Writing Feedback / IELTS Task2 - people relationship has changed because of technology [3]

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

The most important feature of human life is social relationship. Today, social interaction is developed. In this essay I will describe effective forms of technology on social contact and I will distinguish whether those are effective or not.

Now we are witness that a family who their members are even in different continents, because of job opportunity and educational position. Therefore, all members of family will be contacted each other by telephone, mail or virtual/online connection by internet.

Moreover, the most important relationship between people in the world is because of their business relations. They can relate each other by a kind of virtual connection named internet and they can see electronic showcase of international market only in a several minutes instead of visiting there face to face. Also, they can to save amounts of time and money.

Media is another version of technology which is developed our relationship as well. Many presses, local or international TV networks always spread their news or information that they want. Sometimes they manipulate the real news and changed them to affect some nation mind. For example, if you trace a piece of news in the associated press and some broadcasts you may witness types of manipulation. In some cases, it leads to protestation or even war.

Furthermore, today social networks such as Facebook, Twitter and Youtube, a 21's era inventions, could modify many people's life. In these sites, people share their ideas, favorites, or even their private pictures with their close friends or even all friends. If you want to know a person you have to search his/her name and find the private page that belongs to that person. Consequently, you can know him/her in a fraction of second. Maybe someone wants to bother or even phishing their private information for intention purpose or gangster groups.

To sum up, today technologies have developed people's mind, attribute, tendencies or even their life. They have a chance to develop their life with new ideas as merit people who were famous or well-known. Being positive or negative effect of technology relates to people's intention.

Writing Feedback / Increasing petrol prices- immediate solution, but temporary! [3]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

As regards increasing population, we are facing the new problems such as growing traffic and pollution. The way which is suggested to control of those problems is increasing petrol price. In this essay I will describe some cause and effect which is effective or ineffective. Ultimately I suggest another possible new way.

Not only population increase every day, but also our construction of city is constant. It is natural that our roads and highways capacity cannot tolerate commute masses of people. So it would better to change roads and highways based upon increasing population mutually. Also, describing traffic zone and updating traffic route tables according to daily needs may control roads and highways traffic. These solutions will be useful in all cars based on technology, highway police groups, or some private companies which are responsible for transporting people.

On the other hand, mass media maybe change people's mind not commuting in rush hours. In addition, they can affect commuter folk who will produce a huge amount of pollution that cars exude. If they know that this pollution is harmful for their health, they will collaborate each other to decrease the enormous amount of pollution.

Additionally, the next generation of cars which produce no pollution and work with green fuel may decline pollution. Moreover, sky train, fly cars and even private plane which work with green fuel may decrease traffic and pollution as the same.

To conclude, increasing petrol maybe the first and temporary way to decrease traffic and pollution. All people have to do their necessary needs in society every day, so it is thought that is not the best way. (271 words)

Writing Feedback / scientists researches; average weight of people is increasing, health decreasing [5]

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Because of some reasons, the average weight in society is increased, additionally levels of health and fitness is decreased. I will describe those reasons and will mention feasible suggestions to solve these problems.

With advent of technology in human's life, their recent lifestyle has changed. In last century, people had to work on farms. They had to hard-working for being alive. After technological developments, many people go to office for earning money. Now they have sedentary jobs instead, with no physical activity, so they were weighting too much.

Because of technology, people's nourishment has changed. Masses of people use transportation facilities instead of walking or riding with horses. Usually they rush to do their routines even they do not have enough time for themselves, so some kinds of food like fast food and sandwiches were common. Healthy food removed and fat/unsaturated fat one comes in people's nutrition instead.

Nonetheless, scientists did some researches about heath and food. They found how will be health and keep their fitness together. They classified people by range of age and health level. Also, they defined amount of healthy food for different group of folks. Media was responsible for informing people to use them. According to the "hamshahri press", after a decade people who used those ways could reserve their fitness and health.

Additionally, governments could dedicate a private budget for public sporting. They can create some green areas for people and plan to entertain and exercise program for them. They may name a particular time in a week to such programs.

To conclude, it is thought technology change people's lifestyle, but people cannot adapt their right habits too. If they were responsible for themselves in diet and health besides their new form of life, they could have kept valuable stuff like health and fitness.. I hope for a day which people know themselves and try for an integral part of their life like healthy life.

Writing Feedback / IELTS:apprehensive mind; learning a foreign language at primary/secondary school [6]

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages of this outweighs the disadvantages?

Some professionals claim that learning foreign language at childhood is better than learning it at school in upper. They think the benefit of this issue is more than the drawbacks. I will describe some of these advantages and disadvantages and reveal which of them is more effective.

Children have an apprehensive mind in primary school. Only do they have childish world. They do not have responsibility for anything in this period of life. They have passed just some child period playing game and their mind can absorb everything which exists in their environment even foreign language.

In addition, childhood experiences are the most important factor for children like every adult experiences in youth ages. It is obvious that these experiences may improve decision making skill for them at upper ages. Therefore, learning other languages and get familiar with cultural advantages is more important for them at the primary school. However, these learning will expand cognition ability more than when a student knowing only his/her mother-tongue.

On the other hand, children in under 12 do not know a profound knowledge about the structural language and grammar so learning the second language may limit them only in some superficial information like words, speaking language and listening. They cannot know another language fluently. Also, they may lose their personality only in some words instead of expressing themselves with their talking, painting or the other well-known activities in this age like playing.

In conclusion, many researches in increasing learning ability have been accomplished in the world. One of the most important of them is concerning learn foreign language when students are in primary school. It is thought that benefit of this is more than disadvantages.

Writing Feedback / Working in supplementary task besides studying at high school may bring benefits [2]

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the data centric era, communication among people is a ludicrous thing beneath such equipped and developed technology. Therefore, support of philanthropic characteristics is an essential need. We usually witness the poverty, natural disaster, disease and even illiteracy circumstances in Africa, Middle East Asia and even in Southern America. Consequently, it is upon us to provide a superficial condition for the human beings of these kinds of lands. We evidence many online web sites that service to clients and collect their assistant for needy people. Nowadays, we have an NGO's for altruistic helping people over the world. Definitely, those kinds of assistants are an evidence of comprehensible attempts in educational system in each level even for the beginners and youngsters.

In addition, learning and teaching the significant traits like working for charity or teaching peers are the other responsibilities that are germane to educational system. It would be better to teach them at the beginning ages. Because pupils have abundant chances to help people and learn how to respect them simultaneously.

To treat children and to learn pupils are the burden responsibilities of schools. When children learn how to assist the others and pleasure it, the emotional part of their brain will be completed. Therefore, their social relationship skill may be growing.

Furthermore, if youngsters worked in paid instead of unpaid institutes and saw result of their attempts they would endure in such institutes. Also, when high school students can see how to help people and make them happy and how to serve them a satisfied service, they may do this as a kind of prospective jobs. Also, they may have innovation and invention in these ways and their creativity will be increase.

Put all in the nutshell, working in supplementary task besides studying at high school may bring children some benefits. Not only is studying lessons an ultimate goal of educational systems but also learning valuable traits is a penultimate purpose. It is taught that working in paid and voluntary institutes are better.