you is loaded. Your content is strong, so you should not add another respect which not relate on your eassy. Your eassy is perfect when you focussed on the point.^^

Sorry I couldn't come up with some help with checking your grammar. because I'm still weak about it. T^T I hope giving you what i found to be the flaw helped!

Anyways.... I enjoyed reading your essay! Great writing. ^_^
Salikron   
Nov 28, 2012
Undergraduate / UC Transfer Prompt - Intended major: Physics [5]

I like your eassy writting so much. ^^
Althought I just start learning to write English recently, and certainly I'm don't good at English.
But I enjoyed reading your eassy.^^ I feel like is so have fun,easy to understand,and not be bored with your relate.
I agree with mrkrishan that you have a good details and flows.

And I'm so sorry I couldn't come up help you for checking grammar or revising your writting, because I still weak about it. T^T

I would like to tell you that your eassy is perfect for me. ^^
Salikron   
Nov 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / Marriage partners should similar or not - essay structure check [3]

Hello.^^ This is my second time for my writing. Because I've learned it myself . So, I think that I must have a lot of gramma error. but that is a best thing because I think I will learn them's mistake. I would appreciate if anyone who take time to help a little bit. and Thank you for your revising so much. ^_^

QUESTION; Some people believe that marriage partners should be very similar to themselves. Other believe such similarity is not needed. What is your opinion?

Finding the marriage partners right is not always an easy thing to do, so having something to be very similar may a good way of choosing the marriage partners right in our marrige life.In my opinion, the marriage partner should be similar,because many people tent to fall in love and stay with people who share us profound similarities. For example, having similarity attitude or comfort zone, the same goals and values,and the same hobby. Moreove, some measure of similarities is usually helpful maintaining love relation in our marrige life.

To begin with, the marriage partners should be similarity attitudes or comfort zone. This is the bigger of living togerther. For example, if one spouse is a negative thinking or stubborness, but the other is a positive thinking. It is hard to live together. Because one spouse would talk or do something which contribute the other feel bad all the time . If one spouse did not try to change his negative thinking, soon they get a divorce. On the contrary, if one spouse and the other are within the core of their comfort zone. They would feel comfortable in talking, doing activites together, and sharing their feeling without arguing. This may be fullfied if the partner is somewhat different from them. Opposites do attract, since they may enlarge our comfort zone, but significant differences can throw them out of our emotional equilibrium into discomfort.

Moreover, the marriage partners would have similar goals and values in life. For instant, if one spouse values a simple lifestyle and the other values accumulating wealth, it doesn't matter how well they communicate, their basic life orientation will present constant opportunities for conflict. If one spouse values faith and the other resents religion, conflict is inevitable. This doesn't mean that both spouses have to have the same religion, but both must value a spiritual dimension of life.

In addition, the marriage partners should have similarity hobby. For example, if both have the same hobby of listening music, they could share kind of the music that they like, or enjoy going to the concert together. This same hobby to help their feelings of being closer, more better understanding and spending time each other. It appears that for the sake of long-term happy life.

In conclusion, the marriage partner similar to them would make them comfortable everytime live together, they could talk, do, or share everything in their life easily without confilt.

P.S. I would like to tell that I spent time for my eassy all day. haha I don't have teacher or anyone to teach. So, I thankful this web for good opportunity for leaning English and Thank you again for all people who help me. Thank you Thank you Thank you. ^^
Salikron   
Nov 29, 2012
Writing Feedback / Marriage partners should similar or not - essay structure check [3]

Thank you so much Dumi. ^^
Thank you for your comment and suggest.
Your example it's useful so much for me.
My problem is I don't know will write how to example .
But I will try to learn for your writting.
Thank you again Dumi for your help. ^_^
Salikron   
Nov 30, 2012
Writing Feedback / Person should never make an important decision alone; 'faculty choosing' [8]

Hi, everyone ^^ I spent time with this essay 14 hours. haha In fact, because my computer were errored many times, I must repeatly write again again and again. I finally had finished to write.>//< Could someone help me to make it better,need some feedback about my essay too.i really appreciated .^_^

QUESTION; Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When I was hight school, there was some people said me that " we should make an important decision alone because no one know our desire as well as ourselves"

But, when I grew up I found It is not ture!! A person is not always necessery make an important decision alone, consulting others may be the best way of making decision. Because I think that everything can be looked in various aspects, and learn something new because it is possible to see the situation more clearly because of the objective opinions of others. So, I agree with this statement that a person should never make an important decision alone.Threre are at least three reason why I agree with this statement by following below:

To begin with, a person should consult other when making an important decision to avoid possibly mistakes. For example, last 2 years ago, I hesitated to choose my faculty that I should study. In my head wanted to study a doctor, but in my heart wanted to study a law. I was confused and realized that I could not made a wrong decision due to affect all of my future. So, I decided to ask the comment of my families, my teachers, and my sister's friends who experience likes me. They gave me a good advice which were very useful for me of making an important decision. I finally decided to study a law which is what I love, and right now I am sure that I had made a right decision that consulted others, because I am happy with it . If that time, I choosed it myself without consulting others, I might choose to study a doctor who was not happy, and repent later for making a wrong mistakes.

In addition, making an important decision is necessery for teenagers are too young. Because they don't experience a lot of their lives. So, it is very important not to make a significant judgment alone, but all teens should ask the older people for a good advice. For example, one of my brother's friends who teenager. He alone took a decison of going through his peers and perssure and ended up drinking and doing drug with his friends. This happens as result of feeling tension and anxiety his a wrong decision. Causing from he did not know how to deny his friends and what is the wrong and right. If he consults older people for advice. They may have got the good feedback for them. This will help to relieve pressure, tension and anxiety.

Moreover, I think that making an important decision alone is unacceptable for some job, especially for company or business. For example, in the business, if owner want to increase budget to develop a company, but he decides to do so by himself without consulting with accountances who are good at calculating budget, the business may be turn down. So, the owner has to waste a lot of money because he makes an importance decision alone.

In conclusion, I agree that a person should never make an important decision alone and the best way for making a decision is consulting with other person.
Salikron   
Nov 30, 2012
Writing Feedback / Person should never make an important decision alone; 'faculty choosing' [8]

Thanks you sooooooo much Dumi for your revising. ^^
Yep, I'm preparing for IELTS. So,I have some a question.
What do you think about my essay?
Is it too easy? Should I use a difficult words or complex sentense?
Thank you again for a good advice you. ^_^
Salikron   
Nov 30, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Preeclampsia' - A personal narrative essay [5]

Hi, hend nga. ^^
your writing was interesting and kept my attention too,
I enjoye reading your essay. But, I think you might want to expound on your conclusion a little.
Overall, I love it. ^_^
Salikron   
Dec 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food [11]

Hi.everyone. ^^ I'm thankful everyone for your revising and suggesting. I'm trying to improve everything that all ones commented me. Don't hesitate to criticize my essay. I known I still weak my English much. So your critizine will help me better. >//< Thank you again for your kindness. ^_^

Qustion; Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

At the present time, preparing food is more easier than in the former time. With modern technological were built for improving to the way of ones food preparation. These modern techonlogical of cooking have higher property than the old appliances. That means, the modern cooking appliances have a methods are used much easily and more convenient than the old appliances that were used by former time.

To begin with, the modern appliances of cooking have contributed to help people to perpare their food easily and quickly. Having also a lots of capabilities such as more convenient, safety and efficient. One of is the microwave ovens which are often used for preparing fast food due to is easily and quickly methods to prepare their food. Also, they have the botton of control oven heate and can convert the temparature of their cooking require for avioding the food became indible. As a reults, people can easily their cooking without worrying about indible food.

In addition, nowadays, there are many food sections which are easily purchase and more convenient to prepare thier food such as instant food and precooked. For examle, people who have no time much can buy an instant noodle covered with a disposable small cup which devours in just three minutes instead of doing to their cooking prepareation. Besides, there are many kind of precooked can easily purchase in the stores or supermarket, such as hams,bacons, chicken recipes and pies. These precooked can be made into a microwave soon they wanted and also keep for a long time than kind of food fresh meals or fishes.

Moreover, there are some ingredients which helps to prepare their food is more easily. For example, somtimes, when I wanted to a spagetty in the hurry time, I would use a prepackaged ingredients instead of cutting tomatoes or any spices by myself. I found that is easy way and still the original taste of my cooking. As a results, I spending for a short time and their tastes do not much more different than doing the original spagetty myself.

However, this is just only my opinon and experiences. There are some aspects was agrued that buying instant food, precooked or prepackaged ingredients will affect thier unhealthly which become catalysts of obesity later. Despits,it is a difficult denies that these modern methods and appliances have helped most of people can more easily prepare thier food and more efficiency for their busy lives than in former time.
Salikron   
Dec 3, 2012
Writing Feedback / Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food [11]

Thank you soooo much " my88626 " AND " barrymu " !!
your revising and recommending are so useful for me.
Thank you for your helping. I will wait your input and recommend for both you.>//<
Thank you again for your kindness. ^_^
Salikron   
Dec 3, 2012
Undergraduate / Exodus to epiphany - Common App Essay! [17]

Hi, guy ^^
I am not an excellent writer too, but I think that your essay is very good.
I learned a lots from your excellent ideas and I also enjoyed reading your writing. ^_^
Salikron   
Dec 26, 2012
Undergraduate / Which is better:Studying in a Regular school or in an International School? [5]

Instructions: write an argumentative essay consisting of 4 paragraph. Each paragraph should contain between 5-10 sentense. If 2 or more papers are identical in any way, it is an indication that eassy have been prepared and memorized and thus will be given an F. Use pen only and in a clear handwriting.

Which is better: Studying in a Regular School or in an Internation School?

The compitition among students in growing day by day. The education system have changed over time. Nowadays, education is not more restricted to academics. Student who studies in an Internation school are given a chance to learn English more correctly than those who are studies in a Regular school. Due to they get trained by a native speaker who are skilled directly in using English. Moreover, those students will have their's lives differently from those who studies in an International school is better than studying in Regular school for at least two major reason -having efficiencly improved English skills, having diffently lifestyle.

The one reason is that the students who studies in an International school are improved their English skills more quickly and correctly than those who in a Regular school. Due to the students who in an International school have been directly learned by a native speaker who have certified to teach with international standards. Whenever, speaking, listening, reading and writing; especially speaking. As a result, they can have a early opportunity to speak the correct accent. They finally can speak English like a native speaker. On the other hand, the students who are learned in a Regular school will rather spend a lot of time for practising their speaking skills. Due to they can not use it in their real life. So, they must try hard to listen and speak to conversation from the tapes with script everyday untill they can properly speak life a native speaker.

The other reason is that studying in an International School making the student have differently experienced and lifestyle more than the students who studies in an International school have found many people come from different social backgrounds and different backgrounds and different contries, which given them to meet different kind of students. They will gain a wider perspective of other culture and also their own. Consequently, studying in an International school are rather free more than a Regular school. Most of students who are in an International school can extremely give their's opinion without wrong. These students will have increase more self-confident and maturity than the students who are in a Regular school.

In conclustion, the above paragraphs have been discussed about studying in an International school and a Regular school. These paragraph have provided two reason why studying in an International school ill help the students to improve their English skills more efficiencly than the students who not studying in an International school. The other reason is that the student who studies in an Internation school will have a good opportunity in learning about the others' culture. Moreover, these students learn self-confident and maturity. Thus, studying in an International school is better than studying in a Regular school.
Salikron   
Dec 27, 2012
Undergraduate / 'The Secret' by Rhonda Byrne; Princeton - Quote [3]

Your eassy is good for me. ^^
Your writing have great unity, suppose, and coherence. ^^
Actually, I'm very very enjoyed about your experince.
The Secret does really work.>//<
Salikron   
Dec 27, 2012
Undergraduate / Which is better:Studying in a Regular school or in an International School? [5]

Thank you very much "natangesh" ^^
Don't worry about your criticism. Your comment will make me a better on my writing. ^^
I agree with you that be blunt. Moreover, i know that my grammar is still weak. but i will try hard more.
Thank you again for your recommending. ^_^
Salikron   
Jan 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food [11]

Thank you sooooo much for your revise, Dumi. ^^
To be honest, i'm still confuse about using inappropriate word and sentense structure. i dont' really know how should I choose word. T^T

But i wil try to revise my essay carefully next time. Thank you so much Dumi. You help me a lot. ^______^
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