Writing Feedback / IELTS T-2: Write Pros and Cons of crime prevention in society, give your opinion [10]

There is an old saying 'Prevention is better than cure'. Does the same apply to crime prevention too? Criminality is on the rise everywhere in the world and whether its removal will benefit society in any way is a debatable issue since long ago. In the following paragraphs I will narrate pros and cons of the matter under discussion.

Those who oppose say good and evil are in human nature. For instance, the first murder in history of mankind was committed by a brother to another. Even if someone is law abiding, certain situations can drag him to offense. For example, I was reading an article yesterday describing how a young man killed her wife on adultery. Even that person had no criminal record, when he came to know about her wife's affair, he could not simply resist. Hence anger, revenge and suspicion are part and parcel of human nature that cannot be completely eradicated. Consequently, prevention of crime will make no difference.

On the other hand, it is argued that clearing society from evil makes it happier. For instance, people tend to move to crime free countries where rule of law prevails. This is evident from large number of people in developing countries trying to migrate to developed territories. Although, these prospective immigrants are well educated and settled in their homelands yet desire to live in peaceful environment motivates them to move to unknown world. Also, it is evident that citizens of developed countries live in harmony with others and contribute in the development of a healthy society. Therefore, removal of crime from society grants limitless benefits.

Considering above discussion I strongly suggest that crime free world will be more rewarding and benefiting for humanity. Hence, crime prevention will certainly make a difference in society. It is therefore recommended to implement strict punishments like capital punishment and heavy penalties for any misdeeds to create a sense of deterrence.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Shopping as a hobby. Why? Good or Bad! [4]

Shopping is inevitable for everyone. Yet, it has dramatically changed its dynamics more recently as numbers of people prefer to spend their free time in shopping malls. This trend has taken the form of a hobby and has replaced many leisure activities. It is agreed that shopping as a fun activity is an unhealthy trend seriously affecting our society. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss reasons for this happening as well as points supporting my opinion.

This is largely attributed to the role of Media strongly affecting its audience. Take an example of dress shows excessively highlighted by TV channels. People watching these programs tend to copy these designs and wander around shops for countless hours. Similarly, lavish life styles shown in dramas affect many young-ones and they try to follow the same by any means. Also, stardom plays a key role enticing people to live a life-style like their heroes.

Disadvantages of shopping as a hobby outweigh its advantage. First, people waste considerable amount of their free time that could be used on more fruitful activities. For instance, week-end spend with family going out for a trip will bring more happiness for an individual as well as family. It will strengthen family ties and energise a person for week ahead. Second, inability to buy costly things will give rise to extreme stress and anxiety. As a result, society will become even tense.

From above discussion, it is clear that quickly evolving trend of using free time in shopping places is not a very good advancement. It may become a basis for dissatisfaction among people in society. It is therefore highly recommended to use free time in more constructive hobbies.

Writing Feedback / IELTS 2: Living in high apartments : Advantages and Disadvantages [5]

Some say that people living in high-rise apartments are lonely and unhappy, while others say that it's advantageous to stay in high-rise apartments. Discuss advantages and disadvantages. Give your opinion.

There is an old saying that necessity is the mother of invention, similarly lack of space for living is quickly replacing big homes with sky high flats. Whether people living in apartments feel isolated and unhappy or they are at an advantage is a debateable issue. I will narrate both advantages and disadvantages to reach a reasoned conclusion.

One clear disadvantage is being off from ground, although seems trivial but can make a lot of difference. For example, a house woman may need to drop her children at school or go for shopping, but every time she will have to come at ground level before she could start her real task. Consequently, she would avoid going out as much as possible, leading to loneliness. Second, people living in apartments are somewhat away from nature, for instance, they may see beautifully bloomed rose in garden but they can not touch and smell it. Third, in case of emergency, they would find it difficult to escape from the building.

Contrarily, flats are cheaper alternatives to homes, both for living and maintenance. For example, buying flat will cost no more that £300,000 whereas cheapest home will be 3 times expansive. Hence, money saved on accommodation expanses will be available for other ventures like business. Also, these flats are purposefully built with all necessities within small area, hence cleaning and maintaining them will be easier. Lastly, living rooms above the ground will be more isolated, ideal for peaceful un-interrupted living.

Analysing the above comments, I opine that living in apartments has more advantages than disadvantages. This is more economical and calm style of living, beneficial both for individual and masses. It is therefore, highly recommended that people should adopt it sooner than later.

Writing Feedback / Should students concentrate more on the subjects they like? [7]

Some parents feel that students should focus on all subjects equally. Others believe that students should concentrate more on the subjects they are interested in. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that parents are concerned about the upbringing as well as the education of their toddlers more than ever before. Some hold the opinion that children should concentrate on the subjects of their interest while others believe that they should focus on all subjects. In my perspective, students in their first classes must learn all subjects and then focus the modules of their interest in their higher classes.

Firstly, leaving the choice of subjects to students at the primary level may make them like easy modules with a little practical significance. For instance, it takes a lot of effort and practice to study mathematics and science, whereas filling colours in the pictures may seem quite fascinating to the primary school students. Therefore, it is not recommended to make the choice of subjects at the disposition of children in primary level.

Secondly, forcing mature students to learn all the subjects may lead to loss of their interest in studies. Therefore, at a higher level students should be given the right to choose subjects according to their preference. Teaching a group of unrelated subjects to students at high school may be a waste of time and effort. For instance, when I was in higher secondary level preparing for my admission in a medical college, studying subjects like history and geography as essential modules were a nuisance to me. As this example shows higher school students should be given an opportunity to concentrate on their specialized subjects.

In summation, it is good to get students learn all the subjects at the primary level, but in the higher classes they should be given a space to concentrate on their areas of interest.

Writing Feedback / Punishment for misconduct of school children [2]

In some countries students who misbehave have to leave the school and are not allowed to continue their education. In other countries they can return to their studies after a suspension period. Discuss both options and give your opinion.

The idea of punishment is nothing new in human community and its purpose is to deter misconduct in society. However, the level of punishment for the same wrongful act may vary in different cultures. Unsocial attitude of children at schools is not an exception where some societies show little lenience and expel students from schools, closing the door of education for them forever. Contrarily, some cultures are content with rustication of students.

The principal argument in favour of removing students is that it sets an example for others. As evident from human behaviour the fear of punishment is more effective in restraining culprits. To illustrate this, Saudi Arabia is a country that verdicts death penalty when someone is found possessing drugs. Therefore, ratio of drug related crimes in the country is almost 0%. Contrarily, most Western countries, besides having effective law and order system, are now considering alternate ways of dealing with this curse, such as according to a recent report UK is considering establishment of areas where addicts will be free to use drugs. This case clearly shows that generally strict penalties keep people away from crimes. Hence, in some societies students are forced to leave schools on account of misbehave.

On the other hand, improving moral values is one of the key goals of education and elimination of children from schools is self-defeating for educational institutes. For instance, although fictional, two characters in the movie 'Le Miserable' portray two schools of thought. The main character of the movie is a person who committed crime out of choice. A police inspector believes in eliminating crimes by merciless punishment, but fails. Contrarily, a preacher works by persuasion and converts a criminal into a benevolent member of society. Thus, persuasion can work more effectively than punishment and schools should be encouraged to shoulder this responsibility. Moreover, eliminating children from school will push them towards even worse evils prevailing in society. Thus, expelling students is not an ideal course of action to respond student misconduct.

In summation, education should play its part in improving child behaviour instead of forcing them to leave schools. It is expected that school administration work towards this worthy cause.  

Writing Feedback / Should museums charge admission fees? YES [3]

Some museums charge admission fees, while others don't. Do you think the advantages of such charges will outweigh the disadvantages?

Advances in technology are quickly changing human hobbies and leisure activities. Visiting historical places is not an exception and most people are losing appeal in such engagements. Therefore, whether museums should charge entry fee is a debatable question. However, it is argued that this will provide financial autonomy and museums will be able to provide more facilities to spectators.

The principal argument against introduction of entry fee is that it will discourage people to visit museums. This is because going to historical places is considered as respecting the local history and culture and regarded as a courtesy. Charging people for visiting places of historical interest will make them competitor of other leisure activities, such as going to the cinema or a concert. As customer choices are influenced with the cost they pay, inception of entry fee will adversely affect people visiting to the historical places. Therefore, there should be no charges on visiting museums.

On the other hand, charging an entry fee will make museums financially independent. In this day and age of recession when everyday governments, especially in Europe, are introducing the austerity measures, museum administration will be able to benefit from revenue generated by the entry fee. Lack of funds is causing governments to cease many public welfare and arts projects. For museums, to become self-reliant will guarantee their survival.

In addition to this, by charging entry fee, administration will be able to provide better facilities for visitors that will attract more people. For instance, installation of air-conditioner in most Asian countries will be a great relief for people visiting museums. Moreover, short excerpts dramatizing the historical significance of objects will encourage people interest. Thus, charging people for visiting museums will help the administration to equip them with better facilities.

In summation, introduction of door fee in museums has better advantages and should be considered by administration.